讀后續(xù)寫：動作描寫落水救人(動作鏈+面)課件-高三英語作文復習

讀后續(xù)寫動作描寫Step1Readtheoriginalstoryandfillintheblanks.(快速找到故事元素)Time

Place

Characters

Conflicts

Reason

Climax

ElementsofthestoryAfewdayslater,Robertwasbathingwithhisnewfriends.InariverHenry、Robert、Robert’snewfriendsOneday,ontheirwayhome,HenryandRobertnoticedafight.Henryrefusedtowatchit,andRobertthoughthewasacoward.Robertdidn’tinviteHenrytogohometogetheranymore.Instead,hewouldgototheriverorsomewheretoplaygameswithotherboys.Robertstruggledintheriverandcriedforhelp,buttheboyswentoutofthewateranddidnothingtohelphim.Step2Makeaprediction1.WhathappenedtoRobertintheriver?（1）水環(huán)境描寫：______

/_______/_______/_______/________（2）Robert

心理_________________________

動作_________________________Tips:Circlethekeywordsofthegivensentencesandplotthestorybyaskingquestionsaboutthegivensentences.Atleast3relatedquestionsofeachparagraph視覺聽覺觸覺味覺嗅覺horrible/frightened/terrified/scared...struggle/cry、yell、scream/wave/beat/stamp…Paragraph1Robertwasfastsinking2.Whohappenedtopassby?Whatdidheorshedo?

3.What’stheresultofhelp?

（過渡句，銜接para2首句）Henry.HejumpedintotherivertosaveRobert.Robertwasbroughttotheshore/Robertwassenttothehospital.Paragraph2:Thus,Robert’slifewassaved.________Step3AppreciationandfillintheblanksParagraph1Robertwasfastsinking.

①【________(swallow)upbywater

greedily,hewasseizedbyhorror,________(cry)forhelp.】②【_______(feel)breathless,Robertstampedthewaterhelplessly,______(try)tokeephimselfafloat.】③【W(wǎng)iththeoxygen__________(disappear),hisconsciousnesswasfading.】Justatthemoment,Henryhappenedtobepassingby.④【Hearingthescreams,Henry______(run)totheriverside,______(throw)offhisclothesand_______(jump)intothewaterwithouthesitation.】⑤【___________(make)thegreateffort,Henry_________(bring)Roberttotheshoresuccessfully.】Swallowed

cryingFeelingtryingdisappearingranthrewjumpedbroughtHavingmade

Step4ObservePara1andsummarize5sentencepatternswecanusetomaketheactiondescriptionmorevivid.Sentencepattern1________+主語+謂語動詞+___________Sentencepattern2________+主語+謂語動詞+___________Sentencepattern3With+n.+非謂語(_____________________),謂語動詞Tip1:動作面句式。分別從_______、_______、________________等不同角度構(gòu)造畫面。

學會靈活運用_____________。在沒有連詞的情況下，一個簡單句只能有_______謂語動詞，但非謂語動詞可以有很多個。doingdoingdoingdonedoing/done/todo肢體面部心理/語言非謂語動詞一個Sentencepattern4主語+_____________________________Tip2:動作鏈句式。三個并列謂語動詞，動作依次發(fā)生。讀后續(xù)寫中三個連續(xù)動詞時態(tài)要一致，都為_____________）---簡稱________Sentencepattern5___________,主語+謂語動詞Tip3:動作鏈句式。出現(xiàn)兩個動作，前后兩個動作邏輯主語一致,動作先后之分明顯。謂語1+謂語2and謂語3一般過去時三連動HavingdoneStep5即學即練1.在我的鼓勵下，大衛(wèi)堅定地盯著我，表達自己完成比賽的決心。(encourage,stareat,express)22年新高1卷_______________________________________________________________2.感到很興奮，我緊緊抱住媽媽，嘗試冷靜下來。

（feel,hug,try）23年11月金太陽聯(lián)考________________________________________________________________3.感動的淚水在眼里滾動，我拿過三明治，狼吞虎咽。（rollaround,take,eat）21年1月八省聯(lián)考_______________________________________________________________

Encouragedbyme,Davidstaredatmewithdetermination,expressinghisdeterminationtofinishrace.Feelingexcited,Ihuggedmymomtightly,tryingtocalmdown.Withmovedtearsrollingaroundmyeyes,Itookthesandwich,eatingitlikewolf.4.他拿出肉，瞄準狼，直接扔向那只兇猛的動物。(pullout,aimat,throw)17年6月浙江卷____________________________________________________________________________

5.在遇到一些障礙后，簡慢慢地走到一個開闊的地區(qū)，等待救援。

（suffer，walk，wait）16年10月浙江卷____________________________________________________________________________Hepulledoutthemeat,aimedatthewolfandthrewitstraighttothefierceanimal.Havingsufferedsomebarriers,Janewalkedtoanopenareaandwaitedforrescue.請運用以上動作鏈和動作面的技巧，完善下面的語篇。（2021年新高考全國I卷）Inthemorning,asscheduled,

______________________________________________①________________________________________________________（雙胞胎早早起床，溜進了廚房，從袋子里拿出面粉).Oncetheysataboutmakingbread,theyfeltconfused.Atthattime，________②_________________

____________________________

他們的爸爸走進廚房，輕拍雙胞胎的肩膀，柔聲安慰道),“Don’tquit.Youcanovercomethechallenge.”______________③__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________（順利做完面包后，雙胞胎端著早餐，向樓上走去，喊醒他們的媽媽).

_________④________________________________________________________（被這暖心早餐深深打動，媽媽緊緊地抱住了雙胞胎，感到很開心。）三個連續(xù)動作，三連動謂語動詞，doinganddoingHavingdone,三連動Done,謂語動詞，doingStep5高考鏈接Inthemorning,asscheduled,①thetwinsgotupearly,slidintothekitchenandtook

someflouroutofthebag.

Oncetheysataboutmakingbread,theyfeltconfused.Atthattime,②theirfatherwalkedintothekitchen,pattingthetwins’shouldersandcomfortingtheminasoftvoice,“Don’tquit.Youcanovercomethechallenge.”③Havingmadethebreadsmoothly,thetwinscarriedthebreakfast,wentupstairsandwokeuptheirmother.④Deeplymovedbythewarmbreakfast,motherhuggedthetwinstightly,feelingveryhappy.Conclusion動作描寫動作鏈動作面?zhèn)戎貏幼髦g的時間先后三連動：

三個并列謂語動詞，動作依次發(fā)生Havingdone，主語+謂語動詞

發(fā)生_____發(fā)生側(cè)重從不同角度描繪同一個畫面———————————————————————————————————————————————————主語+謂語1+謂語2and謂語3先后肢體面部語言/心理Done,主語+謂語動詞,doingDoing,主語+謂語動詞,doingWith+n.+非謂語,主語+謂語動詞

Discussion：discusswithyourpartnersandwritedownatleast3relatedquestionsofPara.2tohelpyouplotthestory.Step6HomeworkParagraph2Thus,Robert’slifewassaved.________________________________(2)_________________________________(3)_________________________________(主旨升華)HowdidRobertfeelafterhewassaved?WhatwouldRobertdo?

WhatwouldHenryrespondtoit?WhatwouldRobertlearnfromthisincident?2.CompletethePara.2afterclassParagraph2:Thus,Robert’slifewassaved._________________________