2021浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫分析講義-2024屆高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)

2021浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫分析父親小時(shí)候把所掙的錢都用來補(bǔ)貼家用。父親George只有八年級(jí)文憑。Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighth-gradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,父親小時(shí)候把所掙的錢都用來補(bǔ)貼家用。父親George只有八年級(jí)文憑。“我”認(rèn)為“我”會(huì)在任何方面超過父親。Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldeither：Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超過）anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.“我”認(rèn)為“我”會(huì)在任何方面超過父親。Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone（長號(hào)）.雖然工作很辛苦，“我”也不確定究竟會(huì)得到多少報(bào)酬，但“我”依舊期待著薪水發(fā)放的時(shí)候。上八年級(jí)之前的暑假“我”被雇傭到附近農(nóng)場(chǎng)去做兼職掙錢。ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldandlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb's-quarters,foxtails,andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.雖然工作很辛苦，“我”也不確定究竟會(huì)得到多少報(bào)酬，但“我”依舊期待著薪水發(fā)放的時(shí)候。上八年級(jí)之前的暑假“我”被雇傭到附近農(nóng)場(chǎng)去做兼職掙錢。父親認(rèn)為“我”應(yīng)該也像他當(dāng)年一樣把掙得的錢用來補(bǔ)貼家用。Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.父親認(rèn)為“我”應(yīng)該也像他當(dāng)年一樣把掙得的錢用來補(bǔ)貼家用?！拔摇闭J(rèn)為把掙得的錢用來補(bǔ)貼家用這件事是不公平的。Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn'tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.“我”認(rèn)為把掙得的錢用來補(bǔ)貼家用這件事是不公平的。注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Thepaydayarrivedatlast.___________________________________________________Paragraph2:Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.______________________________________________文本勾畫Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighth-gradeeducation.tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.IthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超過）anythinghehadaccomplishedThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Ilookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.文章大意文章講述了“我”在八年級(jí)前暑假在農(nóng)場(chǎng)兼職賺錢的故事。父親希望“我”能把賺的錢貢獻(xiàn)給家里，而“我”卻覺得這不公平。直到薪水發(fā)放日的時(shí)候，“我”才體會(huì)到父母的擔(dān)憂。文本分析梳理原文（記敘文五要素）讀五要素WhoMydadandIWhenThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeWhereAneighboringfarmerHow(emotion)expected→disappointed→unfair→excited→understandWhat(mainidea)ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Mydadwantedmetocontributetothehousehold.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.情節(jié)+情感分析Para1.→情節(jié)：介紹爸爸情況，即爸爸上學(xué)只到八年級(jí)，十四歲便輟學(xué)工作補(bǔ)貼家用了。→情感：對(duì)爸爸的敬畏之情以及尊重。Para2.→情節(jié)：爸爸只是一位牲畜運(yùn)輸司機(jī)，“我”自認(rèn)為會(huì)在任何方面都會(huì)超過爸爸?！楦校悍浅Ｓ凶孕?，對(duì)任何事情都充滿了期待。Para3.→情節(jié)：分享了在七十年代“我”的暑假日常生活?！楦校洪_心快樂的暑假時(shí)光。Para4.→情節(jié)：鄰居雇傭“我”去除草，雖然工作很苦，但為了賺錢“我”依然堅(jiān)持著?！楦校豪鄄⒖鞓分?，對(duì)薪水充滿了期待。Para5.→情節(jié)：爸爸暗示“我”應(yīng)該像他當(dāng)年一樣把賺的錢貢獻(xiàn)給家庭?！楦校焊械绞c不愿。Para6.→情節(jié)：“我”意識(shí)到把自己兼職除草賺的錢貢獻(xiàn)出來是不公平的一件事?！楦校簯嵟⒉唤?，意識(shí)到不公平。續(xù)寫段1.終于等到了薪水發(fā)放日?！楣?jié)：①描寫“我”領(lǐng)到薪水后的興奮與激動(dòng)，計(jì)劃著如何使用這筆錢，但是卻不愿意把辛辛苦苦掙的錢用來補(bǔ)貼家用。②描寫“我”是如何轉(zhuǎn)變自己的想法的：看見了滿臉皺紋的父母的對(duì)家庭的辛勞付出，突然就理解了父親曾經(jīng)對(duì)“我”說的“工作是邁向成長的一大步”?！楦校簭募?dòng)興奮，再到不滿不愿，最后是理解父母，轉(zhuǎn)變想法。續(xù)寫段2.“我”立刻知道了“我”的父母擔(dān)憂的是什么?！楣?jié)：①描寫“我”理解了父母擔(dān)心自己不懂得為家庭做出貢獻(xiàn)，然后又想到了父親為這個(gè)家的辛勞付出，“我”便自豪地把錢交給了父親?！楦校簭陌l(fā)現(xiàn)父母不易，再到理解奉獻(xiàn)，最后自豪。句子銜接第一段Thepaydayarrivedatlast.Althoughthejobwasverytiring,IwasveryhappyinmyheartforIgotsomethingfrommywork.Thetoiloflaborwasforgottenforthetimebeing.IthoughtIshouldhavemyownmoneyandplannedhowtospendit.“Howmuchmoneyhaveyouearned?”Dadasked.Iwassurprised,reluctanttotellhimmyincome.Thenextmorning,mydad’slivestocktruckstartedrunning.Isawmyfather’shard-workingfigureandthoughtofhiswords“Ajob’sabigsteptogrowingup”.第二段Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.TheywereworriedthatIwastooselfishtogive.Irealizedthatmylaborwasveryhard,butmygrowthandourwholefamilyhadbeendependingonthehardworkofmyparents!Dadnevercomplainedaboutunfairness!Heevenseemedtothinkthatwasfair.Ithought,“I’veonlyworkedfortwoweeks,buthowmanyyearsmyfatherhasworked!”Intheevening,Dadcam