維詞資料：2016年10月浙江高考英語(yǔ)開(kāi)放寫(xiě)作---荒野冒險(xiǎn)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)元宵-

1、荒野冒險(xiǎn)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)步 驟 1概括已知信息：標(biāo)明核心詞、核心句， 梳理語(yǔ)篇內(nèi)容的推進(jìn)方向。Jane and her husband, Tom,driven three hours to campa lake in the forest.quarrel walked awayloststop for the nightrose at the break of dayto a streamdrank and ate a few berrieshope it would lead her to the lakeheard a helicopterUnfortunately, the trees made

2、 it impossible for people to see herA few minutes later, another helicopter yellow blouse漢語(yǔ)：驅(qū)車野營(yíng)生嫌隙，迷失山林心焚急；挨餓恐懼度長(zhǎng)夜，兩架飛機(jī)失機(jī)會(huì)。步 驟 2按人物、環(huán)境、情節(jié)動(dòng)詞等分類劃線詞：KindsUnderlined key words and phrasesCharacterActionPlaceConcrete ThingsAbstract步 驟 3 緊扣語(yǔ)境構(gòu)思情節(jié)，分析：1. 據(jù)第一段開(kāi)頭”dark”可知，-2. 據(jù)第二段開(kāi)頭”woke up”可知，-。3. 第二段情節(jié)可能：-J

3、ane, Tom,walked, climbedlake, stream,Helicopter, yellow blouse,To her great joy, at a distance情節(jié)1（搭建本段空白處前后橋梁）情節(jié)2步 驟 3 緊扣語(yǔ)境構(gòu)思情節(jié)，分析：據(jù)第一段開(kāi)頭DARK可知，2. 據(jù)第二段開(kāi)頭WOKE UP可知，3. 第二段情節(jié)可能：又要在荒野再過(guò)一晚。環(huán)境描寫(xiě)。大量心理活動(dòng)，后悔？想念？期待？堅(jiān)持？夜里有沒(méi)有遇到蛇、老虎、獅子？第一段應(yīng)有JANE入睡的情節(jié)。醒來(lái)看到TOM；OR醒來(lái)在醫(yī)院；OR貴人相助OR直升機(jī)救援；OR獨(dú)自找到湖。dark again. -Jane tired,

4、 hungry-frightened-thought to herself-if only-miss Tomtomorrow guide the helicopter-lie beside the stream-tigers-hold her breathquietsleptIt was day break when Jane woke up. -ate berries and drank some water-catch sight of a fisherman at a distance-climbed to an open area together- To her great joy-

5、helicopteryellow blouse-rescuers-the warmest hug-smile satisfied smiles步 驟 4 (分析原文寫(xiě)作風(fēng)格，特殊語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)有時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句，條件狀語(yǔ)從句，賓語(yǔ)從句，DOING,直接引語(yǔ)，虛擬語(yǔ)氣，倒裝，疑問(wèn)句，感嘆句，介詞短語(yǔ)等)初稿1But no more helicopter came and it wasgetting dark again.Jane was so tired and hungry that she didnt have any power at all. Whats worse, she was

6、 extremely frightened. She thought to herself, “If only I had not quarrelled with Tom. Where is Tom? He must have made the emergency call. What I need is enough courage. If I continue my spirits tomorrow, I will be likely to guide the helicopter.” Lying beside the stream, she fell asleep very soon.

7、Suddenly, she was woken up by the wild shouts of several tigers, which made her scared to death. After she held her breath for a few minutes,gradually everything was quiet again. In the terrible darkness, she slept again. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. 除使用原文已有從句等復(fù)雜語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)外，還使用主語(yǔ)從句，定語(yǔ)從句等復(fù)雜語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)。She c

8、aught sight of a fisherman at a distance. Walking nearer, she told him the whole story. Together, they climbed to an open area. To her great joy ，a helicopter flew overhead just at that moment. The fisherman helped her flag her yellow blouse wildly. This did catch the helicopters attention! Jane was

9、 rescued. Bursting into tears, she told Tom that she missed him so much. Never would she do such a foolish thing. Tom gave her the warmest and longest hug she had ever received. People around smiled satisfied smiles. 步 驟 5 核查字?jǐn)?shù)、下劃線標(biāo)明原文給出的5個(gè)以上關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)、連接詞、標(biāo)點(diǎn)、語(yǔ)法可能能版本(201 words)刪詞，盡量不減少特殊語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)。But no more h

10、elicopter came and it was getting dark again. Jane was so tired, hungry, and extremely frightened. She thought to herself, “If only I had not quarreled with Tom. Where is Tom? He must have made the emergency call. What indeed is enough courage. If I continue my spirits tomorrow, I will be likely to

11、guide the helicopter.” Lying beside the stream, she fell asleep very soon. Suddenly, she heard the shouts of tigers, which made her scared to death. After she held her breath for a few minutes, everything was quiet again. In the terrible darkness, she slept again.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. S

12、he caught sight of a fisherman at a distance, with whose help she climbed to an open area. To her great joy, a helicopter flew overhead just at that moment. The fisherman helped flag her yellow blouse wildly. This did catch the rescuers attention! Jane was rescued. Seeing Tom, she told him how much

13、she missed him. Never would they be away from each other. Tom gave her the warmest and longest hug she had ever received. People around smiled satisfied smiles. (174 words)（砍柴老人，湖泊，直升機(jī) ）But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again. The temperature got lower at night than in the daytime.

14、 Jane put on her yellow blouse. At that moment, tiredness surrounded her. She felt exhausted both physically and emotionally. But she continued walking forward because she really wanted to meet Tom as soon as possible. She walked slowly and carefully in darkness. Following the stream for about two h

15、ours, Jane couldnt support her physical strength, so she found a flat ground to spend the long and hard night.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She felt hungry and tired. After a short adjustment, she began the hard trip. A few hours later, she caught sight of an old man cutting woods. To her great joy, the old man, who was very familiar with the geographical characteristics, informed her of the way to the lake. Seeing the lake meant seeing hope in t