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那少女披著一襲輕紗般的白衣，猶似身在煙中霧里，看來約莫十六七歲年紀，除了一頭黑發(fā)之外，全身雪白，面容秀美絕俗，只是肌膚間少了一層血色，顯得蒼白異常。楊過抬起頭來，與她目光相對，只覺這少女清麗秀雅，莫可逼視，神色間卻是冰冷淡漠，當真是潔若冰雪，也是冷若冰雪，實不知她是喜是怒，是愁是樂。aloof冷漠的；離群的unemotional不動感情的

ethereal縹緲的;飄逸的；

Criteria第五檔：（21-25分）在內容上，續(xù)寫故事首先要“與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接合理”，續(xù)寫的每一段要與所給原文融洽，同時續(xù)寫的每一段要緊貼所給首句的線索來寫。dancewithshackles讀

后

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探----捕捉和照應續(xù)寫點

可續(xù)寫點（continuationpoints)：

一篇完整的文章中，作者通常會圍繞(revolvearound)某個主題來寫，在篇首,篇中或篇末設置伏筆(ahintforeshadowinglaterdevelopmentsinastory)，這些統(tǒng)稱為可續(xù)寫點。捕捉和照應續(xù)寫點

品讀首段提煉原文主題關注特定情節(jié)留意細節(jié)描寫關注高頻詞留意原文結尾解讀續(xù)寫所給首句閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。

OneweekendinJuly,

Jane

andherhusband,

Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,"I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp"and

walked

away.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehad

climbed

toahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost."Tom!"shecried."Help!"

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoa

stream.

Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janehearda

helicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffher

yellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.

Paragraph1：

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.__________________________________________________Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.______________________________________________________________________1、仔細品讀原文首段：故事背景OneweekendinJuly,

Jane

andherhusband,

Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,"I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp"and

walked

away.背景續(xù)寫點：_________________________________________________________背景照應方式：_____________________________________________________________JulyJane,Tombyalakeintheforest第一段可寫天黑后Jane的感受。AlthoughitwasalreadyJuly,Janestillfeltverycoldintheforest,feelingextremelyregretfulforleavingTom.Thegurgleofstreamaddedhercoldnessandloneliness.WhenWhoWhere2、仔細品讀原文，提煉原文主題，續(xù)寫時你會如何照應原文主題。原文主題：

_____________________________________________________照應主題方式：___________________________________________________________OneweekendinJuly,JaneandherhusbandTom,hadanunpleasantbutunforgettablejourney.Fortunately,Janewaseventuallyrescuedandsheandherhusbandcontinuedtheirexcitingandunforgettablejourney.3、仔細品讀原文，關注特定情節(jié)：對續(xù)寫有推動或暗示作用的情節(jié)。特定情節(jié)續(xù)寫點：

____________________________________________________________照應方式：____________________________________________________________Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.第1段天黑后Jane獨自一人感到后悔想念他們的感受。AgainJanelayawakeonlyinthedark,missingTomandherfamilydesperatelyandwantingtobethemimmediately.4、仔細品讀原文，留意細節(jié)描寫：語言描寫、動作描寫、神態(tài)描寫、外貌描寫、環(huán)境描寫、情感變化描寫

細節(jié)描寫可續(xù)寫點

照應方式

動作語言心理語言動作心理I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp.Theystartedtoquarrel.Janewassoangry.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Thebestspottocampistheplacewhereyouare.HowshewishedshehadneverquarreledwithTom!HerangerandtirednessweresweptawaytheinstantshesawTom.Or

HerangerandtirednesswereovertakenbytheloveshefeltforTom.5、仔細品讀原文，關注高頻詞：原文中反復出現(xiàn)或重點描寫的特定物品。高頻詞可續(xù)寫點：____________________________________________________________照應方式：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________helicopter,yellowblouse續(xù)寫第二段可寫Janewavedheryellowblouseonhearingthehelicopter.Tomspottedheryellowblousefromthehelicopter.6.仔細品讀原文，留意原文結尾，捕捉可續(xù)寫點，續(xù)寫時你會如何照應續(xù)寫點。原文結尾續(xù)寫點：____________________________________________________________照應方式：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Janegatheredherstrengthtowalktoanopenarea,wavingheryellowblouse.Tohergreatjoy,thehelicopterdidn’tflyawaythistime.7.仔細品讀原文，留意所給首句：第二段的開頭隱藏著第一段結尾所包含的信息。所給首句續(xù)寫____________________________________________________________照應方式：____________________________________________________________Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Paragraph２:

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.第二段續(xù)寫可寫ShewassafewithTom.Toherrelief,sheneedn’tstayintheforestforanothernight.捕捉和照應續(xù)寫點

品讀首段提煉原文主題關注特定情節(jié)留意細節(jié)描寫關注高頻詞留意原文結尾解讀續(xù)寫所給首句契訶夫之槍

Chekhov'sGun)Writingtip:Findoutthegunsandfirethem.Respondtothedetailsmentionedinthegivenmaterials.Possibleversions:Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.ItwasevenharderforJanetofindthelake.Shestoppedandrestedagainstatreebythestream.“l(fā)shouldn'thavequarreledwithTomaboutthetinythings."sheregretted,"lflhadn’twalkedawayangrily,Iwouldn’thavegotlost."AgainJanelayawakeinthedark,missingTomandherfamily.HerangerwasovertakenbytheloveshefeltforTom.Sheknewhewasconcernedabouthersafetyandwassearchingforher.Gradually,shecalmeddownandfellasleep.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Shebecameenergeticafteranight'ssleep.Aftereatingsomeberries,shemovedontofindthelake.Walkingalongthestream,JanewaswavingheryellowblouseandprayingthatTomwouldfindhersoon.Herprayerwasreallyheard!Tomspottedheryellowblouseinthehelicopter.Tomdashedtohugherassoonasthehelicopterlanded.Theyapologizedtoeachother,forgaveeachotherwithtearsintheireyesandwenthomehappily,planningnextcampintheforestagain.Possibleversions:Paragraph1:

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnig