高考英語復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)：麥當(dāng)勞里的溫暖善意+課件

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習(xí)：麥當(dāng)勞里的溫暖善意1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Iamamotherofthreeandhaverecentlycompletedmycollegedegree.ThelastclassIhadtotakewasSociology.TheteacherwasabsolutelyinspiringwiththequalitiesthatIwisheveryhumanhadbeengracedwith.Herlastprojectofthetermwascalled“Smile”.Theclasswasaskedtogooutandsmileatthreepeopleandrecordtheirreactions.Iamaveryfriendlypersonandalwayssmileateveryoneandsayhelloanyway,soIthoughtthiswouldbeapieceofcake.

4續(xù)寫原文Soonafterweweregiventheproject,myhusband,myyoungestson,andIwentouttoMcDonald’sonecoldMarchmorning.Itwasjustourwayofsharingspecialplaytimewithourson.Wewerestandinginline,waitingtobeserved,whenallofasuddeneveryonearoundusbegantobackaway,andthenevenmyhusbanddid.Ididnotmoveabit.AstrongfeelingoffearwelledupinsideofmeasIturnedtoseewhytheyhadmoved.AsIturnedaroundIsmelledaterrible“dirtybody”smell,andtherestandingbehindmeweretwopoorhomelessmen.5續(xù)寫原文AsIlookeddownattheshortgentleman,closetome,hewas“smiling”.Hisbeautifulskyblueeyeswerefullofhopeashesearchedforacceptance.Hesaid“Goodday”ashecountedthefewcoinshehadbeenholding.Thesecondmanwasobviouslymentallydisabled.IheldmytearsasIstoodtherewiththem.Theyoungladyatthecounteraskedhimwhattheywanted.Hesaid“Coffeeisall,Miss”becausethatwasalltheycouldafford.(Iftheywantedtositintherestaurantandwarmup,theyhadtobuysomething.Hejustwantedtobewarm.)ThenIreallyfeltthedesirewassogreatthatIalmostreachedoutandhuggedthelittlemanwiththeblueeyes.6段首句Paragraph1:ThatwaswhenInoticedalleyesintherestaurantweresetonme,judgingmyeveryaction.Paragraph2:Iturnedin“myproject”andtheinstructorreadit.7Part2題目分析8續(xù)寫原文分析9文章講述了一位三個(gè)孩子的母親在完成大學(xué)學(xué)位的最后一門社會(huì)學(xué)課程時(shí)，遇到了一個(gè)特殊的任務(wù)——對(duì)三個(gè)人微笑并記錄他們的反應(yīng)。在麥當(dāng)勞，她遇到了兩個(gè)無家可歸的人，周圍人都避而遠(yuǎn)之，但其中一個(gè)藍(lán)眼睛的小個(gè)子男人帶著希望的微笑，他們的遭遇讓作者心生憐憫。故事圍繞著作者如何應(yīng)對(duì)這一情況以及這件事對(duì)她的影響展開，體現(xiàn)了人與人之間的理解、同情與接納等主題。續(xù)寫需圍繞這兩個(gè)關(guān)鍵情節(jié)，合理拓展故事發(fā)展，升華主題。點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)10續(xù)寫思路分析一，Paragraph1：ThatwaswhenInoticedalleyesintherestaurantweresetonme,judgingmyeveryaction.二，分析：此段開頭表明作者成為眾人焦點(diǎn)，續(xù)寫可從作者內(nèi)心感受入手，盡管被眾人注視，她仍堅(jiān)定地選擇善良。接著描述她如何用行動(dòng)幫助這兩位無家可歸者，比如為他們購(gòu)買更多食物。再描寫藍(lán)眼睛男人收到幫助后的反應(yīng)，可能是驚訝、感激，通過細(xì)節(jié)刻畫其神態(tài)、語言。最后提及作者家人，如丈夫和兒子，描述他們從最初的反應(yīng)到理解支持作者的過程，體現(xiàn)家庭在傳遞善意中的力量。11續(xù)寫思路分析一，Paragraph2：Iturnedin“myproject”andtheinstructorreadit.二，分析：這段首句引出老師對(duì)作者作業(yè)的閱讀。續(xù)寫可先寫老師讀完后的表情、動(dòng)作，比如驚訝、感動(dòng)等，體現(xiàn)故事對(duì)他人的觸動(dòng)。接著老師決定在課堂上分享這個(gè)故事，同學(xué)們的反應(yīng)也可描述，如安靜聆聽、被打動(dòng)等。最后，作者從這件事獲得感悟，強(qiáng)調(diào)善良、接納等品質(zhì)的重要性，以及這件事對(duì)自己未來生活的影響，升華主題。12Part3范文呈現(xiàn)13范文呈現(xiàn)ThatwaswhenInoticedalleyesintherestaurantweresetonme,judgingmyeveryaction.Itookadeepbreathandwalkeduptothecounter.Iorderedtwomoresandwichesandabigcupofhotchocolate.ThenIcarriedthefoodtothetablewherethetwohomelessmenweresitting.Theshortmanwithblueeyeslookedatmeinsurprise.“Thisisforyou,”Isaidwithawarmsmile.Hewassotouchedthathiseyesfilledwithtears.“Thankyou,miss.Youaresokind,”hesaid.Myhusbandandsonalsocameoverandsatwithus.Mysonevensharedhislittletoywiththem.Iturnedin“myproject”andtheinstructorreadit.Hereyeswidenedassheread.Thenshelookedupatmeandsaid,“ThisisthemostmeaningfulprojectI'veeverread.”Shesharedmystorywiththewholeclass.Everyonewasdeeplymoved.Throughthisexperience,Ilearnedthatasmallactofkindnesscanhaveabigimpact.Itcannotonlywarmtheheartsofothersbutalsomakeourselvesfeelfulfilled.14范文呈現(xiàn)ThatwaswhenInoticedalleyesintherestaurantweresetonme,judgingmyeveryaction.Withouthesitation,Iwalkedtothehomelessmen.Isquatteddowninfrontoftheshortmanandsaidgently,“Youmustbehungry.Letmegetyousomethingmoretoeat.”Henoddedshyly.Iquicklyboughtabigmealforthem.WhenIputthefoodinfrontofthem,thedisabledmanstartedtolaughhappily.Theblue-eyedmanthankedmeagainandagain.Myhusbandcametomysideandputhishandonmyshoulder,showinghissupport.Iturnedin“myproject”andtheinstructorreadit.Afterreading,shecouldn'tholdbackhertears.“Thisisareal-lifelessonforallofus,”shesaid.Sheaskedmetostandupandsharemyfeelingswiththeclass.ItoldthemhowIfeltwhenIsawthehomelessmen,andhowIrealizedtheimportanceofkindness.Fromthatdayon,Iknewthatweshouldalwaysbereadytohelpthoseinneed.15升級(jí)版范文呈現(xiàn)Thatafternoon,theyreconvenedtoadornthedeerwiththematerialstheyhadprocured.Colinarrived,bearingseveralcansofvibrantpaints-pink,purple,andyellow-thatglistenedenchantinglyinthesunlight.Amy,forherpart,carriedanassortmentofcolorfulribbons,twinklingsequins,anddaintybows.Kendra'seyeslitupatthesightoftheseabundantmaterials,herheartbrimmingwithanticipation.Shewascertainthatthedeerwasabouttobetransformedintoaworkofart.Theyswiftlydividedthetasksamongthemselves.Colintookupthepaintbrush,intentoncreatingadorablepatternsonthedeer'sbody.Withdeftstrokes,hepaintedstars,moons,andhearts,eachonecomingtolifeunderhisskilledhand.Beforelong,avividpinkheartadornedthedeer'sflank,addingatouchofwhimsy.Amy,meanwhile,setaboutdecoratingthedeer'sbackandforeheadwiththeribbonsandsequins.Shetiedtheribbonsintointricatebows,andthenmeticulouslyappliedthesequins,hereverymovementatestamenttoherpatienceandcare.Kendra,nottobeoutdone,continuedtoadorntheantlerswithadditionalsmallhearts.Sheevensourcedsomecolorfulfeathersandartfullyinsertedthemamongtheantlers,givingthemalivelyanddynamicappearance.Astheyworked,theyengagedinanimatedconversation,sharingideasandlaughingheartily.Theirvoicesechoedthroughtheyard,fillingtheairwithasenseofcamaraderieandjoy.Afteraperiodofintenseeffort,theonce-plaindeerstatuewascompletelytransformed.Itnowstoodbeforethem,resplendentandmagnificent,likearegalcreaturereadytotakecenterstage.16升級(jí)版范文呈現(xiàn)ThatwaswhenInoticedalleyesintherestaurantweresetonme,judgingmyeveryaction.Withoutamoment'shesitation,Istrodepurposefullytowardsthecounter.Iorderedasumptuousmealthatincludednotonlycoffeebutalsoavarietyofhotpastriesandalargebowlofsoup.AsIplacedthetrayonthetableinfrontofthetwomen,theshortman'sbeautifulblueeyeswelledupwithtears.“You'reanangel,”hemurmured,hisvoicethickwithgratitude.Thedisabledman,thoughunabletoexpresshimselfclearly,pattedmyhandgently.Myhusband,whohadwitnessedmyactions,walkedoverandputhisarmaroundme,aproudsmileonhisface.Myson,followinghisfather'slead,offeredhiso