作文講評公開課

高三英語作文講評課堂內容1）寫作的基本步驟2）學生作文中常犯的毛病3）寫作實例分析4）實例作文中的錯誤語句5）范文欣賞6）學生作文實例講評（兩名同學）英語作文寫作的基本步驟：1、審試題2、圈要點3、注短語4、定基調(體材,時態(tài),人稱,段落,基本框架)5、寫全文（加過渡語句，串句成篇）6、改病錯學生作文中常犯毛病:1)理解錯誤2)文不對題3)格式錯誤4)譴詞造句錯誤5)語言運用不當6)時間不夠7)時態(tài)、語態(tài)、人稱、主謂一致、表達、單詞拼寫、標點、大小寫等易錯之處假設你是李華，你將代表學校參加國際中學生論壇，就你所在城市的教育狀況發(fā)表演講。請根據下面兩幅圖表中的數(shù)據所反映的情況發(fā)表你自己的看法。注意：1，文章的開頭已經給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；

2，詞數(shù)120左右

3，參考詞匯；圖表chart職業(yè)學校vocationalschool

外來務工人員non-localworkers演講稿(格式）寫作分析：1）作文類型-----2）時態(tài)人稱-----3）文章結構/寫作提綱

------本市的教育狀況（已給出）陳述現(xiàn)象--------------4）關鍵詞匯：圖表職業(yè)學校外來務工人員本地居民子女畢業(yè)去向選擇一般現(xiàn)在時，第一人稱

說明主題本市的教育狀況（闡述兩個圖表的內容發(fā)表個人觀點本市教育chartvocationalschoolnon-localworkers

localstudents/childrenoflocalfamilychoosewhattodoaftergraduation主要語句：1）根據表一

accordingto/fromChart1/thefirstchart2）91﹪的學生是本地居民的子女

91﹪ofstudentsarethechildrenofthelocalcitizens3）8﹪的學生是外來務工人員的子女1﹪的學生是外籍人員的子女5）高中學生畢業(yè)去向大有不同6）60﹪的學生選擇上大學7）30﹪的學生上職校8）10﹪的學生出國留學深造9）我認為10）結束語學生作文中的錯誤語句:1.Thechart12.91﹪students3.Thereare60﹪ofstudentsgototheuniversityand30﹪ofstudentsgotothevocationalschool.吳超4.Therearesomeforeignstudentscometoourcitytostudywhichtake1﹪ofthewholestudents.代驪錦5.Thereare8﹪ofthehighschoolstudentsarenotnon-localworkers’childrenwhocomefromanothercountry.宋佳林6.Theothersarewhosehomeisn’there.朱鵬7.Thelocalstudentsarethemainlypart,whohavea91percentage.聶作鋼講評學生習作范文欣賞：Ladiesandgentlemen,I’mLiHua.Today,I’mgreatlyhonoredtospeakhereonbehalfofmyschool.I’mgoingtotalkaboutthehighschooleducationofmycity.FromChart1,wecanseehighschoolstudentsarefromdifferentfamilybackgrounds.Besideslocalstudents,whomakeup91﹪,8﹪ofthestudentsarethechildrenofnon-localworkers,Thereare1﹪offoreignstudents.

AccordingtoChart2,thestudents’choicesaftergraduationhavepresentedawidervariety,60﹪ofwhomintendtogotouniversity.30﹪choosetoentervocationalschools,and10﹪plantogoabroadforfurtherstudies.

Ithinkwehavemorefreedomtochoosewhatwewouldliketodoaftergraduation.Goingtocollegeisnolongertheonlychoiceformostofusasitwasyearsago.Ibelievethefutureofeducationinourcityispromising.That’sall.Thankyou.Or:1.Ithinkourcitygovernmenthasmademoreeffortstohelpthenon–localworkers.Forexample,theirchildrencanenjoytheequalrightofagoodeducationwiththecitystudents.2.Ithinkwiththeeconomicdevelopmentofourcity,morefore