2024屆廣東省高三下學(xué)期二模英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫精講講義素材

廣東省二模讀后續(xù)寫精講Step1：閱讀材料-找出矛盾（要解決的問題），主線情節(jié)-找到主人公的訴求，主線情節(jié)-找到可以點(diǎn)明、反襯、暗示某種品質(zhì)的句子-找到值得慶祝、紀(jì)念和令人悲傷、后悔的事情-找到是否有值得主人公反思、牢記的（某個(gè)親人、朋友、同學(xué)、老師說的）話，在續(xù)寫中呼應(yīng)-找到是否有值得主人公懷念的情形-掠過次要情節(jié)材料WhenIwassevenyearsold,myfamilymovedfromMexicotoAmerica.InMexico,Iwasacheerfulgirlwholovedmakingpeoplelaughwithmyjokesandinventingfungamestoplaywithmyfriends.However,whenIarrivedinAmerica,Ifoundithardtofitin【矛盾、問題所在：難以融入】,andIbecamequieter.Welivedinasmallhousewithamodestyardwherewegrewvegetables—myresponsibility.WhileItookprideinwatchingthemgrow,thereweretimeswhenIdreamedofhavingabeautifulgardenlikemyschoolmateLuella's【主人公訴求】,withitsdelicatetulips(郁金香).AlthoughLuellalivedinthesameneighborhoodasme,webarelykneweachotherItwasafteratornadothatLuellaandIfinallybecameclosefriends.【聯(lián)想：作者想要一個(gè)和Luella‘s家花園一樣的花園，經(jīng)過了tornado兩個(gè)人還成為了好朋友——那么兩個(gè)人大概率是在花園這件事上互相幫助，或者其中一方幫助了另一方】ThetornadostruckonaSundayafternoon.Thegentlebreezetransformedintoastrongwind,andthickgraycloudsfilledthesky.Gradually,thetornadotookshape,startingasathinropeandgrowingintoalargeblackfunnel(漏斗).Myentirefamilygatheredinthebathroom,seekingshelterfromthestorm.Terrified,Isatclosetomymom,kneesinmychest.Afterthestormhadpassed,ourworriesandfearswerereplacedbyreliefthatwewereunharmedandthatourhousehadremainedundamaged.【掠過次要情節(jié)：災(zāi)難前后過程，不重要，因?yàn)橹攸c(diǎn)寫的是“aftertornado兩個(gè)人如何成為好朋友”】AsIsteppedoutside,Iwitnessedtheextentofthedamagethetornadohadcausedtoourneighborhood【是Luella的花園遭受了損失，所以大概率是主人公幫助了Luella】.Acrossthestreet,atalltreehadfallen,crushingLuella'sgardeninfrontofheryellowhouse.Wehurriedovertocheckonit.Fortunately,herfamilyseemedtobeawayatthetime,andnoonewasinjured.However,heronce-beautifulgardenwasinruins,withthefallentreedestroyingthetulipsanddebris(碎片)spreadeverywhere.Icouldonlyimaginehowheartbrokentheymustfeelseeingthis.1.Thenmymom'susualwordsranginmyear,"Itismoreblessedtogivethantoreceive,”【值得主人公牢記的話-一般需要在續(xù)寫中呼應(yīng)——但是考慮到這句話和本文主旨“友誼、互助”沒什么關(guān)系，所以可以呼應(yīng)，也可以不呼應(yīng)——我個(gè)人覺得還是不呼應(yīng)好，不然太刻意了——但如果真的點(diǎn)了，寫通順也可以】andmyfamilystartedtothinkabouthowwecouldhelp.Justatthatmoment,Luella'sfamilyreturnedintheircar.Evenafterthedebriswascleared,IcouldstillsenseLuella'ssorrowforherlostgarden.Step2：分析續(xù)寫兩句話1.第二段第一句“afterthedebriswascleared”，說明第一段“我”幫助了Luella’sfamily清理院子2.第一段，Luella回來之后看到什么？心情如何？看到的是殘破不堪，感到震驚、難過、悲傷類似（如果沒有描寫Luella看到的景象和感受，我認(rèn)為是不合理的）3.第一段，“我”看到Luella的反應(yīng)，我又是什么表現(xiàn)？應(yīng)該是同情、安慰4.第一段，但是我又因?yàn)闆]有fitin而感到害羞，所以我不可能一下子就主動(dòng)上去幫忙5.第一段，我們是怎么幫助他們的呢？可以是媽媽先去，然后我受到了鼓舞之后再去6.第二段，要以“我和Luella成為好朋友”“我成功fitin”為最終目標(biāo)，至于“Itismoreblessedtogivethantoreceive”，我覺得可點(diǎn)可不點(diǎn)，因?yàn)檫@句話和全文主旨“友誼、互助”沒什么關(guān)系7.第二段，我怎么鼓勵(lì)Luella并和她成為了好朋友呢？我主動(dòng)提出和她一起種花，培育植物和友誼Step3：設(shè)計(jì)兩段情節(jié)第一段：1.Leulla一家開始收拾廢墟Luella滿臉震驚、難過2.媽媽走過去，安慰、擁抱他們3.我受到了鼓舞，也加入他們。并和Luella在合作中交流4.描寫清理打掃的過程第二段：1.環(huán)境描寫：破敗不堪的景象2.我提出和她一起種花3.Luella現(xiàn)出笑容4.我們不僅在培育花草，還在培育友誼5.這個(gè)花園是我們友誼的見證Step4：寫作第一段：Justatthatmoment,Luella'sfamilyreturnedintheircar.Theirwereshockedandsaddenedbythescenewheretherewereruinsandbrokenbrancheseverywhere.Astheysurveyedthewreckage（殘骸）,Luellaweptandgroaned（嘆息）.BeforeIcoulddosomething,mymotherapproachedthem,comfortingthemandgivingthemawarmembrace.Inspiredbyherexample,Ibashfully（害羞地）cameforwardtoLuellaandofferedtohelp.Shelookedatme,withaffectioninhereyes,andnodded.Together,wepickedupfallenbranchesandflowers,clearingthedestroyedflowerbeds.第二段：Evenafterthedebriswascleared,IcouldstillsenseLuella'ssorrowforherlostgarden.Theemptyspacewheretulipsandotherflowersonceflourishedseemedbadlyhurt.Asthesunshinesagain,IinvitedLuellatojoinmeinplantingnewflowersinbothouryards.Witheachseedplanted,hersmilesl