00002高考英語讀后續(xù)寫動作描寫之動作鏈-1

1、 高考讀后續(xù)寫動作描寫之動作鏈英語讀后續(xù)寫主要涉及動作描寫、情感描寫、對話描寫以及環(huán)境描寫。而在這四種描寫中，動作描寫占比重最大，對學(xué)生來說難度最高。今天帶大家一塊來破解動作描寫的奧秘。通過動作的細(xì)節(jié)描寫來推動故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展，塑造人物形象性格，但不是沒有針對性地對所有動作都進(jìn)行描寫，要選擇最能刻畫人物性格或者最有價(jià)值的動作來進(jìn)行刻畫。以下動作描寫三部曲能夠幫助你更好地完成動作的細(xì)節(jié)描寫。1 精選動詞，精準(zhǔn)描述學(xué)生在動作描寫過程中常出現(xiàn)的一個(gè)問題是經(jīng)常用通用詞匯去代替具體詞匯，而做不到精準(zhǔn)描述，比如“說”，學(xué)生會用say，在對話中反復(fù)出現(xiàn)，讀者則完成感受不到說話的語氣，嗓音，聲調(diào)等，解決方法就是

2、做到精準(zhǔn)用詞，使用具體詞匯去代替通用詞匯。我整理了關(guān)于從頭到腳的具體詞匯，供學(xué)生參考。1.關(guān)于說的動作：嘟囔： whisper/mumble/grunt/murmur結(jié)結(jié)巴巴地說：stutter/stumble/stammer宣布：announce/declare保證：promise/assure建議：offer/propose/suggest；問與答：ask詢問/answer回答/reply回復(fù)喊叫：cry out喊叫/call喊叫/shout大喊/scream尖叫/yell大喊/ 其他的說：add補(bǔ)充說道= continue繼續(xù)說道/retort反駁道； explain解釋道/ state

3、陳述道；/protest抗議道/sob哭訴道/agree同意地說/comfort安慰道 /insist2.關(guān)于eye的動作：閃爍（某種感情色彩）：shine/sparkle/glimmer/glitter/twinkle with+excitement/joy/pride等表示感情色彩的名詞各種哭：cry/sob/weep/wail/burst into tears/burst out crying/fight back tears抑制住淚水睜大眼睛：ones eyes widened/ grew wide 3. 關(guān)于face/cheek的動作： 露出笑容：a smile appeared o

4、n/ spread across his face 煥發(fā)光彩：ones face lit up/brightened/glowed 臉紅：flush/burn （with embarrassment）各種笑：smile微笑/laugh出聲笑/chuckle輕聲笑/giggle咯咯笑/sneer譏諷地笑/beam笑容滿面/grin露齒笑4. 關(guān)于hand的動作：各種打：pound/thump/punch 猛擊; beat連續(xù)擊打；slap打耳光；tap/pat輕拍各種抓：seize；grasp；grab; clutch; take hold of; catch hold of; hold on

5、to 其他的動作：pull拉/掏； push推；reach 伸；drag拽；pinch捏wipe擦；rub揉；hug/embrace/hold sb in ones arms擁抱；press按壓；roll搖；pick up撿起5. 關(guān)于body的動作：sit 坐；lie 躺；bend/stoop 彎腰；lean against.倚靠；drop/hang/lower ones head 低頭6.關(guān)于heart的動作：各種心跳：beat/thump/pound/pump ( with excitement/fear) 其他動作：miss/skip a beat 漏跳了一拍； break心碎；mel

6、t融化；ache疼7. 關(guān)于foot/knee的動作： dash/rush沖；rise to ones feet站起來 ; struggle to ones feet 吃力地站起來; jump to ones feet 跳起來; kneel down跪下; get down on one knee單膝跪地; slip 滑到；sneak/creep偷偷走；crawl 爬；wobble/limp/stagger/stumble搖搖晃晃地走 2. 添加修飾成分，做到生動描寫1. 可以添加介詞短語或者副詞來修飾動詞。with+情感名詞的搭配：with delight/excitement/ pleas

7、ure/ happiness /joy/satisfaction /anger/rage/patience/fear/terror/embarrassment/pride /caution/care/patience/certainty如：Her eyes shone with excitement.她的眼睛中閃爍著興奮的光芒。with+身體部位 with its hungry red eyes/ its sharp teeth/her shaky hand/her pale lips等等如：The ferocious wolf stared at Mac with its hungry re

8、d eyes.此處用with its hungry red eyes來修飾動作stare，使狼兇狠的形象更加豐滿。如：She kissed Oliver with her pale lips. 此處用with her pale lips來修飾動作kiss，體現(xiàn)了母親當(dāng)時(shí)虛弱的狀態(tài)，和對Oliver滿滿的愛。in+名詞 in surprise/amazement/shock/sorrow傷心 in a high /low / sweet/loud/soft /weak voice 用.的嗓音 In a tone of surprise /curiosity /impatience /regret

9、 /command命令/sarcasm諷刺 用.的語氣 如：He gazed at me in surprise.副詞 suddenly /immediately /instantly /rapidly /firmly /slowly /angrily/happily/excitedly/如：He carefully jumped over the broken glasses.此處也可以把副詞carefully提高句首，強(qiáng)調(diào)他的小心，效果更好。高分表達(dá)：Carefully，he jumped over the broken glasses.2. 在動作描寫中也可以運(yùn)用明喻、暗喻、擬人、夸張等

10、寫作手法，讓你的寫作更加生動傳神。She howled long and loud like a ferocious wolf and then jumped at Buck.此句把她比作兇殘的惡狼，用到了明喻的寫作手法，使整句的動作描寫更有力度，更有畫面感。She went home in a flood of tears.她淚如泉涌地回家去了。此處在動作描寫中添加了in a flood of tears夸張描寫，生動傳神地體現(xiàn)她當(dāng)時(shí)的情感狀態(tài)。三分解動作，形成動作鏈或者動作面學(xué)生要學(xué)會分解動作，形成一個(gè)完成的動作鏈，比如浙江高考讀后續(xù)寫Mac遇到狼上車的動作，不是簡單的get in the

11、 car就可以解決的，過于籠統(tǒng)的描述使描寫空洞乏味，學(xué)生要善于捕捉這個(gè)關(guān)鍵的慢鏡頭，并將Mac的動作按照時(shí)間軸分解為jump off the bicycledash into the back seat of the carslam the doorlean against the seat, breathless飽滿的動作鏈，那動作鏈或者動作面有哪些形式呢？1. 動作鏈的表達(dá)可用狀語從句，如when，while，as，before，after引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句來體現(xiàn)。 When I arrived there, I walked to the door and knocked. As I w

12、aited at the stop, I heard a big noise.2.動作鏈的表達(dá)可用并列謂語動詞來體現(xiàn)，即A and B或者 A， B and C。 She hailed a taxi, got into it and told the driver her destination. He reached deep into his pocket , pulled out a handful of change, and held it up to the farmer.3.動作鏈的表達(dá)可用非謂語來體現(xiàn)。 A-ing，B 或者A，B-ing Looking up at the f

13、armer, the boy said, “Thank you.” The dog awkwardly wobbled towards the others, doing its best to catch up. A and B, C-ing 或者A，B-ing and C-ing或者A-ing， B，C-ingThe farmer picked up the dog and knelt down, saying, “Its yours now.” The students came in, talking and laughing. Looking straight into my eye

14、s, Mike stroke my hair, whispering, “You are the most beautiful girl Ive ever seen.” Having done., 主句Having left something in the cloakroom, I went inside to get it and found.= After I had left something in the cloakroom, I went inside to get it and. Having thought about the situation for a while, I decided to ask Roy about the theft.=After I had thought about the situation for a while, I decided to ask Roy about the theft.這個(gè)句型可以和after引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句互換4.動作鏈可以和情感，環(huán)境，心理，語言等結(jié)合，形成動作面。Burning with anger, he glared at me with his big frightening eyes , yelling, “Youre