2024年廣東深圳高三二模英語讀后續(xù)寫試題講評(píng)課件

授課人：張某某學(xué)校：XX學(xué)校讀后續(xù)寫2024深圳二模01原文回顧原文回顧Ididn'tlikeDelsomuch.Healwayscalledmethenickname"Germy,"whichmeant"dirty,"insteadofmyrealname"Jamie."Besides,hewasknownasatrouble-makerinschool.SowhentheheadteacherMr.SmithaskedDeltocometohisoffice,InaturallythoughtthatDelhaddonesomethingmeantosomeone.Throughthewindow,Icaughtsightofasmallerboycrying.Delseemedunhappy,too.原文回顧Hedidnotreturntoclassthatday.Allofuswerediscussingwhathadhappenedtohim.Whatelsecouldsuchanannoyingboydo?"Hemusthavehittheboyandwassenthome,"1whisperedtomyfriends.Theireyeswidened.ItfeltgoodtoseethemsointerestedinwhatIsaid.原文回顧Thenextmorning,thewholeschoolwastalkingaboutDelbeingexpelled(開除)

forbeatingupakid.Iwassurprisedthatmyassumptionswerepassedonsoquickly.SowhenDelwalkedintotheclassroom,allthekidswereshocked.Thekidsnexttohimshiftedtheirdesksaway."What'syourproblem?"Delasked.“Idon'twantyoutoattackme,"onekidsaid.Somelaughed."Yeah,Imight,"saidDel.Icouldtellhewasjoking,butmanykidsthoughtheadmittedhedidbeatupsomeone.原文回顧Duringrecess(課間休息)，Deltriedtojointhekickballgame."Neitherteamwantsyou,"oneoftheplayerssaid.“Why?"Delasked,lookingconfused.

“Ialwaysplaywithyouguys."Theyignoredhimandwentonplaying.Delsatbyhimselfwhiletherestofthe

schoolenjoyedtheirrecessawayfromhim.Dellookedlonelyandsad,muchdifferentfrombefore.Istartedtofeelsorryforhim.原文回顧Laterthatday,

Ilearnedwhatreallyhappened.ThekidwasDel'slittlebrotherandhewascryingbecausetheirmotherfellillandwassenttohospital.IfeltevensorrierforwhatIsaidbefore.

Istartedarumor(謠言).情節(jié)概括_______(who)wasatroublemaker.Iwas_______(how)whenhecalledmemynicknamewithhumiliatingmeanings.Onedayhewascalledinto____________(where)andasmallerboywas_____(what).Itookitforgrantedthathe______________________________________(what)andtoldthisassumptiontootherkids,whobeganto________(what)Delthenextmorning.Delcouldn't_____________(what)byotherkids,feelingrather____________(how).WhenIsawthescene,Ifelt______(how).Ifelteven________(how)whenIknewthetruththat____________________________(what).That'swhyhewasintheoffice.DelannoyedMrSmith'sofficecryingmusthavebeatenupthisboyandbesenthomeestrangegetincludedlonelyandsadsorrysorrierhismomfellillandwasinhospital02寫作流程設(shè)計(jì)情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)【文末：】IfeltevensorrierforwhatIsaidbefore.

Istartedarumor(謠言).【Para1:】Atrecessthenextday,IsawDelsittingalonewatchingthekickballgame.【Para2:】NowthatDelhadforgivenme,Idecidedtodomorebeforetherecesswasover.DelsorrierrumoraloneDelhadforgivenmedomore抱歉的我，孤獨(dú)的他，錯(cuò)誤的謠言，“破碎的家”，我該做點(diǎn)什么？我能再做點(diǎn)什么？情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)P1:Atrecessthenextday,IsawDelsittingalonewatchingthekickballgame.

MymixedfeelingsP2:NowthatDelhadforgivenme,Idecidedtodomorebeforetherecesswasover.

MyapologytoDelDel’schange/attitude/reflectionKid’sreactiontoDelMyclarificationtokidsMyreflectionontheissueThetheme(故事主旨）Wordshavethepowertohurtandheal!寫作練習(xí)1、Mymixedfeelings我討厭“Germy”這個(gè)綽號(hào)，但是看到他被孤立也不是我想要的。Ihatedthenickname“Germy”,butseeinghimisolatedwasalsonotwhatIwanted.轉(zhuǎn)折情緒愧疚又汗顏，我深深吸了一口氣，鼓起勇氣，走到Del面前。Guiltyandashamed,Itookadeepbreath,summonedmycourageandwalkeduptoDel.情緒描寫+動(dòng)作鏈寫作練習(xí)2、MyapologytoDelDel問：“你想要什么？”他的聲音聽起來受傷多于生氣“Whatdoyouwant,Gerry?”Delasked,andhisvoicesoundedmorehurtthanangry.并列句我坐在他身邊解釋了整件事情是如何從我的猜測變成了一個(gè)糟糕的謠言。Isatnexttohimandgraduallyutteredhowthewholethingaretransformedfrommyhastyassumptionintosuchaterriblerumor.賓語從句寫作練習(xí)2、MyapologytoDel“我很抱歉，我本不應(yīng)該這樣做的?！蔽蚁蛩狼福瑓s不敢看他的眼睛?！癐’msorry.Ishouldn’thavedonethis.”Iapologized,daringnottolookintohiseyes.虛擬語氣+精準(zhǔn)動(dòng)詞寫作練習(xí)3、Del’change/attitude/reflection惱怒和驚訝從他的臉上一閃而過。Annoyanceandsurpriseflickeredacrosshisface.物稱主語但是幾秒鐘后，他低下頭，輕聲說：“沒關(guān)系。我想我對(duì)你也不夠好”。Butsecondslater,heloweredhisheadandsaidquietly,“It’sokay.IguessIwasn’tverynicetoyou,either.”寫作練習(xí)3、Del’change/attitude/reflection他的話安慰了我，但是我覺得他依然很難過Hiswordssoothedme,butIcouldfeelhewasstillsad.寫作練習(xí)4、Myclarificationtokids我跑向那群足球員并引起他們的注意。所有人都驚訝地停了下來。Iruntowardsthekickballplayersandcalledfortheirattention。Everyonestoppedinsurprise.“Del沒有欺負(fù)任何人?！蔽艺f到，并且解釋發(fā)生了什么“Deldidn’tbeatupanyone,”Istated,explainingwhatactuallyhappened.寫作練習(xí)5、Kids’reactiontoDel驚訝的討論聲傳開，最終一位運(yùn)動(dòng)員說到：“好了，Del,你要加入我們嗎？”Whispersofastonishmentspreadandfinallyoneplayershouted,“Alright,Del,doyouwanttojoinmyteam?”Del憂郁的臉上閃過一絲微笑，“當(dāng)然，我希望Jamie也一起加入。”AsmilebrokethroughDel’sgloomyface,“Yes,andIwantJamietojoinus,too.”寫作練習(xí)6、Myreflectionontheissue他害羞地掃過我，而我明白他在用這種方式向我道歉。Heglanc