讀后續(xù)寫給80歲母親的禮物課件

讀后續(xù)寫講評(píng)讀后續(xù)寫講評(píng)1一、原文分析WHO(maincharacters;relationship?):

Theoldlady(Myra’smother);

Thepostman

Myra(theoldlady’sdaughter);

Myra’shusband(Mayor,theoldlady’sson-in-law)

Mrs.Morrison(maybethelady’sneighbour

);

Mrs.Grant(thelady’sneighbour);

Johnnie(thelady’sneighbour)

Jim(maybeoneofherrelatives)

WHEN:Theoldlady’seightiethbirthdayWHERE:

Theoldlady’shome一、原文分析Theoldlady(Myra’smoth2WHAT:Itwasthelady’seightiethbirthday.Althoughshehadreceivedmanypresentsfromherneighbours,shewasstilllookingforwardtoherdaughter’spresent,whichshewassureherdaughterwouldneverforget.Havingmadefullpreparations,shestoodbythewindow,expectingthearrivalofthepost.Atlast,onlyanenvelopefromMyraarrived,theoldladyalmostunwillinglytoreitopen…

WHAT:Itwasthelady’s3Maincharacters:Theoldlady:Myra:Johnnie:livealonelookedafter

byherneighboursMyrawouldn'tforgethermother'sbirthday,evenifsheseldomwroteatothertimes.Ofcourseshewasbusy.TheoldladywasproudofMyra.HerherbandhadbeenmadeMayor,andMyraherselfhadgotamedalforherwork.Perhaps---perhapsMyramightcome.Afterall,eightywasaspecialbirthday.Thelittleboy,Johnnie,hadbeenupwithapacketofmints,andsaidhewouldn'tgoouttoplayuntiltheposthadcome.successful/ambitious/diligent

selfish/lackthesenseofresponsibilityShemayfeelregrefulfornotattendingtohermomHiscompanycomfortstheoldlady’sheart.Contrasttohighlighttheoldlady’slonelinessOrletusreflectonMyra’sabsenceofresponsibilitytotakecareofhermomPredictwouldshecometothepartyornot?Thereasonableplot

Theme?Maincharacters:Theoldlady:l4What’stheauthor'spurposeofwritingthisstory?What’sthebestgift?Itisoneofthetragediesthatchildrenregretinthelaterdaysnotbeingabletorewardparents'lovebeforetheypassaway.Nothingcouldbebetterthanthecompanyofherdaughter.What’stheauthor'spurposeo5二、每段的開頭語分析（用下劃線標(biāo)出關(guān)鍵詞）

Para1:Shestoodbythewindow,watching.Whydidshestandbythewindow?Howdidshefeelwhilewaiting？What/Whodidshewatchthatcouldaddtothefeelingofloneliness,excitement,hope?Howlongdidshewatch?thesunrisesunsetthesunrose/sank/setdownDidshereceiveagiftoraletter?Didherdaughtercome?WhosenthertheletterthepostmanorJohnnie?Whatwashisfeeling?Howdidshefeelseeingtheletter?Contrast

第一段應(yīng)該包含以下內(nèi)容：

二、每段的開頭語分析（用下劃線標(biāo)出關(guān)鍵詞）Whydids6Asthepostmanpassedby,abeamofdisappointmentsweptoverher.HopesofreceivingthepresentfromMyraseemedtobefadingaway.OnseeingwhatJohnniecarried,hersmilefrozeabruptly.Sheshookherhead,withatremblingvoice...Facedwithsuchafrustratingsituation,shekeptwaitingwiththeexpectationfadingaway.However,itseemedthatGodplayedatrickonhersincesherecievedtheletterwhenshewasalmostoverwhelmedbyadeepsenseofdespair.段子妍Theshiningfromeyesfadedaway,whichwassubstitutedbythedesperationandthenumbsense....suddenly,arapidsoundoffootstepsfiredherhopeagain...Staredatbytheboywithdissatisfactionandsuspicion,shewasatalossaboutwhattodo.儲(chǔ)加明Asthepostmanpassedby,abe7Theshineonhereyesfadedaway,sheturningbacktothetickenwithaheavygait/step.Hardlyhadshedecidedtocutthecakewhenthedoorbellrang.Theoldladyrushedtothedoor,openingitwithatremblinghand....Suddenly,asmileofunderstandingflashedacrossherface.Shehuggedtheboy,tearsgatheringinhereyes...錢藝ShestillfailtocatchsightofMyra,feelingasuddensurgeofdisappointment,theonlyfireofexpectationfadingaway.Whensheintendedtogiveupwaiting,Johnnierushedupstairsatfullspeed,graspinganenvelopfirmly.章祎瑋Thelittleboycastadelightedlookonhisfaceaswell.He

staredatthestreetuntilthepostmancameintohissight.Herantowardsthepostman,onlytobegivenaletter.Withahintofsadness,theladypickeduptheletter.詹雨

Theshineonhereyesfadedaw8兩段話內(nèi)容如何順暢銜接及第二句的關(guān)鍵部分：

Didherfeelingchangewhenshereceivedtheenvelope?Howdoyouknow?Para2:Almostunwillinglyshetoretheenvelopeopen.herfeelingchange(joy/expectation---disappointment)兩段話內(nèi)容如何順暢銜接及第二句的關(guān)鍵部分：

Didher9續(xù)寫的第二段要包含以下內(nèi)容：

Whatwasintheenvelope?

Therelayacardpeacefully,whichread/said,”...”Howdidshefeelwhenseeingthething(s)intheenvelope?Didsheseeherdaughteratlength?Didshereceivesomegifts?Whatwasthebestgiftforher?Whatwastheendofthestory?

ahappyending/asadending(outofexpectation)

disappointment–excitement/relief)Contrast續(xù)寫的第二段要包含以下內(nèi)容：

Whatwasinthe10四、語言基礎(chǔ)隨著時(shí)間的流逝里面有一張卡片，上面寫著...一個(gè)孤獨(dú)的身影站在門口，眼中充滿了期待。一個(gè)熟悉的身影出現(xiàn)在門口，眼中含有淚水

(With)Timegoingby/proceedingAstimeproceededInside/Therelayacard,whichread/said,”...”Therestoodalonelyfigurebythedoor,(with)eyesfilledwithexpectation.(獨(dú)立主格)Bythedoorstoodalonelyfigure...Thereappearedafamiliarfigureatthedoor,eyesfilledwithtears.Atthedoorappearedafamiliarfigure,eyesfilledwithtears.Afamiliarfigurecameintohersight四、語言基礎(chǔ)(With)Timegoingby/p11四、語言基礎(chǔ)5房間里很安靜。6突然7我很想陪伴你度過生日我最想要的是女兒的陪伴很抱歉我不能參加生日party9

Thewholeroomwasinsilence.Thewholeroomwascoveredwithablancketofsilence.Thewholeroomwasindeadlysilence,withonlythedeepbreathandthepumpingheartforcompany.Abruptly/Allofasudden,I’mdesperatetoaccompanyyou/tokeepyoucompany.I’msorryIfailtoattendyourbirthdayparty.I’msorryformyabsencefromyour...WhatIreallydesirewasmydaughter’scompany.四、語言基礎(chǔ)Thewholeroomwasins12四、多種表達(dá)訓(xùn)練1.她一想到女兒可能會(huì)來陪伴她，心里感到一陣激動(dòng)。

On/Uponthinkingthatherdaughterwouldcometoaccompanyher,shewasovercome/overwhelmedbyexcitement.

Theinstantshethoughtherdaughterwouldcometoaccompanyher,anairofexitementfloatedintheair.

Nosoonerhadshethoughtofherdaughter’scomingforcompany

than

sheheldherbreathwithheartpumpingwildly.四、多種表達(dá)訓(xùn)練On/Uponthinkingthat13Hereyestwinkledwithpleasuretheinstantshethoughtherdaughterwouldcome.Thebloodpulsedthroughherveins.Herfacewaslit/brightenedwithexcitement.Tearsstreameddownherfacebeforeanyword.

Hereyestwinkledwithpleasur14

2.一看到手里的信封，她感到很失落。

On/Uponseeingtheenvelopeinthehand,shefeltdisappointed/

indespair.

Theinstantshesawtheenvelopwithafamiliarsigature,herheartsankintoanabyssofdisappiontment.Nosoonerhadsheseentheenvelopwithafamiliarsigaturethan

herheartsankintoanabyssofdisappiontment.

Shestaredattheenvelopedwithafamiliarsignature,thebrightnessonherfacefadingaway.(獨(dú)立主格)Shecastadisappointedlookontheletter.詹雨

Thewholeroomwascoveredwithablanketofsilence.

On/Uponseeingtheenvelopei15Sherushedtothemailboxinexcitement,onlytofindtherewasmerelyanenvelop.Disappointedasshewas,shetookitout.Deeplytouched,shesobbedwithhappiness.Throughhermistyeyes,shesaw...李梁鈞

Sodisappointedwasshethatherbodyshudderedslightly.汪燕超Thedeliciouscaketastedbittertoday.梅秀玲Sherushedtothemailboxine163.收到了來自女兒的禮物后，她心里樂開了花。

Havingreceivedthepresentfromherdaughter,shejumpedtojoy/letoutascream.（具體的動(dòng)作）

Havingreceivedthepresentfromherdaughter,shewasoverjoyed,shewaswildwithjoy.Whenshereceived...herfacewaslightenedwithhappiness.Herlivelyeyesglittered（閃爍）liketheblackpearlsfullofjoy.(瞿比喻)Thebloodpulsedthroughherveins.Anairofdelight/happinessfloatedintheair.比喻Thewholeroomwascoveredwithablanketofhapiness.Thewholeroomwasbathedinhappiness.3.收到了來自女兒的禮物后，她心里樂開了花。Having17Smileclimbedontheoldlady’sfaceimmediatelywithairfilledwithwarmth.舒露Abittersmileclimbedonherface.Inaninstant,sherushedtotaketheenvelop,butitwasnotaddressed.Tearsrolleddownherface,“Iloveyou,too.”sherepliedwithasatisfiedandsweetsmile...鮑可潤(rùn)Smileclimbedontheoldlady’18

4.看完了信，她非常生氣。Afterreadingtheletter,shefeltannoyed.

...shelosthertemper.Afterreadingtheletter,shehittheceiling/wenthotunderthecollar(勃然大怒)，(with)thewholebodytrembling.獨(dú)立主格

Soannoyedwasshethatshetoreitintopieceswithtremblingfingers.(倒裝)Whatshesaidinthelettermadeherbloodboil（夸張）.Havingreadtheletter,shetoreitintopieceswithtremblingfingers.（具體動(dòng)作）

4.看完了信，她非常生氣。Afterreadingt19Para1：

She