高考英語作文的潤色與提高

高考英語作文潤色與提升以應(yīng)用文為主1/55專題一：優(yōu)異作文基本特征2/55優(yōu)異高考英語作文六個基本特征1、層次不亂 2、句式多變3、亮點(diǎn)若干 3、巧妙串聯(lián)4、蠢錯不犯 6、整齊卷面3/55層次不亂開頭：引出話題（第一段）主體：陳說觀點(diǎn)或給出提議

（第二段）結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)（第三段）4/55題目：假設(shè)你是李華，你朋友Liz剛才進(jìn)入高中，在交友上面存在一些問題，請你依據(jù)以下提醒，幫她度過難關(guān)。要交朋友首先要做一個朋友。要和朋友同甘共苦；患難之中朋友才是真朋友。情誼需要時間和投入(effort).5/55DearLiz,______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours,LiHua6/55層次不亂開頭：引入話題主體：陳說觀點(diǎn)或給出提議結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)通常只需要2-3句話。提出話題，并說明你有提議。7/55第一段：引出話題通常只需要2-3句話。I’msorrytohearthatyouhavetroubleinmakingfriends.Asfarasi’mconcerned/Formypart/Inmyopinion,therearesomewaystosolvethisproblem.8/55層次不亂開頭：引入話題主體：陳說觀點(diǎn)或給出提議結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)通常只需要2-3句話。提出話題，并說明你有提議。每一個觀點(diǎn)或提議之間要保持層次清楚，加上適當(dāng)過渡詞語。9/55第二段：陳說觀點(diǎn)或提議Tobeginwith,youshouldbeafriend...Then,youneed...Lastly,itisalsoimportanttodo....Firstandforemost,youshouldbeafriend...Secondly,youneed...Lastbutnotleast,itisalsoimportanttodo....10/55層次不亂開頭：引入話題主體：陳說觀點(diǎn)或給出提議結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)通常只需要2-3句話。每一個觀點(diǎn)或提議之間要保持層次清楚，加上適當(dāng)過渡詞語?？偨Y(jié)，并提出美好愿景。11/55第三段：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)，或者表示愿景。Allinall/Inshort/Inconclusion/Inaword,youcanimproveyourpresentsituation.Andibelieve,withyourtrying,youcanovercome...12/55DearLiz,I’msorrytohearthatyouhavetroubleinmakingfriends.Asfarasi’mconcerned/Formypart/Inmyopinion,therearesomewaysto..Firstandforemost/Tobeginwith,youshouldbeafriend...Secondly,youneed...Lastbutnotleast,itisalsoimportanttodo...Allinall/Inshort/Inconclusion/Inaword,youcanimproveyourpresentsituation.AndIbelieve,withyourtrying,youcanovercome...

Yours,LiHua13/55句式多變長短改變主、被動改變主語改變同義詞改變同功效句型改變橫向比較改變14/55亮點(diǎn)若干高中詞匯高中常見短語高級句型各種復(fù)合句倒裝句強(qiáng)調(diào)句型虛擬語氣句型非謂語動詞結(jié)構(gòu)15/55巧妙串聯(lián)起：firstofall,tobeginwith,aboveall...承：inaddition,besides...轉(zhuǎn)：however,ontheotherhand...合：inmyopinion,allinall,inaword...16/55蠢錯不犯：初中二年級學(xué)生就應(yīng)該掌握基本語言表示能力。1.Iverylikethebook.2.Hewasveryangrily.3.Therehavemanystudentintheclassroom.4.Thecarisyellowcolor.17/55整齊卷面英文書寫大方、圓潤、自然；詞與詞間距適當(dāng)字母大小適當(dāng)無大面積涂改不影響交際18/5519/5520/5521/5522/5523/55專題二肅清基礎(chǔ)語言錯誤24/55中學(xué)生英語寫作中常見14種語言錯誤：1.主謂不一致MyfatherandIlikesgoingfishingbythelake.Largequantitiesofsoilhasbeenwashedaway.25/552.時態(tài)、語態(tài)混用Lastnight,Ihadenjoyedaparty.Thepaintingonthewalldamagedseriously.∧was26/553.句子成份殘缺Istoodupandsawthereaboy.Theyoungmanrunninginthestreet.∧∧waswas27/554.習(xí)慣搭配誤用Ionceheardfromtheanimallikethis.Wepassedawaythebuilding.ofby28/555.名詞單、復(fù)數(shù)不分Imademanyfriendinthesummercamp.WecangetsomeinformationsfromtheInternet.29/556.動詞單、復(fù)數(shù)不分Ourteacheroftensaythatsuccesslieinhardwork.Mr.Smith,togetherwithsomestudents,arecomingtoourschool.30/557.贅詞現(xiàn)象多發(fā)Ihopeyoucanreturnbacktoourschoolsoon.We'llholdapartyonnextSunday.31/558.近義詞誤用Theschoolrequeststhatallthestudentsshouldweartheschooluniform.Iquarreledwithmyteacheraboutmygrades.32/559.基本詞匯拼寫錯誤IfliedtoNewYorkdirectlyfromBeijing.Thiswillbedoneimmediatly.33/5510.前后人稱不一致Theboywasborninapoorfamilybutsheworkshard.Wewatchedafewmoviesandwelovedit.34/5511.動詞原形作主語/賓語Takeawalkafterdinnerisverygoodforyou.Atthatmoment,Ididn'tfeelliketakeawalk.35/5512.邏輯主語與主句主語不一致Preparingdinner,thedoorbellrang.Walkinginthestreet,acarhitanoldman.36/5513.一個簡單句出現(xiàn)兩個謂語Therewasnoworktodo,hewentbackhome.Ireceivedyouremail,Iwasveryexcited.being∧When∧and37/5514.中式英語Nextweekhaveaparty.IsorryyouIcan'twithyougoBeijing.38/55有則改之，無則加勉；專心則易，無心則難。39/55專題三：第一反應(yīng)與抑制第一反應(yīng)40/55他是個好人。第一反應(yīng)測試：Heisagoodman.generous,humorous,interesting,smart,gentle,warm-hearted,hospitable,easy-going,devoted,open-minded,modest,friendly…41/55對不起，我不能和你一起去北京了。I’msorrythatIcan’tgotoBeijingwithyou.WouldyouacceptmyheartfeltapologythatIcan’tmakeittoBeijingwithyouaswehaveplanned?IsorryyouIcan’twithyougoBeijing.42/55存點(diǎn)錢是很主要。Thereisnodenying/Itisbeyondanydisputethatdepositingsomemoneyinthebankiscrucial.Sometimes,whetheryouhavemoneyathandmeansthedifferenceoflifeordeathforalovedone.43/55專題四：打感人心句型和打翻人胃句型

44/5545/55審題：“十年后我”---“感性、充滿想象”切忌：套用了太多所謂“萬能句式”，破壞了這種“感性”，使之變得“太理性”、“太剛”了：

（1）利用了大量表示次序詞句(太過理性)：

Firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally;

Tostartwith；Lastbutnotleast;

Myfuturelifeisasfollows.46/55審題：“十年后我”---“感性、充滿想象”切忌：套用了太多所謂“萬能句式”，破壞了這種“感性”，使之變得“太理性”、“太剛”了：

（1）利用了大量表示次序詞句(太過理性)：

Firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally;

Tostartwith；Lastbutnotleast;

Myfuturelifeisasfollows.47/55（2）利用了大量表示強(qiáng)烈觀點(diǎn)句式（語氣太剛）：IholdthepointofviewthatThereisnodoubtthat…Istronglybelievethat…Iamfirmlyconvincedthat(therewillbeexcitingandwonderfulchangesin…/itgivesmeastrongbody)Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…WhatIwanttostressisthat(healthisveryimportanttous)48/55（3）利用了大量總結(jié)、轉(zhuǎn)換、強(qiáng)調(diào)、轉(zhuǎn)折等語氣、句式，不夠得體。Allinall,…/Generallyspeaking,Asamatteroffact,Asformysparetime,…AsfarasIamconcerned,Ihopebecomeadoctor.Whenitcomestomyownfamily,itoccurstomethatIwillhave2children.Itisknowntousthatfamilyisthemostimportantthinginourlife.Ontheonehand,…ontheotherhand…49/55注意：在結(jié)構(gòu)清楚，邏輯通順基礎(chǔ)上，要注意句型多變，句子優(yōu)美。50/55（1）利用大量強(qiáng)調(diào)句和倒裝句，給人非常生澀感覺。Inmysparetime,soactiveamIthatIwillgofishingwithmyfamily.Itisaftertenyearsthat…（2）在同一篇短文里，堆砌了大量一樣句式：It’sIthatwanttobeateacher;ItisIthatamfondonchildren.ItisIthatlikemakingalotoffriends.ItisfamouscitythatI’llgoto…（3）中式英語，意思相差較大,或完全不達(dá)意。LoverOrganizeafamilyIhopemywillbelittlespeakEnglish.51/55那些能稍微充滿想象句子，就顯得難能可貴：…Mytwosonssurroundingmesmilelikesunshine.…Onweekends,Iwilltakemyfamilytothebeachtohavearest,enjoyingthesunrises.…gooutforapicnic,huggingthenatureandstrengtheningouremotion…cleverandoptimistic,mydaughterisgoingtobethesortofgirlwhospreadsunshinetoothersthroughhersmile.…Lovecanadddelightfulcolortolife.52/55

MyChineseDream

Tomakeourmotherlandbecomemoreandmorepowerful,teenagersshouldplayaroleinrealizingChinesedream.Recently,ourclasshasheldameetingaboutthis.ThereIwilldiscusshowIunderstandChinesedream.Maybeeveryonehasadream,whateveritis.Dreamislikewater,whichcanwaterourheart;dreamislikesunshine,whichcanmeltthesnow;dreamislikewind,whichcanblowawayfoginfrontofoureyes.WhenIwasachild,Iwantedtobeadoctor,whocansavethedyingpeople.AndnowIwanttomakemyfanilyliveabetterlife.