備考2024屆高考英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)第二部分讀后續(xù)寫專題二熱考話題素材8關(guān)愛(ài)動(dòng)物

熱考話題8關(guān)愛(ài)動(dòng)物[2023浙江1月]Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention，soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird（蜂鳥），desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs（蛛網(wǎng)）andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand，Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside，closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand，thebirddidnotflyaway；shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still，shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired？Ortoothirsty？AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle，shebegantomove.Istopped，andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering（懸停），sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment，thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes，turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout，Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting，myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes，thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment，allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid，"Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye."Afewweekslater，Iwenttothefarmagain.Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.人物主要角色"I"：從文中的描述"Withthebirdinmycuppedhand""stuffedapieceofclothintothehole""removedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings"可知，"我"善良、細(xì)心、關(guān)愛(ài)動(dòng)物，為續(xù)寫第一段"我"重回舊地，想念蜂鳥，想知道它是否安好，埋下了伏筆。主要角色ahummingbird：從文中的描述"ceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup""satlookingatmewithherbrighteyes""Hovering（懸停），sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface""Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye"表明蜂鳥相信人類，親近"我"，心懷感恩，為續(xù)寫第二段蜂鳥的再次出現(xiàn)做好了鋪墊。情節(jié)及情感線"我"去朋友農(nóng)場(chǎng)野餐，發(fā)現(xiàn)一只被困的蜂鳥（好奇它是怎么被困的）→"我"把它解救出來(lái)，它卻沒(méi)有飛走（疑惑它是否累了或者渴了）→"我"告訴朋友蜂鳥事件（擔(dān)心再有蜂鳥受困）→"我"離開(kāi)之際，蜂鳥前來(lái)相送（驚訝又感動(dòng)）主題原文講述了"我"在朋友的農(nóng)場(chǎng)外意外救下一只被困的蜂鳥，在"我"要離開(kāi)農(nóng)場(chǎng)時(shí)，這只蜂鳥又來(lái)到了"我"的面前，似乎在和"我"告別。再通過(guò)續(xù)寫兩段的提示語(yǔ)可知，文章展現(xiàn)的是關(guān)愛(ài)動(dòng)物、人與動(dòng)物和諧共處的主題。續(xù)寫第一段銜接原文最后一段，蜂鳥深情相送，再銜接本段首句，幾周后"我"重訪農(nóng)場(chǎng)，應(yīng)該是希望再次見(jiàn)到蜂鳥。續(xù)寫的情節(jié)發(fā)展可以是：漫步黑莓小路（呼應(yīng)前文）→想起蜂鳥（主要角色再現(xiàn)）→很想再見(jiàn)那只可愛(ài)的小鳥（情感流露）→與朋友燒烤、談心直到日落→"我"該離開(kāi)了（銜接下文）。續(xù)寫第二段銜接本段續(xù)寫提示語(yǔ)"我正要離開(kāi)時(shí)，蜂鳥出現(xiàn)了"可知，該段主要講述"我"和蜂鳥的和諧互動(dòng)。續(xù)寫的情節(jié)發(fā)展可以是：蜂鳥向"我"飛來(lái)（情景復(fù)現(xiàn)）→"我"的反應(yīng)→"我"的感受→人與動(dòng)物應(yīng)該和諧共處（主題升華）。1.Irememberedthehummingbird.①將句子改寫為無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)句，使表達(dá)更為生動(dòng)。Memoriesofthehummingbirdoccurredtome.②為句①補(bǔ)充時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，呼應(yīng)原文"我"第一次發(fā)現(xiàn)蜂鳥時(shí)的場(chǎng)景，使上下文銜接更緊密、更流暢。MemoriesofthehummingbirdoccurredtomewhenIwalkedpastthemilkinghouse.2.Weroastedmeat，chattedandlaughed.①用形象的氣味描寫和with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)改寫句子，使表達(dá)更生動(dòng)形象。Withthesmellofroastingmeatfloatingintheair，wechattedandlaughed.②為句①中的暢聊和歡笑補(bǔ)充情感副詞、地點(diǎn)狀語(yǔ)以及時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，使表達(dá)更加具有畫面感。Withthesmellofroastingmeatfloatingintheair，wechattedandlaughedmerrilyaroundthepicnictabletillthesunset.3.Sheflewtome.①用動(dòng)詞dive，hover，stop將蜂鳥朝"我"飛來(lái)的動(dòng)作細(xì)化，使表達(dá)更加準(zhǔn)確、生動(dòng)。Shedivedtowardsme，hoveredbeforemyfaceandthenstoppedonmyleftshoulder.②為句①蜂鳥俯沖和盤旋時(shí)的動(dòng)作補(bǔ)充它當(dāng)時(shí)的神態(tài)描寫，體現(xiàn)蜂鳥看到"我"時(shí)的興奮和喜悅。Shedivedtowardsme，hoveredbeforemyfacelookingatmewithherbrighteyes，andthenstoppedonmyleftshoulder.Afewweekslater，Iwenttothefarmagain.Havingparkedthecar，Iwanderedontheblackberry-linedpathagain.Memoriesofthehummingbirdoccurredtome（我想起）whenIwalkedpastthemilkinghouse.Wassheallright？"HowIwishIcouldseeheragain！"Imurmuredtomyselfwithasenseofloss（失落感）.Iwaslostinthememories（沉浸在回憶中）whenmyfriendsinterruptedme，invitingmetothecookout.Withthesmellofroastingmeatfloatingintheair（空氣中飄著烤肉的味道），wechattedandlaughedmerrilyaroundthepicnictabletillthesunset.Theeveningglowspreadingacrossthefarm（晚霞灑滿整個(gè)農(nóng)場(chǎng)），itwastimeforustosaygoodbye，sowewenttotheparkinglottogether.Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.Withasqueakingcall，shedivedtowardsme，hoveredbeforemyface（向我俯沖下來(lái)，在我面前盤旋）lookingatmewithherbrighteyes，andthenstoppedonmyleftshoulder.Ipattedheronthebackwhichwascoveredbycolorfulfeathers.AndItookoutmywaterbottle，tryingtogivehersomewater.Contentandjoyful（滿足又快樂(lè)），sheflewabout2metersabovetheground，turningherheadfromsidetosideasifexpressinghergratitudeforsavingherlifetomeagain.Atthatmoment，I