年4.8期杜仕明寫作保分班-lesson2-議核心段

段的擴展一篇議的任務是為了完成如下任務的其中一部分：1.

好處2.

壞處3.

影響4.

原因2020/11/17段落的細在一篇議

的結(jié)構(gòu)被安排好之后，你需要做的就是把節(jié)處理好。這也是很多同學一直糾結(jié)的地方。問題1：寫了一句話之后，接下來完全不知道該怎么繼續(xù)下去。索性換個方向再寫，導致兩三句話之間沒有任何邏輯聯(lián)系；問題2：寫了一句話之后，接下來的一句對前一句完全是簡單的換詞重復，并沒有起到更進一步解釋的作用。問題3：各種我難以啟齒的問題?？傊褪乔把圆淮詈笳Z?。。。?020/11/17接下來展示的四種方法都是針對”好/壞”的基本邏輯。四種方法之間并沒有本質(zhì)的差別，只是在

topicsentence上有不同，目的是為了增加大家的選擇。2020/11/17最基本的好壞分析（使用機會50%）1.

給出方向(好/壞)----很模板的一句話2.

第一個好(壞)處3.

解釋4.第二個好(壞)處5.

解釋聯(lián)系外星人的好處On

the

one

hand,

from

the of

some

optimists,there

may

be

great

benefits

to

connecting

alien

life

forms.

1).It

is

likely

that

our

neighbours

in

space

would

lend

us

their

farmore

advanced

technologies

to

solve

a

series

of

problems

onthe

Earth.

For

example,environmental

pollution

couldbeeradicated

and

life-threatening

diseases

could

be

cured

if

weare

technologically

improved

by

our

alien

friends.

2).

What’smore,

with

their

help

and

assistance,

human

beings

may

beable

to

make

a

significant

step

forward

to

live

beyond

theEarth.

This

means

that

we

would

no

longer

be

afraid

of

facingany

catastrophe

that

might

destroy

our

home

planet.支持校服的理由People

in

favour

of

students

wearing

school

uniforms

believethat

it

has

a

number

of

benefits.1).

,

requiring

students

towear

uniforms

helps

reduce

peer

pressure.

When

everyoneinthe

class

is

dressed

in

the

same

way,

they

are

not

likely

to

talkabout

the

price

and

taste

ofclothes.

As

a

result,

no

one

wouldfeel

a

sense

of

superiority

or

being

prejudiced.

2).

In

addition,the

rule

of

wearing

school

uniforms

keeps

the

campus

safe.This

is

because

those

who

are

not

members

of

the

school

canbe

easily

recognized

and

kept

outside.

There

are

consequentlyless

possibilities

of

some

incidents,

such

as

theft

or

gangbullying

oncampus.在家工作的好處Advocates

of

working

at

home

believe

that

individuals

benefitalot

from

it.

1).

It

is

time-saving

for

employees

to

work

at

home.Instead

of

spending

hours

getting

to

and

from

work,

people

justtake

a

few

steps

to

their

working

table.

With

the

saved

time,they

could

do

a

better

job

or

have

a

better

rest.

2).

In

addition,working

at

home

allows

people

to

work

in

their

own

way.Forexample,

there

is

no

need

for

them

to

wear

suits

which

are

not

acomfortable

choice

for

the

majority

ofpeople.在家工作的壞處However,

I

am

of

the

opinion

that

this

unconventional

way

ofworking

causes

more

problems.

1).

ly,

people

who

work

intheir

living

room

may

suffer

from

poor

health.

They

are

morelikely

to

be

attacked

by

obesity

or

hypertension,

as

they

spendthe

whole

day

without

any

outdoor

activities.

2).

Secondly,

theremay

be

extremely

low

working

efficiency.

This

is

because

peopleare

easily

distracted

and

disturbed

by

many

things,

such

assnacks,

gadgets

and

visitors.

3).

Finally,

it

damages

the

ability

offace-to-face

communication

if

people

do

all

their

work

athome.When

they

have

got

used

to

sending s

or

having

a

camerameeting,

it

is

difficult

for

them

to

communicate

with

others

inreal

life.沒有外語天分的孩子就不要被強制學習外語了On

the

one

hand,

advocates

of

the

given

opinion

believe

thatuntalented

students

will

undergo

some

negative

emotions

if

theyare

required

to

learn

a

foreign

language.

1).

One

of

these

impacts

is

that

they

may

feel

unconfident.

This

is

because

theyoften

frown

upon

what

can

be

easily

completed

by

students

whohave

more

talent

in

language

study.

2).

Inaddition,

forcingstudents

weak

in

language

study

to

be

bilingual

may

have

anadverse

effect

on

their

enthusiasm

for

study.

The

low

self-assessment

caused

by

their

poor

performance

in

foreignlanguage

classes

reduces

their

interest

in

other

subjects.家里孩子多的好處分析On

the

one

hand,

some

people

believe

that

having

morethanone

child

in

a

family

has

a

number

ofbenefits.1).

One

isthatparents

can

have

more

free

time

of

their

own.

This

is

becausechildren

take

care

of

each

other

or

play

with

each

other.

Forexample,

when

the

elder

brother

reads

bed

stories

to

theyounger

ones,

their

parents

are

free

to

do

what

they

want.2).

Inaddition,

children

who

grow

up

in

such

a

family

are

less

likely

tobe

selfish

and

have

more

experience

of

sharing.

They

are

moreaware

of

the

importance

of

being

considerate

and

responsiblefor

their

own

decisions.提前總結(jié)段落的兩個ideas—很有難度的一句話解釋idea1舉例/進一步影響解釋idea2舉例/進一步影響(使用幾率很高，但是要看自己的總結(jié)能力)帶孩子出國的壞處On

the

one

hand,

some

people

worry

that

children

who

go

andlive

abroad

with

parents

may

face

the

problems

of

homesicknessand

language

barriers.

ly,

these

children

are

very

likely

tomiss

their

old

school,

friends

and

relatives.

Such

a

negativeemotion

is

difficult

to

deal

with

even

for

adults,

so

it

is

a

largerchallenge

for

young

children.

Secondly,

learning

a

foreignlanguage

is

rather

challenging.

Therefore,

when

these

childrenarrive

in

a

foreign

country,

it

would

be

impossible

for

them

to

goto

a

normal

school

very

soon,

which

probably

leads

to

morenegative

impacts.帶孩子出國的好處Two

major

advantages

of

having

their

children

with

them

whenthey

move

a represerving

family

unity

and

giving

themthe

opportunity

to

learn

a

new

language.

It

isundeniable

thatchildren

are

far

more

likely

to

be

happy

in

the

company

of

bothparents.

As

for

the

language

argument,

fluency

in

multiplelanguages

is

an

increasingly

valuable

skillin

the

modern

worlddue

to

the

ever-growing

effects

of

globalization.There

are

two

reasons

why…….—必須提前想好是否真的有兩個理由reason1解釋reason2解釋（使用幾率極高）On

the

one

hand,

there

are

two

reasons

why

some

people

saywe

are

more

dependent

on

each

other

now.

1).

ly,

thecost

of

living

has

increased

so

dramatically

that

life

is

morecomplex

and

difficult.

Young

adults,

for

example,

have

to

relyon

their

parents

for

financial

help

when

renting

a

flat

orbuying

ahouse.

Housing

prices

are

higher

than

ever,

and

ifrelying

on

themselves

it

would

be

impossible

for

many

youngpeople

to

pay

a

deposit

and

amortgage.

2).

Secondly,

peoplewant

a

better

quality

of

life

for

their

families.

This

means

thatboth

parents

usually

need

to

work

full-time,

and

they

dependon

support

from

grandparents

and

babysitters

for

child

care.著自己想第二整個段落只寫一個比較寬泛的idea—不要個莫名其妙的idea解釋1舉例解釋2舉例(使用幾率比較高)單學校的好處Some

educationalists

think

it

ismore

effective

to

educate

boys

and

girls

in

single-sex

schools.

1).

They

believethisenvironment

reduces

distractions

and

encourages

pupils

toconcentrate

on

their

studies.

This

is

probably

true

to

someextent.

2).

It

also

allows

more

equality

among

pupils

and

givesmore

opportunity

to

all

those

at

the

school

to

choose

subjectsmore

freely

without

gender

prejudice.

For

example,

a

muchhigher

proportion

of

girls

study

science

to

a

high

level

whenthey

attend

girls’

schools

than

their

counterparts

in

mixedschools

do.

Similarly,

boys

in

single-sex

schools

are

more

likelyto

take

cookery

classes

and

to

study

languages

which

areoften

thought

of

traditional

subjects

for

girls.混合學校的好處On

the

other

hand,

some

experts

would

argue

that

mixedschools

prepare

their

pupils

better

for

their

future

lives.

1).Girlsand

boys

learn

to

live

and

work

together

from

an

early

age

andare

consequently

not

emotionally

underdeveloped

intheirrelations

with

the

opposite

sex.

2).

They

are

also

able

to

learnfrom

each

other

and

to

experience

different

types

of

skillandtalent,

which

is

often

impossible

in

a

single

gender

environment.接下來的這種

段稍微特殊一些，因為題目里所給的觀點本身就范圍很窄，所以你不能隨意擴寬 的內(nèi)容。題目問題范圍很小，只能順著一個小方向去論證（出現(xiàn)幾率極高，這也是避免跑題的重要方法）1.

引出這個具體的論證方向；2.

第一個對應的知識/事實；3.

帶來的影響/結(jié)果；4.

第二個對應的知識/事實；5.帶來的影響/結(jié)果；的定義However,

admitting

the

importance

of

money

is

not

the

sameasassuming

that

it

is

the

only

factor

contributing

to

being

happy.

Asa

matter

of

fact,

the

definition

of

happiness

varies

greatly

fromto .

Children

are

happy

to

have

new

toys,

but

th

irgreater

happiness

comes

from

being

paid

attention

to

andpanied

by

parents

or

friends.

Similarly,

while

many

youngpeople

consider

a

successful

career

with

a

decent

salary

as

theirultimate

pursuit,

there

are

still

many

others

feeling

satisfied

bymaking

contribution

to

the

community

and

society

they

live

in.In

addition,

people

in

their

sixties

or

seventies

would

hope

thatthey

are

in

a

healthy

physical

condition

rather

than

as

rich

as

amillionaire.帶來的文化信息On

the

one

hand,

I

admit

that

getting

acquainted

with

culture

ofdifferent

places

across

the

world

has e

incredibly

easy

andconvenient

with

the

help

of

media.

There

are

thousands

of

books

and

magazines,

such

as

Lonely

Planet,

vividly

picturinghow

people

live

their

daily

lives

in

a

city

thousands

of

awayfrom

the

reader.

Information

about

their

food

tradition,

festivalcelebration

and

......can

be

accessed

at

almost

no

cost

of

timeand

money.

In

a

similar

way,

watching

movies

brings

viewersclose

to

a

lifestyle

totally

different

from

their

own.

nmovies,

for

example,

let

people

know

how

important

singing

anddancing

is

to

the

ns.使用/電子設備影響人們的面對面交流On

the

one

hand,

it

is

undeniable

that

having

a

mobile

phone

ora

tablet

around

negatively

affects

people’s

face-to-facecommunication

skills.

1).

For

those

who

are

constantly

textingwith

abbreviated

forms

of

words

such

as

LOL

or

OMG,

it

will

berather

difficult

to

accura y

express

themselves

when

havingareal

face-to-face

conversation

as

they

are

not

able

to

pick

out

theappropriate

words.

2).

Also,

sending s,

in

many

ways,

isrobbing

people

of

the

ability

to

think

and

respond

quicklyenough.

This

is

because

they

are

allowed

far

more

time

to

thinktwice

before

writing

down

a

sentence,

which

is

impossible

forpeople

having

discussion

or

quarrelling

with

others.文化商業(yè)化帶來的壞處However,

I

would

argue

that

the

inheritance

of

culturaltraditions

should

not

totally

rely

on

the

market

because

theprocess

of

commercialization

does

damage

to

local

waysoflife.

For

example,

in

order

to

help

tourists

understand

culturalperformances

and

shows

more

easily,

performers

would

haveto

simplify

and

even

alter

the

way

of ng

them.

As

a

result,no

longer

could

the

original

forms

of

dancing

and

celebratingbe

seen

by

the

local

younger

generation.

In

addition,

localrestaurants

would

cater

for

tastes

of

tourists

by

changingingredients

and

cooking

methods.

This

means

that

……………..文化商業(yè)化帶來的壞處有時候你會得到一個特別抽象的話題，盡管幾率不大，你也需要了解如何能展開相對應的 段。給出比較抽象的方向句—topic

sentence解釋這個句子—explanation舉例/事實支撐—for

example反向假設/總結(jié)—if………….一方面，出色的身體素質(zhì)扮演重要角色在比賽競爭中。換句話說，擁有強壯肌肉，超強的耐力和極大爆發(fā)力的運動員更容易獲得比賽的勝利。比如說，在短跑比賽中，獲得冠軍的往往都是那些天生或者后天擁有超強爆發(fā)力的選手，例如.博爾特。如果運動員不能維持出色身體狀態(tài)的話，他們會發(fā)現(xiàn)完成比賽都很，更不用說去爭奪獎牌。On

the

one

hand,

parents

play

a

critically

important

role

insha

children’s

behavior.

Educating

the to

understandthe

need

to

obey

rules

and

respect

others

always

begins

inthe

home

and

is

widely

thought

to

be

the

responsibility

ofparents.

They

will

certainly

be

the to

help

children

learnwhat

is

important

in

life,

how

they

are

expected

to

behaveand

what

role

they

will

play

in

their

world.用來引出段落第一句的參考句型1).On

the

one

hand,it

is

undeniable

that…..(少用)2).On

the

one

hand,some

people(恰當?shù)娜朔Q)believe

that……..(少用)3).On

the

one

hand,from

the of..人/名詞…,….4).On

the

one

hand,some

people

blame….for…….(壞)5).On

the

one

hand,some

people

link….to…..(中)6).Advocatesof

the

given

opinion(may)believe

that…….(只在是否贊同里使用)7).However,I

would

argue

that……(

版本)8).

It

seems

to

me

that

…….9).On

the

one

hand,those

people

who/in

support

of/against……謂語動詞…..(少用)10).

On

the

one

hand,

the

argument

in

favour

of/against

….may

be

that

…….11).There

are

two

reasonswhy…….(不會了別的就用這個)report里的原因分析1.題目話題的相關(guān)事實；2.

這個事實帶來的影響/內(nèi)容；3.

最終導致的結(jié)果(回應題目)；孩子在學校表現(xiàn)糟糕的原因In

many

countries,the

birth

rate

is

decreasing

so

thatfamilies

are ing

smaller

with

fewer

children.(必須是基于事實的句子)These

children

are

oftenspoilt.

They

are

allowed

to

have

whatever

they

wantregardless

of

price

and

to

behave

as

they

please.Thismeans

that

the

childre