中考英語高分作文攻略 寫事(課件共)

中考英語高分作文攻略--寫事云南師大附中呈貢校區(qū)中考英語高分作文攻略云南師大附中呈貢校區(qū)英語作文怎么寫？不會啊！記的單詞都忘了！??！奧利給！胡謅吧！我是有原則的！??！英語怎么寫？不會??！記的單詞都忘了?。?！奧利給！胡謅吧！我是新冠疫情下，老師扮演主播角色

--表象化、片面化此視頻反映了什么現(xiàn)象？立意標新（社會層面）

--對復合型人才的需求（個人影響）廣度深度此視頻反映了什么現(xiàn)象？立意標新（社會層面）廣度怎樣寫好英語中考作文--敘事一、分析去年中考英語作文二、總結(jié)英語作文寫作思路及流程三、評講作文“Everyoneneedshelp”四、作文拓展延申及賞析怎樣寫好英語中考作文--敘事一、分析去年中考英語作文一、分析去年中考作文

分析云南近6年中考真題的書面表達可知，針對“經(jīng)歷與感受”這一話題共涉及過6次，2017省卷“ASpecialDay”、2019昆明“Onmyparent’sbirthday”、2018昆明“Asmallthing”、2017昆明A“Onedayinmychildhood”、2015昆明A“Thegoodolddays”、2014昆明A“Ahappytime”；全國近年中考真題也針對自己或者他人的經(jīng)歷和感受進行考查。命題探索一、分析去年中考作文分析云南近6年中考真題中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)(2019昆明)Onmyparent’sbirthday

某英文網(wǎng)站正在面向全國中學生開展以“感恩父母”為主題的征文活動，請你用英文以“Onmyparent’sbirthday”為題目寫一篇記敘文投稿，內(nèi)容為某次你為媽媽或爸爸慶祝生日的經(jīng)歷。要求：1.語言流暢、書寫規(guī)范、卷面整潔，詞數(shù)不少于60個；

2.文中不得使用真實姓名、校名，否則以零分計。

3.書面表達必須寫在答題卡上，如在本卷上作答，一律不得分。(2019昆明)Onmyparent’sbirthda范文點評Onmyparent’sbirthday

①August8thwasmymother’sbirthday.MyfatherandIwantedtogivehersurprisingbirthdaypresents.①文章采用“總—分—總”的結(jié)構展開敘述。范文點評Onmyparent’sbirthday①文范文點評②Inthemorning，myfatherandIwentshoppingandboughtaverynicecake.Thenwewenttothemarketandboughtsomefood.Whenwegothome，myfathercookedsomenicefoodinthekitchen.Iwenttomyroomtomakeabirthdaycard.IwantedtotellmymotherthatIlovedherverymuch.ThenIwroteinthecard，“Iloveyou，mydearmother！”Iputitonherpillow，thenwecleanedtheroom.Wefeltverytired，butwewereveryhappy.Whenmymothergothome，wesaid，“HappyBirthday！”Mymothersmiled.Wehadsuppertogether.Mymothersaid，“Thankyou，mydaughter！”③Howhappywewere?、陟`活運用多種句型：時間狀語從句和賓語從句等，講述事情的經(jīng)過。③結(jié)尾用感嘆句表達一家人的幸福。范文點評②Inthemorning，m二、英語作文寫作思路及流程（五個步驟）1.審題（文體、時態(tài)、人稱、題目內(nèi)容）文體：記敘文、說明文、議論文和應用文。時態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時、一般過去時、一般將來時、現(xiàn)在進行時、過去進行時、現(xiàn)在完成時、人稱：第一、第二、第三人稱題目內(nèi)容：寫人、敘事2.標新立意寫作的方向、意圖和動機。（廣度和深度）二、英語作文寫作思路及流程（五個步驟）1.審題（文體、時態(tài)、3.搭腳手架

①框架（總-分-總）

②提綱挈領--每段主旨首段點題中間描述事情經(jīng)過（人物、事件、影響）結(jié)尾呼題、升華情感3.搭腳手架4.細節(jié)處理、潤色

①準確地遣詞造句--好詞好句（語言能力）詞法（詞性、詞義）句法句子用法分類句子結(jié)構分類句子成分(主謂賓定狀補）

4.細節(jié)處理、潤色中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)定語從句定語從句4.細節(jié)處理、潤色②思維品質(zhì)（中英文化差異）1.中英表達差異--中文含蓄，英文直白Youaresohandsome.你好帥！陌上人如玉，公子世無雙。Youaresobeautiful.你好漂亮！回眸一笑百媚生，六宮粉黛無顏色。4.細節(jié)處理、潤色1.中英表達差異--中文含蓄，英文2.狀語的習慣用法有些不同

在北京大家都喜歡吃烤鴨。（地點狀語）

EveryonelikesroastduckinBeijing.

為了取得好成績，她每天都熬夜。（目的狀語）

Shestaysuplateeverydaytogetabettergrade.InBeijing,

everyonelikesroastduck.Togetabettergrade,

shestaysuplateeveryday.2.狀語的習慣用法有些不同InBeijing,every3.定語的位置有差異

中文（形容詞、數(shù)量詞、名詞、代詞充當）

平靜的湖面

一個故事今天的報紙我的衣服

英文（形容詞、名詞、代詞、數(shù)詞、介詞短語、動詞不定式、分詞、定語從句）

calmlakeastorytoday'snewspaper

myclothes

前置定語后置定語3.定語的位置有差異中文（形容詞、數(shù)量詞、名詞、代詞充當英語后置定語的用法：1.復合不定代詞要用后置定語修飾

somethinginteresting（interestingsomething）

2.動詞不定式作后置定語Doyouhaveanythingtosay?3.分詞作后置定語現(xiàn)在分詞表主動；過去分詞表被動Theman

lyingonthegroundismyfather.（主動）Thepen

bought

byherismadeinchina.（被動）英語后置定語的用法：2.動詞不定式作后置定語3.分詞作后4.介詞短語作后置定語TheboyinblueisTom.Thepeoplearoundtheworldarefightingwithdisease.5.定語從句作后置定語TheboywhoisstrongisTom.Ishethemanwhowantstoseeyou?4.介詞短語作后置定語5.定語從句作后置定語4.動詞用法的差異中文：我要去爬山。英文：Ialwaysclimbmountains.Iamclimbingthemountainnow.Iclimbedthemountainyesterday.Iwasclimbmingthemountainateightyesterdaymorning.IwillclimbthemountainnextFriday.

中文可以有不用動詞的情況，但英文不能省略動詞。我累了。Itired.（錯)Iamtired.4.動詞用法的差異中文可以有不用動詞的情況，但英文不能省略動5.一詞多性多形的正確使用happy（adj.)開心的，高興的happiness（n.)開心，幸福happily（adv.)開心地happier（adj.)更開心的happiest（adj.)最開心的morehappily(adv.)更開心地mosthappily(adv.)最開心地eg.Iamsohappytoday.Shesingsasonghappily.IthinkGinaisthehappiestpersoninherfamily.5.一詞多性多形的正確使用happy4.③巧用過渡詞起：開始承：承接，并列轉(zhuǎn)：轉(zhuǎn)折合：整合，總結(jié)過渡詞分類：文章結(jié)構（4類）句子間的邏輯關系（10類）4.③巧用過渡詞起：開始過渡詞分類：表示順序：first(ly);second(ly);tobeginwith;tostartwith;atfirst;atlast;intheend;next;then;afterthat;finally表示對比：while;ontheonehand…ontheotherhand…表示轉(zhuǎn)折：but;however;ontheotherhand;though;although;afterall;unluckily;unfortunately表示讓步：though;although;evenif/though表示舉例：forexample;forinstance;suchas;like表示順序：first(ly);second(ly);t表示并列:either…or;neither…nor;both…and;notonly…butalso;aswellas表示遞進：besides;what’smore;what’sworse;inaddition表示原因：because;becauseof;for;since;thanksto;forthereasonthat;as表示結(jié)果：so;therefore;asaresult;so…that表示目的：sothat;inorderthat/to;soasto表示并列:either…or;neither…nor;5.評審書面表達評分標準一檔（12-15分）：內(nèi)容切題、層次清楚、語言流暢、基本無語言表達錯誤。二檔(8-11分)：內(nèi)容切題、層次比較清楚、語言比較流暢、語言表達錯誤較少。三檔（5-7分）：內(nèi)容基本切題、層次不夠分明、語言表達錯誤較多。四檔（1-4分）：有一定內(nèi)容、但語言表達錯誤很多。（注意：書面表達語法錯誤全卷扣分不得超過2分；單詞拼寫錯誤扣分不得超過2分；抄襲卷中閱讀材料的，抄襲部分不給分。）5.評審書面表達評分標準中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)

在生活中你幫助過別人嗎？或者得到過別人的幫助嗎？請以“Everyoneneedshelp”為題，寫一個你自己的故事。要求：1.注意緊扣主題，語言流暢，此數(shù)不少于80個；2.不得使用真實姓名和校名，如需使用名字，請用Mike,Gina等英文名，校名統(tǒng)一用GuangmingMiddleSchool;三、評講作文“Everyoneneedshelp”在生活中你幫助過別人嗎？或者得到過別人的幫助嗎？請以

（Atthebeginningof2020,Ifirstrealizedthatpeople’slivesareingreatdangerand

weak.Lotsofdangerwillleavepeople’slives.

Suchasearthquake,bore,rainstormandsoon.Sotolivehealthyandbetter,everyoneneedshelp.）Bywatchingnews,wecouldknowthatpeoplealloftheworldarefightingwithNCP----apneumonia.?WuHanisthecentralityofthisepidemicsituation.WemustthankthenursesanddoctorswhoarefightingwithNCP.?Theyhelpthepatientsgetoutofillness,butdidn’tthinkaboutthemselves.Howgreatthenursesanddoctorsare!Andtheyalsoreceivedlotsofhelp.Suchasthemedicineandmask

fromeverycountries,thedoctorfromeveryprovinces,themedical

materialfrompeople.Becauseofthishelp.WuHanbecamebetterjustwithin

onemonth

.

Everythingisjustlikethatsaying“Whereverneedshelp,theotherssideswillgive.”Ithinkwewillpassthistimesoon.

Inourdailylives,everyoneneedshelp,becauseofthishelp，wecanpasstheseunexpectedaccidentsintheworld,althoughwearesmallandweak.Atthebeginningof2020,Ifirstrealizethatpeopleareveryweakinthefaceofdisaster,soIthinkeveryonecan'tlivebetterintheworldwithoutothers'help.

點題要簡明扼要，直擊話題butdidn'tcareaboutthemselves.differentbelieve(重新立意）Helpingothersishelpingourselves.AlthoughallChinesepeoplearefightingwithNCPnow,Ibelievewecanovercomealldifficultiesifweunitetogethertohelpeachother.（Atthebeginningof2020,Flowersgrowwithsunshine’shelp,andanimalsneedtheshelteroftreestosurvive,sodohumans.

IstillrememberthedaythatMikehelpedtocheermeup.Theseniorhighschoolentranceexaminationiscomingsoon.Unluckily,mygradedroppedinashorttime.Althoughteachersexpectedmetobemoreexcellent,Ijustfeltnervous,increasinglylackinginconfidence

aboutmyself.However,ashinningstarlightedmylife——Mikecametohelpme.

HestayedwithmewhenIwasalmostcompletelydisappointedinmyself.“Istillrememberyou’vegotfirstplacemanytimesbefore,youarealwaysincredible,anditstillis.Comeon,pick

yourselfup!Youcangetit!”Afterthat,Iwasgraduallyconfidentandworkedharder,becauseIknowtheyexpectalotfromme,I

havenoexcusetoletthemdown.I’mreallygettingbetterbecauseofMike.Everyoneneedshelp,becauseeveryonefaces

problems.Whatwecandoistohelpothersandthanksforhelp,beingapositiveandhelpfulpersontolightothers’hearts.juniorof刪除，累贅atcheerexpectedmealotthank

開頭出彩，從物聯(lián)系到人，且點題

結(jié)尾呼題，且升華合理得當Flowersgrowwithsunshine’sAllpeoplelivetogetherontheearthfromancienttimestothepresent.Andnoonecoulddealwitheverythingwellwithoutothers'helpsofar.Ancientpeoplelivedtogethertohelpeachother,sotheycreatedmanythingsforhumansbecausetheypulledtogether.Now,ourparents,teachersandfriendshelpuswhenwehavedifficulties.IstillrememberIhadafightwithmymotherandwedidn'ttalkforalongtime.Ifelthelplessanddidn'tknowhowtodo.SoIaskedmyfriendsforhelp.Theycameupwithagoodideaformeandalsocheeredmeup.Thatmovedmealot.Isuddenlyrealizedhelpisakindoflovebetweenpeople,itspreadswarmthinourlife.Fromthenon,IfelthappierandmoreexcitedthanIdidbeforewhenIhelpothersbecauseeveryoneneedshelpandshouldhelpothers.Idecidedtomakeourlifewarmer.

寫作手法獨特，反向點題

標點應用不當，導致句子不完整

Fromthenon,IfeelhappierandmoreexcitedthanIdidbeforewhenIhelpothers.Atthesametime,inordertomakeourlifebetterandwarmer,everyoneneedshelp.寫作手法獨特，反向點題標點應用不當，導致句子不完整Nowadays,mostofpeoplearekind,buttherestillsomeoneis

selfish,theyevenneverhelpothers.Forthis,Ijustwanttosay,everyoneneedshelp.Inthepast,IthoughtthatIcoulddoeverythingjustbymyself,butonethinghadchangedmyidea,Abouttwoyearsago,IfoundmyEnglishhadnotimproved.Atfirst,Ijustwantedtosolveitbymyself,butafterthat,myperformancestilldidn'timprove,evenslowlydropped.Atthattime,myfriendAmyhelpedwithme.ShenotonlytoldmeagoodwaytostudyEnglish,butalsostudiedwithme.Withherhelp,myEnglishperformancehasimprovedalot.Everyonehasdifferentabilities.Tosolveproblems,wehavetopulltogether.Nomatterhowexcellentapersonis,hecan'tsolveeverythingonlybyhimself.Everyoneneedshelp,onlydependingonthestrengthoftheteamcanhelpusachievethegoal.

Everyonehasdifferentabilitiestosolveproblem,sowehavetopulltogether.especially描述細膩到位Everyonehasdifferentabil常見錯誤類型：1.審題不清2.拼寫錯誤3.表達混亂4.名詞單復數(shù)的問題5.句子邏輯不清，缺少成分6.代詞誤用7.缺少動詞8.前后不一致（數(shù)、時態(tài)、代詞、主謂）9.搭配不當10.標點使用不當常見錯誤類型：1.審題不清

語義表達不清，句子不流暢Onceatime,IdonotknowtoaskforhelpthatIcannotalwayssolveproblem.Onceuponatime,Idon'tknowhowtoaskforhelp,soIcannotsolveproblemseasily.語義表達不清，句子不流暢Onceatime,Ido短語搭配不當①動詞+介詞短語hearfrom(收到...來信）≠hearof/about

聽說eg.Ioftenhearfrommyparents.takecareof

照顧takecare當心，小心②介詞短語在那時

inthattime（錯)

在某天

inoneday(錯）atthattimeononeday③動詞+名詞短語dohomework做家庭作業(yè)makeacake制作蛋糕receivealetter收到一封信acceptinvitation接受邀請短語搭配不當②介詞短語atthattimeonone四、作文拓展延申及賞析TheGreatestHelp提示：初中三年馬上就要結(jié)束了，三年的時光一定給你留下了很多揮之不去的記憶。什么人給了你最大的幫助？你取得了哪些進步？有什么感想或受到了哪些啟發(fā)？請以“TheGreatestHelp”為題，寫一篇英語短文。要求：1.語言流暢、書寫規(guī)范、卷面整潔，詞數(shù)不少于60個；2.文中不得使用真實姓名、校名，否則以零分計。四、作文拓展延申及賞析TheGreatestHelpTheGreatestHelpIhavegotlotsofhelpinmylife，andmyfathergivesmethegreatesthelpofall.Istillrememberonethingthathappenedbetweenmyfatherandme.Once,weclimbedthemountainonasunnyday.Onthehalfway,IfeltthattheweatherwassohotthatIdidn'twanttocontinue.Thenmyfathertoldmelifeislikeclimbingthemountain.Nomatterwhatdifficultieswemeet，weshouldfacethembravelyinsteadofrunningaway.Hearingthesewords,Idecidedtokeepgoingon.Fromthenon,Irealizedthatcouragecouldbeatdifficulties.TheGreatestHelpHomework一、整理筆記1.中考英語寫作思路及流程（10-25頁）2.常見英語作文的錯誤類型（35-37頁）Homework一、整理筆記

MyHappiness提示：幸福是什么？幸?？赡苁峭瑢W間互相幫助的感動，幸福也可能是老師贊揚時內(nèi)心的激動，幸福也可能是父母一個細微的舉動。請你以“MyHappiness”為題，敘述一件發(fā)生在你生活中的令你感到幸福的事。要求：1.語言流暢、書寫規(guī)范、卷面整潔，詞數(shù)不少于60個；2.文中不得使用真實姓名、校名，否則以零分計。二、寫作練兵

Thankyou!Thankyou!中考英語高分作文攻略--寫事云南師大附中呈貢校區(qū)中考英語高分作文攻略云南師大附中呈貢校區(qū)英語作文怎么寫？不會??！記的單詞都忘了?。。W利給！胡謅吧！我是有原則的?。。∮⒄Z怎么寫？不會啊！記的單詞都忘了?。?！奧利給！胡謅吧！我是新冠疫情下，老師扮演主播角色

--表象化、片面化此視頻反映了什么現(xiàn)象？立意標新（社會層面）

--對復合型人才的需求（個人影響）廣度深度此視頻反映了什么現(xiàn)象？立意標新（社會層面）廣度怎樣寫好英語中考作文--敘事一、分析去年中考英語作文二、總結(jié)英語作文寫作思路及流程三、評講作文“Everyoneneedshelp”四、作文拓展延申及賞析怎樣寫好英語中考作文--敘事一、分析去年中考英語作文一、分析去年中考作文

分析云南近6年中考真題的書面表達可知，針對“經(jīng)歷與感受”這一話題共涉及過6次，2017省卷“ASpecialDay”、2019昆明“Onmyparent’sbirthday”、2018昆明“Asmallthing”、2017昆明A“Onedayinmychildhood”、2015昆明A“Thegoodolddays”、2014昆明A“Ahappytime”；全國近年中考真題也針對自己或者他人的經(jīng)歷和感受進行考查。命題探索一、分析去年中考作文分析云南近6年中考真題中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)(2019昆明)Onmyparent’sbirthday

某英文網(wǎng)站正在面向全國中學生開展以“感恩父母”為主題的征文活動，請你用英文以“Onmyparent’sbirthday”為題目寫一篇記敘文投稿，內(nèi)容為某次你為媽媽或爸爸慶祝生日的經(jīng)歷。要求：1.語言流暢、書寫規(guī)范、卷面整潔，詞數(shù)不少于60個；

2.文中不得使用真實姓名、校名，否則以零分計。

3.書面表達必須寫在答題卡上，如在本卷上作答，一律不得分。(2019昆明)Onmyparent’sbirthda范文點評Onmyparent’sbirthday

①August8thwasmymother’sbirthday.MyfatherandIwantedtogivehersurprisingbirthdaypresents.①文章采用“總—分—總”的結(jié)構展開敘述。范文點評Onmyparent’sbirthday①文范文點評②Inthemorning，myfatherandIwentshoppingandboughtaverynicecake.Thenwewenttothemarketandboughtsomefood.Whenwegothome，myfathercookedsomenicefoodinthekitchen.Iwenttomyroomtomakeabirthdaycard.IwantedtotellmymotherthatIlovedherverymuch.ThenIwroteinthecard，“Iloveyou，mydearmother！”Iputitonherpillow，thenwecleanedtheroom.Wefeltverytired，butwewereveryhappy.Whenmymothergothome，wesaid，“HappyBirthday！”Mymothersmiled.Wehadsuppertogether.Mymothersaid，“Thankyou，mydaughter！”③Howhappywewere?、陟`活運用多種句型：時間狀語從句和賓語從句等，講述事情的經(jīng)過。③結(jié)尾用感嘆句表達一家人的幸福。范文點評②Inthemorning，m二、英語作文寫作思路及流程（五個步驟）1.審題（文體、時態(tài)、人稱、題目內(nèi)容）文體：記敘文、說明文、議論文和應用文。時態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時、一般過去時、一般將來時、現(xiàn)在進行時、過去進行時、現(xiàn)在完成時、人稱：第一、第二、第三人稱題目內(nèi)容：寫人、敘事2.標新立意寫作的方向、意圖和動機。（廣度和深度）二、英語作文寫作思路及流程（五個步驟）1.審題（文體、時態(tài)、3.搭腳手架

①框架（總-分-總）

②提綱挈領--每段主旨首段點題中間描述事情經(jīng)過（人物、事件、影響）結(jié)尾呼題、升華情感3.搭腳手架4.細節(jié)處理、潤色

①準確地遣詞造句--好詞好句（語言能力）詞法（詞性、詞義）句法句子用法分類句子結(jié)構分類句子成分(主謂賓定狀補）

4.細節(jié)處理、潤色中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)定語從句定語從句4.細節(jié)處理、潤色②思維品質(zhì)（中英文化差異）1.中英表達差異--中文含蓄，英文直白Youaresohandsome.你好帥！陌上人如玉，公子世無雙。Youaresobeautiful.你好漂亮！回眸一笑百媚生，六宮粉黛無顏色。4.細節(jié)處理、潤色1.中英表達差異--中文含蓄，英文2.狀語的習慣用法有些不同

在北京大家都喜歡吃烤鴨。（地點狀語）

EveryonelikesroastduckinBeijing.

為了取得好成績，她每天都熬夜。（目的狀語）

Shestaysuplateeverydaytogetabettergrade.InBeijing,

everyonelikesroastduck.Togetabettergrade,

shestaysuplateeveryday.2.狀語的習慣用法有些不同InBeijing,every3.定語的位置有差異

中文（形容詞、數(shù)量詞、名詞、代詞充當）

平靜的湖面

一個故事今天的報紙我的衣服

英文（形容詞、名詞、代詞、數(shù)詞、介詞短語、動詞不定式、分詞、定語從句）

calmlakeastorytoday'snewspaper

myclothes

前置定語后置定語3.定語的位置有差異中文（形容詞、數(shù)量詞、名詞、代詞充當英語后置定語的用法：1.復合不定代詞要用后置定語修飾

somethinginteresting（interestingsomething）

2.動詞不定式作后置定語Doyouhaveanythingtosay?3.分詞作后置定語現(xiàn)在分詞表主動；過去分詞表被動Theman

lyingonthegroundismyfather.（主動）Thepen

bought

byherismadeinchina.（被動）英語后置定語的用法：2.動詞不定式作后置定語3.分詞作后4.介詞短語作后置定語TheboyinblueisTom.Thepeoplearoundtheworldarefightingwithdisease.5.定語從句作后置定語TheboywhoisstrongisTom.Ishethemanwhowantstoseeyou?4.介詞短語作后置定語5.定語從句作后置定語4.動詞用法的差異中文：我要去爬山。英文：Ialwaysclimbmountains.Iamclimbingthemountainnow.Iclimbedthemountainyesterday.Iwasclimbmingthemountainateightyesterdaymorning.IwillclimbthemountainnextFriday.

中文可以有不用動詞的情況，但英文不能省略動詞。我累了。Itired.（錯)Iamtired.4.動詞用法的差異中文可以有不用動詞的情況，但英文不能省略動5.一詞多性多形的正確使用happy（adj.)開心的，高興的happiness（n.)開心，幸福happily（adv.)開心地happier（adj.)更開心的happiest（adj.)最開心的morehappily(adv.)更開心地mosthappily(adv.)最開心地eg.Iamsohappytoday.Shesingsasonghappily.IthinkGinaisthehappiestpersoninherfamily.5.一詞多性多形的正確使用happy4.③巧用過渡詞起：開始承：承接，并列轉(zhuǎn)：轉(zhuǎn)折合：整合，總結(jié)過渡詞分類：文章結(jié)構（4類）句子間的邏輯關系（10類）4.③巧用過渡詞起：開始過渡詞分類：表示順序：first(ly);second(ly);tobeginwith;tostartwith;atfirst;atlast;intheend;next;then;afterthat;finally表示對比：while;ontheonehand…ontheotherhand…表示轉(zhuǎn)折：but;however;ontheotherhand;though;although;afterall;unluckily;unfortunately表示讓步：though;although;evenif/though表示舉例：forexample;forinstance;suchas;like表示順序：first(ly);second(ly);t表示并列:either…or;neither…nor;both…and;notonly…butalso;aswellas表示遞進：besides;what’smore;what’sworse;inaddition表示原因：because;becauseof;for;since;thanksto;forthereasonthat;as表示結(jié)果：so;therefore;asaresult;so…that表示目的：sothat;inorderthat/to;soasto表示并列:either…or;neither…nor;5.評審書面表達評分標準一檔（12-15分）：內(nèi)容切題、層次清楚、語言流暢、基本無語言表達錯誤。二檔(8-11分)：內(nèi)容切題、層次比較清楚、語言比較流暢、語言表達錯誤較少。三檔（5-7分）：內(nèi)容基本切題、層次不夠分明、語言表達錯誤較多。四檔（1-4分）：有一定內(nèi)容、但語言表達錯誤很多。（注意：書面表達語法錯誤全卷扣分不得超過2分；單詞拼寫錯誤扣分不得超過2分；抄襲卷中閱讀材料的，抄襲部分不給分。）5.評審書面表達評分標準中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)中考英語高分作文攻略寫事(課件共)

在生活中你幫助過別人嗎？或者得到過別人的幫助嗎？請以“Everyoneneedshelp”為題，寫一個你自己的故事。要求：1.注意緊扣主題，語言流暢，此數(shù)不少于80個；2.不得使用真實姓名和校名，如需使用名字，請用Mike,Gina等英文名，校名統(tǒng)一用GuangmingMiddleSchool;三、評講作文“Everyoneneedshelp”在生活中你幫助過別人嗎？或者得到過別人的幫助嗎？請以

（Atthebeginningof2020,Ifirstrealizedthatpeople’slivesareingreatdangerand

weak.Lotsofdangerwillleavepeople’slives.

Suchasearthquake,bore,rainstormandsoon.Sotolivehealthyandbetter,everyoneneedshelp.）Bywatchingnews,wecouldknowthatpeoplealloftheworldarefightingwithNCP----apneumonia.?WuHanisthecentralityofthisepidemicsituation.WemustthankthenursesanddoctorswhoarefightingwithNCP.?Theyhelpthepatientsgetoutofillness,butdidn’tthinkaboutthemselves.Howgreatthenursesanddoctorsare!Andtheyalsoreceivedlotsofhelp.Suchasthemedicineandmask

fromeverycountries,thedoctorfromeveryprovinces,themedical

materialfrompeople.Becauseofthishelp.WuHanbecamebetterjustwithin

onemonth

.

Everythingisjustlikethatsaying“Whereverneedshelp,theotherssideswillgive.”Ithinkwewillpassthistimesoon.

Inourdailylives,everyoneneedshelp,becauseofthishelp，wecanpasstheseunexpectedaccidentsintheworld,althoughwearesmallandweak.Atthebeginningof2020,Ifirstrealizethatpeopleareveryweakinthefaceofdisaster,soIthinkeveryonecan'tlivebetterintheworldwithoutothers'help.

點題要簡明扼要，直擊話題butdidn'tcareaboutthemselves.differentbelieve(重新立意）Helpingothersishelpingourselves.AlthoughallChinesepeoplearefightingwithNCPnow,Ibelievewecanovercomealldifficultiesifweunitetogethertohelpeachother.（Atthebeginningof2020,Flowersgrowwithsunshine’shelp,andanimalsneedtheshelteroftreestosurvive,sodohumans.

IstillrememberthedaythatMikehelpedtocheermeup.Theseniorhighschoolentranceexaminationiscomingsoon.Unluckily,mygradedroppedinashorttime.Althoughteachersexpectedmetobemoreexcellent,Ijustfeltnervous,increasinglylackinginconfidence

aboutmyself.However,ashinningstarlightedmylife——Mikecametohelpme.

HestayedwithmewhenIwasalmostcompletelydisappointedinmyself.“Istillrememberyou’vegotfirstplacemanytimesbefore,youarealwaysincredible,anditstillis.Comeon,pick

yourselfup!Youcangetit!”Afterthat,Iwasgraduallyconfidentandworkedharder,becauseIknowtheyexpectalotfromme,I

havenoexcusetoletthemdown.I’mreallygettingbetterbecauseofMike.Everyoneneedshelp,becauseeveryonefaces

problems.Whatwecandoistohelpothersandthanksforhelp,beingapositiveandhelpfulpersontolightothers’hearts.juniorof刪除，累贅atcheerexpectedmealotthank

開頭出彩，從物聯(lián)系到人，且點題

結(jié)尾呼題，且升華合理得當Flowersgrowwithsunshine’sAllpeoplelivetogetherontheearthfromancienttimestothepresent.Andnoonecoulddealwitheverythingwellwithoutothers'helpsofar.Ancientpeoplelivedtogethertohelpeachother,sotheycreatedmanythingsforhumansbecausetheypulledtogether.Now,ourparents,teachersandfriendshelpuswhenwehavedifficulties.IstillrememberIhadafightwithmymotherandwedidn'ttalkforalongtime.Ifelthelplessanddidn'tknowhowtodo.SoIaskedmyfriendsforhelp.Theycameupwithagoodideaformeandalsocheeredmeup.Thatmovedmealot.Isuddenlyrealizedhelpisakindoflovebetweenpeople,itspreadswarmthinourlife.Fromthenon,IfelthappierandmoreexcitedthanIdidbeforewhenIhelpothersbecauseeveryoneneedshelpandshouldhelpothers.Idecidedtomakeourlifewarmer.

寫作手法獨特，反向點題

標點應用不當，導致句子不完整

Fromthenon,IfeelhappierandmoreexcitedthanIdidbeforewhenIhelpothers.Atthesametime,inordertomakeourlifebetterandwarmer,everyoneneedshelp.寫作手法獨特，反向點題標點應用不當，導致句子不完整Nowadays,mostofpeoplearekind,buttherestillsomeoneis

selfish,theyevenneverhelpothers.Forthis,Ijustwanttosay,everyoneneedshelp.Inthepast,IthoughtthatIcoulddoeverythingjustbymyself,butonethinghadchangedmyidea,Abouttwoyearsago,IfoundmyEnglishhadnotimproved.Atfirst,Ijustwantedtosolveitbymyself,butafterthat,myperformanc