0425-3.高考英語作文的潤色與提高(宋武棟老師)

高考英語作文的潤色與提高宋武棟

山東省實驗中學(xué)1專題一：優(yōu)秀作文的基本特征2優(yōu)秀高考英語作文的六個基本特征1、層次不亂 2、句式多變3、亮點若干 3、巧妙串聯(lián)4、蠢錯不犯 6、整潔卷面3層次不亂開頭：第一個要點主體：第二個要點結(jié)尾：第三個要點4句式多變長短變化主、被動變化主語變化同義詞變化同功能句型變化橫向比較變化5亮點若干高中詞匯高中常見短語高級句型各種復(fù)合句倒裝句強調(diào)句型虛擬語氣句型非謂語動詞結(jié)構(gòu)6巧妙串聯(lián)起：firstofall,tobeginwith,aboveall...承：inaddition,besides...轉(zhuǎn)：however,ontheotherhand...合：inmyopinion,allinall,inaword...7蠢錯不犯：初中二年級學(xué)生就應(yīng)該掌握的基本語言表達能力。1.Iverylikethebook.2.Hewasveryangrily.3.Therehavemanystudentintheclassroom.4.Thecarisyellowcolor.8整潔卷面英文書寫大方、圓潤、自然；詞與詞間距適當字母大小適當無大面積涂改不影響交際910111213專題二肅清基礎(chǔ)語言錯誤14中學(xué)生英語寫作中常見的14種語言錯誤：1.主謂不一致MyfatherandIlikesgoingfishingbythelake.Largequantitiesofsoilhasbeenwashedaway.152.時態(tài)、語態(tài)混用Lastnight,Ihadenjoyedaparty.Thepaintingonthewalldamagedseriously.∧was163.句子成分殘缺Istoodupandsawthereaboy.Theyoungmanrunninginthestreet.∧∧waswas174.習慣搭配誤用Ionceheardfromtheanimallikethis.Wepassedawaythebuilding.ofby185.名詞單、復(fù)數(shù)不分Imademanyfriendinthesummercamp.WecangetsomeinformationsfromtheInternet.196.動詞單、復(fù)數(shù)不分Ourteacheroftensaythatsuccesslieinhardwork.Mr.Smith,togetherwithsomestudents,arecomingtoourschool.207.贅詞現(xiàn)象多發(fā)Ihopeyoucanreturnbacktoourschoolsoon.We'llholdapartyonnextSunday.218.近義詞的誤用Theschoolrequeststhatallthestudentsshouldweartheschooluniform.Iquarreledwithmyteacheraboutmygrades.229.基本詞匯拼寫錯誤IfliedtoNewYorkdirectlyfromBeijing.Thiswillbedoneimmediatly.2310.前后人稱不一致Theboywasborninapoorfamilybutsheworkshard.Wewatchedafewmoviesandwelovedit.2411.動詞原形作主語/賓語Takeawalkafterdinnerisverygoodforyou.Atthatmoment,Ididn'tfeelliketakeawalk.2512.邏輯主語與主句主語不一致Preparingdinner,thedoorbellrang.Walkinginthestreet,acarhitanoldman.2613.一個簡單句出現(xiàn)兩個謂語Therewasnoworktodo,hewentbackhome.Ireceivedyouremail,Iwasveryexcited.being∧When∧and2714.中式英語Nextweekhaveaparty.IsorryyouIcan'twithyougoBeijing.28有則改之，無則加勉；用心則易，無心則難。29專題三：第一反應(yīng)與克制第一反應(yīng)30他是個好人。第一反應(yīng)測試：Heisagoodman.generous,humorous,interesting,smart,gentle,warm-hearted,hospitable,easy-going,devoted,open-minded,modest,friendly…31對不起，我不能和你一起去北京了。I’msorrythatIcan’tgotoBeijingwithyou.WouldyouacceptmyheartfeltapologythatIcan’tmakeittoBeijingwithyouaswehaveplanned.IsorryyouIcan’twithyougoBeijing.32適應(yīng)

fitinadapttoadjusttocopewith…beusedtobeaccustomedtofeelathome…33專題四：打動人心的句型和打翻人胃的句型

3435存點錢是很重要的。Thereisnodenying/Itisbeyondanydisputethatdepositingsomemoneyinthebankiscrucial.Sometimes,whetheryouhavemoneyathandmeansthedifferenceoflifeordeathforalovedone.36審題：“十年后的我”---“感性的、充滿想象的”切忌：套用了太多所謂的“萬能句式”，破壞了這種“感性”，使之變得“太理性”、“太剛”了：

（1）運用了大量的表示順序的詞句(太過理性)：

Firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally;

Tostartwith；Lastbutnotleast;

Myfuturelifeisasfollows.37（2）運用了大量的表達強烈觀點句式（語氣太剛）：IholdthepointofviewthatThereisnodoubtthat…Istronglybelievethat…Iamfirmlyconvincedthat(therewillbeexcitingandwonderfulchangesin…/itgivesmeastrongbody)Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…WhatIwanttostressisthat(healthisveryimportanttous)38（3）運用了大量的總結(jié)、轉(zhuǎn)換、強調(diào)、轉(zhuǎn)折等語氣、句式，不夠得體。Allinall,…/Generallyspeaking,Asamatteroffact,Asformysparetime,…AsfarasIamconcerned,Ihopebecomeadoctor.Whenitcomestomyownfamily,itoccurstomethatIwillhave2children.Itisknowntousthatfamilyisthemostimportantthinginourlife.Ontheonehand,…ontheotherhand…39（4）運用了大量的強調(diào)句和倒裝句，給人非常生澀的感覺。Inmysparetime,soactiveamIthatIwillgofishingwithmyfamily.Itisaftertenyearsthat…（5）在同一篇短文里，堆砌了大量同樣的句式：It’sIthatwanttobeateacher;ItisIthatamfondonchildren.ItisIthatlikemakingalotoffriends.ItisfamouscitythatI’llgoto…（6）中式英語，意思相差較大,或完全不達意。LoverOrganizeafamilyIhopemywillbelittlespeakEnglish.40那些能稍微充滿想象的句子，就顯得難能可貴：…Mytwosonssurroundingmesmilelikesunshine.…Onweekends,Iwilltakemyfamilytothebeachtohavearest,enjoyingthesunrises.…gooutforapicnic,huggingthen