高考英語復(fù)習(xí)之讀后續(xù)寫旅行中被狗咬傷了腿幸得護(hù)林員的救治課件

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習(xí)旅行中被狗咬傷了腿，幸得護(hù)林員的救治1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文IwasbackpackingandplannedtoclimbavolcanocalledVolcanBaru.At3,474m,itisthehighestpeakinthecountryandoneoftheonlyplacesonEarthfromwhereyoucanseetheAtlanticandthePacificOceansatthesametime.Itisanactivevolcano,butlasteruptedaround1550.Isetoffbeforesunrise.Itwasalittlecold,soIhadpulledontightsundermytrousers.Iintendedtoreachthetopbymidday,andthenreturnbeforedarktogetalifttomyhotel.I’vealwaysfeltsafetravellingasawomanonmyown,whichI’vedonesincemy20s.Ilovethefreedom.WhenIgottothebaseofthevolcanoat7inthemorning，therangerdisagreedtoletmegoalone,butsaidOKbecauseanAmericancouplewerebehindme.4續(xù)寫原文Thefirstpartoftheclimbwasbeautiful.Itwasnotdryasyoumightimagineavolcanomightbe—thereweretreesandflowersallaround,andadirtroadforthefarmerswhoworkedaroundthere.Iwalkedforanhourandreachedafairheight.Theviewswereimpressive,soIstoppedtotakeaphotograph.SuddenlyIheardviolentbarkingbehindme.Iturnedandsawtwodogsrunningaggressively(挑釁)towardsme.Iexpectedthemtostop,buttheydidn’t.Astheygotcloser,Icouldseetheirteethlookedsharp,andthattheylookedangry.Therewasnowhereformetorun.Itriedtokeepcalm,butmyheartwasracing.I’dneverbeenbittenbyadog,andIcouldn’thelpbutfearwhatwouldhappen.TheystoppedadozenfeetfromwhereIstoodandkeptbarking.Iknewtheycouldmovefast,soIdidn’twanttotrytooutrunthem.5段首句Para1：Terrified,Islowlykeptwalking,saying,“Comeon,gooddogs!”Para2：Justatthiscriticalmoment,apickupappeared,drivenbytheranger.6Part2題目分析7點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)8續(xù)寫思路分析本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者背包旅行時，計劃爬一座叫巴魯火山的火山。結(jié)果在爬山途中，遇到了兩只兇猛狗，被咬傷了腿。幸虧得到了護(hù)林員的幫助，把作者帶回了基地，進(jìn)行了包扎。9續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：Terrified,Islowlykeptwalking,saying,“Comeon,gooddogs!”由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我嚇壞了，慢慢地走著，說：‘來吧，好狗!’”可知，第一段可描寫作者被狗咬傷的經(jīng)過。10續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：Justatthiscriticalmoment,apickupappeared,drivenbytheranger.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“就在這個關(guān)鍵時刻，一輛皮卡出現(xiàn)了，是護(hù)林員開的。”可知，第二段可描寫作者得救的經(jīng)過。11續(xù)寫思路分析續(xù)寫線索被咬——絕望——皮卡出現(xiàn)——得救——回基地——感悟12續(xù)寫素材可用詞匯：行為類猛沖：dashup/rushto到達(dá)：reach/arriveat出現(xiàn)：appear/emerge情緒類茫然：feelataloss/belost寶貴：precious/valuable13續(xù)寫素材可用句型：[高分句型1]HardlycouldIstepoutofthetroubleonmyown.(運(yùn)用了部分倒裝)[高分句型2]Facingthesetwoaggressivedogs,Idesperatelyfeltataloss.(運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)14Part3范文呈現(xiàn)15范文呈現(xiàn)16范文呈現(xiàn)17范文譯文我嚇壞了，慢慢地走著，說：“來吧，好狗！”突然，一只狗沖過來，把牙齒咬進(jìn)了我的腿?！芭?，我的天，我在一只狗的嘴里，它正試圖吞下我，”我心想，當(dāng)我感覺到它的牙齒咬在我的肉里時，疼痛讓我屏住呼吸。我撿起一塊石頭想把他擊退，但我很緊張，擔(dān)心他會抓住我的脖子，或者另一個人會一起來攻擊我。面對這兩只好斗的狗，我感到不知所措。我?guī)缀鯚o法獨(dú)自走出困境。18范文譯文就在這個關(guān)鍵時刻，一輛皮卡車出現(xiàn)了，由護(hù)林員駕駛：看到我當(dāng)時的狀態(tài)，他立即停下皮卡車，打開車門，示意我上車。當(dāng)我們到達(dá)基地時，他幫我包扎好腿，認(rèn)真提醒我旅行時安全第一。我感