2024屆高考英語復習：3月長沙四區(qū)一模讀后續(xù)寫精講-陌生人的相互治愈 講義素材

分析材料哪些信息可以呼應-篩選可以使用的詞匯：一般是和線索、引起矛盾出現(xiàn)的事物、導致矛盾升級的事物有關的詞匯-找出矛盾（要解決的問題）-明確氛圍和環(huán)境-找到“續(xù)寫兩句話”沒有提到的情節(jié)，但是卻可以點明、反襯、暗示某種品質，比如值得慶祝、紀念和令人悲傷、后悔的事情-找到是否有值得主人公反思、牢記的（某個親人、朋友、同學、老師說的話，可以在關鍵情節(jié)時激勵主人公）-找到是否有值得主人公懷念的情形讀后續(xù)寫原題目呈現(xiàn)：ThenoticewaspostednexttothemailboxesintheapartmentbuildingIhadjustmovedinto.

“AMitzvah(善行)forMrs.Green,”【主題詞】

itread,“SignuptodriveMrs.Greenin3Bhomefromherchemotherapy(化療)treatmentstwiceamonth.”【Mrs.Green是誰？】SinceIwasn’tadriver,Icouldn’taddmyname,buttheword“mitzvah”wasalwayswanderinginmythoughtsafterIwentupstairs.It’saHebrewwordthatmeans“todoagooddeed”.Butaccordingtomygrandma,italsohadanothermeaning.ThiswastheoneshewasalwayspointingouttomebecauseshenoticedthatIthoughtitashametoletpeopledothingsforme.

“Linda,it’sablessingtodoamitzvahforsomeoneelse,butsometimesit’sablessingtoletanotherpersondosomethingforyou.”【融洽-呼應材料“引起主人公思考和啟發(fā)的話語”】【思考：為什么讓別人幫你的忙也是一種善意？】Oneevening,snowflakeshadbeenfallingpastmywindowforseveralhourswhenthetimetoleaveforclasscame.Ilaboredtothebusstop,reachingitjustasabuswentby.Foranhour,Iprayeddesperatelythatabuswouldcome.ThenIgaveup.Thewindatmybackpushedmetowardshome.EvenifIwantedtoasksomeoneforagooddeed,whichIdidnot,therewasn’tasoulonthestreet.【你會注意到：到這里都沒提到MrsGreen】ButasIpushedthedoorofmyapartmentopen,Ifoundmyselffacetofacewithawomanatthemailboxwithasetofkeysinherhand.Obviouslyshehadacarandwasgoingout.Inthatsplitsecond,desperationovercamemyprideandIblurted(脫口而出),“Couldyoupossiblygivemealift?”Anoddlookcrossedherfaceandsheagreedwithouthesitation.l【融洽

-呼應了前文“sometimesit’sablessingtoletanotherpersondosomethingforyou”】l【你會注意到：到這里都沒提到MrsGreen，但是卻提到了這個awoman，還不是可以猜測她就是MrsGreen】Onourwaytomyschool,shespokesowarmlythatIfeltcomfortable.“Youremindmeofmygrandmother.”Isaid.Aslightsmilecrossedherlips.“JustcallmeGrandmaAliceasmygrandchildrendo.”Whenshedroppedmeoff,Ithankedheragainandagain.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。BackhomeIheardaneighborsaying“Goodnight,MrsGreen.”toGrandmaAliceonthestairs.Mrs.Greenvisitedmelaterandsaid,“MayItellyousomething?”“我”是一個自認為有能力而獨立的大學生，從來不愿意想他人求助。一個大雪紛飛的晚上，我怕遲到趕不上考試，終于鼓足勇氣求助，而這次開車送我去學校的，竟然是身患癌癥的Green太太。因為此次經(jīng)歷，我學會了向他人求助，而老太太也為再次像個正常人那樣去幫助他人而很高興。

【第一段續(xù)寫】BackhomeIheardaneighborsaying“Goodnight,MrsGreen.”toGrandmaAliceonthestairs.思考【融洽度、銜接度與內(nèi)容豐富】l【這里知道GrandmaAlice

就是

MrsGreen】l【融洽：她怎么了？-cancer】l【銜接：我第一次知道MrGreen就是Alice，想到什么？-

一個得了癌癥的人竟然看起來這么健康】l【融洽與銜接：把所有線索、引起作者思考的話語、引起作者心情變化的情節(jié)、人物關系，整合到一起

——

it’sablessingtodoamitzvahforsomeoneelse,butsometimesit’sablessingtoletanotherpersondosomethingforyou.奶奶說的這句話和MrsGreen的行為有什么關聯(lián)？——因為她得了癌癥，身體虛弱，讓她幫我的忙會讓她感覺她依舊對他人有幫助、依舊健康、依舊充滿生命的活力】第一段范文BackhomeIheardaneighborsaying“Goodnight,MrsGreen.”toGrandmaAliceonthestairs.

Mrs.Green,thewomanwithcancer【融洽度：呼應開頭的cancer】.

“GrandmaAlice”wasMrs.Green【融洽與銜接度：呼應開頭和續(xù)寫首句的MrsGreen的真正身份】.Istoodonthestairs,myhandcoveringmymouth【內(nèi)容豐富：反映作者思考、情感變化的動作，細節(jié)描寫】:Ihadaskedapersonstrugglingwithcancertogooutinasnowstormtogivemealifttoschool.“Oh,Mrs.Green,”I

stammered（結結巴巴地說）【內(nèi)容豐富：用詞生動，反映作者情緒變化的動作】,“Ididn’trealizewhoyouwere.Pleaseforgiveme.”【銜接度】

I

forcedmylegstomovemeupthestairs.【內(nèi)容豐富：表達生動，反映作者情緒變化的動作】

Inmyapartment,Istoodstill,nottakingmy

coatoff.HowcouldIhavebeensoinsensitive?

Inafewseconds,someonetappedonmydoor.【銜接度：銜接下文】【第二段續(xù)寫】Mrs.Greenvisitedmelaterandsaid,“MayItellyousomething?”思考【融洽度、銜接度與內(nèi)容豐富】【融洽與銜接：什么內(nèi)容會與主題

“itisablessingtoletothersdosthforyou”相關呢？】第二段范文Mrs.Greenvisitedmelaterandsaid,“MayItellyousomething?”

Inoddedslowly,motioninghertowardachair,sinkingdownontomycouch【銜接度/融洽度/內(nèi)容豐富】.“Iusedtobesostrong.”shesaid.Shewascrying.

“Iusedtobeabletodothingsforotherpeople.Noweverybodykeepsdoingthingsforme,givingmethings,cookingmymealsandtakingmetoplaceswhereIwanttogo.It’snotthatIdon’tappreciateit,butIdon’thavechances.TonightbeforeIwentouttogetmymail,IprayedtoGodtoletmefeellikepartofthehumanraceagain.Thenyoucamealong...”【融洽度/銜接度/內(nèi)容豐富：交代上文內(nèi)容，為什么“讓別人幫助你也是對他人的善意？”】ItwasnotuntilthenthatIunderstoodthetruemeaningofmygrandmum’sremarks:

sometimesit’sablessingtoletanotherpersondosomethingforyoubecausetheyneedyoutoletthemfeelyouneedthem.【點明主旨】好詞好句1.

Ipulledontwosweaters,acoat,awoolhatandboots,

bundling

upforthe

trek

tothebusstopthattherealestateagenthaddismissedasashort

stroll.

我穿上兩件毛衣、一件外套、一頂羊毛帽和一雙靴子，準備長途跋涉到巴士站，房地產(chǎn)經(jīng)紀人說那只是短途散步。2.

Foranhour,I

craned

myneck,prayingdesperatelythatabuswouldcome.整整一個小時，我伸長脖子，絕望地祈禱公交車會來。3.

AsIpulledGrandma’sscarfmoretightlyaroundmyneck,againIseemedtohearthatwhisper:

Asksomeoneforalift!Itcouldbeamitzvah.當我把奶奶的圍巾更緊地圍在脖子上時，我似乎又聽到了那句低語:找人搭車!可能是成年禮。4.Inthatsplitsecond,desperationovercamepride,andwithmybreathcomingoutinwhite

puffs

inthefreezinghallway,I

blurted,

“Couldyoupossiblygivemealift?”

Ihurriedlyexplained,endingwith,“Ineveraskanybodyforalift,but...”

在那一剎那，絕望壓倒了驕傲，我在