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1、奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析 1. 先根據(jù)文章的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言初步確定檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來(lái)衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。 2. 詞數(shù)低于130或高于170，扣2分。 3. 評(píng)分時(shí)注意的主要內(nèi)容為：內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)、應(yīng)用詞匯、語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)的數(shù)量和準(zhǔn)確性及上下文的連貫性。 4. 拼寫與標(biāo)點(diǎn)是語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確性的一個(gè)方面。評(píng)分時(shí)視其對(duì)交際的影響程度予以考慮。 5. 如書寫較差以致影響交際，將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個(gè)檔次。奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析第五檔第五檔2125分分1. 完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)

2、完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)2. 覆蓋所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)覆蓋所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)3. 應(yīng)用了較多的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯應(yīng)用了較多的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯4. 語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯有些許錯(cuò)誤，但是為了盡力有些許錯(cuò)誤，但是為了盡力使用較復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)或較高級(jí)詞匯所致使用較復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)或較高級(jí)詞匯所致；具備較強(qiáng)；具備較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力5. 有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊構(gòu)緊湊6. 完全達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫作目的完全達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫作目的奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析存在問(wèn)題,大家應(yīng)注意： 一戒：白板一片 二戒：偷梁換柱 三戒：離題甚遠(yuǎn) 四戒：卷面欠雅 五戒：逐

3、句翻譯 六戒：胡編亂造 七戒：語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)單 八戒：？奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析1.explorare the space_ 2. societal problem_3. scientifical_ 4.be pround of _ =_(n.) 5. come ture_ exploresocialn. societyscientificproudtake pride intrue奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析1. China should take into action to solve it.（相慧） _2. Chinese should fix thei

4、r attention to solve the probles about sociate. (李杰)The government should pay more attention on us. (馬琳琳) _3. Only if develop the Space Exploration, we can beat other countries in terms of it.（沈超群） _take action/ measures/ stepsfix ones attention on/ pay ones attention toOnly if 是連詞。放在句首，常須倒裝。是連詞。放在句

5、首，常須倒裝。Only if we develop the Space Exploration, can we beat other countries in terms of blems society奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析4. It can make our country biger and biger. And we also want to pay attention to education, owing to science and engineer is based on it. (朱玲芝) _5. Space Exploration wil

6、l be benfit for china to coporate with other countries. (胥善慧) _6. Most students in favour of Space Exploration.(汪玉/ 李婭) _bigger and biggerOwe to 是介詞短語(yǔ)是介詞短語(yǔ)=due to/ because of .改為：改為：because/或或is based onbenefit是動(dòng)詞是動(dòng)詞/名詞。名詞。改為：改為：beneficialcooperate缺謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞缺謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞.改為改為:most students are in favor of奇文共欣賞奇文

7、共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析7. Exploration need a lot of money. China cant affort it. （接春萍）China cant afford to the Space Exploration. (黃倩雯)_8. There are some students not agree with the view. (王杰) Most students are agree with it. (趙小娟)_主謂一致：主謂一致：改為改為needsafford 是及物動(dòng)詞。是及物動(dòng)詞。用法：用法：afford sth/ afford to do sth中式英

8、語(yǔ)中式英語(yǔ)/句子成分不清句子成分不清There are some students who dont agree to the viewMost students agree with it奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析9. I believe that China will be more and more stronger. (李娟)_10. Some students thinks that explore space needs so much money, that China cant afford it.(蔣婕)_比較級(jí)的用法：比較級(jí)前只能用比較級(jí)的用法：比較級(jí)前

9、只能用程度副詞修飾如程度副詞修飾如:much, still, even, a lot, a bit, by far 等等改為：改為：much stronger 或或 stronger and stronger. 或或more and more strong.動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)。動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)。改為改為:exploring space動(dòng)詞后連接兩個(gè)或兩個(gè)以上的賓動(dòng)詞后連接兩個(gè)或兩個(gè)以上的賓語(yǔ)從句時(shí)，應(yīng)在最后一個(gè)賓語(yǔ)從語(yǔ)從句時(shí)，應(yīng)在最后一個(gè)賓語(yǔ)從句前加句前加and步驟步驟1 審題審題（時(shí)態(tài)，體裁，結(jié)構(gòu)）（時(shí)態(tài)，體裁，結(jié)構(gòu)）步驟步驟2 羅列要點(diǎn)羅列要點(diǎn)（化繁為簡(jiǎn)）（化繁為簡(jiǎn)）步驟步驟3組句成文組句成文 (連

10、貫性連貫性-關(guān)聯(lián)詞關(guān)聯(lián)詞)最后最后檢查檢查 (拼寫、大小寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)等非智力錯(cuò)誤)奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析羅列要點(diǎn)羅列要點(diǎn)（化繁為簡(jiǎn)）（化繁為簡(jiǎn)）1.多數(shù)學(xué)生支持太空探索。多數(shù)學(xué)生支持太空探索。2.太空探索是中國(guó)熱長(zhǎng)期持有的夢(mèng)想。太空探索是中國(guó)熱長(zhǎng)期持有的夢(mèng)想。3.有助于未來(lái)參與國(guó)際競(jìng)爭(zhēng)。有助于未來(lái)參與國(guó)際競(jìng)爭(zhēng)。4.中國(guó)科學(xué)技術(shù)的發(fā)展使太空探索成為了可能。中國(guó)科學(xué)技術(shù)的發(fā)展使太空探索成為了可能。5.部分學(xué)生反對(duì)這種觀點(diǎn)。部分學(xué)生反對(duì)這種觀點(diǎn)。6.探索太空需要大量的金錢中國(guó)負(fù)擔(dān)不起。探索太空需要大量的金錢中國(guó)負(fù)擔(dān)不起。7.中國(guó)是一個(gè)發(fā)展中國(guó)家，應(yīng)努力解決其他社會(huì)問(wèn)題。中國(guó)是一個(gè)

11、發(fā)展中國(guó)家，應(yīng)努力解決其他社會(huì)問(wèn)題。8.自己的觀點(diǎn)和感想。自己的觀點(diǎn)和感想。奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析1.多數(shù)學(xué)生支持太空探索。多數(shù)學(xué)生支持太空探索。2.太空探索是中國(guó)熱長(zhǎng)期持有的夢(mèng)想。太空探索是中國(guó)熱長(zhǎng)期持有的夢(mèng)想。3.有助于未來(lái)參與國(guó)際競(jìng)爭(zhēng)。有助于未來(lái)參與國(guó)際競(jìng)爭(zhēng)。4.中國(guó)科學(xué)技術(shù)的發(fā)展使太空探索成為了可能。中國(guó)科學(xué)技術(shù)的發(fā)展使太空探索成為了可能。The majority of the students are in favor of Space Exploration Space exploration is a dream that China has for a

12、long time.It is beneficial for China to take part in the international competition in the future.The development of science and technology makes it possible for China to explore space.奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析5.部分學(xué)生反對(duì)這種觀點(diǎn)。部分學(xué)生反對(duì)這種觀點(diǎn)。6.探索太空需要大量的金錢中國(guó)負(fù)擔(dān)不起。探索太空需要大量的金錢中國(guó)負(fù)擔(dān)不起。7.中國(guó)是一個(gè)發(fā)展中國(guó)家，應(yīng)努力解決其他社會(huì)問(wèn)題。中國(guó)是一個(gè)發(fā)

13、展中國(guó)家，應(yīng)努力解決其他社會(huì)問(wèn)題。Some students argue against it. Some students dont agree with it.China cant afford Space Exploration which needs a large amount of money. As a developing country, China is supposed to make every effort to solve other social problems.奇文共欣賞奇文共欣賞, ,疑義相與析疑義相與析8.自己的觀點(diǎn)和感想自己的觀點(diǎn)和感想。As far a

14、s Im concerned, its necessary for us to explore space in that it will bring more benefits in the future, which we can not even imagine now.As a student, I feel not only happy but also proud of the great achievements made in this field. I will work hard so that I can make a contribution to our nation

15、.From the point of view of mineAs far as I am concernedIn my opinion等等It has been reported that China successfully launched a three-man crew into space where one of them made the countrys first space walk, the countrys most challenging space mission since first launching a person into space in 2003.

16、 The majority of the students surveyed are in favor of Space Exploration because the Chinese people have been dreaming of going into outer space ever since before. Exploring space will help China to take part in the international competition in the future. Also, the development of science and techno

17、logy makes it possible for China to realize the dream.However, some students argue against it. In their opinion, China cant afford Space Exploration which calls for a large amount of money. In addition, as a developing country, China is supposed to make every effort to solve other social problems.As

18、 far as Im concerned, its necessary for us to explore space in that it will bring more benefits in the future, which we can not even imagine now. As a student, I feel not only happy but also proud of the great achievements made in this field. I will work hard so that I can make a contribution to our

19、 nation.The majority of the students_ Space Exploration because _. Exploring space_ _ international competition in the future. Also,_ _makes it possible for China to _. However, _. In their opinion, China cant afford Space Exploration _. In addition, as a developing country, _ _solve other social pr

20、oblems. As far as Im concerned, _ _in that _ _which we can not even imagine now. As a student, I feel not only_ but also _ the great achievements _ in this field. I will _ so that I can _ _to our nation.1) 開(kāi)頭的、總結(jié)性句子開(kāi)頭的、總結(jié)性句子1. There is a widespread concern on the news. concern n.(利害利害)關(guān)系關(guān)系, 關(guān)心關(guān)心, 關(guān)注

21、關(guān)注, 關(guān)注關(guān)注, 所關(guān)心的是所關(guān)心的是 2. In terms of the space mission, different people have different attitudes towards it. space mission航天任務(wù)航天任務(wù) 3. Different voices arise in a recent survey conducted by us.(過(guò)去分詞作定語(yǔ)過(guò)去分詞作定語(yǔ)) 4. Students of our school conducted a survey on whether we should explore space. Results are as follows: on one hand, on the other hand1.The majority of the students think it necessary to carry out Space Exploration.2. Most of the students speak highly of it. speak highly of v.贊揚(yáng)贊揚(yáng)3. Most of the students support it.4. Most of the students think it good to our country.5. The majority o