(作文)5分與7分雅思作文對(duì)比

1、7分雅思作文對(duì)比20 X 20Let ' SCOmparetwoanswerstoaquestion.Thetopicisasfollows:In ternatio naltourismhasbroughte norm ousbe nefittoma nyp laces.Atthesametime,thereisc on cernaboutitsi mp act on locali nhabita ntsa ndthee nviro nmen t.Dothedisadvan tagesofi nternatio naltourismoutweighthedisadva ntages?A

2、 Po orEssay-Thefollowi ngisaba nd5essay.In ternatio naltourismhasbroughte norm ousbe nefittoma nyp laces.Atthesametime,thereisc on cernaboutitsi mp act on locali nhabita ntsa ndthee nviro nmen t.Dothedisadv an tagesofi ntern ati on altourismoutweightheadva ntages?Inmyopin io nadva ntagesoutweightthe

3、disadva ntages.Firstly,ma nycoun trieslike'tbeabletofuntcionproperly.Egyp torTaila ndlivefromtourismLotsofpe op leworkthereasaseilsme nsortouristguides.Theseco un trieswithouts upp ortoftouristswould nSec on dly,i ncoun triesvisitedbytouristsare pie ntyofplaceswhere peop lejustca np assbecauseof

4、rarea ni malsorpla nts.Ano therthi ngisthat peop leliketraveli ngan dseei ngn ewexotic places.Theylikelieon thebeachorswimi nocean.Furthermore,tourismis no wmoregrow ingin dustryhigheri ngtousa ndsof people.Therearemake ingnewp lacestoworka ndtohavef un.But on theotherha nd,peop leofte nforgetthatth

5、eyar en' tthe onl ybe ingson the planet.=J rpMa nytouristsarelivi nggarbagejusta ny where.Someofthemwa ntan exoticsouvenirsothe yp ayforillegalthi ngslikedeadorlivea nimalsorsomescul pture.Tosu mup Ith inkintern atio naltraveli ngisagoodth in gbut peop lemustrealisethatthereissomethi ngelsebesid

6、esthem.The yn eedtok no wthatfloraa ndfaunan eedstobe protected.Peop lehavetoe njo ytheirholidaysbutalsow protecte nvir onment.Belowisa nan alysisofthisessay.TaskRes ponse.Theessayquesti on hasbee ncop ieda ndusedasthe in troducti on(p aragra ph1).O ncethese34wordsaretake no ffthewordco un t,theres

7、pon seis un derle ngthat194wordsa ndsolosesmarks.Nevertheless,thet op icisaddresseda ndareleva ntp ositio nisex pressed,althoughthereare patches-asi nthethird paragra ph-wherethedevelo pmen tis un clear.Otherideasaremorereleva ntbutaresometimes in sufficie ntlydevel oped.Cohere ncea ndCohesi on.Thec

8、andidate ' sideasareclearlyorganised,andthereisanoverallprogressionwithin theres pon se.Thereissomeeffectiveuseofara ngeofcohesivedevices(e.g.c onn ectiveslike “ Secondly ” and “ Furthermore ” ).Referencingisalsosometimesusetyeeeptnparagraph4,theuseof“ they ” inthesecondsentencetoreferto“people

9、” inthefirstsentence).However,thereisalsosomemecha nicaloveruseofli nkersi np laces(e.g.“Butontheotherhan' J'd, ” paragraph6).Aswell,paragraphsaresometimesrathertooshortandinappropriate.LexicalResource.20 X 20k.However,co ntrolofthevocabularyisweak,a ndtherearefreque ntsp elli ngerrorswhichc

10、a20 X 20n causesomedifficultiesforthereader(e.g.“ 1” XI“ I”seilsme nsin steadofsalesme n,p aragra.Thislowersthemark.GrammaticaIRa ngea ndAccuracy.Theca ndidateusesamixofsi mp lea ndco mp lexstructureswithfreque ntsubordi nateclauses.Co ntrolofco mp lexstructuresisvariable,a ndalthougherrorsare notic

11、eable,they on lyrarelymakeitdifficultto un dersta ndthemessage.AGoodEssay-Thefollowi ngisaba nd 7essay.Tourismisaverybigi ndustry in themoder ntimea ndisgrow in gquitera pidly.Thousa n dsofpe op letraveleverywheretovariousdesti natio nseveryyear.Argume ntshavecomeu p regard in gthebe nefitsa ndn ega

12、tivei mp actsoftourism inp lacesa ndon itslocali nhabita nts anden viro nmen t;however,lbelievetherearemoreadva ntagestha ndisadva ntagesofi nter n ati on altourism.Peop letravelforvariousreas on s;wetravelforbusi ness purposes,holidays,visitfrien dsa ndrelativesetc.Travelli ngismostlysee nasarecrea

13、ti on alactivity.Tourismhasma nyad van tages.Tourismca np layatreme ndous parti naco un tryseco no my,themoretouristsvisita coun trya ndspendmon eythere,thebetteritisfortheco un try;thatwaymorem on eyiscircula tedwithi ntheco un trya ndeve nthestabilityoftheircurre ncysrateofexcha ngep ersistsifnoti mp rove.Ve ndorsa ndsh op sgettosellmoregoodsa ndmakea nin come.Tourismalsohasits n on-m on etaryadva ntages;itbri ngsculturesa ndpeop lecloser