人教必修第二冊(cè)-英語概要寫作基于學(xué)生問題的概要寫作講評(píng)課例分析“We-talk”教學(xué)課件

1、Summary writingWe-talkSummary We-talkEvaluation criteriaContentComplete; objective;concise&independentpointslanguage&grammarCorrect& diversifiedlogichandwritingcoherentClear&neatEvaluation criteriaContentCompStudents difficulties in writing踩不中點(diǎn)，既怕不完整，又怕太繁瑣ContentLanguage Logic找不到替換詞和句式段與段關(guān)系不明，不會(huì)用連接詞

2、Students difficulties in writSolution: three stepsRead for structure and organize your writing coherently.Step3Read for key points and rewrite them correctly and concisely.Step2Read for theme & main ideas.Step1Solution: three stepsRead for Read for theme and main ideasStep1Read for theme and main id

3、easSRead for theme and main ideas We all know that friends are special people who we share our lives with, and who share their lives with us in return. But seeking friends and keeping the friendship going are never easy. According to research recently published in the Journal of Social and Personal

4、Relationships, the key is to use “we-talk”. Led by University of California psychologist Megan Robbins and her colleagues, the researchers reviewed and analyzed 30 different studies involving over 5,000 participants. This largest-ever analysis of “we-talk” suggested that the frequent use of “we” and

5、 “us” is linked to happier and healthier relationships. The word “we” move people from an individual position into a partnership, which makes us more interdependent. “The pronouns offer an insight into whether people see themselves as individuals or as part of a whole,” Robbins told Science Daily. T

6、heir research also found that “we-talk” is helpful for solving conflicts. “The primary point is that interdependence may bring about supportive behaviors and positive ideas of the partner especially important in times of stress and conflict,” according to a statement released by Robbins lab. Contrar

7、y to “we-talk”, there is “I-talk”, which refers to the frequent use of first-person singular pronouns, such as “I”, “me”, and “mine”, when writing or speaking. Earlier this year, researchers from the University of Arizona, US, analyzed a set of data that came from 4,700 people in Germany and the US.

8、 They found that too much “I-talk” was an accurate linguistic marker（語言標(biāo)記）that someone is likely to feel stressed or experiencing negative emotions. As you can see from the two studies, too much “I-talk” can make you feel depressed. But “we-talk” can encourage you to become more positive and create

9、a ripple effect of healthy interdependence with others. So next time youre talking to a friend, try using more “we-talk”. You may find yourself feeling more positiveand the effect it will have on your friend will have on your friend will be positive as well.“we-talk”“we-talk” The of“we-talk”“we-talk

10、”“we-talk”“we-talk”“we-talk” One of“we-talk”Another of“we-talk”The of“I-talk” The importanceadvantageadvantagedisadvantagesuggestionRead for theme and main ideas Read for key points and rewrite themStep2Read for key points and rewritPara.1The importance of “we-talk” We all know that friends are spec

11、ial people who we share our lives with, and who share their lives with us in return. But seeking friends and keeping the friendship going are never easy. According to research recently published in the Journal of Social and Personal Relationships, the key is to use “we-talk”. We all know that friend

12、s are special people who we share our lives with, and who share their lives with us in return. But seeking friends and keeping the friendship going are never easy. According to research recently published in the Journal of Social and Personal Relationships, the key is to use “we-talk”.Tip1 抓住信號(hào)詞，定位要

13、點(diǎn)。Tip2 抓住關(guān)鍵詞，同義替換。seek friends:make friends;buildestablish friendshipkeep friendship:maintain friendshipkey:sth.is importantessentialcrucialvital; sth. plays an important role in; sth. is of importancePara.1The importance of “we-taLearn from peersTip3 巧用句型，整合關(guān)鍵信息。Which version is the best one? Why?1

14、.Using “we-talk” is vital to making friends and maintaining friendship. (v-ing作主語） 2.“We-talk” can play a crucial role in building and maintaining the friendship. (句型sth. plays a crucial role in doing sth.）3.Despite the obstacles in establishing and maintaining friendship, “we-talk” may be of assist

15、ance. (despite引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句）Possible version“We-talk” plays a crucial role in establishing and maintaining friendship. correct &conciseLearn from peersTip3 巧用句型，整合關(guān)鍵Para.2 One advantage of “we-talk” Led by University of California psychologist Megan Robbins and her colleagues, the researchers reviewed a

16、nd analyzed 30 different studies involving over 5,000 participants. This largest-ever analysis of “we-talk” suggested that the frequent use of “we” and “us” is linked to happier and healthier relationships. The word “we” move people from an individual position into a partnership, which makes us more

17、 interdependent. “The pronouns offer an insight into whether people see themselves as individuals or as part of a whole,” Robbins told Science Daily.研究介紹(冗余信息)研究結(jié)果(主要點(diǎn))解釋“relationship”(次要點(diǎn))Tip4 逐句分析復(fù)雜段落，提取主要點(diǎn)和次要點(diǎn)，去除冗余信息。 Led by University of California psychologist Megan Robbins and her colleagues,

18、the researchers reviewed and analyzed 30 different studies involving over 5,000 participants. “The pronouns offer an insight into whether people see themselves as individuals or as part of a whole,” Robbins told Science Daily.舉例說明(冗余信息)Whats “happier and healthier relationships” in para.2? Para.2 On

19、e advantage of “we-taWhats “happier and healthier relationships” in para.2?(Draw a mind map to illustrate the concepts like “individual”; “partnership”; “interdependent” and “happier and healthier relationship”. )Iindividualpartnership“We”interdependentTip5 借助思維導(dǎo)圖， 厘清抽象概念。Whats “happier and healthie

20、r Learn from peers1. According to their study, the more you use “we” and “us”, the happier and healthier you will be. (句型 “the+比較級(jí),the+比較級(jí)”)2. Frequently using “we” is associated with healthier relationship and motivates individuals into a group. (將is linked to改寫為is associated with; move改寫為motivate)

21、3. The research demonstrates “we-talk”,with plenty of “we” and “us”, promotes harmonious relationships by mingling people to a community. (將happier and healthier改寫為harmonious; move改寫為mingle;借助v-ing連接主次要點(diǎn))Possible version As a study reveals, “we-talk” contributes to healthier relationships, motivatin

22、g individuals into a group and to rely on each other.Which version is the best one? Why?主次要點(diǎn)邏輯清晰Learn from peers1. According tbe helpful for:Para.3 Another advantage of “we-talk” Their research also found that “we-talk” is helpful for solving conflicts. “The primary point is that interdependence may

23、 bring about supportive behaviors and positive ideas of the partner especially important in times of stress and conflict,” according to a statement released by Robbins lab. “we-talk” is helpful for solving conflicts.研究結(jié)果(主要點(diǎn))解釋說明(次要點(diǎn))benefitbe beneficial tobe conducive tocontribute tosolve:conflict:

24、settleaddresstackledeal withcollisiondisagreementargumentdisputePossible version Support from such interdependence is beneficial to address collisions.Tip6 巧用限定詞，省略重復(fù)信息。be helpful for:Para.3 Another Some researches show that “we-talk” not only can make relationship happier and healthier, but also ca

25、n help us to deal with some conflicts between friends. Thinking：The following version combines the points in para.2 and para.3 into one sentence. Do you think it proper? Why? Tip7 概括較長段落時(shí)，各要點(diǎn)獨(dú)立成句，以免丟失次要點(diǎn)。點(diǎn)評(píng)：此生雖能借助“not onlybut also”句型體現(xiàn)para.2和para.3兩段的并列關(guān)系，且能抓住兩段的主要點(diǎn)，但合并處理不利于次要點(diǎn)的整合。要點(diǎn)2要點(diǎn)3 Some resear

26、ches show thPara.4 The disadvantage of “I-talk” Contrary to “we-talk”, there is “I-talk”, which refers to the frequent use of first-person singular pronouns, such as “I”, “me”, and “mine”, when writing or speaking. Earlier this year, researchers from the University of Arizona, US, analyzed a set of

27、data that came from 4,700 people in Germany and the US. They found that too much “I-talk” was an accurate linguistic marker（語言標(biāo)記）that someone is likely to feel stressed or experiencing negative emotions. Contrary to “we-talk”, there is “I-talk”, which refers to the frequent use of first-person singu

28、lar pronouns, such as “I”, “me”, and “mine”, when writing or speaking. Earlier this year, researchers from the University of Arizona, US, analyzed a set of data that came from 4,700 people in Germany and the US. They found that too much “I-talk” was an accurate linguistic marker(語言標(biāo)記)that someone is

29、 likely to feel stressed or experiencing negative emotions. an accurate linguistic marker:indicate;symbolize;demonstrate;show“I-talk” indicates pressure or negative feelings.Possible versionstressed:tense;anxious;strained;under the pressure研究結(jié)果(主要點(diǎn))Para.4 The disadvantage of “I-Para.5 The suggestion

30、 As you can see from the two studies, too much “I-talk” can make you feel depressed. But “we-talk” can encourage you to become more positive and create a ripple effect of healthy interdependence with others. So next time youre talking to a friend, try using more “we-talk”. You may find yourself feel

31、ing more positiveand the effect it will have on your friend will have on your friend will be positive as well. As you can see from the two studies, too much “I-talk” can make you feel depressed. But “we-talk” can encourage you to become more positive and create a ripple effect of healthy interdepend

32、ence with others. So next time youre talking to a friend, try using more “we-talk”. You may find yourself feeling more positiveand the effect it will have on your friend will have on your friend will be positive as well.建議內(nèi)容(主要點(diǎn))建議效果(次要點(diǎn))表建議:its necessaryrecommendedsuggestedadvisedproposeda must to

33、do sth.Possible versionIts advisable to use “we-talk” in the benefit of you and your friends. Tip8 巧用介詞短語、非謂語動(dòng)詞、定語從句等語法，連接主次要點(diǎn)。Para.5 The suggestion Read for structure and organize your writingStep3Read for structure and organizRead for the structure and draw a mind map Suggestion (Para.5)Introduction (Para.1)Advantage 1 (Para.2)Advantage 2 (Para.3)Disadvantage (Para.4)并列轉(zhuǎn)折因果Read for the structure and draFill in the blanks with proper logical word