專題02 情感與情緒-備戰(zhàn)2025年上海中考英語書面表達(dá)滿分攻略（解析版）

（一）（2021年楊浦區(qū)一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthegivensituation.(根據(jù)以下情境寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。)法國“蜘蛛人”阿蘭.羅伯特的經(jīng)歷告訴我們，戰(zhàn)勝恐懼也可以是一種勇敢。你對勇敢的理解是如何的呢？請以“ThetimeIwasbrave(那次我很勇敢)”為題，根據(jù)自身的經(jīng)歷談?wù)勀銓τ赂业睦斫?。（注意?.短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名等個(gè)人信息，否則不予評分。2.照抄閱讀的語篇不得分。）ThetimeIwasbrave____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文：ThetimeIwasbraveInourdailylife,wehavevariousfearspreventingusfrommovingforward.Andovercomingthefearshelpsusbecomemoreconfident.Iusedtobeafraidofspeakinginpublic.Ineverdaredtostepupandspeakinfrontofacrowd.Then,inGrade9,aspeechcontestwasheldinmyschool.Withmyteacher'sencouragement,Ienteredforitandmadefullpreparationsforit.Luckily,Ifinisheditsmoothly.Tomysurprise,Iwonthesecondprize.ThistimeIwasbrave.NowIhavebecomemoreandmoreconfidentinexpressingmyselfinpublic.Don'tletthefeartakeyou.Juststepforwardandyouwillfindyoucandoit!【解析】【分析】【詳解】1.題干解讀：該題目屬于記敘文寫作。但寫作時(shí)要根據(jù)漢語提示，首先敘述自身的經(jīng)歷，然后根據(jù)經(jīng)歷談?wù)剬τ赂业睦斫狻?.寫作指導(dǎo)：本文應(yīng)該用第一人稱來敘述自身的經(jīng)歷；時(shí)態(tài)采用一般過去時(shí)敘述過去的經(jīng)歷，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)來敘述自己的成長和對勇敢的理解。描述經(jīng)歷時(shí)，力求語言準(zhǔn)確，敘事完整，行文連貫，保證條理清晰。（二）（2021年虹口一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic"Happinessdoesn'talwaysdisappearduringdifficulttimes"(以"在困難時(shí)期，幸福感不一定會(huì)消失"為題寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格).小到個(gè)人，大到團(tuán)隊(duì)、城市、國家，都會(huì)有困難時(shí)期，但即便是困難時(shí)期，人們還是能感受生活中的小喜悅，感受幸福溫馨的片刻，請結(jié)合自己或他人的經(jīng)歷，說說困難時(shí)期的幸福感。(注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何人名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予計(jì)分)Happinessdoesn'talwaysdisappearduringdifficulttimes____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文Happinessdoesn'talwaysdisappearduringdifficulttimesEveryonemayhavedifficulttimes.Evenindifficulttimes,peoplecanstillfeelthesmalljoysinlife.Oneday,itwasraininghardwhenIwasonmywayhomefromschool.Ididn’ttakeanumbrella,soIwaswet.Suddenly,astrangercametowardme.Hepassedmeanumbrellaandsaidhecoulddrivemehome.Ididn’tknowhimbutIwasverythankfulhehelpedme.Althoughtheweatherwascold,Ifeltverywarminmyheart.【解析】【分析】【詳解】題干解讀：這篇作文要求學(xué)生們以“Happinessdoesn'talwaysdisappearduringdifficulttimes在困難時(shí)期，幸福感不一定會(huì)消失”為題寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文。題目中并沒有規(guī)定具體的寫作內(nèi)容，學(xué)生們應(yīng)發(fā)揮想象力，結(jié)合自己的實(shí)際生活，寫一篇切題的文章。這是一個(gè)難點(diǎn)，學(xué)生所選取的生活中的事例應(yīng)合情合理。寫作指導(dǎo)：審題可知，這篇短文應(yīng)以一般過去時(shí)態(tài)、第一人稱為主來敘述，注意謂語動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)注意英語句式結(jié)構(gòu)和表達(dá)習(xí)慣，寫完整的句子，以簡單句結(jié)構(gòu)為基礎(chǔ)，穿插并列句、復(fù)合句、非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)等復(fù)雜句式，提升作文檔次。同時(shí)注意上下文的銜接，使文意連貫、表達(dá)流暢。（三）（2021年浦東新區(qū)一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Mychoice”.（請以“我的選擇”為題，寫一篇不少于60字的短文。）人生即是選擇。你在生活中一定做過無數(shù)次選擇，或許是明智的，亦或許是錯(cuò)誤的；或許是難忘的，亦或許是遺憾的……請結(jié)合你以往的一次選擇，談?wù)勊鼘δ愕挠绊懟蚰愕母形?。（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何真實(shí)人名、校名其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分。）Mychoice____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文:MybestchoiceEveryonehastomakedifferentchoicesinthelife.Fiveyearsago,Ialsomademychoice.WhenIplayedwithmylittlebrother,Ibrokemymother’sfavouritevase.Iknewshewouldbeangry.Iwantedtolieatfirst.ButsoonIchangedmyidea.Itoldmymotherthetruth.Tomysurprise,mymotherpraisedmeinstead.Honestyisvaluable.Ifitisourmistake,weshouldacceptitandthenwecancorrectit.Thus,wecanmakeprogressinourlife.【解析】【分析】【詳解】1.題干解讀：該題目屬于夾敘夾議的文章寫作，要通過自己的一段經(jīng)歷，談?wù)勛约核龅倪x擇對自己的影響或獲得的感悟。寫作指導(dǎo)：本文應(yīng)該用第一人稱來敘述自己的一段經(jīng)歷，說明自己做了如何的選擇，時(shí)態(tài)用一般過去時(shí)；最后要談自己的感悟，可以用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。注意敘述時(shí)的完整性，并保證條理清晰。（四）（2020年寶山一模）writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Athank-youletterto”.（以“給……的一封感謝信”為題寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文。信件格式已給，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）在日常的生活與學(xué)習(xí)中有許多人曾經(jīng)幫助或鼓勵(lì)過我們，令我們時(shí)常心存感激。請選擇一個(gè)對象寫一封感謝信，并結(jié)合你們之間的真實(shí)經(jīng)歷談一談你為何要感謝他/她，說一說你當(dāng)時(shí)的感受以及此時(shí)此刻想對他/她說的話。（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何真實(shí)人名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分。）Thefollowingisforreferenceonly.（以下表達(dá)僅供參考）havedifficultyin…encouragemeto…Itwas…ofyouto…____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文DearMrsWang,Nowordcandescribemythankstoyou,myEnglishteacher.WhenIfirstcameintothemiddleschool,IwaspooratmyEnglish.Oneday,youaskedmetogotoyourofficeafterschool.Youlistenedtomyproblempatientlyandencouragedmetokeepstudyinghard.WemadeaplanformyEnglishstudy.Afterthat,youstartedtohelpmefromtimetotime.Finally,ImadegreatprogressinEnglish.Ithankyouverymuchforallthehelpyouhasgivenme.【解析】【詳解】1.題干解讀：本書屬于記敘文，通過真實(shí)存在的一件事談?wù)勀銥楹我兄x她。描述過去曾經(jīng)發(fā)生的事情時(shí)，用一般過去時(shí)。并靈活使用所學(xué)的單詞、短語以及句型使文章出彩。2.例文點(diǎn)評：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。3.高分亮點(diǎn)：單詞短語：asksbtodo,encouragesbtodosth,keepdoing,makeaplanfor,starttodo,fromtimetotime以及makegreatprogress。高分句型：WhenIfirstcameintothemiddleschool,IwaspooratmyEnglish中when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句。【點(diǎn)睛】首先認(rèn)真審題，看清題目中的要求和要點(diǎn)；然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容，列出寫作要點(diǎn)及每個(gè)要點(diǎn)中可能要用到的表達(dá)，例如asksbtodo,encouragesbtodosth,keepdoing,makeaplanfor,starttodo,fromtimetotime以及makegreatprogress等；然后緊扣要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆寫作，在寫作過程中，要注意句與句、段與段之間的過渡，必要時(shí)可適當(dāng)運(yùn)用表示轉(zhuǎn)折、因果、并列、比較等關(guān)系的連詞，使文章過渡平穩(wěn)，自然流暢；最后，要仔細(xì)檢查有無單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)誤用等，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。（2021年長寧區(qū)二模）Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Keeppatientwhenfacingdifficulties”(請以“面對困難保持耐心”為題，寫一篇不少于60詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）閱讀文章（C）篇告訴我們?nèi)粘Ｉ钪胁荒苋狈δ托?，還提出用2種方式來幫助我們克服這樣的缺點(diǎn)，在我們的生活和學(xué)習(xí)中遇到的各種困難也很容易使人失去耐心，請你以一個(gè)具體的例子談?wù)勗鯓用鎸щy保持耐心。（注意：文中不得摘錄試卷閱讀原文，不得出現(xiàn)任何姓名、校名以及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分）Keeppatientwhenfacingdifficulties____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________KeeppatientwhenfacingdifficultiesIstillrememberthefirsttimeIrodebicyclewhenIwasseven.Mysisterpushedthebicycletohelpme.Fewminuteslater,sheletitgo,andIfellintheground.Sheaskedmetotryonemoretime,whileIwasextremelyimpatientafterfailingseveraltimes.Thewayshetolddidn’tsuitmequitewell.AtlastItookadeepbreath,andtriedmybesttohavethefinaltime.Unbelievable,Isucceed.WhenIamintroublenow,Ialwaystellmyself“keeppatientanddon’tgiveup.”Maybejusttryanothertime,everyonewilltastethefruitsofvictory.（六）（2019年長寧區(qū)一模）Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Thattime,Ireallyfeltworried”(請以“那一次，我真的感到很擔(dān)心”為題，寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格)在你的學(xué)習(xí)和生活中，你一定解決過一度令你感到擔(dān)心的事情，請你描述擔(dān)心的事情是什么，為什么擔(dān)心以及最后又如何解決的。（注意：文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分）Thattime,Ireallyfeltworried____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Eachofushaveworriedaboutsomething,andatthattime,wethoughtwecouldn’tovercomeit.However,itturnsoutthatwecanfigureitoutanyway.TherewasaspeechcontestinmyclasswhenIwasinGrade8andIreallyfeltworriedasIhadnoideahowtospeaknaturallyinfrontofallmyclassmates.Ihadpractisedalotbutwhentheverymomentwascoming,IwasstillsonervousthatIcannotstopshaking.Iwasworriedaboutforgettingwords,actingstrange,andworst,beinglaughedatbyothers.ItoldmybestfriendsaboutmyworriesandallIgotwas“Sowhat?”Thesetwowordsgavemecourageandmademecalmdown.Sowhat?ItwasnottheendoftheworldandevenifIfailedthistime,Icouldstillgetanotherchance.ThenItookadeepbreathandwasreadytogivemyspeech.Theresult,asyoumighthaveguessed,wasthatIfinishedmyspeechlike,perfectly.Andfromthenon,Iunderstoodthathowimportantitisthatoneshouldbeconfidentandbrave.（七）（2019年奉賢區(qū)一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Say‘’tomyself”(以“對自己說”為題，寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格)(注意:短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何人名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分。)你一定對你周圍的人說過:“謝謝”、“對不起”、“生日快樂”等許多話。你對自己說過的哪句話最讓你記憶猶新?或者此刻你最想對自己說什么?請用你的筆尖傾吐你最真實(shí)的心聲吧！____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【范文】Iwouldliketosay‘cheerup’tomyselfbecausetheentranceexaminationhasexertedsuchanunbearableburdenonmethatIsometimesfailtofeelthejoyfromstudyandseethebeautyinlife.Exams,forperspective,aresimplyaformofevaluation.Theprocessofgainingknowledgeisthemostimportant.Asaresult,thereisnoneedcryingoveranunsatisfactoryscoreaslongaswehavealreadymasteredtheknowledge.Besides,participatinginextracurricularactivitiesisequallynecessarysimplybecauseitenablesustodevelopinanall-roundway.Inconclusion,apositiveattitudetowardsstudymakesourlifecolorfulandmeaningful.（八）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“WhenIhavetroublewithmybestfriend”【以“我與好朋友鬧矛盾后”為題，寫一篇不少于60詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格】提示：生活中好友間也會(huì)因各種原因鬧些小矛盾，當(dāng)你與朋友間產(chǎn)生不愉快后，你會(huì)如何處理此類問題呢?請就此話題談?wù)勀愕淖龇ㄒ约斑@樣做的理由，可結(jié)合自身經(jīng)歷進(jìn)行闡述。(注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何人名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分。)WhenIhavetroublewithmybestfriend____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________WhenIhavetroublewithmybestfriendSimilaraswearetoourfriends,wearedistinctandindependentindividuals.Sometimeswemaydifferinviewsandhavetroublewitheachother.However,itiscommunicationandunderstandingthatreallymatter.WhenIhavetroublewithmybestfriend,Iwon’twithdrawbutcontacthimtimely,figureoutwhathasgonewrongandworkoutaplantorebuildfriendship.Tosomedegree,Ioweapermanent,steadyanddynamicrelationshiptomutualunderstanding.AttentionshouldbepaidtosimilaritiesratherthanhoveringoverdifferencesifIamtocultivateourfriendship.Furthermore,asIhavechosenhimtobeanintimatefriend,Ishouldneverbeconqueredbyobstaclesthataremeanttotestmyheartandadvancerelationship.Toconclude,whatevertroubleIhavewithmyfriends,Iwillreservedifferences,seekcommonground.（九）每個(gè)人都會(huì)從不同的經(jīng)歷中獲得不同的感受。哪一種感受經(jīng)常伴隨著你呢？請根據(jù)下面的圖示寫一篇短文。內(nèi)容包括:（1）Howdoyouoftenfeel?（2）Whatmakesyouso...Why?（3）Doyouwanttomakeanychanges?How?要求:（1）內(nèi)容完整,語意連貫,層次清晰,書寫規(guī)范。（2）文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名和校名。（3）短文開頭已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Ioftenfeel____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Ioftenfeelangry.I’mangrywithmyself.Ihopetodevelopsomehealthyhabitslikegettingupearlyortakingmoreexercise,butIstillspendmostofmytimestayingupplayingcomputergames.I’malsoangrywithmyfriendBill.HearguedwithmeseveraldaysagoandIdon’twanttotalktohimanymore.ButIreallywanttochangethesethings.MaybeIshouldbestrictwithmyselfandmaybeIshouldsaysorrytoBillfirst.Afterall,Idon’twanttolosemybestfriend.Ihopemylifecanbefilledwithpeaceandhappiness.【詳解】1.題干解讀：本題為材料作文，要求根據(jù)題目要點(diǎn)提示，寫一篇關(guān)于自己情緒的作文。題目所給要點(diǎn)提示必須全部包括，切忌遺漏。2.寫作指導(dǎo)：寫作時(shí)人稱應(yīng)用第一人稱，時(shí)態(tài)根據(jù)動(dòng)作發(fā)展時(shí)段正確使用過去時(shí)、現(xiàn)在時(shí)或?qū)頃r(shí)。這是一篇提綱作文，題目要求圍繞提示內(nèi)容寫作，命題既有限制又給予學(xué)生發(fā)揮的空間。在寫作中要綜合運(yùn)用所學(xué)知識(shí)，適當(dāng)運(yùn)用連詞、副詞等進(jìn)行過渡。（十）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“ApersonalhabitI’dliketochange”.（以“我想改變的一個(gè)個(gè)人習(xí)慣”為題寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何人名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分。）Thefollowingpointsareonlyforreference:簡述你想改變的這個(gè)個(gè)人習(xí)慣；說明你想改變這一習(xí)慣的理由及措施。ApersonalhabitI’dliketochange__________________________________________