期中考試讀后續(xù)寫講評(píng)

讀后續(xù)寫：全神貫注高二英語(yǔ)期中考試Thefootballseasonwasalmostover.Sallyhadbeenplayingfootballallsummer.Shereallyenjoyedrunningaroundwiththeotherplayersinherbrightorangeuniform,chasingtheblackandwhiteballacrossthegrassyfield.Asmuchasshetried,though,Sallystillhadnotscoredonesinglegoal.Beforeeachgame,theyhadapracticesession.ThecoachshowedSallyandherteamhowtopasstheballtoeachotherandtakeshotsatthegoal.Sallywasprettygoodatpassingtheball,butevenduringpractices,shecouldn'tkicktheballpastthegoalkeeper.Shewonderedifsheshouldquitfootballandjoinadifferentclub."Don'tgiveup,"saidthecoach.Butitwashalf-time,andSallywasfeelingfrustrated（沮喪）.Shewastrying!Everytimeshegotachancetokicktheball,itwouldgointhewrongdirectionoraplayerfromtheotherteamwouldtakecontrolofit.Shesippedathercolaandpouted（撅嘴）.Thebreakwasoverandtherefereeblewhiswhistletostartthegameagain.Thetwoteamswalkedbackontothefield,bothdeterminedtowin.Sallybent,tieduphershoelaceandheardhermotherwhisperinherear."Stayfocused.Keepyoureyesontheball.Lookforanopportunitytogettheball.Youcandoit."Sallystoodupandtookadeepbreath.Evenifshedidn'tgetonegoalallsummer,sheknewthatshehadtriedherbest.Thatwassomethingtobeproudof.Soshesmiledathermotherandheadedtoherposition.Thewhistleblew,andthegamecontinued.Thescorewastied（打成平局）withonegoaleach.Thegreenteamwasprettygood,butSally'sorangeteamwasfast.Thegirls'ponytailsbouncedastheyran,withmanyfeetkickingfrantically（拼命地）attheballwhenitcamenearthem.ItwasaratherboringgameandSally'sheartwasnolongerinit.Paragraph1:Sallystarteddaydreamingaboutjoiningotherschoolclubs.__________________________Paragraph2:Recallinghermother'swords,Sallywaswokenfromherdaydream._____________________評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)讀后續(xù)寫·如何評(píng)？第五檔(很好)(21～25分)(1)與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開頭語(yǔ)銜接非常合理，文章內(nèi)容新穎、豐富、合理，非常有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整；(2)所使用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤很少，且完全不影響意義表達(dá)；(3)自然有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，全文結(jié)構(gòu)非常清晰，前后呼應(yīng)，意義非常連貫。閱卷老師在閱卷時(shí)，主要考慮以下內(nèi)容：1.與所給短文及段落開頭語(yǔ)的銜接程度；2.內(nèi)容的豐富性；3.應(yīng)用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性；4.上下文的連貫性。

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Sallystarteddaydreamingaboutjoiningotherschoolclubs.…………銜接句1：過(guò)渡句1：銜接句2：

Recallinghermother’swords,Sallywaswokenfromherdaydream.

…銜接句2：過(guò)渡句3：主題句：Whataboutotherclubs?Whichclub?Howdidsherecallhermother’swords?(sawhermother/heardhermother’scheeeingvoice)Whatwouldshedo?Howwasthegamegoing?(Shescoredagoal)ThethemeHowwouldshefeel?Whatdidshedointhatclub?

FocusedonthegameStayfocused!absent-minded10分第二檔(6～10分)(1)與所給短文有一定的關(guān)系，與所提供各段落開頭語(yǔ)有一定程度的銜接，內(nèi)容和邏輯上有一些問(wèn)題，續(xù)寫不夠完整；(2)語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項(xiàng)目有限，有些語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤影響了意義的表達(dá)；(3)較少使用語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，全文內(nèi)容缺少連貫性，全文結(jié)構(gòu)不夠清晰，意義欠連貫。16分第四檔(好)(16～20分)(1)與所給短文融洽度較高，與所提供各段落開頭語(yǔ)銜接較為合理，比較有邏輯性，續(xù)寫比較完整；(2)所使用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯較為豐富、準(zhǔn)確，表達(dá)比較流暢，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但不影響意義表達(dá)；(3)比較有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。Languagekeyword2第五檔(很好)(21～25分)(1)與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開頭語(yǔ)銜接非常合理，文章內(nèi)容新穎、豐富、合理，非常有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整；(2)所使用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤很少，且完全不影響意義表達(dá)；(3)自然有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，全文結(jié)構(gòu)非常清晰，前后呼應(yīng)，意義非常連貫。Whataboutotherclubs?

Whichclub?Whatdidshedointhatclub?Hermindwaswandering,“IfIhadjoinedthedancingclub,

Iwouldbedancing

onthesplendidstageinsteadofrunningonthegrassyfield---”

Hermind________,“_________thedancingclub,

I________

onthesplendidstage________runningonthegrassyfield.”她心不在焉地想“如果我加入的是舞蹈社團(tuán)，此刻我就會(huì)是在華麗的舞臺(tái)上跳舞，而不是在這草地上奔跑了---”Howwouldshefeel?

Shejustran

absentmindedlyaroundthefootballfield,

nothavingthepassionto

winthegame.

Shejustran

__________aroundthefootballfield,

_______(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞）thepassionto

winthegame.她只是心不在焉地在足球場(chǎng)上亂跑，已經(jīng)完全沒(méi)有贏得比賽的激情了。absent-mindedHowdidsherecallhermother’swords?

Whilestilllostinherowndaydream,sheheardafamiliarvoiceShouting，

“Stayfocused.Youcandoit.”________herowndaydream,sheheardafamiliarvoice________，

“Stayfocused.Youcandoit.”就在她還沉醉在自己的白日夢(mèng)的時(shí)候，她聽到一個(gè)熟悉的聲音在大叫，“注意力集中，你定能成功！”sawhermother/heardhermother’scheeeingvoiceWhatwouldshedo?Itwasatthatmoment

that

herteammatepassedtheballtoher.

_______atthatmoment______herteammatepassedtheballtoher.就在那一刻，她的隊(duì)友把球傳給了她。(強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu)）FocusedonthegameWhatwouldshedo?Withouthesitation,shetooktheball,passedtheopponent,andrushedtowardsthenetofthegreenteam.

__________,shetooktheball,_______theopponent,and__________thenetofthegreenteam.毫不猶豫，她接過(guò)足球，超過(guò)對(duì)手，直奔綠隊(duì)球門。三連動(dòng)Howwasthegamegoing?

Focusedontheball,shekickeditashardasshecould,whicharousedthounderouscheers.__________theb