讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)2021年6月浙江省高考真題講解課件【知識(shí)精講精研】 高考英語(yǔ)作文復(fù)習(xí)專項(xiàng)

EnglishContinuationWriting讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)2021年浙江省高考真題主講人：Cathy考情分析能基本讀懂故事，對(duì)原文本分析不夠具體到位。寫(xiě)作情節(jié)偏離，邏輯混亂，銜接不當(dāng)。句式簡(jiǎn)單，描寫(xiě)生硬。教學(xué)目標(biāo)通過(guò)閱讀圈，引導(dǎo)學(xué)生從主題語(yǔ)境，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)，故事情節(jié)詞匯處理等多角度去深度解析文本，幫助學(xué)生理順情節(jié)發(fā)展。通過(guò)主述位推進(jìn)幫助學(xué)生搭建文章邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)。通過(guò)提供語(yǔ)料，作文互批表，明確批改潤(rùn)色要求，反復(fù)練習(xí)，指導(dǎo)學(xué)生寫(xiě)出更自然合理、銜接得當(dāng)?shù)淖魑?。文本分析part1Let’swatch.What’syourdaddylike?Pleaseusethreewordstodescribeyourbelovedfather.Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.

01Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldeither：Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超過(guò)）anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.02Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone（長(zhǎng)號(hào)）.03ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.04Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb's-quarters,foxtails,andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.04Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.05Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn'tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.06閱讀小組長(zhǎng)DiscussionLeader組織小組討論，并針對(duì)閱讀內(nèi)容提問(wèn)。篇章大師PassagePerson講解閱讀內(nèi)容中有意思、重要或較難的段落。生活實(shí)際聯(lián)結(jié)者Connector將閱讀內(nèi)容與生活實(shí)際相聯(lián)系，分享經(jīng)驗(yàn)。單詞大師WordMaster講解閱讀內(nèi)容中的生詞、重點(diǎn)單詞及詞組。篇章概括者Summarizer用自己的話概括篇章的主要內(nèi)容。文化采集者CultureCollector尋找閱讀內(nèi)容中與自己國(guó)家文化相同或不同之處。ReadingCirclesvt.超過(guò)；勝過(guò)

surpass單詞大師WordMaster[s??pɑ?s]Hehassurpassedallourexpectations.他超越了我們所有的預(yù)期。vt.捐獻(xiàn)，捐助，捐贈(zèng)

contribute單詞大師WordMasterWecontributed￡5000totheearthquakefund.我們向地震基金捐贈(zèng)了5000英鎊。n.一家人，家庭

household單詞大師WordMasterMosthouseholdsnowownatleastonecar.大多數(shù)家庭現(xiàn)在至少有一輛汽車(chē)。記敘文Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished. 篇章大師PassagePerson文體一般過(guò)去時(shí)第一人稱時(shí)態(tài)人稱篇章大師PassagePersonAthome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished. “Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.”語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě):篇章大師PassagePersonAthome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.

心理描寫(xiě):Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.

篇章大師PassagePersonAthome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.

“I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.”線索：篇章大師PassagePersonAthome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.因?yàn)榘职值脑?，我?dān)心不能自由支配自己打工賺的錢(qián)。事件：親情，父愛(ài)，成長(zhǎng)人與社會(huì)閱讀小組長(zhǎng)（DiscussionLeader)人物分析情節(jié)發(fā)展主題語(yǔ)境主旨Rereadthestoryandfigureouttheplot.Ididn’tunderstandmyfatherandneitherdidhe.discontentIworkedformyneighbortoearnmoney.tiredbuthappyIcouldn’tdealwithmyearningsasIwishedandlostinterest.disgruntledHowdidtheauthorfeel?Handoverornot?

Whatwilltheauthordo?thesummerbeforemyeighthgradehomeandthefieldmyfatherImyneighboringfarmermylaborsonweedinginmyneighboringfarmer’sfieldtoearnmoneybutthenIlostinterestinit故事要素WhenWhereWhat Who WhyImisunderstooddadwouldtakethemoneytopayfamilyexpensessoIcouldn’tusethemoneyasIwished本文情節(jié)線setting背景risingaction發(fā)展climax高潮dadandI

summervacationhomeandfield

Iwashiredtoworkinmyneighboringfarmer’sfieldtoearnmoney.Mydad’swordsmademerealizeIcouldn’tdealwithmyearningsasIwishedandIlostinterestinmylabors.resolution解決ending尾聲續(xù)寫(xiě)部分續(xù)寫(xiě)部分DadandIhaddifficultywithmutualunderstanding.本文情感線risingaction發(fā)展climax高潮resolution解答ending尾聲setting背景Aquietman,hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay....butIwasn’tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分續(xù)寫(xiě)部分Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither.DadGeorgeAquietman,hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.amanoffewwordsDadGeorgeFromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.diligent;bearthefamilyburdenwillinglyDadGeorge“Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.”silentbutdeeploveforhischildIIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超過(guò)）anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.lookdownuponmyfatherIshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,IreadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombonehasawiderangeofhobbiesIItwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.tough,hard-working,fullofhopeIMydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.discontent;depressedItheremightbemorework,butIwasn'tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.allhopewasextinguished;disgruntled

生活實(shí)際聯(lián)結(jié)者ConnectorWhatcanwedotoformagoodrelationshipwithdaddy?篇章概括者Summarizer八年級(jí)暑假，我和一群孩子給鄰居家除草賺錢(qián)。我滿心歡喜期待工作結(jié)束可以拿到報(bào)酬，直到我爸爸跟我說(shuō)......Thesummerbeforemyeighthgrade,myfriendsandIwerehiredtoworkforaneighboringfarmertoearnsomemoney.Iwasmorethanthrilledtolookforwardtothepayuntilonedaymyfathersaid...寫(xiě)作構(gòu)架part2平行性延續(xù)性三種敘述模式浙江省高考真題2021年6月Paragraph2Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.Paragraph1Thepaydayarrivedatlast.01thrilledatthebigfortune02recalldad’swords04dragfeethomeParagraph1Thepaydayarrivedatlast.PlotDesign05overheardad’sworry03wishdadhadforgottenthepayParagraph1Thepaydayarrivedatlast.89dollars!

Iwasthrilledatthebigfortune,watchingthecoinsearnedthroughthetiringwork.However,Isuddenlyrecalledmyfather’swords,“I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold”.HowI

wishedmyfatherhadforgottenmypay.Idraggedmyfeethome.Ioverheardmyfathersighing,“Wecan’taffordanewtruck.Weonlyhadonehundreddollarsleft.”0201Iwasthrilledatthebigfortune,watchingthecoinsearnedthroughtiringwork.Isuddenlyrecalledmyfather’swords,“I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold”.I

wishedmyfatherhadforgottenmypay.Idraggedmyfeethome.Ioverheardmyfathersighing,“Wecan’taffordanewtruck.Weonlyhadonehundreddollarsleft.”040503平行敘述浙江省高考真題2021年6月Paragraph2Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.Paragraph1Thepaydayarrivedatlast.01betornbetweenkeepingthepayorhandingitover02stepintotheroomandhandoverthemoney04Paragraph2Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout…PlotDesign05decidetocontinuemylaborsunderstandthemeaningofgrowingupdai03dadpullmeintoarmsParagraph2Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.Iwastornbetweenkeepingthemoneyorhandingitovertodad.Eventually,Isteppedintotheroomandhandedhimthepay,“Don’tworry,dad.I’vejustgotmypaymentfromthefarmer.”“Bigboy,proudofyou!”Iwaspulledintomydad’sarms,tearsmistinghiseyes.Iunderstoodthemeaningofgrowingupjustattheexactsamemoment.Idecidedtocontinuemyworkandcontributetothehousehold.平行敘述0102040503Iwastornbetweenkeepingthemoneyorhandingitovertomyfather.Isteppedintotheroomandhandedhimthepay.Iwaspulledintomydad’sarms,tearsmistinghiseyes.Iunderstoodthemeaningofgrowingupjustattheexactsamemoment.Idecidedtocontinuemyworkandcontributetothehousehold.潤(rùn)色批改part3詞匯潤(rùn)色whispertomyself悄聲說(shuō)inasoothing/tendervoice輕聲說(shuō)murmuredathankyou小聲嘟囔addsoftly輕輕地說(shuō)一般動(dòng)詞細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)詞說(shuō)詞匯潤(rùn)色turningmygazetowardsdad凝視gazeatthecoins

凝視stareatmetearfully含淚凝望一般動(dòng)詞細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)詞凝視詞匯潤(rùn)色wrapmysweatyhandstightlyaroundthebills緊緊攥著錢(qián)countthecoinsoverandoveragain

一遍遍數(shù)硬幣reachintothecrumpledbanknotesinmypocketandpresentthemtodad伸進(jìn)口袋，拿出皺巴巴的鈔票給父親一般動(dòng)詞細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)詞關(guān)于錢(qián)的動(dòng)作詞匯潤(rùn)色echoinmymindwhatmyfathersaidwaslingeringovermyhead一般動(dòng)詞細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)詞聲音回蕩詞匯潤(rùn)色dragone’sfeet拖著腳步走throwmeintoaworldofsadness陷入悲傷heaveasigh嘆氣myeyelidsdrooping眼皮聳拉著myheartsank心沉下去theirforeheaddeepening額頭加深情緒狀態(tài)身體表征不高興詞匯潤(rùn)色

pullmeintoatighthug拉入懷抱herbodyshakenwithsobs身體顫抖

tearsblurredhisvision眼淚模糊視線withthousandsofbutterfliesinmystomach七上八下betornbetween...and/or...

搖擺不定keepponderingoverthequestion不停考慮這個(gè)問(wèn)題

情緒狀態(tài)身體表征感動(dòng)猶豫詞匯潤(rùn)色myeyessparkled眼里放光shinelikeadiamond鉆石一樣閃耀myeyestwinkledwithjoy眼睛閃爍著快樂(lè)amusementgleamedinmyeyes眼睛流露出愉快laughter

lingeredaroundtheroom笑聲縈繞

情緒狀態(tài)身體表征高興詞匯潤(rùn)色passingthroughthecorridorsighingandfrowningItookadeepbreath,steppingintotheroomandgivingmypaytodad.Imanagedasmiletocheer

himup.Hearingthis,dadwidenedhiseyes,staringatmewithtearsmistinghiseyes.非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞單一狀語(yǔ)多樣狀語(yǔ)詞匯潤(rùn)色underacloudofgloomanddespair絕望afterroundsofinnerstruggle內(nèi)心掙扎withtearswellinguphiseyes感動(dòng)介詞短語(yǔ)單一狀語(yǔ)多樣狀語(yǔ)詞匯潤(rùn)色asif

suddenlyjerkedtorealityfromaterriblenightmareIwillcontinuetoworkif

chancesareavailable.句子單一狀語(yǔ)多樣狀語(yǔ)Paragraph1Thepaydayarrivedatlast.【1】Lyinginfrontofmyeyeswas89dollars,whichwasabsolutelyabigfortune.【2】Eyessparkling,Iwrappedmysweatyhandstightlyaroundthebills.【3】“Youwillbecontributingtothehousehold!”saidavoiceinmyear,throwingmeintoaworldofsadness.【4】HowIwishedmyfatherhadforgottenmypay.【5】Acloudofgloomanddespairhoveringabovemyhead,Idraggedmyfeethome,eyelidsdrooping.【6】Whenpassingthroughthecorridor,Ioverheardmyfathersighing,“Wecan’taffordanewtruck.Weonlyhadonehundreddollarsleft.”細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)作lyinginfrontofmyeyes因?yàn)榈寡b提前，到鄰居家后錢(qián)映入眼簾，描寫(xiě)出了自己盼望已久的情緒。Paragraph1Lyinginfrontofmyeyeswas89dollars,whichwasabsolutelyabigfortune.01身體表征sweaty生動(dòng)地刻畫(huà)了看到錢(qián)后的激動(dòng)和緊張。多樣狀語(yǔ)獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)：eyessparkling做狀語(yǔ)Paragraph1Eyessparkling,Iwrappedmysweatyhandstightlyaroundthebills.02細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)作sparkle描繪了看到勞動(dòng)所得后的開(kāi)心，wrap表達(dá)出害怕上交的不舍之情。細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)作throwmeintoaworldofsadness,throw一詞刻畫(huà)了作者想起爸爸的話突然悲傷的情緒。多樣狀語(yǔ)非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞：throwing做狀語(yǔ)Paragraph1“Youwillbecontributingtothehousehold!”saidavoiceinmyear,throwingmeintoaworldofsadness.03虛擬語(yǔ)氣虛擬語(yǔ)氣的使用，更加凸顯出作者想自由支配錢(qián)的強(qiáng)烈欲望。Paragraph1HowIwishedmyfatherhadforgottenmypay.04細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)作dragfeet,eyelidsdrooping描寫(xiě)出了作者不愿回家的沮喪心情。多樣狀語(yǔ)獨(dú)立主格：acloudofgloomanddespairhovering和eyelidsdrooping都是獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)做狀語(yǔ)Paragraph1Acloudofgloomanddespairhoveringabovemyhead,Idraggedmyfeethome,eyelidsdrooping.05細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)作sigh描寫(xiě)出了父親湊不夠錢(qián)的沮喪多樣狀語(yǔ)whenpassingthroughthecorridor是時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)，是whenIpassedthroughthecorridor的省略形式Paragraph1Whenpassingthroughthecorridor,Ioverheardmyfathersighing,“Wecan’taffordanewtruck.Weonlyhadonehundreddollarsleft.”

06Paragraph2Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.【1】Iwastortured,tornbetweenkeepingthemoneytobuysportsshoesIhadbeendesiringandcontributingmypaytothehousehold.【2】Afterroundsofinnerstruggle,Isteppedintotheroom，reachingintothecrumpledbanknotesinmypocketandpresentingthemtodad.【3】Tearswellingupinhiseyes,hepattedmeonmyshoulder,proudandrelieved.【4】“Bigboy,proudofyou!”【5】ItwasatthatmomentthatIunderstoodthetruemeaningofgrowingup.【6】Touchedvastly,Ideterminedtocontinuemyworkandeaseburdenonmyfamily.細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)作tear表達(dá)出了作者面臨兩難選擇時(shí)內(nèi)心的掙扎。多樣狀語(yǔ)非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做狀語(yǔ)：tornParagraph2tortured寫(xiě)出了作者內(nèi)心的煎熬。形容詞Iwastortured,tornbetweenkeepingthemoneytobuysportsshoesIhadbeendesiringandcontributingmypaytothehousehold.01細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)作step,reach,present連續(xù)的三個(gè)動(dòng)作表現(xiàn)出作者理解爸爸的辛苦，愿意為家庭付出。形容詞crumpled描寫(xiě)出想自由支配錢(qián)的渴望。多樣狀語(yǔ)介詞短語(yǔ)做狀語(yǔ)：afterroundsofinnerstruggle非謂語(yǔ)做狀語(yǔ)：reachingpresentingParagraph2Afterroundsofinnerstruggle,Isteppedintotheroom，reachingintothecrumpledbanknotesinmypocketandpresentingthemtodad.02細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)作tearswellingup表達(dá)出父親的感動(dòng)。身體表征patmeonmyshoulder描寫(xiě)出父親的欣慰。多樣狀語(yǔ)獨(dú)立主格：tearswellingup形容詞做狀語(yǔ)：proudandrelievedParagraph2Tearswellingupinhiseyes,hepattedmeonmyshoulder,proudandrelieved.03語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)bigboy表達(dá)出父親的欣慰，暗示孩子內(nèi)心的成長(zhǎng)。proudofyou表達(dá)出父親的驕傲和感動(dòng)。Paragraph2“Bigboy,proudofyou!”04強(qiáng)調(diào)句對(duì)atthatmoment強(qiáng)調(diào)，既實(shí)現(xiàn)了句子升級(jí)，也表達(dá)出聽(tīng)到父親夸獎(jiǎng)，突然理解了父親，內(nèi)心獲得了成長(zhǎng)。Paragraph2ItwasatthatmomentthatIunderstoodthetruemeaningofgrowingup.05細(xì)節(jié)動(dòng)作determine,continue,ease表達(dá)出作者情感轉(zhuǎn)化和態(tài)度轉(zhuǎn)變，真正實(shí)現(xiàn)了自我成長(zhǎng)。多樣狀語(yǔ)非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞touchedvastly做狀語(yǔ)Paragraph2Touchedvastly,Ideterminedtocontinuemyworkandeaseburdenonmyfamily.06Lyinginfrontofmyeyeswas89dollars,whichwasabsolutelyabigfortune.Eyessparkling，Iwrappedmysweatyhandstightlyaroundthebills.0102非限定性定語(yǔ)從句倒