2025年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫熱考話題素材練習(xí)

專題二熱考話題素材

熱考話題1挑戰(zhàn)自我

困難性格內(nèi)向、身體缺陷體、面對(duì)要完成的任務(wù)不白信、害怕、恐懼等

自我激勵(lì)或他人鼓勵(lì)（白我反思；師長、家人、朋友等的幫助和鼓勵(lì)）

戰(zhàn)螃難K挑戰(zhàn)過程及結(jié)果（直面恐懼、迎難而上、最終挑戰(zhàn)成功）

挑戰(zhàn)自我

注重突出人物在受到激勵(lì)后以及直面挑戰(zhàn)時(shí)的心理變化、挑戰(zhàn)過程中人物

細(xì)節(jié)刻畫的具體動(dòng)作細(xì)節(jié)

的q重拾勇氣、自信；突破自我、戰(zhàn)勝自我等

[2022新高考I]Itwasthedayofthebigcrosscountryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinand

aroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute（路線）throughthickevergreenforest.

IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfor

tenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn'twiththeother

children.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool'scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.nIwasafraidthatkidsfrom

otherschoolswouldlaughathim,"heexplainedunfortably.nIgavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide."

Ibitbackmyfrustration。懊寸齒）.Iknewthecoachmeantwell——hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.After

makingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsideto

sideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhis

classmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.

ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecrosscountryteam.Itjusttookhim

longer—that'sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheother

children,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavid

facedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

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主要人物David：從文中的描述”smallfortenyearsold""bigtoothysmile""hadworkedsohardforthis

event""hadabraindisease""alwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisability”和“hadnotmissedasinglepractice"

可知，David身患?xì)埣驳e極樂觀、意志堅(jiān)強(qiáng)。

人物

次要人物T'：從文中的描述”makingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted"和"familiarwiththechallenges

Davidfaced”“proudofhisstrongdetermination可以看出，“我”是一個(gè)關(guān)愛學(xué)生的老師，也暗示了續(xù)寫部

分應(yīng)有“我”與David溝通并試圖勸說他參加比賽以及David聽從勸說并以堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的意志完成比賽的情節(jié)。

原文最后一段中描述的"hisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid"表明，同學(xué)們對(duì)David態(tài)度友

好，這也為續(xù)寫第二段David在賽場上時(shí)同學(xué)們的表現(xiàn)埋下了伏筆。

越野賽前得知David決定不參加比賽（David情緒低落，害怕被嘲笑）一找教練獲悉原因，回想

情節(jié)及

David雖患腦疾卻認(rèn)真積極訓(xùn)練（"我"為他感到自豪）一續(xù)寫第二段提示語，David走向起跑線（David

情感線

重拾勇氣和信心）。

根據(jù)讀后續(xù)寫“結(jié)局圓滿”的原則可知，David最終應(yīng)該完成了比賽。再結(jié)合原文中David遇到的困

主題難一一行走不穩(wěn)、害怕被嘲笑等可知，文章最終的主題應(yīng)該體現(xiàn)David直面挑戰(zhàn)、克服恐懼、戰(zhàn)勝自

己。

Step2構(gòu)思框架

根據(jù)續(xù)寫兩段的提示語可知，本段主要描述David從不愿參加越野跑，到走向起跑線參加比賽的轉(zhuǎn)

續(xù)寫

'〔變過程。涉及的人物是T和David,主要故事情節(jié)："我”開導(dǎo)、鼓勵(lì)David以及他對(duì)“我”的勸說的反

自一段

應(yīng)，側(cè)重人物對(duì)話、動(dòng)作、—表情和心理描寫。尾句銜接第二段提示語：David最終決定參加越野跑。

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段提示語可知，本段的故事情節(jié)應(yīng)發(fā)生在越野賽跑線路上，涉及的主要人物是

續(xù)寫David,也可以呼應(yīng)原文，加入“我”、教練和學(xué)生們的反應(yīng)。主要故事情節(jié)：David在越野賽跑過程中

第二段的具體表現(xiàn)及比賽結(jié)果，側(cè)重人物在比賽過程中以及受到大家鼓舞后的動(dòng)作、心理描寫。最終升華主

題，David戰(zhàn)勝了內(nèi)心的恐懼。

Step3優(yōu)化細(xì)節(jié)

l.Hewasinspiredanddecidedtohaveatry.

①用形容詞作狀語改寫句子，使行文更連貫。

Inspired,hedecidedtohaveatry.

②運(yùn)用連續(xù)動(dòng)作描寫將David決定參賽這一過程細(xì)化。

Inspired,hetookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage,"Iwillhaveatry."

2.Theycheeredhimon.

①將人群具體到個(gè)人或一些人，因?yàn)椤拔摇庇葹殛P(guān)注David,所以他一摔倒，"我"應(yīng)該是第一個(gè)作出反應(yīng)的人，緊

接著是他的同學(xué)們。這樣使情節(jié)發(fā)展更加自然順暢。

Istartedtoshoutencouragementandhisclassmatesallappearedandcheeredhimon.

②用as引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句改寫句①，并運(yùn)用現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語改寫cheerhimon,使句子語法結(jié)構(gòu)更豐富。

AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement,hisclassmatesallappeared,cheeringhimon.

③為句②同學(xué)們的加油鼓勵(lì)增加具體的話語，使內(nèi)容更富有畫面感。

AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement,hisclassmatesallappeared,cheeringhimon.neon,David.Youcandoit1

“theyshoutedenthusiastically.

3.Davidfinishedtherun.

①使用具體的動(dòng)作描寫表示David完成比賽，切合當(dāng)時(shí)比賽的氛圍和場景。

Davidcrossedthefinishline.

②為句①增加對(duì)David通過終點(diǎn)線時(shí)人們的歡呼聲和喝彩聲的描寫，使情節(jié)自然，更具有畫面感。

Davidcrossedthefinishlinewithwildcheersandapplause.

Step4欣賞佳作

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Hiseyesdeliberatelyavoidedmine,withhislimbs

unavoidablyshaking."It'snottherealyou,David,"Ipattedhimgentlyontheback（輕輕地拍了拍他的后背）and

saidquietly.HYouhavepreparedsomuchforit.Lookatmyeyesandtellme.Doyouwanttorun?"Iheldmybreath（屏

住呼吸）asDavidlookedup.Inspired,hetookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage（深吸一口氣，鼓起勇氣），

HIwillhaveatry.'1

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Thestarter5sgunsounded!Davidsparedno

efforttorunasifhehadforgottenallhisweaknesses,buthestilltrippedwithinafewkilometers.Myheartsank.AsI

startedtoshoutencouragement,hisclassmatesallappeared,cheeringhimon.Meon,David.Youcandoit!”they

shoutedenthusiastically.Touched,hepickedhimselfupandstartedagain.Finally,hecrossedthefinishlinewithwild

cheersandapplause.Excitementswallowedhim（他激動(dòng)壞了）andheembracedmetightly.Atthattime,Iknewhe

hadalreadyoverethedarknessstuckinhismind（戰(zhàn)勝了他腦海中的陰霾）.

熱考話題2個(gè)人成長

精節(jié)構(gòu)思.

情嬴1苦惱、憤懣等消極情緒，左右為難的兩難處境等

/J與師長談心、參與勞動(dòng)、參加集體活動(dòng)或發(fā)生某一特殊事件等使主人公轉(zhuǎn)變

［個(gè)人成長）I成長中I原有想法'態(tài)度等---------------------------------------------

7T成長后?理解師長用心、感受勞動(dòng)魅力、體會(huì)活動(dòng)意義等，獲得了個(gè)人感悟和成長

［2021浙江改編］Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn'tunderstandmy

worldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedanduseditto

payfamilyexpenses.

Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldeither:Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超過）

anythinghehadacplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.

Summersinthemid70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparing

formyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone（長

號(hào)）.

ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.

Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywith

chemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.This

happenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb^quarters,foxtails,

andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughI

wasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.

Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."My

dad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.

Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn'tinterested.Idecided

itwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.

WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome—itwas$119-mydadwantedtotalktome.

IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.

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主要人物George（mydad）：從文中的描述”Aquietman...Fromage14,heworked.Andhis

dad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses"和”I'mgladyouwillbe

contributingtothehousehold”可以看出，父親George是一個(gè)沉默寡言、能吃苦、有家庭責(zé)任感的人，

他認(rèn)為“我”的打工所得也應(yīng)該貼補(bǔ)家用。

人物主要人物T'：從文中的描述“1wouldsurpass（超過）anythinghehadacplished"和"Idecideditwas

notfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney”可以看出，“我“志存高遠(yuǎn)、不理解父親，并不認(rèn)可父親將“我"

的打工所得“征收”的想法，這也是文章的沖突所在。

根據(jù)文中的"hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities"和"Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworld

either”可知，父子二人相互缺乏了解，這為下文的發(fā)展埋下了伏筆。

“我”與父親相互不理解（"我“想超越他）一"我“到隔壁農(nóng)場打工掙錢（期待能擁有這筆錢）一父

情節(jié)及

親想用這筆錢貼補(bǔ)家用（“我”感到不公，對(duì)繼續(xù)在農(nóng)場打工失去興趣）一續(xù)寫第二段提示語，父親讓

情感線

"我"自己支配薪水（感到驚喜）。

._父親本來要讓"我"把打工的收入用來貼補(bǔ)家用，最后卻改變了主意，這應(yīng)該會(huì)給“我"帶來觸動(dòng)，

主題

因此，文章最終的主題應(yīng)該展現(xiàn)“我”的成長、對(duì)父親的理解以及對(duì)家庭責(zé)任的認(rèn)可。

Step2構(gòu)思框架

根據(jù)原文及續(xù)寫第一段的提示語可知，本段主要描述父親與“我”談話的內(nèi)容、過程以及“我”的反

續(xù)寫

、應(yīng)，可以從動(dòng)作、神態(tài)描寫體現(xiàn)“我”不情愿和不甘的心理狀態(tài)，以及父親在與“我”談話過程中對(duì)“我”

第一段

的理解。尾句銜接第二段的提示語：父親讓“我“留錢自用。

續(xù)寫結(jié)合原文和本段的提示語可知，本段應(yīng)該描寫“我“聽到父親的決定后驚訝、興奮的心理狀態(tài)；

第二段與此同時(shí)，在續(xù)寫本段時(shí)還應(yīng)呼應(yīng)原文中的描述并凸顯主題，將“我”的反思和成長感悟展現(xiàn)出來。

StepT優(yōu)化細(xì)節(jié)

1.1wantedtoarguewithmydad.

①用具體的動(dòng)作描寫代替want,體現(xiàn)“我“想留著錢的決心。

Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad.

②為句①增加條件狀語從句，使文章邏輯更嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，前后銜接更連貫。

Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad,ifheannouncedthemoneywasn'tmine.

③為句②增加具體神態(tài)描寫，凸顯“我“想留著錢的渴望。

Withmyeyesgluedtothepaycheck,Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad,ifheannouncedthe

moneywasn'tmine.

2.1wasunwillingtohandinthemoney.

用具體手部動(dòng)作和心理活動(dòng)描寫改寫優(yōu)化句子，體現(xiàn)“我”的不情愿。

Igrippedthepaycheckmorefirmly,readytoargue.

3.1feltashamed.

①用面部表情代替feelashamed,使表達(dá)更生動(dòng)。

Iflushedwithshame.

②為句①增加原因狀語，并運(yùn)用現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語，使感情轉(zhuǎn)變更加順暢自然。

Recallingmyambitionofsurpassinghim,Iflushedwithshame.

Step4欣賞佳作

WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome——itwas$119——mydadwantedtotalktome.Hetoldmetowaitintheliving

roomforawhile.Isatonthesofa，withmyeyesgluedtothepaycheck（眼睛盯著薪水），searchingmymindfor（腦

海里才叟索著）wordstoarguewithmydadifheannouncedthemoneywasn'tmine.Justthen,thedooropenedandin

camemydad.Themomenthesatdownbesideme,Igrippedthepaycheckmorefirmly（更力口牢牢地握住薪水），

readytoargue.However,hegentlyplacedhisrighthandonmyshoulder（輕輕地把他的右手放在我的肩上）and

said,"Iknowyouhavegrownupalotthroughyourwork...**Thentherewasalongpause.Hewithdrewhishand（X攵回

他的手）andslowlycontinued,"Youdeservethemoneyandthemoneyisyoursnow."

IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.Inamoment,Ididn'tknowwhattosay.With

thismoney,Icouldbuyanewfootball,oranewbike.Ilookedatmydadwithgratitude,andhesmiledawkwardly,

nUseitwisely,son."Recallingmyambitionofsurpassinghim,Iflushedwithshame（羞紅了臉）.Althoughlife

hadn'tbeenfairtohim,hehadtriedhisbesttomakeitfairtome.Meanwhile,IalsorealizedtherewasaburdenthatI

shouldshoulderinmyfamily.

熱考話題3師生關(guān)系

在學(xué)習(xí)過程中遇到困難和打擊，如成績不佳、能力有限等，在老師的引導(dǎo)、

學(xué)習(xí)?鼓勵(lì)和幫助下,下定決心刻苦學(xué)習(xí)、奮發(fā)圖強(qiáng)，最終突破自我,取得進(jìn)步

——-~?在校園生活中遇到挫折，如性格羞怯、缺乏自信心，不敢參加學(xué)校的活動(dòng)或

/比賽，或者參加活動(dòng)表現(xiàn)不佳，自信心受挫。老師及時(shí)發(fā)現(xiàn)問題或者學(xué)生向

I老師傾訴、求助，在老師的開導(dǎo)和鼓勵(lì)下，學(xué)生鼓足勇氣、重拾信心，順利

―-展—|參加活動(dòng)或在比賽中取得好成績

ijrp生關(guān)系J-----1校園/古切--------------------------------------------------------------------

\展現(xiàn)教師師德、良師益友對(duì)學(xué)生的深遠(yuǎn)影響，使學(xué)生取得進(jìn)步或?qū)W到某種品

\|升華|質(zhì)，受益終身____________________________________

[2023新高考I]WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaid

nowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.

Writingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingofthe

Titanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:"BecauseIloveyour

stories.Ifyou'rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis."Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedto

giveitatry.

IchosePaulReveredhorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（專艮匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseat

nightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswereing.Mystorywouldestraightfromthe

horse'smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse'schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?I

sympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere?shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworked

hard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaul

Reverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,"Great.Now,writeitagain."

Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoyment

ofwriting.IfIdidn'twin,Iwouldn'tcare.

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher?sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.___________________________________________________

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主要人物TZ從文中描述的"saidnowithoutthinking""difficultandpainfulforme""Iagreedtogive

itatry""wantedtoquit...Ikeptgoing...checkedmyspelling...correctmygrammar...readafewofthem""wrote

itagain,andagainandagain"可以看出，"我"起初缺乏自信，但隨后變得努力勤奮二信念堅(jiān)定。

人物次要人物mysocialstudiesteacher：從文中描述的"Noonelaughedharderthanhedid""Iloveyour

stories...youhaveagoodshotatthis""laughedoutloud,andsaid,'Great.Now,writeitagain.,"可

知，“我”的社會(huì)科學(xué)老師樂觀開朗，天心、理解、支持、鼓勵(lì)學(xué)生。為續(xù)寫第二段“我”來到老師辦公

室表達(dá)對(duì)老師的感激之情奠定了基礎(chǔ)。

社會(huì)科學(xué)老師要“我”參加寫作比賽（“我”很抗拒，直接拒絕）―他鼓勵(lì)“我”參加比賽（“我”受到

情節(jié)及

鼓舞，決定試試）一"我"選定主題開始寫作（糾結(jié)、自我懷疑，但還是繼續(xù)堅(jiān)持）T“我”一遍遍修

情感線

改、潤色文章（已經(jīng)不在意能否得獎(jiǎng)）

通過"我"前后對(duì)待寫作的態(tài)度的強(qiáng)烈反差，體現(xiàn)了要持之以恒地努力，克服困難并從中獲得樂趣

主題和成長的主題；同時(shí)根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段提示語可知，本文也體現(xiàn)了良師益友這一主題，贊美了老師對(duì)學(xué)

生潤物細(xì)無聲的引導(dǎo)和鼓勵(lì)。

Step2構(gòu)思框架

銜接本段首句的thenews,接下來應(yīng)該是得到獲獎(jiǎng)的消息、聽到消息后“我”的反應(yīng)；銜接第二段

續(xù)寫

首句，本段還應(yīng)該講到頒獎(jiǎng)典禮上發(fā)生的事情，尾句落腳點(diǎn)在回想老師對(duì)自己的幫助，與第二段首

第一段

句完美連貫起來。本段重點(diǎn)描寫消息引發(fā)的一系列心理活動(dòng)和動(dòng)作。

銜接本段首句，接下來應(yīng)該是老師得知"我”獲獎(jiǎng)后的反應(yīng)、“我”對(duì)老師的回應(yīng)；尾句升華主題：

續(xù)寫

個(gè)人感悟，這件事對(duì)“我”的深遠(yuǎn)影響。本段重點(diǎn)描寫"我"到辦公室后師生間的互動(dòng)，可通過對(duì)話、動(dòng)

第二段

作、心理描寫等刻畫細(xì)節(jié)。

Step3優(yōu)化細(xì)節(jié)

1.1feltexcited.

①用短語beoverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbelief替換feelexcited,體現(xiàn)用詞的豐富性。

Iwasoverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbelief.

②用so...that結(jié)構(gòu)改寫句①，引出“我”聽到消息后激動(dòng)的身體表現(xiàn)。

Iwassooverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbeliefthatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.

③用倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)改寫句②，更加凸顯“我"得知獲獎(jiǎng)時(shí)的激動(dòng)心情。

SooverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbeliefwasIthatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.

2.1feltexcitedandproudwhenIacceptedtheprize.

①用現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語改寫句子并增加副詞修飾，豐富句式結(jié)構(gòu)。

Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud,Iacceptedtheprize.

②為句①增加“我”的獲獎(jiǎng)感悟，照應(yīng)前文"我”寫作時(shí)的堅(jiān)持和努力，使前后文銜接更緊密。

Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud,Iacceptedtheprize,asymbolandrecognitionofmypastperseveranceand

hardwork.

3.Hecongratulatedme,andIexpressedmythankstohim.

①用對(duì)話形式展現(xiàn)“我”與老師的互動(dòng)，使故事情節(jié)發(fā)展更加自然、順暢。

"Congratulations!Iknewyouwouldwin,nhesaid."Thankyouforyourencouragement.H

②為句①中老師對(duì)“我"的獲獎(jiǎng)感到開心增加肢體動(dòng)作描寫；并用虛擬語氣表達(dá)“我”對(duì)老師的感激之情。

"Congratulations!Iknewyouwouldwin,nhesaid,huggingmetightly."Thankyou.Iwouldn'tbewhatIam

todaywithoutyourencouragement."

③為句②中“我”對(duì)老師的感激之情增加心理細(xì)節(jié)描寫，使我對(duì)老師的感激躍然紙上，更具有畫面感。

"Congratulations!Iknewyouwouldwin,"hesaid,huggingmetightly."Thankyou.Iwouldn'tbewhatIam

todaywithoutyourencouragement."Asenseofgratitudewelledupfromthebottomofmyheart.

Step4欣賞佳作

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Iwonfirstplace!Sooverwhelmedwith

excitementanddisbelief（4口W匕興奮,口難以置信）wasIthatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.Finallycamethebigday!

Whenmynamewasannounced,Iwalkedontothestageagainstwildcheersandthunderousapplause（在熱烈的歡呼聲

和雷鳴般的掌聲中）.Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud,Iacceptedtheprize,asymbolandrecognitionofmypast

perseveranceandhardwork.Thinkingaboutthis,Ishedtearsofgratitude（流下感激的淚水），astherewasone

specialpersonwhomeantalottome.

Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation."Congratulations!Iknewyouwouldwin,“hesaid,

huggingmetightly.nThankyou.Iwouldn'tbewhatIamtodaywithoutyourencouragement."Asenseofgratitudewelled

upfromthebottomofmyheart（感激之情從我的心底涌出）.Pattingmyshoulder,hesmiled,"Itisyoureffortsthat

countmost."Fromthenon,IbegantoburymyselfinEnglishwriting.Withmyteacher'sinspiration,Ideterminedto

keeponchallengingmyselfandembraceabetterme.

熱考話題4同學(xué)關(guān)系

隋書構(gòu)思

同學(xué)相互不了解或融入新環(huán)境有困難；因誤會(huì)、矛盾等導(dǎo)致關(guān)系破裂或疏遠(yuǎn)

積極主動(dòng)幫助新同學(xué)或跟同學(xué)因一些事或活動(dòng)由不了解到相處融洽；因偶然

事件或一方改變想法，雙方消除誤會(huì)、化解矛盾、重歸于好、合作共贏等

展現(xiàn)同學(xué)間的純真友誼，或體現(xiàn)真誠相待、理解包容、誠實(shí)守信、精誠合作、

不以貌取人等品質(zhì)___________________________________________________

[2022浙江1月改編]WhenDr.Hendersonwasassigning（指定）projectmatesforhispsychologyclass,Isecretly

hopedthathewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.Aboveall,Ihopedhe

wouldn'tassignmetoworkwiththefiercelypetitiveandextremelyseriousfellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothesand

apparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.Asfate（命運(yùn)）wouldhaveit,Dr.Hendersonverydeliberatelymatched

everyoneinclassandannouncedthatIwouldbeworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.

Iwentuptomynewteammateandintroducedmyself.HelookedatmeasthoughIweren'tthere.Ifelthetreatedme

asthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablymakehimfailtogetanAinthecourse.Hewasn'tmeanorabusive;hejust

gavemetheimpressionthathecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhediditalone.

Needlesstosay,Ididn'tlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedoff,butItriedtomakethebestofitand

didn'tsayanythingforfearthatIwouldmakethingsworse.

Theprojectrequiredeachteamtodevelopahypothesis（假說）,setupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis,do

thestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.Whatevergradetheteamreceivedwouldbesharedbybothstudents.

WhenmyteammateandImettodiscussourproject,Iwasuneasy.Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohada

reputationforsinglemindednessandgoodgrades—theexactoppositeofme.Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatone

point,butstoppedshortbecauseIdidn'twanttogivehimthesatisfactionofmychickeningout.Idecidedtosticktoitno

matterwhat.

Afterlongdiscussionswesomehowagreedtodoastudyonthepsychologicalwellbeingofteenagers.Iwasn'tsure

whatitmeantexactly,butatleastwehadatopic.

Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.__________________________________________________________

OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtothehospitalforaseriousdisease.

Stepl梳理原文

主要人物myteammate：文中描述的“fiercelypetitiveandextremelyserious"ndowhateverproject...

betterifhediditalone"和"hadareputationforsinglemindednessandgoodgrades”表明，myteammate成績

優(yōu)異、性情高傲、學(xué)習(xí)專注、好勝心強(qiáng)，且“我“和“我”的隊(duì)友關(guān)系冷淡，似乎互相看不上對(duì)方。

主要人物"I"：從文中描述的"makethebestofitanddidn'tsayanything""singlemindednessandgood

人物、、、、

grades一theexactoppositeofme"和“decidedtosticktoitnomatterwhat"可以看出，“我”學(xué)習(xí)成績一般、

性情隨和、努力且不輕言放棄。

兩個(gè)主要人物幾乎相反的性格為續(xù)寫部分兩人合作中的摩擦埋下了伏筆，第五段尾句"decidedto

sticktoitnomatterwhat”也為續(xù)寫部分“我”在項(xiàng)目中起到積極作用奠定了基礎(chǔ)。

“我”被安排與一位自己原本想避開的同學(xué)合作（感到自己很不幸）我"主動(dòng)向隊(duì)友介紹自己，

情節(jié)及

卻被冷漠對(duì)待（感覺自己被忽視，同時(shí)很擔(dān)心倆人的合作）一"我"與隊(duì)友會(huì)面討論項(xiàng)目（面對(duì)優(yōu)秀的

情感線

隊(duì)友，“我”自慚形穢，想放棄但又不甘心，于是決定堅(jiān)持）一最終確定了課題（感到一絲寬慰）

根據(jù)續(xù)寫兩段提示語可知，“我”和隊(duì)友開始逐漸進(jìn)入狀態(tài)，但隊(duì)友卻因病住院，結(jié)合讀后續(xù)寫"

主題結(jié)局圓滿”的原則可以推測，"我”和隊(duì)友在合作上應(yīng)該是從消極配合到積極參與，最終研究項(xiàng)目一定

會(huì)成功。文章最終是要體現(xiàn)戰(zhàn)勝困難、精誠合作、隊(duì)友情深的主題。

Step2構(gòu)思框架

根據(jù)原文中講到的人物性格特征和續(xù)寫第一段的提示語可知，本段主要講“我”和隊(duì)友定期碰面

續(xù)寫

推進(jìn)項(xiàng)目、相互磨合的情景，主要通過敘述和心理描寫展現(xiàn)搭檔在推進(jìn)項(xiàng)目中的表現(xiàn)、"我“對(duì)此的

第一段

反應(yīng)、倆人關(guān)系的發(fā)展情況。

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段提示語以及續(xù)寫”故事曲折，結(jié)局圓滿”的原則可知，本段應(yīng)該主要講述在得知

續(xù)寫

隊(duì)友生病后，“我”的反應(yīng)、“我”對(duì)待項(xiàng)目的態(tài)度、為了最終完成項(xiàng)目“我“做了哪些努力等。尾句可以

第二段

升華主題：“我們”意識(shí)到了團(tuán).隊(duì)合作的重要性。

Step3優(yōu)化細(xì)節(jié)

l.Hetookchargeoftheproject.

①增加副詞，凸顯隊(duì)友的專權(quán)。

Hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally.

②為句①補(bǔ)充as引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句，講述隊(duì)友專權(quán)的原因。

Ashewasafiercelypetitivefellow,hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally.

③為句②補(bǔ)充結(jié)果，并運(yùn)用現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語，講述隊(duì)友專權(quán)對(duì)“我”的影響，體現(xiàn)初期合作的不順暢。

Ashewasafiercelypetitivefellow,hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally,leavingmedoingnothingbutsimply

followinghisstepsandinstructions.

2.1wenttothehospital.

①增加副詞，并用hurry替換句中的go,體現(xiàn)"我"想去探望隊(duì)友的急切心情。

Immediately,Ihurriedtothehospital.

②為句①增加定語從句，講述“我“在醫(yī)院了解到的情況，使故事性更強(qiáng)，情節(jié)更完整。

Immediately,Ihurriedtothehospital,whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalizedforquiteawhile.

3.1triedhardtodotheproject.

①用putallmyheartinto替換tryhard,體現(xiàn)用詞的豐富性。

Iputallmyheartintodoingtheproject.

②用原文中的表達(dá)細(xì)化句①中做項(xiàng)目的過程，使情節(jié)發(fā)展更加自然完整。

Iputallmyheartintodoingtheanalysisandpresentingourfindings.

③用with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)優(yōu)化句②，并用副詞體現(xiàn)"我"分析和呈現(xiàn)結(jié)果的狀態(tài)，凸顯"我"的努力和認(rèn)真。

Withallmyheartputintotheproject,Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresentedourfindingsreasonably.

Step4欣賞佳作

Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Ashewasafiercelypetitivefellow,hetookchargeoftheproject

totally,leavingmedoingnothingbutsimplyfollowinghisstepsandinstructions.Thoughunwilling（盡管不情愿），I

didmypartbutdiditinablindway.Astheprojectprogressed,Iseemedtogetthetrick,whichbuiltupmyconfidence

（增強(qiáng)了我的信心）andmademyteammateslightlyrelieved.Atthispoint,westartedtoreallyworkasateam.

OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtothehospitalforaseriousdisease.Immediately,Ihurriedtothe

hospital,whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalizedforquiteawhile.Seeingtheworryandweaknesswrittenonhis

face（看著他臉上的憂慮和虛弱），IassuredhimthatIwouldcarryonwithourproject.Withallmyheartputintothe

project（我全身心投入至【J這個(gè)項(xiàng)目中），Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresentedourfindingsreasonably.

Eventually,ourhardworkpaidoffandDr.Hendersonwasverysatisfiedwithourwonderfulfindings.Fromthis

project,webothlearnedthatonepersoncangofar,butagroupofpeoplecantravelfarther（一個(gè)人可以走很遠(yuǎn),但

一群人可以走得更遠(yuǎn)）.

熱考話題5溫馨家庭

（祖）父母在孩子做錯(cuò)事或有困難時(shí)，給予糾正、理解、開導(dǎo)、

幫助、支持、安慰等

（孫）子女借助特殊節(jié)日、生日或在不經(jīng)意間表達(dá)對(duì)（祖）父

（祖）父母與（孫）子女

母的孝順和愛

因性格、習(xí)慣等的不同造成相處問題，或因小事產(chǎn)生誤會(huì)，最終問題解決

或誤會(huì)消除，重歸于好

兄弟姐妹新成員的加入，由不喜歡到喜歡的轉(zhuǎn)變；或者兄弟姐妹通力合作完成某

項(xiàng)任務(wù)

產(chǎn)馨家庭

夫妻間相互體諒、理解，愛意滿滿，共渡難關(guān)

夫妻

通過家庭內(nèi)部各種故事充分展現(xiàn)血濃于水的親情，或一家人其樂融融、互助互

二愛的溫馨畫面

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[2021新高考I]AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.How

pleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastand

chickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhat

todo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedto

boiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroke

twoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeff

turnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthe

bread.Thepanwastoohotandthe