2025屆高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)專(zhuān)題親情類(lèi)家有喜事-母親生日的家庭溫情策劃講義

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Janewasstillasleep

whenthephoneranginthelivingroom.Sheopenedhersleepyeyesandlookedattheclockonthetable.Itwasalreadynineo’clock!AlthoughJanewasstillverysleepy,sheknewshehadtogetupbecausehermotherwasworkinginherofficeandshecouldn’texpectheryoungerbrotherTom,whowasalwayssleepinglikeapig,toanswerthephone.Shequicklyputonacoatandrantothelivingroom.Whenshepickedupthephone,ontheotherendcamethewarmgreeting,“Goodmorning!”Itwasfromherfather,whowasasailor

andrarelycamehome.Suddenly,Jane’ssleepinessdisappeared.Borninto

anot-so-richfamily,JaneandTomfeltthestressoflife,buttheywerehappytoenjoythefamilyatmosphere.Atschool,theywerestraight-Astudentsandtookpartinvariousafter-schoolactivities.Theyweretheprideofthefamily.“Goodmorning,Dad.Whyare

youcalling

ussoearlyontheweekend?”Janesaid,

pretending

tobeannoyed.“TomandIhavebeenverynicerecently.”“Mydear,todayisyourmother’sbirthday,andIhaveorderedacakeonlineanditwillbesenttoourhomelatethisafternoon.Doremembertotakethecake.

Itismysurpriseforyourmother.”Hearingherfather’swords,Janefeltalittleashamed.Howcouldsheforgethermother’sbirthday?Whileshewaschattingwithherfather,Janelookedaroundtheroomandsawalotofdirtyclothesonthesofa.Thefloorhadnotbeencleanedfordays,sincehermotherhadbeenatworkallweek.Shelookedattheclockagainandwassurethatshestillhadenoughtimetoprepareasurpriseforhermother.“Well,Dad,nowI’mgoingtowakeTomup.WewillgiveMumasurprise,too!”Janesaidandhungupthephone.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。JanehurriedtoTom’sroomandsharedherplanwithhim.

_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________“Happybirthday,Mum!”JaneandTomshoutedwhentheirmotheropenedthedoor.

__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意：簡(jiǎn)在周六早上九點(diǎn)被電話(huà)鈴聲吵醒，得知是很少回家的父親來(lái)電，原來(lái)是母親生日，父親訂了蛋糕下午送達(dá)。簡(jiǎn)發(fā)現(xiàn)家中臟亂，便打算給母親一個(gè)驚喜，隨后她叫醒湯姆并分享計(jì)劃。故事山分析：開(kāi)端：簡(jiǎn)被電話(huà)吵醒，得知母親生日及父親的安排。發(fā)展：簡(jiǎn)叫醒湯姆并商量計(jì)劃，兩人開(kāi)始行動(dòng)打掃房間并準(zhǔn)備禮物。高潮：母親下班回家。結(jié)局：簡(jiǎn)和湯姆為母親慶祝生日。伏筆以及在續(xù)寫(xiě)中的回應(yīng)：伏筆1：簡(jiǎn)看到客廳沙發(fā)上的臟衣服和未打掃的地板?；貞?yīng)：在續(xù)寫(xiě)中簡(jiǎn)和湯姆會(huì)認(rèn)真打掃房間，讓房間煥然一新，給母親一個(gè)整潔的環(huán)境。伏筆2：簡(jiǎn)說(shuō)要給母親一個(gè)驚喜。回應(yīng)：他們會(huì)制作手工禮物或者準(zhǔn)備特別的晚餐等作為驚喜內(nèi)容。伏筆3：湯姆總是睡得像頭豬?；貞?yīng)：簡(jiǎn)叫醒湯姆時(shí)可能會(huì)有些困難，但湯姆醒來(lái)后積極參與準(zhǔn)備。伏筆4：簡(jiǎn)和湯姆是優(yōu)秀學(xué)生且參加各種課外活動(dòng)?；貞?yīng)：他們可能利用在課外活動(dòng)中學(xué)到的技能來(lái)準(zhǔn)備生日驚喜，比如繪畫(huà)制作賀卡或者烹飪技能準(zhǔn)備晚餐。伏筆5：父親很少回家?；貞?yīng)：母親生日時(shí)父親雖未親自到場(chǎng)，但通過(guò)訂蛋糕和簡(jiǎn)與湯姆的準(zhǔn)備讓母親感受到家庭的完整與溫暖。續(xù)寫(xiě)要點(diǎn)：第一段：簡(jiǎn)匆忙趕到湯姆房間，叫醒他并告知計(jì)劃。湯姆起初有些不情愿，但在簡(jiǎn)的勸說(shuō)下迅速起身。他們先把臟衣服清洗干凈，然后認(rèn)真打掃房間的每個(gè)角落，擦拭家具、清掃地板。接著，他們發(fā)揮創(chuàng)意，用彩紙和畫(huà)筆制作了精美的生日賀卡，還從零花錢(qián)里拿出一部分去買(mǎi)了母親喜歡的鮮花。簡(jiǎn)利用在手工課上學(xué)到的技巧，編織了一個(gè)小巧的手鏈，湯姆則負(fù)責(zé)整理客廳的物品，把房間布置得溫馨而漂亮。第二段：“Happybirthday,Mum!”簡(jiǎn)和湯姆喊道。母親走進(jìn)家門(mén)，被眼前的景象驚呆了。干凈整潔的房間，散發(fā)著芬芳的鮮花，還有孩子們親手制作的禮物。她的眼中閃爍著感動(dòng)的淚花，依次擁抱了簡(jiǎn)和湯姆，夸贊他們的懂事和貼心。隨后，一家人圍坐在餐桌旁，享用著簡(jiǎn)單卻充滿(mǎn)愛(ài)的晚餐，等待著父親訂的蛋糕送達(dá)。這個(gè)生日雖然父親缺席，但簡(jiǎn)和湯姆的努力讓母親感受到了濃濃的家庭溫暖，也讓他們更加懂得珍惜家人和家庭的幸福。情感線(xiàn)：

從簡(jiǎn)最初被電話(huà)吵醒的慵懶，到得知母親生日后的些許愧疚，接著叫醒湯姆時(shí)的堅(jiān)定，在準(zhǔn)備過(guò)程中充滿(mǎn)期待，最后母親回家時(shí)的喜悅與自豪，情感逐漸升溫，展現(xiàn)了家庭親情的溫暖與力量。故事線(xiàn)：周六早上簡(jiǎn)被電話(huà)吵醒，得知母親生日。簡(jiǎn)叫醒湯姆并分享計(jì)劃。簡(jiǎn)和湯姆打掃房間、制作禮物、購(gòu)買(mǎi)鮮花等準(zhǔn)備驚喜。母親下班回家。簡(jiǎn)和湯姆為母親慶祝生日，母親感動(dòng)。一家人等待蛋糕，享受家庭溫暖。主旨升華句：Familyisahavenoflove,wherealittleeffortcancreateaseaofwarmth.（家庭是愛(ài)的港灣，一點(diǎn)小小的努力就能創(chuàng)造出一片溫暖的海洋。）Intheembraceoffamily,everyactofloveisapricelesstreasure.（在家庭的懷抱里，每一個(gè)愛(ài)的舉動(dòng)都是無(wú)價(jià)之寶。）Thebondoffamilyisstrengthenedbythesimplestactsofkindnessandthoughtfulness.（家庭的紐帶因最簡(jiǎn)單的善意和體貼行為而更加牢固。）Abirthdayinthefamilyisnotjustacelebrationofage,butareaffirmationofloveandtogetherness.（家庭中的生日不僅僅是對(duì)年齡的慶祝，更是對(duì)愛(ài)與團(tuán)聚的再次確認(rèn)。）Truefamilyloveliesinthedetails,inthesurpriseswecreateandthememoriesweshare.（真正的家庭之愛(ài)在于細(xì)節(jié)，在于我們創(chuàng)造的驚喜和分享的回憶。）寫(xiě)作示范一：JanehurriedtoTom’sroomandsharedherplanwithhim.Tomrubbedhissleepyeyesandgrumbledabit,butwhenherealizeditwasfortheirmother’sbirthday,hejumpedoutofbed.Theystartedbytidyingupthelivingroom,foldingtheclothesneatlyandvacuumingthefloor.Thentheyrummagedthroughtheirartsuppliesandmadeabeautifulcollagewithpicturesofthefamily.Tomwroteaheartfeltpoemonapieceofpaperanddecorateditwithdrawings.Janefoundsomecandlesandplacedthemaroundtheroom.Theyalsomadeasimplebutdeliciousmealwiththeingredientsinthefridge.“Happybirthday,Mum!”JaneandTomshoutedwhentheirmotheropenedthedoor.Theirmotherwasspeechlesswithsurprise.Thesightofthecleanroom,thelovelygiftsandthewarmatmospherebroughttearstohereyes.Shehuggedherchildrentightlyandkissedthemontheirforeheads.Astheysatdowntoeat,shekeptexpressinghergratitude.Thefamilyspentabeautifuleveningtogether,filledwithloveandlaughter.Althoughtheirfatherwasaway,theloveinthefamilywaspalpable,andthisbirthdaybecameamemorableoneforallofthem.寫(xiě)作示范二：JanehurriedtoTom’sroomandsharedherplanwithhim.Tomwasabitslowtowakeup,butonceheunderstood,hebecameenthusiastic.Theyfirstclearedtheclutterfromthelivingroomandscrubbedtheflooruntilitshone.Thentheyusedtheircraftskillstomakeabirthdaycrownfortheirmother.Janesewedsomebeadsontoaheadband,andTomaddedpaperflowers.Theyalsobakedsomecookies,eventhoughtheywereabitlumpy.Theyarrangedthecookiesonaplateandputitonthetablewiththehandmadecards.“Happybirthday,Mum!”JaneandTomshoutedwhentheirmotheropenedthedoor.Theirmotherwasoverjoyed.Shewasdeeplytouchedbytheeffortsofherchildren.Theroomlookedsoinviting,andthegiftsweresofulloflove.Shesatdownandletthechildrenputthecrownonherhead.Theyallsataroundthetable,sharingthecookiesandtalkingabouttheirday.Thisbirthdaywasareminderofthepoweroffamilyloveandhow,evenintheabsenceofonemember,theotherscouldcreateabeautifulandlovingcelebration.參考范文JanehurriedtoTom’sroomandsharedherplanwithhim.

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