新高考專用讀后續(xù)寫10救人型（故事構(gòu)造三部曲）高考英語技巧與訓練

/10/10/讀后續(xù)寫10：救人型TOC\o"1-3"\h\uPart1：經(jīng)典例文（鐵軌救嬰兒） 1Part2：救人故事構(gòu)造三部曲 4第一步：救人之前（惡劣環(huán)境+負面情緒） 4第二步：救人之中（努力+救人動作+如釋重負） 5第三步：救人之后（感激+升華） 6Part3：靈活應(yīng)用 7例1：河中救人 7例2：海邊救人 9讀后續(xù)寫很多時候會涉及自然災(zāi)害與防范、安全常識與自我保護的話題，會經(jīng)常涉及到危難之際，挺身而出救助他人的故事。在這個話題中有時會寫到危難之際，利用所學急救知識，成功救人脫離生命危險的故事；有時會寫到樓內(nèi)突發(fā)火災(zāi)，警察/群眾舍己救人的故事；有時會寫到群眾/路人遇到有人不幸溺水，鼓足勇氣跳入水中施救的的故事。Part1：經(jīng)典例文（鐵軌救嬰兒）a.m.1998.Mohra.m.on12May1998.hadalreadyscannedseveralpackageslistingdangerousmaterialsaboardthetrain.Thepresenceofgaswouldmeantakingextraprecautionwhenbrakingthe6,200-tontrain.Withexplosivegasonboard,itwouldbedisastrousifthetraincameoffthetrack.Afterafinalinspection,Mohrjumpedaboard.Hewasheadingeast,intoasunthatpromisedabeautifuldayfortheir276-kmruntoPeru,Indiana.Ataroundnoonthatday,Marshallpreparedtotacklesomeyardwork.Itwasabeautifuldayforit,shethought,gazingpastthehousesacrossthestreet.Some45metersaway,railroadtracksshoneinthesun.Marshallbeganworkinginapatch(地塊）ofsoil.Sittingnexttoher,cheerfullyrunningherhandsthroughdirt,washer19-month-olddaughter,Emily.Forawhile,shekeptturningtocheckonEmily,whoplayedcloseathand.Eventually,though,Marshall'sabsorptioninherworkbecametotal.p.m.approachedthetownwhereMarshalllivedatabout1:45p.m.andslowedthetraintothe40-kmphspeedlimit.Heactivatedtheflashinglightsandwarningbell.Mohrhadbeenthroughthetownhundredsoftimes,buthegrewextracautiousroundingthefirstcurve.Asthetraincameoutofthecurve,Mohrnoticedasmalldotonthetrackabout200metersahead.Hethoughtitmightbeadog.Althoughitwasagainsttherulestodosointhetown,hebeganlightlytappinghishorn."Comeon,puppy,move,"heurged.Thetoots(嘟嘟響）ofatrainwhistlestartled(使受驚嚇）Marshallfromheryardwork.That'sodd,shethought.Theydon'tusuallyblowthewhistlethroughtown.Sheglancedovertocheckherdaughter,andherheartskipped.Emilywasnowhereinsight.Now,asthetrainapproachedwithin100metersoftheobjectontherail,Mohrnarrowedhiseyes,tryingtomakeoutwhatexactlywaslyingahead.Thenshockranthroughhimlikeelectriccurrent.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語：3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Para1"MyGod!"heyelledasatinyfaceturnedtowardshim.“It'sababy!"______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2Thechildwasnowjust36metersahead.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Para1"MyGod!"heyelledasatinyfaceturnedtowardshim.“It'sababy!"Mohrhadaninstantdecisiontomake,applyingfullemergencybrakeswithhalfthetrainstillwrappedaroundacurve.Hehadtoriskanemergencystop.Hardashetry,thetrainkeptmovingjustasacatsawafish,whoseenticingsmellattractedthecattoapproachthebaby.Meanwhile,Marshallrushedtowardsherdaughter,nervousbutdesperate,fearingthetrainwouldrunintoherbeloved.“我的上帝啊！”他像一張小臉轉(zhuǎn)向他時大聲喊道?！斑@是個嬰兒！”莫爾立即做出了決定，實施了緊急剎車，一半的火車仍然繞在彎道上。他不得不冒著緊急停車的危險。在他的努力中，火車繼續(xù)移動，就像一只貓看到了一條魚，它誘人的氣味吸引了貓接近嬰兒。與此同時，馬歇爾沖向緊張但絕望的女兒，擔心火車會撞到她的愛人。Para2Thechildwasnowjust36metersahead.Mohrpulledthebrakewithhiswholeefforts.Thesoundofwheelsgrindingagainsttherailsrangthroughthesky.Thesituationwasquitedangerous.Asthetrainwasalmoststopped,heimmediatelyopenedtheleftdooroftheenginecabquicklyandswiftlyjumpedfromthemovingtrainandranbacktothechild.Shelaycryingbythetracks.AgreatreliefsweepingoverMohr,heliftedherfromthedirthurriedly.ItwasonlythenthatMohrnoticedthetrainhadstoppedandMarshallwasjustcomingtoherbaby.Withthebabyinhisarms,Mohrbegantowalktowardsthemother.這個孩子現(xiàn)在只有前面36米遠。莫爾竭盡全力地拉下了剎車。車輪撞擊鐵軌的聲音響徹天空。情況很危險。當火車快停下來時，他立即打開駕駛室的左門，迅速從行駛的火車上跳下來，跑回孩子身邊。她躺在鐵軌邊哭泣。他使莫爾松了一口氣，急忙把她從泥土里抬了起來。直到那時，莫爾才注意到火車已經(jīng)停了下來，馬歇爾正要來接她的孩子。莫爾抱著孩子，開始向母親走去。【分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了火車司機Mohr，在一次駕駛火車全速前進時，他注意到遠處的鐵軌上有個黑點，他以為是一條狗，后來證實這個黑點是一個嬰兒。他要在保證火車安全的情況下，救下這個嬰兒?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我的上帝!”當一張小臉轉(zhuǎn)向他時，他大叫起來。“是個嬰兒！”，可知，第一段可描寫火車司機Mohr的心理感受及其采取的措施，同時可以描寫嬰兒媽媽Mashall的現(xiàn)場反應(yīng)。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“這時火車距離嬰兒只有36米了?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懟疖囁緳CMohr努力減速火車直至火車停下，然后救嬰兒，最終嬰兒平安得救。2.續(xù)寫線索：看見嬰兒——決定剎車——跳車救孩子——孩子得救3.詞匯激活行為類①.做決定：makeadecision/makeuphismind/keepinmindthat②.剎車：pullthebrake/stopthetrainwitheffort③.救孩子：savethechild/rescuethechild/savethebaby'slife情緒類焦急：anxious/haveone'sheartinone'smouth【點睛】applying...hrhadaninstantdecisiontomake,applyingfullemergencybrakeswithhalfthetrainstillwrappedaroundacurve.（applying...為現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語）[高分句型2].Hardashetry,thetrainkeptmovingjustasacatsawafish,whoseenticingsmellattractedthecattoapproachthebaby.（as引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句，whose之后為非限制性定語從句）Part2：救人故事構(gòu)造三部曲第一步：救人之前（惡劣環(huán)境+負面情緒）1、惡劣環(huán)境（1）一到晚夏，池塘就會被綠色的起泡浮渣覆蓋。有時候，池塘里冒出一陣強烈的難聞的味道。Inlatesummer,thepondwouldbecoveredbyagreenandbubblyscum（起泡的浮渣）.Sometimesastrong,unpleasantsmellrosefromit.（2）在池塘中間，冰面忽然露出了一條裂縫。Inthemiddleofthepond,theicegavewaywithasuddencrack.（3）空氣里彌漫著濃厚灼熱的味道。Athickburningsmellfilledtheair.?2、負面情緒：害怕(1)Watchingtheshoreinthedistance,Ifeltpowerless(無力的)asifwewerebrokentinyboatsatthemercyofstrongwaves.(2)Exhaustedandcold,thethoughtthatwemightdiehereflashedacrossmymind，whichmademequiverwithanuncontrollableterror/horror/fright(難以控制地發(fā)抖)Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseoffearsurgingthroughmywholebody(在身體涌動)第二步：救人之中（努力+救人動作+如釋重負）1、.掙扎努力Tomlookedthoughtful(若有所思)“Weneedtothinkoutaway!”Imuttered(喃喃自語),scratchingmyhead.(絞盡腦汁)...,Weswamtoothandnailsparednoefforttotoothandnailsparednoeffortto(全力以赴地).sparednoefforttotoothandnailsparednoeffortto2.救人有關(guān)的驚險場面描寫(1)ThenextthingIknewIwashangingontotheedgeofaholeintheicebyarmsoutstretchedontheice.FrommyshouldersdownIhunginicywater.(2)Itriedtoclimboutofthehole,butwhenIgotakneeontheice,itbrokelikewindowglass(像玻璃一樣破裂).（浙江省十校聯(lián)盟考試續(xù)寫2020.10）(3)Asthecoatbecamecompletelywet,itdraggedmedown(把我拖下水).Iwastiredofthestruggleandrestedwithmyarmsstretchedoutontheice.（浙江省十校聯(lián)盟考試續(xù)寫2020.10）3實施救援的過程“幫我把西蒙斯弄下車！”諾伍德對驚慌失措的朋友們大聲喊道。（2021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟）“HelpmegetSimmonsoutofthecar!”Norwoodyelledloudlytoherfriends,whowereleftinapanic.諾伍德和朋友們把西蒙斯從車里拉了出來，把他放在一個安全并且離車有點遠的地方。盡管緊張而焦慮，諾伍德努力讓自己鎮(zhèn)靜下來，對西蒙斯進行了急救。（2021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟）Nervousandanxious,NorwoodstruggledtocalmherselfdownandcarriedoutfirstaidtoSimmons.諾伍德和她的朋友們把西蒙斯放到平躺的位置，打開了她的呼吸道。（2021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟）4、如釋重負Ensuingtheirsafety,Ifeltasurgeoftriumph.(感到一陣勝利的喜悅)Hearingthenews,Icouldn'thelprestrainingmyexcitement.(情難自抑)Itthrilledustohearthegoodnews(聽到新消息很高興).Onhearingthegoodnews,TomandIsighedingreatrelief(如釋重負地嘆了口氣),grinningmerrilyateachother.第三步：救人之后（感激+升華）1、感激如果我沒有得到急救，我就會死了。西蒙斯感激地對諾伍德說。（2021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟）“IfIhadnotbeengivenfirstaid,Iwouldhavedead.”SimmonssaidtoNorwoodgratefully.SimmonsshowedhergratitudetoNorwood,saying“Itwasyouwhocametomyaidandsavedmylife.”西蒙斯對諾伍德表示了感謝，她說：“是你來幫助我，救了我一命?！保?021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟）“謝謝你進入我的世界，我會永遠記住你為我所做的?！蔽髅伤箤χZ伍德說。（2021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟）“ThankyouforenteringmyworldandIwillalwaysrememberwhatyouhavedoneforme.”SimmonswhisperedtoNorwood.2、升華句(1)花點時間來學習急救和心肺復(fù)蘇術(shù)。拯救了生命，而且很有效。Takesometimetolearntheknowledgeoffirstaid.Itsaveslives,anditworks.(2)這個故事表明，良好的急救知識真的可以起作用。Thestoryshowsthatagoodknowledgeoffirstaidcanmakearealdifference.(3)每個人都應(yīng)該學點急救知識，因為在緊急情況下每一秒都很重要。Everyoneshouldlearnsomethingaboutfirstaid,foreverysecondwillcountinanemergency.(4)了解基礎(chǔ)的急救知識有助于你對緊急情況作出迅速的反應(yīng)。Knowingbasicfirst-aidtechniqueswillhelpyourespondquicklytoemergencies.Part3：靈活應(yīng)用例1：河中救人Boysliketobeconsideredtobebrave,butwhatkindofthingscanbeconsideredtobebrave?Itisnotaquestionthatcanbeansweredbywords,butbytheactualdeed.AboywiththenameHenrygaveusagoodexample.RonnyandHenryweretwofriendsinthesameclass.Theyalwaysplayedtogetherandwenthometogether.OnedayasRonnyandHenryweregoinghomeafterschool,theysawsomepeoplefightinginthestreetcorner.Ronnysaidexcitedly,“Somepeoplearefighting!Let'sgoandhavealook!”ButHenryrefused,“It'snoneofourbusiness.We'dbettergohomeanddon'tgetclosetothem.AlsoourparentsareexpectingtohavedinnerwithustogetherathomeandIdon'twantthemtoworryaboutme.”“Youareacoward,andafraidtogo,”saidRonny,andoffherantothespotwithsomeotherboys.Henryhadtogohomealoneanddidn'tthinkaboutitanymore.ButRonnythoughtHenrywasacowardandtoldalltheboysthat.Theylaughedathimagreatdeal.Fromthenon,theylookeddownuponHenryanddidn'twanttoplaywithhim.Henrywassadbuthewasn'tangrywithRonnyforhisrudebehavior,becausehehadlearnedthattruecouragewasshownmostinbearingmisunderstandingwhenitwasnotdeserved,andthatheoughttobeafraidofnothingbutdoingwrong.Thus,hejustignoredtheotherboys'laughterandcontinuedtosticktohisthoughtandgotoschoolandstudyaswell.However,Ronnydidn'tinviteHenrytogohomewithhimanymore.Instead,hehadhisnewfriendswhoalsothoughtHenrywasacoward.Everydayafterschool,theydidn'tgohomedirectlybutwenttotheriverorsomewheretoplaygamesandhadlotsoffun.注意：1.所續(xù)寫的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為二段，每段的開頭語已經(jīng)為你寫好；4續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Afewdayslater,somethingterriblehappenedtoRonny.Paragraph2:Atthatmoment,Henryhappenedtopassby.Paragraph1Afewdayslater,somethingterriblehappenedtoRonny.Thatafternoonafterschool,Ronnywasbathingwithsomeofhisnewfriendsintheriverhappily.Suddenly,hewasstuckinthemudandcouldn'tgetout.Hestruggledhardbuthewasstilltrapped.Hescreamedforhelp,butallinvain.TheboyswhohadcalledHenryacowardgotoutofthewaterasfastastheycould.Theyweresoscaredanddidnoteventrytohelphim.Paragraph2:Atthatmoment,Henryhappenedtopassby.Heheardthescreamsandrantotheriverassoonaspossible.SeeingRonnywasalmostdrowned,Henrytookoffhisclothesimmediatelyandjumpedintothewaterwithoutanyhesitation.HereachedRonnyjustashewassinkingthelasttime.Withgreateffort,andwithmuchdangertohimself,hebroughtRonnytotheshoreintime.Henrywashappytohelphisfriend,thoughhewasextremelytired.第1段幾天后，羅尼發(fā)生了一件可怕的事情。那天下午放學后，羅尼和他的一些新朋友在河里快樂地洗澡。突然，他被困在泥里，無法出來。他努力掙扎，但仍然被困住了。他尖叫著呼救，但都沒有成功。那些叫亨利是懦夫的孩子們盡可能快地離開了水面。他們很害怕，甚至沒有試圖幫助他。第2段：就在那一刻，亨利碰巧經(jīng)過了。他聽到了尖叫聲，就盡快跑到河里去了?？吹搅_尼差點被淹死，亨利立即脫下衣服，毫不猶豫地跳進了水里。他上次就在羅尼下沉時，到達了羅尼。他費了巨大的努力，對自己也很危險，及時把羅尼帶到了岸邊。亨利很樂意幫助他的朋友，盡管他非常累。例2：海邊救人閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。OnJuly8，2017，eightmembersofafamilyintotal，wereenjoyinganeveningtogetheratthebeachinPanhandle，F(xiàn)lorida．Asthesunsankloweronthehorizon，thetwoboysNoah，11，andStephen，8—swamintothewaveswithoutthegrown-upsnoticing．Soontheyrealizedthattheoceanhadpulledthemintothesea．Aftertryingandfailingtoswimback，theystartedwavingandscreamingforhelp．Butthelifeguardshadbeenoffdutyfortheevening．TheboyshadbeenstrugglingforseveralminuteswhenJackyandTabatha，acouplefromGeorgia，heardthem．Theydivedintothewaterandsoonreachedthetwobrothers．Butafterafewminutes，theywerealltrappedinaripcurrent(離岸流)—apowerfulonethatcouldsweepeventhestrongestswimmerouttosea!Bythen，someteenagershadheardthecry．Oneoftheteensrushedintothewater，grabbedJacky，andpulledhimbacktoshore．Meanwhile，Tabathacouldfeelherselfbeingpulledfartherout．Shewasalreadyexhaustedandbeginningtofeeldesperateasshewastryingtosavebothboysalone．Onshore，Jackywasterrified．Amanstopped．“What’swrong?”askedShaun，whowasheadingbacktohiscar．“Mywifeisdrowning!”Brittanysaid．Shaunimmediatelystrode(大步跨)intothewater．Butseveralminuteslater，agaping15feetstilllaybetweenhimandTabathaandtheboys．Heknewthatifhecontinued，he’dbecomeanothervictim．Heturnedaroundtoseekhelp．ItwasaboutthattimethatRoberta，theboys’mother，returnedfromthebathroomandlookedaroundforherchildren．Shewasshockedtospotthemfloatingmuchfartheroutthantheywereallowedtogo．Shefoughtthewavestogettoherscreamingsonsandthestrangerwhowastryingtosavethem，butshequicklydiscovereditwasnearlyimpossibletomakeheadwayinanydirection．Lookingaround，Robertasighedwithrelieftoseesomemorepeoplecomingtohelp．Paragraph1WhentheytriedinvaintorescuethebrothersandTabatha,ariskyideacametothem._______________________________________________________________________________Bythen,more