2024屆高考英語寫作話題短文故事續(xù)寫講義素材

2024年高考英語寫作話題短文故事續(xù)寫閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。“Mommy,don'tgo,"mythree-year-oldsonscreamedintearsasIwalkedtothedoorMyfifteen-year-oldleanedagainstthekitchencounterwithhisarmsfoldedacrosshischest,notscreaming,butglaringatmeasIpulledhislittlebrotheroffmylegs“Areyoumadatmetoo?”Youspendallyourtimekeepingotherpeople'skidscompany,butwhataboutus?”Dylancomplainedandleftangrily.Iwasshockedandalittlehurt.HowcouldmyownchildnotunderstandthattheworkIwasdoingwassavinglives?Thentheanswerhitme.Hedidn'tknowbecausehehadneverseenwhatHealingtheChildrenactuallydid,Dylanhadheardstoriesofsickchildren,buthadneveroncelookedintotheeyesofachildandunderstoodthehardtruththatwithoutourassistance,thechildwouldlikelydie.GetdressedYouaregoingwithme,”IsaidIspentthedriveexplainingthecaseofHectortomyson,whopretendedtoignoremetheentiretime.“He'sseven,onlyweighsthirtypoundsandisverysick,HehasacomplicatedheartconditioncalledTetralogyofFallot,whichcouldkillhim,Itisamiraclethatheisstillalive.”IcontinuedtoexplainthatittookateamofvolunteermedicalstafftogetHectortothehospitalfromhisremotevillageandtendtohimwhilehewasthere.Still,DylanseemedcompletelyunimpressedWestoppedataconveniencestoreforwaterandsnacksDylanhadonelargeandonesmallSlurpee(思樂冰飲料)HesaidthesmallonewasforHectorIdoubtedwhetherthelittleguywouldbeabletodrinkit,butremainedsilent.ThiswasthefirstinterestDylanhadshowninbeingthere.Therefore.Iwasn'tabouttoruinitIstoppedatthenurses’stationtocheckonHector'sprogresswhileDylanwenttohisroom.Ourpatientwasrecoveringphysically,butthenursewasconcernedthatHectorwasstrugglingemotionally.Shesaid,“Kidsusuallyrecoverfast,buthehardlyspeaksandneversmiles.”注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。ImaginemysurprisewhenIheardlaughterfromHector'sroom.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Onthewayhomethatnight,DylanaskedmeseveraltimeswhetherHectorwouldbeokay.____________________________范文一ImaginemysurprisewhenIheardlaughterfromHector'sroom.

Surprisingly,IrushedintoHector'sroomandfoundDylanthere.HewastalkingwithHector,anditseemedthattheyweregettingalongwell,astherewasabigsmileonHector'sface.Icouldn'tbelievemyeyestoseeHectorsmilingandspeakingwithDylan.Turningbackandseeingme,Dylantoldmehappily,"IwastellingsomejokestoHectorandhefeltpleasedandbetter."IwasshockedbythechangeDylanbroughttoHector.

Onthewayhomethatnight,DylanaskedmeseveraltimeswhetherHectorwouldbeokay.

Soon,itwastimetoleave.DylanhuggedHectorwarmlyandpromisedhewouldcomebacktoseehimagain.IpromisedDylanthatHectorwouldbeokay,butheisaloneandneedscompany.DylantoldmehewouldcontinuetovisitHectoruntilhewascompletelyrecovered.AfloodofwarmthsurgedupfromthebottomofmyheartwhenhearingDylan'swords.Later,whenDylanhadtime,hewouldgotothenurses'stationtoaccompanyHector,tellingstoriesandjokestohim.Hectorbecamemoreactiveandhealthier.Itwasthepowerofcareandcompanionshipthatchangedbothoftheirlives.范文二ImaginemysurprisewhenIheardlaughterfromHector'sroom.

Tomysurprise,asI

burstinto

Hector'sroom,therewasDylan,engaginginlivelyconversationwithhim.ThewidesmilespreadingacrossHector'sface

hintedatthewarmthoftheirinteraction.Itwasalmost

unbelievable

toseeHector,usuallyreserved,laughingandchattingfreelywithDylan.Catchingsightofme,Dylanexclaimedwithjoy,"I'vejustsharedafewjokeswithHector,andhisspiritshaveclearlylifted."ThetransformationDylanhadbroughtaboutinHectorleftmeastonished.

Onthewayhomethatnight,Dylanaskedmeseveraltimeswhether

Hectorwouldbeokay.

AsthetimecameforDylantodepart,heembracedHectoraffectionately,promisingaswiftreturn.IreassuredDylanthatHectorwouldbefine,emphasizingthat

companionshipwaswhathetrulylongedfor.DylanvowedtovisitHectoruntilhemadeafullrecovery.Dylan'sreassuringwordsfilledmewithwarmthandhope.

Inthedaysthatfollowed,Dylanfrequentlyvisitedthenurses'stationtokeepHectorcompany,entertaininghimwithstoriesandjokes.Hector'svitalityandhealthvisiblyimproved.Undoubtedly,itwasthe

profoundpowerofcareandfriendship

thathadaprofoundimpactonboththeirlives.

令我驚訝的是，當(dāng)我沖進(jìn)?？颂氐姆块g時(shí)，發(fā)現(xiàn)迪倫在那里，正與他熱烈交談。?？颂啬樕涎笠绲臓N爛笑容暗示著他們之間交流的溫馨。看到平時(shí)內(nèi)向的?？颂噩F(xiàn)在竟然和迪倫一起開懷大笑，自由交談，簡直令人難以置信?？吹轿液?，迪倫高興地喊道：“我剛和?？颂胤窒砹藥讉€(gè)笑話，他的精神明顯振作起來了。”迪倫給?？颂貛淼淖兓屛艺痼@。

當(dāng)?shù)蟼愐x開的時(shí)候，他深情地?fù)肀Я撕？颂?，并承諾很快就會(huì)回來。我向迪倫保證?？颂貢?huì)沒事的，同時(shí)強(qiáng)調(diào)他真正渴望的是陪伴。迪倫發(fā)誓會(huì)一直看望海克特，直到他完全康復(fù)。迪倫的安慰話語讓我充滿了溫暖和希望。

在接下來的日子里，迪倫經(jīng)常去護(hù)士站陪伴?？颂兀o他講故事和笑話。?？颂氐幕盍徒】禒顩r明顯改善。毫無疑問，正是深厚的關(guān)懷和友誼對(duì)他們的生活產(chǎn)生了深遠(yuǎn)的影響。范文一與范文二優(yōu)化改寫理由供參考1.“engaginginlivelyconversation”比“talking”使用更高級(jí)的詞匯和短語更具表現(xiàn)力2.“widesmilespreadingacross”比“therewasabigsmileon”更生動(dòng)。3.ThewidesmilespreadingacrossHector'sfacehintedatthewarmthoftheirinteraction.ItwasalmostunbelievabletoseeHector,usuallyreserved,laughingandchattingfreelywithDylan.

結(jié)合了簡單句、并列句，使文章更有層次感。4.增加細(xì)節(jié)和情感色彩：“ItwasalmostunbelievabletoseeHector,usuallyreserved,laughingandchattingfreelywithDylan”通過對(duì)比展現(xiàn)了海克特的