讀后續(xù)寫姐弟之間的愛講義高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)

新陣地聯(lián)盟續(xù)寫來源：新陣地聯(lián)盟續(xù)寫話題:姐弟之間的愛文本分析Risingtoreachforthebookonthedeskinthelivingroom,Gudrunfelloverherlittlebrother,whohadcrawledoutfromunderneathherchair.“Arnar!Whydoyoualwayshavetoberightunderme?”(此處給出線索，Arnar總是喜歡在Gudrun的正下方，為下文的找到他的地方埋下線索)The

fiveyearold（注意這是五歲的小男孩下文對(duì)其行為的描寫應(yīng)該富有兒童的感覺）

giggled.“Iwashiding,”hesaid,“andyoufoundme.”“I’mnotplaying,”

Gudrunscolded.“I’mknitting.Andit’stimeforyoutogotobed.”

Herparentshadgoneoutfortheevening,leavingGudrunincharge.“Letmehideoncemore,”

Arnarbegged.“ThenI’ll

gotosleep,Ipromise.”Gudruncouldn'thelpsmiling.“Oh,allright.”Sheturnedbacktoherknitting.“I’ll

lookforyouwhenI’vefinishedthisrow.”“Here’saclue,”

Arnarcalledasheskippedaway.“LookformewhereIalwaysam.”（再一次給出提示，強(qiáng)調(diào)了后文發(fā)現(xiàn)他應(yīng)該在床底）ButGudrunwasalreadyabsorbedinherwork.Gudrunwasn’tsurewhathadawakenedherinthemiddleofthenight.

WasittheurgencyinMamma’svoiceorthefrighteningandlowrumblethatrolledthroughherroom?Gudrunfoundherselfsuddenlywideawake,drawntothewindowbyastrangeandunfamiliarbrillianceoutside.（環(huán)境設(shè)置，此時(shí)馬上有一座火山要爆發(fā)，下文續(xù)寫中可以增加能渲染緊張氛圍的句子）

“Aneruption,”MammasaidasshebegantogatherGudrun’sclothes.

“MaybeHelgafell,

maybeanewvolcano.Wemustleavetheislandquickly.”“Tonight?How?”Gudrunasked,herheartpounding.“Wherewillwego?”“We’relucky.Thefishingboatswilltakeustothemainland.”MammaturnedtofaceGudrun.“Pabbihasalreadygonetotheharbor.I’mgoingtohelpMargret.”Theirelderlyneighborlivedalone.Mammaproceeded,“canyoudress

Arnarandtakehimtotheharborbyyourself?”（此處說明父母不在身邊，下文盡量不要出現(xiàn)父母過來幫忙的語句，最后一定是姐弟二人去往harbor港口）“Ofcourse,”shedeclared.Everyonewouldhelptonight.Icelandershadalwaysworkedtogethertosurviveinalandruledbyvolcanoes,glaciers,andocean.Gudrundressedandrantoherbrother’sroom.

“Arnar!”shecried,“Wakeup!”Hearingnoresponse,Gudrunhurriedtothebedandpulledbackherbrother’sthickcover.（找不到弟弟了，接下來的劇情應(yīng)該是找弟弟，弟弟一定是被找到的，并且成功帶往港口）前文主要內(nèi)容Gudrun正在編織的時(shí)候，喜歡在她正下方待著Arnar要和她玩捉迷藏，Gudrun忘記了這回事，半夜，她的媽媽說火山要爆發(fā)，讓她幫忙把弟弟帶到港口集合，但是此時(shí)Gudrun找不到弟弟了段首句解讀Paragraph1：Arnarwas’tthere!由段首句可知，Arnar不見了，于是這段很自然就是找Arnar，，由下一段段首句可知找到了，那么這段應(yīng)該寫找的過程和Gudrun內(nèi)心的緊張和焦急。Paragraph2：There,curledaroundawornstuffedbear,wasArnar,soundasleep.在這一段應(yīng)該寫找到后弟弟的疑惑天真的反應(yīng)和姐姐非常著急地帶著他沖到港口，在港口的父母擔(dān)心，弟弟應(yīng)該感到愧疚總是在她下面，然后姐姐再安慰，最后下船。本文特點(diǎn)本文的細(xì)節(jié)描寫，動(dòng)作描寫，較多，對(duì)人物的刻畫方面細(xì)膩，情節(jié)和環(huán)境氛圍的融合緊密，讓我們有如臨其境的感覺，我們?cè)趯懽约旱睦m(xù)寫時(shí)也可借用本文的方法去豐滿人物形象。善于運(yùn)用對(duì)話和環(huán)境渲染，對(duì)于人物地刻畫有小說感。

寫作中可能存在的問題第一：很容易忽略的點(diǎn)right

under。這是一個(gè)非常明顯的線索指示Arnar的藏身點(diǎn)；第二：全文使用第三人稱，續(xù)寫時(shí)容易用成第一人稱第三：主角年齡的設(shè)定，Arnar為五歲的小男孩，不應(yīng)有過于聰明的情節(jié)出現(xiàn)生詞積累crawloutfrom

爬出giggle

v.咯咯笑scold

v.訓(xùn)斥，責(zé)罵knitv.編織;團(tuán)結(jié)起來;皺緊;織;使團(tuán)結(jié)

n.編織的衣物;織物skipaway

跳過去rumblen.隆隆聲be

drawnto

被吸引到brilliancen.光芒proceedev.先于，在…前說declarv.斷言;宣稱;申報(bào)

好詞積累Dreadn/v.恐懼Aggravatev.使惡化，加劇beardownon

沖向curlv.卷曲dustn.灰塵

v.除去…上的灰塵;擦（或刷、掃、撣）凈;撒在…上;痛打;狠揍clenchtheirfists

握拳squintat

瞇眼看好句積累Wasit

theurgencyinMamma’svoice

or

thefrighteningandlowrumblethatrolledthroughherroom?Was

it……or……that…

是

…或是…that后面接句子下水文by

王雪Paragraph1：Arnarwasn'tthere!UnspeakabledreadseizedmetotallyinitspoweranditdawnedonmethatArnarhadrunofftohideonelasttime.Whenshefinishedknitting,shehadfallenintoherownbed,pletelyforgettingherbrother.GudrunlookedeverywhereshethoughtArnarwouldhideinhisroom,butnothing.Herheartwaspounding,herlegswereshakinguncontrollably,andallkindsofnoisesoutsidethehouseaggravatedherpanic.

“LookformewhereIalwaysam.”Arnar’swordsechoedinhermind.Afterashortthought,shebeardownonthebottomofthebed.Paragraph2：There,curledarounda

wornstuffedbear,wasArnar,soundasleep.Withoutthinkingforaminute,Gudrundraggedhimout,dustedhimoff,pickedhimupandrushedtotheharbor.Whatcaughthersightwereherparentswhoclenchedtheirfists,frownedassoonasGudrunarrived

at

theharborbreathlessly.BeforeGudruncouldcatchherbreath,theshipstarted,andshefeltasenseofjoyandterroraftertheevent.Thedeskwasfullofislanders’preparatoryworkforthenewhome.Atthistime,ArnarsquintedatGudrun,holdingthewornstuffedbearandwhispered:"Didistumbleyoudownagain?Iamalwaysrightunderyou.”Withhiscrystallikeeyesfillingwithtears,heloweredhishead.Gudrunshookherheadgently:”Itdoesn’tmatter.Youshouldhavebeenthere.”Thesunonthehorizonwasabouttorise.Gudrunlookedforwardandthemainlandwasapp