江蘇新材料作文指導

新材料作文---概括指導Howtowriteasummaryofnarration?Learningaim:TofurthermasterthemethodsandskillsofwritingsummariesofnarrativepassagesDifficultpoint:Howtowriteanexactsummarywithoutleavingoutkeypoints學生習作常見錯誤：概括內(nèi)容要點不完整使用太多細節(jié)內(nèi)容而不是用概括的語言過多引用原文詞句詞數(shù)過多用第一人稱而不是第三人稱轉(zhuǎn)述時態(tài)錯誤LastSundayIwentfishing.Aftersettingupmyfishingrodwithbait,Isatdownonthebankofthelake.Buttwohourslater,Ididn’tcatchanyfish.Igotveryangryandbegantopackupmystuff,preparingtogobackhome.Justthen,Isawanoldmansittingnearme.Tomysurprise,hisbasketwasfulloffish,soIwentovertohim,wantingtoknowwhy.“Excuseme,buthowlonghaveyousathere?”Iasked.“Aboutfourhours,”heanswered.“Fourhours?”Icouldn’tbelievemyears.“Yes.It’sveryimportanttobepatient,”theoldmansaid.“Don’tconsiderfishingatiringsport.Justenjoyit.”Suddenly,Iunderstoodwhathesaid.Imustlearntobepatient.ThenIsatthereandwaitedforfishpatiently.Ifeltafishtouchthebait,butIdidn’tmoveandwaitedfortherightmomenttoreelitin.Atlast,Icaughtit.Thismademeveryhappy.Inthefollowingsixhours,Icaughtover10fish.Onmywayhome,Ithoughtwhathadhappenedonthebank.Igraduallyrealizedthatthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.

學生習作常見錯誤1:

ThepassagetellsusthatlastSundayamanwentfishingbuthedidn’tcatchanyfishintwohours.Atthistimehesawanoldmansittingnearhim.Themanaskedthemanhowtocatchfishes.Theoldmansaidthatyoushouldbepatient.使用太多細節(jié)，語言不夠概括概括內(nèi)容要：精，準，全學生習作常見錯誤2:

Thestorymainlytellsusthatthewriterwasfishinganddidn’tcatchanyfish.Whenhepreparedtogobackhome,hefoundanoldmansittingthereandhis

basketwasfulloffish.Intheend,hecaughtmanyfish.引用原文詞句不得直接引用原文的句子學生習作常見錯誤3:

Thestorymainlytellsusthatthewriterwasfishingbutmadenoachievementsandpreparedtogobackhome.Whileanoldmanwhosebasketwasfulloffishtoldhimthatfishisveryimportanttobepatient.Theauthorlearnedtobepatient.Atlast,theauthorcaughtfishandrealizedthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.(共60詞)詞數(shù)過多詞數(shù):約30詞（小于20詞或大于40詞，扣2分）學生習作常見錯誤4:

Thewritertellsusthathewentfishingbutdidn’tcatchanyfishafterwaiting2hours.Thenanoldmansittingnearme

toldmehissecretoffishingwaspatience.Finallythewritersucceeded.人稱用錯，應該用第三人稱一般以第三人稱來表述

學生習作常見錯誤5:

Thepassagemainlytellsusthatthewriterdidn’tcatchanyfishbecauseofhisimpatience.Hebecomehappywhenheunderstandthepatienceisthekeytosuccess.時態(tài)錯誤與原文時態(tài)一致(1)概括內(nèi)容要點要：精，準，全

寫概括時應滿足的5個條件(4)一般以第三人稱來表述

(2)不得直接引用原文的句子（同義詞組替換法；正話反說法；語態(tài)變換；簡單句變復合句……）(3)詞數(shù):約30詞（小于20詞或大于40詞，扣2分）(5)與原文時態(tài)一致（正文和結尾除外）記敘文概括的方法---串聯(lián)要素法第一步：先通讀全文，找出幾個要素who→誰what→何事when→何時where→何地why→原因asaresult/consequence/finally→結果…….,whichledto第二步：用自己的話串聯(lián)起來

萬能公式：Thepassagemainlytellsusthatsb.(who……)didsth.(atsomeplaceatsometime)becauseof/asaresultof/dueto……,whichledto……finally/eventually……開頭套用句式：Thestory/passageisabout……Thewriter/authortellsusabout….Thestory/passagemainlytellsusthat…Thepassagedescribes….LastSundayIwentfishing.Aftersettingupmyfishingrodwithbait,Isatdownonthebankofthelake.Buttwohourslater,Ididn’tcatchanyfish.Igotveryangryandbegantopackupmystuff,preparingtogobackhome.Justthen,Isawanoldmansittingnearme.Tomysurprise,hisbasketwasfulloffish,soIwentovertohim,wantingtoknowwhy.“Excuseme,buthowlonghaveyousathere?”Iasked.“Aboutfourhours,”heanswered.“Fourhours?”Icouldn’tbelievemyears.“Yes.It’sveryimportanttobepatient,”theoldmansaid.“Don’tconsiderfishingatiringsport.Justenjoyit.”Suddenly,Iunderstoodwhathesaid.Imustlearntobepatient.ThenIsatthereandwaitedforfishpatiently.Ifeltafishtouchthebait,butIdidn’tmoveandwaitedfortherightmomenttoreelitin.Atlast,Icaughtit.Thismademeveryhappy.Inthefollowingsixhours,Icaughtover10fish.Onmywayhome,Ithoughtwhathadhappenedonthebank.Igraduallyrealizedthatthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.

hadnopatience第一步：請找出這篇短文的幾個要素：

who→誰①_______________②________________what→何事①____________________________②__________________________when→何時where→何地why→原因①______________________________________

②______________________________________

asaresult→結果______________________________________________________I(thewriter)didn’tcatchanyfishanoldmanhisbasketwasfulloffishgotveryangryIt’svery

importanttobepatientlearntobepatient;caughtit.

第二步：用自己的話串聯(lián)起來

萬能公式：sb.(who……)didsth.(atsomeplaceatsometime)becauseof/asaresultof/dueto……,whichledto…/finally/eventually……

ThewritercaughtalotoffishafterbecomingpatientwhohadnopatienceatfirstbecauseofbeinginfluencedbyanoldmanhimrealizingpatienceisthekeytosuccessOnepossibleversionThepassagemainlytellsusthatthewriterwhohadnopatienceatfirstcaughtalotoffishafterbecomingpatientbecauseofbeinginfluencedbyanoldman.Finally,herealizedpatienceisthekeytosuccess.hadintendedtogiveupintendedtohavegivenupGroupWork

閱讀下面的短文，然后以約30個詞概括這篇短文的主要內(nèi)容。Hi,IamMike.Ijustwentthroughmyfirstyearofcollege.Thetoughestpartonmeatfirstwasthegeneraladjustment.Iwenttoaverysmallhighschoolwheremymomwasateacherandshedidpracticallyeverythingforme.ButatthecollegeIneedtoknowsomebasiclifeskills,suchasbalancingacheck-book,laundry,andthethingsyouhavetobeabletohandlethatIneverthoughtofinthehighschool!ItwasreallytoughformeatfirstandIgotbadlyhomesick.OncethatfirstsemesterwasoverandIgotusedtothecollegelife,Iloveit—goodfacilities,helpfulinstructors,andagoodlibrary.Thestudent’sUnionorganizesvariouspartieseveryweek.Ialsogotocinemasandconcerts,andoftenspendSaturdaynightsinpubsandclubs.OnethingIthinkisimportantistogetyourselfactiveinthings.Iwasondanceteamincollegeandmetatonofpeoplethatway—itwassomucheasiertomakefriendswhenyouhadacommonground.第一步：請找出這篇短文的幾個要素：who→誰_______________when→何時①____________what→_________________②__________________________________where→何地why→原因______________________________________asaresult→結果__________________________________________________第二步：用自己的話串聯(lián)起來(根據(jù)萬能公式)

萬能公式：Thepassagemainlytellsusthatsb.(who……)didsth.(atsomeplaceatsometime)becauseof/asaresultof/dueto……,whichledto……finally/eventually……Presentation&EvaluationGroupWork

閱讀下面的短文，然后以約30個詞概括這篇短文的主要內(nèi)容。Hi,IamMike.Ijustwentthroughmyfirstyearofcollege.Thetoughestpartonmeatfirstwasthegeneraladjustment.Iwenttoaverysmallhighschoolwheremymomwasateacherandshedidpracticallyeverythingforme.ButatthecollegeIneedtoknowsomebasiclifeskills,suchasbalancingacheck-book,laundry,andthethingsyouhavetobeabletohandlethatIneverthoughtofinthehighschool!ItwasreallytoughformeatfirstandIgotbadlyhomesick.OncethatfirstsemesterwasoverandIgotusedtothecollegelife,Iloveit—goodfacilities,helpfulinstructors,andagoodlibrary.Thestudent’sUnionorganizesvariouspartieseveryweek.Ialsogotocinemasandconcerts,andoftenspendSaturdaynightsinpubsandclubs.OnethingIthinkisimportantistogetyourselfactiveinthings.Iwasondanceteamincollegeandmetatonofpeoplethatway—itwassomucheasiertomakefriendswhenyouhadacommonground.Onepossibleversion:Groupwork1范文：ThepassagemainlytellsusthatMike,(whohaddifficultyinadjustingtothefirst-yearcollegelife)got

accustomedtoit

onesemesterlater

becauseofthecolurfulactivitiesandenjoyedhimself.sbdidsth.whenbecauseofIndividualWorkGoodmorning,ladiesandgentlemen.ThisisLiHuafromSeniorThree.I'mheretodaytosharewithyouagoodlessonfromanoverseasChinesestudentlivinginGermany.Itisatruestory.Afteryearsofhardwork,thisChinesestudentgraduatedwithamazingacademicachievements.Everyonethoughthewasgoingtogetagoodjobeasilyandhaveabrightfuture.Buttohisdisappointment,hewasnotevenallowedthechanceforaninterview!Thethirdtimehewasturneddown,hecouldn'thelptelephoningthecompanytoaskwhytheydidn'twanthim.Theanswerwassimple,"Wedon'thiredishonestpeopleinGermany.Whatwaswrongyoumightwonder?Thetruthis,shortlyafterhearrivedinGermany,thiscleverstudentfoundthatitwaseasytoskipbuyingsubwaytickets.So,tosavemoney,heoftenwentwithoutaticket.Asaresult,hehadbeencaughtwithoutaticketinthesubwaythreetimes.Fromthisstory,welearnthatwemaygetshort-termbenefitsbydishonestmeans,butthetruthwillcomeoutsoonerorlaterandthecostishigh.Soremember,honestyisthebestpolicy.That'sallformyspeech.Thankyou!Presentation&EvaluationIndividualWorkGoodmorning,ladiesandgentlemen.ThisisLiHuafromSeniorThree.I'mheretodaytosharewithyouagoodlessonfromanoverseasChinesestudentlivinginGermany.Itisatruestory.Afteryearsofhardwork,thisChinesestudentgraduatedwithamazingacademicachievements.Everyonethoughthewasgoingtogetagoodjobeasilyandhaveabrightfuture.Buttohisdisappointment,hewasnotevenallowedthechanceforaninterview!Thethirdtimehewasturneddown,hecouldn'thelptelephoningthecompanytoaskwhytheydidn'twanthim.Theanswerwassimple,"Wedon'thiredishonestpeopleinGermany.Whatwaswrongyoumightwonder?Thetruthis,shortlyafterhearrivedinGermany,thiscleverstudentfoundthatitwaseasytoskipbuyingsubwaytickets.So,tosavemoney,heoftenwentwithoutaticket.Asaresult,hehadbeencaughtwithoutaticketinthesubwaythreetimes.Fromthisstory,welearnthatwemaygetshort-termbenefitsbydishonestmeans,butthetruthwillcomeoutsoonerorlaterandthecostishigh.Soremember,honestyisthebestpolicy.That'sallformyspeech.Thankyou!用自己的話串聯(lián)起來(根據(jù)萬能公式)

Onepossibleversion:_________________tellsusthat_____________________________________didn’t_______________onpurposewhen_________________,whichledto_________________________dueto_____________.ThepassagemainlyanexcellentChinesestudent

buythesubwaytickets

studyinginGermanyhimnotbeingabletofindajobhisdishonestyReviewthestepsofwritingasummary第一步：先通讀全文，找出幾個要素who→誰what→什么when→何時where→何地why→原因asaresult/consequence/finally→結果…….,whichleadsto第二步：用自己的話串聯(lián)起來

萬能公式：Thepassagemainlytellsusthatsb.(who……)didsth.(atsomeplaceatsometime)becauseof/asaresultof/dueto……,whichledto……finally/even