備考2024屆高考英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)第二部分讀后續(xù)寫專題二熱考話題素材6關(guān)愛鄰里

熱考話題6關(guān)愛鄰里[2020新高考I]TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline，somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems，andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime，shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed，hiswife，whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork，andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy—hisnamewasBernard—hadinterestedherverymuch."Iwishyoucouldseehim，"shesaidtoherownchildren，John，Harry，andClara."Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney，butIdon’tseewhathecando."Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom，thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard."Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney，"saidClara."Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.""SodoI，"saidHarry."Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem."Forsomemoments，Johnsaidnothing，but，suddenly，hesprangtohisfeetandcried，"Ihaveagreatidea！Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）."Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea，itwassuretobeagoodone."Itellyouwhatwecando，"saidJohn."YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus？Well，wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags，andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit."WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too.Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.人物主要人物Mrs.Meredith，herthreechildren（John，Harry，Clara）：從文中的描述"amostkindandthoughtfulwoman""spentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor""bringfoodandmedicinetothem""Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem"可知，Mrs.Meredith一家人善良、樂于助人。續(xù)寫部分可通過動(dòng)作、行為等描寫延續(xù)他們的這一特點(diǎn)。主要人物Bernard：文中對(duì)Bernard的描述"Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney"體現(xiàn)了他勤勞、孝順、懂事，為續(xù)寫第二段他賣出爆米花，得到足夠貼補(bǔ)家用的錢奠定了基調(diào)。情節(jié)及情感線Mrs.Meredith經(jīng)常幫助貧困者（她很有同情心）→她告訴孩子們關(guān)于一個(gè)貧困家庭的情況（孩子們很關(guān)心）→孩子們討論如何幫助Bernard（很想提供幫助）→John想到了一個(gè)好辦法（孩子們開心、興奮）主題本文主要講了Mrs.Meredith鼓勵(lì)孩子們?nèi)椭鶥ernard一家的故事，文章最終的主題應(yīng)該展現(xiàn)鄰里之間互助互愛。續(xù)寫第一段Mrs.Meredith認(rèn)為John出了個(gè)好主意，接下來應(yīng)講述孩子們得到Mrs.Meredith的肯定后采取的行動(dòng)以及Bernard一家對(duì)John這個(gè)主意的反應(yīng)。尾句銜接續(xù)寫第二段提示語：他們幫助Bernard制作好了爆米花。本段側(cè)重通過對(duì)人物間對(duì)話、動(dòng)作、表情等的描寫推動(dòng)故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展。續(xù)寫第二段Bernard開始了他的新營(yíng)生，接著應(yīng)講述Bernard賣爆米花的情況：如何售賣，在哪里賣，賣給誰，在這個(gè)過程中Bernard的感受如何。再根據(jù)續(xù)寫故事"結(jié)局圓滿"的原則可知，Bernard最終通過賣爆米花掙到了錢，因此本段可側(cè)重描寫B(tài)ernard的心理感受和變化。結(jié)尾部分適當(dāng)升華主題：Bernard表達(dá)感恩，鄰里關(guān)系和諧。1.TheywenttotellBernardtheplan.①用can’twait代替句中的go，凸顯他們激動(dòng)、急切的心情。Theycouldn’twaittotellBernardtheplan.②為句①補(bǔ)充地點(diǎn)狀語，將場(chǎng)景從Meredith家轉(zhuǎn)移到Bernard家。Theycouldn’twaittocallatBernard’shouseandtoldBernardtheplan.③將句②中告訴Bernard他們的計(jì)劃，改寫為現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語的形式，使語法結(jié)構(gòu)更豐富。Theycouldn’twaittocallatBernard’shouse，tellingBernardtheplan.2.Theyweretouched.①將人物聚焦到情感更易外露的Bernard母親身上，并用burstintotears凸顯感動(dòng)的程度，營(yíng)造畫面感。Bernard’smotherwastouched，andburstintotears.②用so...that...引導(dǎo)結(jié)果狀語從句改寫句①，使句子內(nèi)部關(guān)系更緊密。Bernard’smotherwassotouchedthatsheburstintotears.③用倒裝句式升級(jí)句②，使句子更高級(jí)。SotouchedwasBernard’smotherthatsheburstintotears.3.Hispopcornwaspopular.①補(bǔ)充原因狀語，說明為什么受歡迎，使文章邏輯更嚴(yán)密。Hispopcornwaspopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor.②為句①增加結(jié)果，凸顯受歡迎的程度。Hispopcornwaspopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor，sobagsofpopcornweresoldout.③利用句式（it’snotlongbefore）改寫句②爆米花賣完的情況，進(jìn)一步說明爆米花受歡迎的程度。Hispopcornwaspopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor，soitwasnotlongbeforebagsofpopcornweresoldout.WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too.Havinggottheapprovaloftheirmother，thechildrenbegantocarryouttheplanhappily.Earlyinthemorning，theycouldn’twaittocallat（迫不及待地去拜訪）Bernard’shouse，tellingBernardtheplan.SotouchedwasBernard’smotherthatsheburstintotears（Bernard的母親感動(dòng)得熱淚盈眶）.Afterwards，theygotdowntomakingpreparations（著手做準(zhǔn)備）togetherwithBernard.Soonafter，theysucceededinmakingpopcornandpackeditwithpaperbags.Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hewentdoortodooraroundthecommunitywherehelived，nervousandanxiousalongtheway（一路上既緊張又不安）.Muchtohisastonishment（令他非常驚訝的是），hispopcornwasverypopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor.Itwasnotlongbeforebagsof