讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)寫作指導(dǎo) 講義-高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)

讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)寫作指導(dǎo)講義閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay．HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed．TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge．Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen．Therewasnothingtoit．JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo．Thebigdaycameatlast．Thealarmrangat6a．m．Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen．Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst．TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast．Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk．Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture．Next,

Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan．EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread．Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds．Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread．Thistime,

sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely．ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake．Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire．Jennapanicked．Thankfully,

Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly．Butthestovewasamessnow．JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge．ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain．Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater．Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning．Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell．第一步通過“四讀”，理清文章脈絡(luò)1．讀標(biāo)題(或首句)通過標(biāo)題和首句可知，本文為記敘文，中心人物為一對(duì)雙胞胎和媽媽，主要事件是這對(duì)雙胞胎在母親節(jié)給媽媽一個(gè)驚喜。2．讀要素Whenon

Mother's

DayWhereat

home,

in

the

kitchen,

in

the

bedroomWhothe

twins

Jenna

and

Jeff,

their

mother

and

fatherWhatto

make

breakfast

for

their

motherWhyto

give

her

a

surpriseHowThey

had

trouble

when

cooking．The

main

ideaIn

order

to

give

their

mother

a

surprise,

the

twins

Jenna

and

Jeff

made

breakfast

for

their

mother,

but

they

had

trouble

when

cooking．3.讀結(jié)構(gòu)Para．1The

twins

planned

to

give

their

mother

a

surprise．(事件的開端)Para．2On

the

morning

on

Mother's

Day,

the

twins

started

making

breakfast．(事件的發(fā)展)Para．3Unfortunately,

they

had

some

trouble

with

cooking．(事件的發(fā)展)續(xù)寫段1當(dāng)雙胞胎失望地環(huán)顧四周時(shí)，他們的父親出現(xiàn)了。(事件的高潮)續(xù)寫段2雙胞胎把早餐端到樓上，叫醒母親。(事件的結(jié)局)

注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為

150

左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared．Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup．4.讀情感變化本文中，作者的心情變化可以用以下表格來表示：CluesEmotion

changeThe

twins

were

filled

with

excitement

as

they

thought

of

the

surprise

．．．(Para．1)excitedJenna

panicked

．．．But

Jeff's

hand

touched

the

hot

burner

and

he

gave

a

cry

of

pain．(Para．3)

disappointed續(xù)寫第一段

可推斷，續(xù)寫第一段的情感應(yīng)該是hopeful，續(xù)寫第二段的情感應(yīng)該是proud。

續(xù)寫第二段

第二步關(guān)注“三點(diǎn)”，續(xù)寫契合美文1．根據(jù)首句關(guān)鍵信息，設(shè)計(jì)故事情節(jié)續(xù)寫第一段的首句為Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,

theirfatherappeared．這句話要引出接下來的續(xù)寫內(nèi)容，需要我們認(rèn)真分析。此句中的關(guān)鍵信息是theirfatherappeared，再結(jié)合續(xù)寫第二段的首句，我們展開合理想象，本段內(nèi)容應(yīng)該是在父親的幫助下，這對(duì)雙胞胎順利做完了早餐，并準(zhǔn)備一份送到媽媽的臥室。續(xù)寫第二段的首句為Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup．這句話承接上文，可以想象到媽媽看到早飯時(shí)的心情是既高興又驚訝的，并且會(huì)夸贊這對(duì)雙胞胎。并且父親會(huì)表現(xiàn)出不知情的樣子。2．依據(jù)情感變化，烘托故事氣氛在整個(gè)故事中，這對(duì)雙胞胎的情感變化為excited—disappointed—hopeful—proud。在續(xù)寫的后兩個(gè)自然段中，可充分利用這條情感線來烘托故事氣氛，使內(nèi)容更加飽滿。3．依據(jù)語言特點(diǎn)，選擇恰當(dāng)詞句本篇短文的語言特點(diǎn)如下表所示：句式結(jié)構(gòu)

長句并不多，使用了較多的并列句。語法結(jié)構(gòu)

使用了狀語從句、定語從句、動(dòng)詞不定式作目的狀語、動(dòng)詞ing形式作賓語補(bǔ)足語等。詞匯選擇

使用了大量的短語，如be

filled

with,

throw

．．．into

．．．,

put

out,

turn

off,

clean

up等?？傮w印象

語言描寫生動(dòng)，語言充分體現(xiàn)了母子之間的親密關(guān)系。選材描述了一個(gè)母親節(jié)活動(dòng)，結(jié)合上表語言特點(diǎn)分析，續(xù)寫時(shí)可用love,

care,company,encouragement,trust,gratitude等詞體現(xiàn)親子之間的親密關(guān)系。參考范文：Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared．Onelookandheknewwhattheywereupto．Seeingtheirdowncasteyes,hetoldthemtocleanupthekitchenwhilehehelpedthemmakebreakfastfor

theirmother．Thetwinscheeredupanddidastold．Withinanhour,

thekitchenwascleanedup,andthefathermadesomeeggsandwichesandcookedsomeoatporridge．Thenhesneakedbacktobed．Thetwinspreparedthebreakfasttray,

andaddedacardtheyhad

made．Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup．Theyhuggedtheirmothertightlyandyelled,

“HappyMother'sDay,dearMummy！”

Themotherhuggedthetwins．Hereyeswidenedatthesightofthebreakfasttray．Sheshookfatherwhowaspretendingto