讀后續(xù)寫森林中的“仙女”講義-廣東省廣州市高三上學(xué)期調(diào)研測試

讀后續(xù)寫“森林中的仙女”來源

2024屆廣東省廣州市高三上學(xué)期調(diào)研測試話題

姐妹感情，幸福的童年生活文本分析

Mylittlesister,Meg（本文的主要人物梅格）,saidthatshewasn'tafraidofthedarkanymoreandshe'dbeOKstayingwithAuntLilyinthe

country."

Aslongas

you'rethere,Mike,"shehadsaid.Still,Mumwasworried.

Meghadneversleptawayfromhome,awayfromthecity（為下文梅格想回家做鋪墊，這是她第一次離開家在鄉(xiāng)下過夜）.SoItoldMumIcouldhandleeverything.（文章第一段講明了主要任務(wù)Meg和Mike和故事的主要背景，我陪著梅格去姑媽Lily家住，這是梅格第一次離開城市去鄉(xiāng)下過夜）

Eventhoughwewereonlystayingovernight,

Meghadbroughtsixbooksallaboutfairies(仙女

)（點(diǎn)明梅格喜歡仙女故事，這是續(xù)寫故事的關(guān)鍵）.Afterweunpacked,

AuntLilyinvitedustopicksomeflowers.Aswefollowedherthroughtheforest,Megheldmyhandtightly.Butoncewereachedthe

sunlit

grassland,sheletgo."Butterflies!"whisperedMeg.Shescreamedwithdelightwhenoneflewnearher.

（“盡管我們只住一夜，梅格帶了六本仙女故事書”體現(xiàn)了梅格喜愛仙女故事，第二段寫到我們到了姑媽家，去草坪采花，梅格見到蝴蝶很興奮）

MaybeIhadnothingtoworryabout,Ithought.IstillrememberedwhenIwasherelastsummer,Ifoundsomeamazinginsects,

likefireflies(螢火蟲)andwalkingstickswhichI'dneverseeninthecity.

（這里注意到螢火蟲是續(xù)寫時理解“Tinyfairies”的關(guān)鍵，我在草坪上想到了去年夏天我在這里時發(fā)現(xiàn)的令人驚奇的昆蟲，螢火蟲等）

"Fairiesaremagical.Seethesebeautifulflowerstheygrow!"shekepttellingabsolutelyeverythingsheknewaboutfairies.（梅格相信仙女的存在，她認(rèn)為這些鮮花是仙女種的，文章多次點(diǎn)出梅格喜愛仙女）

Iwasgladthatifshekeptitupuntilbedtime,thenmaybeshe'dfallrighttosleep.

Megdidkeepchatting,rightthroughsupper.Thenthesunbegantoset.

"Doesitgetreallydarkouthereatnight?"（太陽下山后，梅格有些擔(dān)憂，晚上會不會很黑，她有些想家）

sheasked.Hereyeswere

fixedon

thewindow.

"Sure,butwe'vegotplentyoflightsinside,"saidAuntLily.SheleanedoverandgaveMegawarmsmile.ButIcouldtellshewasstillworried."Icouldreadtoyou."

Ihadn'tevenfinishedapagewhenherbottomlipstartedshakingslightly."Mike,"shesaid,

hereyesstartingtofill."Iwanttogohome."（梅格因為想家而哭了，我作為姐姐想辦法安慰她）Iquicklysearchedthroughherbookforsomethingtokeepherfromcrying.

Thebookfellopentoapagethatwas

dogeared

fromuse,apagethatwasobviouslyoneofMeg'sfavorites.Thetextread:"Amongthetreesdeepintheforest,thelightsoffairies

gleam

(閃爍)."Aha!HowcouldIforgetthose

"tinyfairies"

（這里的”tinyfairies”正式前文鋪墊過的螢火蟲）outthere?注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。"Meg,there'ssomethingoutsideIwanttoshowyou,"Iwhispered."Tinyfairies,Mike!"shesaid,pressingherforeheadagainstthewindow,"Everywhere!"本文主要特點(diǎn)本文結(jié)構(gòu)完整，多次對要續(xù)寫的故事作出鋪墊，在閱讀文本時要注意圈畫鋪墊，方便在續(xù)寫時快速準(zhǔn)確的抓住關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)，本文細(xì)節(jié)描寫，動作描寫較多，對妹妹梅格的性格和人物特點(diǎn)描寫細(xì)膩，我們在續(xù)寫時也可以適當(dāng)使用原文中的部分詞語豐富人物和續(xù)寫內(nèi)容。寫作中可能存在的問題本文中的關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)"tinyfairies"

是螢火蟲，在原文中只出現(xiàn)了一次，考生可能在閱讀時沒有注意到，在續(xù)寫時看到又不明白所指什么，再回去找而浪費(fèi)了時間，在閱讀時應(yīng)關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)注意圈畫鋪墊，方便在續(xù)寫時快速準(zhǔn)確的找到關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)。在續(xù)寫時要提前構(gòu)建好兩段的內(nèi)容，注重心理和細(xì)節(jié)描寫。生詞積累1.

一詞多義countryn.①國家②全國人民③鄉(xiāng)下，鄉(xiāng)村④地區(qū)，地域⑤鄉(xiāng)村音樂

adj.①鄉(xiāng)下的，農(nóng)村的②鄉(xiāng)村音樂的③祖國的2.

aslongas只要3.

sunlitadj.陽光照射的4.

fixon集中于，固定于5.

dogearedadj.

（書頁）折角的；襤褸的,破舊的。6.

gleamv.

發(fā)微光，閃爍；顯得光潔明亮；（眼睛）表露出，流露出；（因興奮而眼睛）發(fā)光，發(fā)亮好詞好句1.形容興奮①asenseofjoyandhappinesssweptover/floodedoversb.心頭滿是喜悅。②bathingusinextremejoy.Everyonewasgrinningfromeartoear.

使我們沉浸在狂喜之中。大家都笑得合不攏嘴。③Asmilelituphisfaceandhiseyeswereshining/twinkling/sparklingwithgreatjoy/excitement.

他臉上露出笑容,雙眸閃爍著喜悅/激動的光芒。④Delightedandthrilled,Igaveajumpintheairandthenskippedintothesupermarketalongwithmysmilingmother.

我高興地蹦跶了一下,然后蹦蹦跳跳地跟著我微笑著的媽媽進(jìn)了超市。⑤Itbroughttomylipsabrightsmile,whichshonelikeadiamond.它使我的嘴角露出了鉆石般閃耀的微笑。2.

自然環(huán)境①M(fèi)orningsunshinefloodedinthroughtheopencurtains.清晨的陽光透過拉開的窗簾傾瀉進(jìn)來。②Themountainwasbathedinthequietmoonlight.山沐浴在靜謐的月色中。③Theskywasdottedwithsparklingstars,shininglikediamonds.夜空繁星點(diǎn)點(diǎn),像鉆石般閃耀。段首句分析Passage1:"Meg,there'ssomethingoutsideIwanttoshowyou,"Iwhispered.Meg,我想帶你去外面看點(diǎn)東西“我小聲的說。分析：看什么東西是一個重點(diǎn)，在原文第三段我們可以獲取關(guān)鍵信息，“我”想讓Meg看的是螢火蟲。但由第二段續(xù)寫開頭可知，他們并沒有出去，所以這一段要寫“我”用了什么方法讓Meg通過窗戶就可以看到螢火蟲。Passage2"Tinyfairies,Mike!"shesaid,pressingherforeheadagainstthewindow,"Everywhere!"“小仙女，Mike！”她把額頭貼在窗戶上說，“到處都是！”分析：因為Meg相信仙女的存在，在她傷心時，作為姐姐的“我”應(yīng)該根據(jù)她的愛好去安慰她，所以這一段要注意體現(xiàn)Meg的情緒變化，由傷心想家—>開心入睡下水文"Meg,there'ssomethingoutsideIwanttoshowyou,"Iwhispered.”No,I'mnotgoinganywhereunlessIgohome.”Withtearyeyes,Megpulledthequiltoverherhand.Iwentoutoftherooaloneintotheforest,which

wasbathedinthequietmoonlight.Underthestarrynightsky,Ifoundthose"tinyfairies".Iopenedthejarandletsomefirefliesflyintoit.Shininglively,theseguysweregoingtoamuseMeg,whowashomesickandbelievedinfairies.Irushedtoourhouse,mycheekflushingandmyheartbeatingwildly.Onarrivingatourhouse,Iknockedthewindowandsaidwithexcitement”Meg!See!”Atthesametime,Iopenedthejarslowlyandcarefully."Tinyfairies,Mike!"shesaid,pressingherforeheadagainstthewindow,"Everywhere!"Asmilelitupher

faceandher

eyesweretwinkling

withgreatjoy.Those"tinyfairies"

dancedfreelyintheyard,andMegnevertookhereyesoffthem.”Theyaresleepingfairies,speciallytoremindyouthatthelittlefairyshouldsleep,andtheywillacpanyyouwhileyouaresleeping.”Isaidlightly.”I’mgoingtobednow,goodnightMike!”Megquicklyclimbedintothebedand