2023學(xué)年完整公開課版作文講評Howtolivewithpressure

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------HowtoLivewithPressure作文

你校英語俱樂部開展“ProblemSolver”的活動(dòng)，就解決學(xué)習(xí)生活中一些問題交流自己的體驗(yàn)和感想。你們這次交流的話題是“Howtolivewithpressure”.請根據(jù)此話題寫一篇英語短文，介紹你在學(xué)習(xí)上所遇到的壓力及其相應(yīng)的對策，以及你的感想。注意：

1.要求結(jié)構(gòu)完整，語意連貫，觀點(diǎn)正確。

2.詞數(shù)：不少于120.作文較好的同學(xué)（18分以上）：C227:羅湘華張思思陳麗君朱荊璞黃玉C228:羅偉煌陸建云王榮李金鑫李雅如李蕓張昌錫

請思考：第二篇語言和第一篇語言差不多，為什么得分會(huì)更低呢？

第一篇字跡更清楚，卷面更整潔。第二篇太馬虎了。

此次書面表達(dá)中出現(xiàn)的其它問題速度問題25分鐘完成的有：彭磊謝佳佳劉拓飛王榮童輝30分鐘完成的有：羅湘華張思思張斌張丹丹李雅如（考綱要求：閱讀填空，閱讀回答問題和寫作三大題型總共45分鐘.）總結(jié)：六步作文法：一審—審題文章到底要求我們寫什么。二分—分段一般為3-4段。三表—表達(dá)力求語言地道，句子正確，可用一些高級句型。四統(tǒng)—統(tǒng)一統(tǒng)一時(shí)態(tài)，人稱等。五檢—檢查檢查要點(diǎn)是否齊全、字?jǐn)?shù)是否符合要求、格式人稱是否正確、是否有語法拼寫錯(cuò)誤。六謄—謄抄注意字跡清楚、卷面工整、段落結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。

Correctthemistakes:1.Theyaresohardworking.2.Wealwaysfeelcan’tbreathe.3.Onlyinthiswaycanwesuccess.4.Althoughthepressureisaroundourlife,butweshouldn’tgiveupourselves.5.Thereismuchpressurecomefromstudying.6.Idon’tthinkaboutthethingswhataren’tconnectedwithstudy.7.Thisisnodenyingthateveryonehavepressure.8.Youshouldfoundsomewaystolivewithpressure.9.IwanttocrythinkinghowcanIsostupid.10.OnlyifIsolvetheseproblemsproperlyIcanmakegreaterprogress.11.Onlyhaveapositiveattitudecanweachievesuccess.12.IwillstarttobenervousandhavenoideawhatshouldIdo.佳句、佳作欣賞1.Onlyinthiswaycanwelearnwell.（張斌）2.OnlyinthiswaycanIhaveconfidencetofacetheproblems.（屈淼鑫）3.Thereisnodenyingthatweshouldalwayskeepoptimisticandconfident.（羅湘華）4.Attitudeisaltitude!態(tài)度就是高度?。慃惥?.Lesspressure,moresuccess.（童輝）6.Onlyinthiswaycanwegetsuccess.（張鴻浩）7.Inaword,everybodycan’tavoidpressureinanything.Buttheattitudeisthemostimportant.（鄧蘇平）8.Thereisnodenyingthatthereismuchpressureamongusstudents.（黃梓煜）9.OnlyinthiswaycanIwinthebestsuccess.（王僑亞）10.Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.（李金鑫）11.Thekeytodevelopingsuchskillsistoenjoylearning.(汪泊林）12.Thereisnodenyingthateverybodyhaspressureinlife.（李蕓）13.Onlyinthiswaycanyougetridofthepressure.（張昌錫）14.Itisknowntousallthatthepressureexistseverywhereinourlife.（張昌錫）15.Pressureshouldnotbeanenemy,butbeafriendwhichcanhelpusmakemoreprogress.(王榮）范文：Howtolivewithpressure

Iusedtofeelpressuredtodowellinexams.IwassoafraidoffallingbehindthatIkeptthinkingaboutstudyingeveryminuteoftheday.Thepressuremademeoutofbreath.Tomydisappointment,themoreworriedIwasaboutmystudies,thelessefficientIbecame.Later,IrealizedIjusttookpressuretooseriously.SoItriedtakingthingseasybytakingpartinvariousactivitiesoutofclass,enjoyingmusicandevendaydreamingaboutfunthings.Tomydelight,thisworked!Gradually,Ibecamelessanxiousaboutexamsandbegantotakepleasureinmystudies.

Pressurecannotbeavoided.Whatcountsishowtodealwithitproperly,andaboveall,howtoturnitinto

pleasureorchallenge.

Practice:1.她想知道會(huì)議什么時(shí)候舉行。2.不可否認(rèn)自信是取得進(jìn)步的關(guān)鍵。3.只有用這種方式，我們才能實(shí)現(xiàn)我們的夢想。4.只要我們正確處理好了壓力，我們就能把壓力化為動(dòng)力（drivingforce)。5.雖然我這次失敗，但我相信高考我一定會(huì)成功。Answers:1.Shewantstoknowwhenthemeetingwillbeheld.2.Thereisnodenyingthatconfidenceisthekeytomakingprogress.3.Onlyinthiswaycanwereal