讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)2022年6月全國(guó)1卷David's+run 講義 高三英語(yǔ)二輪復(fù)習(xí)寫(xiě)作專(zhuān)項(xiàng)

2022年新高考全國(guó)卷I讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)原題：閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線(xiàn))throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell--hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger--that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.注意:1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

第一段還有一個(gè)顯著的寫(xiě)作特點(diǎn)值得關(guān)注：每一個(gè)環(huán)節(jié)雙方動(dòng)作有機(jī)地交織在一起，形成一一對(duì)應(yīng)的態(tài)勢(shì)，構(gòu)建出一幅完整的師生談心話(huà)輪圖，這樣的故事情節(jié)容易給改卷老師留下印象，改卷老師也能很快把分?jǐn)?shù)送出去。第二段考生提到David回頭望了老師，老師回予笑容鼓勵(lì)他，這個(gè)情節(jié)的設(shè)計(jì)表明考生對(duì)這位特殊學(xué)生的心理揣摩到位，對(duì)其個(gè)性把握準(zhǔn)確。關(guān)于對(duì)結(jié)局的設(shè)定，如果最后寫(xiě)David取得了前幾名的話(huà)，肯定是不合理的，這會(huì)導(dǎo)致續(xù)寫(xiě)與原文的內(nèi)容及思想的融合度不高。其實(shí)，原文的最后一段已經(jīng)為續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段的走向奠定了基調(diào)。如：1）Davidhadabraindisease...;2)Itjusttookhimlonger...;3)healwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.David---lookedback---headedfortheline---showedup(sweating)--seemedtogiveout--crossedtheline--smiledemerged--hurdledhisfearI----casthimasmile---cheeredforhim--caughtnosightofhim---heldmybreath考生還利用其他選手跑步之快來(lái)反襯David的特殊情況，此外，考生還通過(guò)描寫(xiě)老師沒(méi)有看到David的身影來(lái)說(shuō)明他跑得有多么的慢?？忌鷮?duì)時(shí)間的描寫(xiě)有兩處，一處是As

timeworeon，另一處是Afterwhatseemedlikecenturies,這都能顯示David跑得實(shí)在太慢了。

這就是考生對(duì)情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)的高明之處——當(dāng)情況糟糕到無(wú)以復(fù)加的地步時(shí)，也就是出現(xiàn)轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)的時(shí)候了——David只要跑完了全程就是好樣的。值得推薦的表達(dá)：duckone'shead低下頭；biteone'slip；castsbanencouragingsmile,朝某人微笑以示鼓勵(lì)；hurdleone'sfear跨越（克服）恐懼；unremittingeffort不懈努力，sweatheavily流大汗；astimewears/woreon隨著時(shí)間的流逝;Alltherunnersshotoutlikearrows所有的選手都猶如離玄之箭；ThunderousapplauseeruptedfromthekidswitheveryonehailingDavid孩子們爆發(fā)出雷鳴般的掌聲，大家都為大衛(wèi)歡呼。讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)，不管是什么類(lèi)型的故事，在考場(chǎng)有限的時(shí)間范圍內(nèi)，要想寫(xiě)出高質(zhì)量的佳作，關(guān)鍵要注重平時(shí)的操練和積累，尤其是故事情節(jié)的整合，掌握好“起承轉(zhuǎn)合”非常重要，不偏離故事的正常軌道就成功一大半了。

一、起：閱讀續(xù)寫(xiě)原文，了解故事基本情節(jié)。越野賽快到了，可是David卻決定不參加比賽了，我找教練了解了情況之后，決定找他談一下……二、承轉(zhuǎn)：分析段落首句，預(yù)設(shè)續(xù)寫(xiě)承轉(zhuǎn)情節(jié)。（研究“矛盾點(diǎn)”、預(yù)設(shè)“觸發(fā)點(diǎn)”）“盡管David身體殘疾，他總是盡自己最大的能力參與運(yùn)動(dòng)，而且他沒(méi)有錯(cuò)過(guò)任何一次訓(xùn)練，但現(xiàn)在他在教練的“放任”下，可能要放棄參加越野賽”這就是故事的“矛盾點(diǎn)”。解決這一矛盾的關(guān)鍵在于預(yù)設(shè)富有生活情趣的情節(jié)——“我”突然出現(xiàn)坐在他旁邊。我會(huì)跟David說(shuō)些什么呢？D