2024屆高三英語二輪復習 讀后續(xù)寫個人成長類 Never play tricks to cheat yourself不要降低對自己的要求 講義

閱讀下面短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫,使之構成一個完整的故事。Ayoungmanwenttovisittheoldestandwisestmaninthevillageforsomeadviceonhowhecouldbecomerich.“Treasure

isyourstobehadatthetopofYonderMountain,”advised

thewiseoldman

ashepointedtoatallmountainin

thedistance.“Youmusttravelonfoottothetopofthemountain.Thereyouwillfindrichesbeyondyourbelief.Onceyouleavethetopofthemountain,whateverremainswillbelostforever.”Theyoungman

couldhardlywaituntilthemorningwhenhewastomeetwiththewiseoldmanforfinalinstructions.Whenhearrivedatthewiseoldman'shome,hesawalong,thickloglyingonthegroundinfrontofthehouse.“Youmustcarrythislogonyourjourneytothetopofthemountain,anditisanecessarypartofyour

journey.Youmusttakeitwithyoutothetopofthemountaintoclaimyourtreasure,”explainedthewiseoldman.Theyoungmanwasnotpleasedwiththissuddensurprise,butherespectedthewiseoldmanandasheliftedthelong,

heavylog

ontohisshouldersand

struggled

downtheroadtowardsthemountain,herealizedthatthetripwouldnotbeaseasyashethought.Afterhewaswalkingforawhile,awoodsmancameuptohimandsaid,“Itlookslikethatlogisprettyheavy.Wouldyoulikemetocutsomeofitofftomakeitlighter?”Theyoungmanwasexhausted,sohesaid,“Isupposethatalittlebitcutofftheendwouldn'thurt.”Andthe

woodsmancuttwo

inches

offtheend.Awhilelatertheyoungmanmetafarmeronhiswaybackfromthefields.Andthefarmerhelpedhimcuttwoinchesofftheend.Atthebottomofthemountain,theyoungmanmetupwitha

trapper

whohelpedhimcutfourmoreinchesoffthelog.（339words）注意:1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右;2續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好;Paragraph1:The

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寫作步驟1.審題快速瀏覽原材料，可判斷文章為記敘文，描述一個完整的故事，同時最后一段要求總結出哲理，屬于半開放性續(xù)寫。2.梳理對劃線部分的關鍵詞分類如下：人物：

thewiseoldman，theyoungman，woodsman，trapper描述事件發(fā)展的關鍵詞：treasure，journey，heavylog，thedistance，struggled，inches3.推斷（1）文章所給材料部分描述了年輕人為了尋寶扛著木頭前行，由續(xù)寫第一段提示句The

young

man

continued

to

struggle

toclimb

the

mountain.可推斷本段應描寫年輕人爬山以及到達財富之地的過程。另外，續(xù)寫第二段的提示句中使用了the來修飾gap，屬于特指，可推斷續(xù)寫第一段中還應描述途中出現(xiàn)了agap。（2）續(xù)寫第二段提示語中and

discoveredthat

it…表明本段應先確定鋸掉木頭是否有影響，然后表明年輕人的感悟。4.擬稿（1）描述年輕人繼續(xù)前行到達山頂時，可使用下列方式：Tiredandexhausted,hefinallysawthetopofthehill.（用過去分詞短語作伴隨狀語）Thelogwasstillheavy,buthefeltmucheasier.Luckily,whenhewasnearlytiredout,hesawthetopofthehill.(使用時間狀語從句)（2）描述發(fā)現(xiàn)agap，可使用下列方式：Beingoverjoyed,herantothetreasure.Butwhenhewasveryclosetoit,hefoundtherewasahugegapattheendoftheroad,andgettingacrossthegapseemedtobetheonlywaytogettothetreasure.(使用V-ing短語做狀語，V-ing短語作主語，時間狀語從句，賓語從句)Seeingthetreasure,hemovedfasterandfaster.Buttohissurprise,therewasahugegapontheway,andthereseemedtobenootherrout.Hehadtogetacrossthegap.(使用V-ing短語作狀語，“比較級+比較級

”結構，動詞不定式短語作表語)（3）年輕人的感悟?qū)儆陂_放性續(xù)寫，可續(xù)寫為木頭的長度短了4英寸，引出“可再一再二，不可再三再四降低要求”的感悟；也可續(xù)寫為木頭的長度剛好短了8英寸，引出“對自己要求的任何一點降低都可能成為自己實現(xiàn)夢想的最大障礙”等。需要注意的是，這部分應盡量寫成鋸斷木頭后會帶來不良后果,

傳遞正能量，才符合原文的主題。5.定稿按照既定的邏輯順序，使用恰當?shù)倪^渡句或關聯(lián)詞，將各個信息串聯(lián)在一起，寫出完整的段落。標出段落中所使用的劃線詞。參考示例Paragraph1:The

young

man

continued

tostruggle

to

climb

the

mountain.The

log

wasstillheavy,buthefeltmucheasier.Luckily,whenhewasnearlytiredout,hesawthetopofthehill.Surroundingthetopofthehill,

thetreasure

wasglittering.Beingoverjoyed,herantothetreasure.Butwhengotcloser,hefoundahugegapattheendoftheroad,andgettingacrossthegapseemedtobetheonlywaytogettothetreasure.“HowcouldIgetthere?”Lookingatthelog,hethoughtofwhat

thewiseoldman

hadsaid.Paragraph2:The

excited

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man

laythe

log

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and

discoveredthat

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wastooshorttocover

thedistance.Seeingthetreasurethatcouldn'tbereached,howheregrettedallowingthelogtobecut!Aftermanyvaintries,hehadtoleavethetop.Howregretfulhewas!Heunderstoodwhatthewiseoldmanwantedtoteachhim,thatis,whenweare

strugglingtosuccess,weshouldneverplaytrickstocheatourselves.(155

words)默寫版：The

young

man

continued

tostruggle

to

climb

the

mountain.The

log

wasstillheavy,buthefeltmucheasier.Luckily,whenhewasnearlytiredout,hesawthetopofthehill.______________________________圍繞著山頂，寶藏閃閃發(fā)光.Beingoverjoyed,herantothetreasure.__________________________________________________________________但當他走近時，他發(fā)現(xiàn)路的盡頭有一個巨大的缺口，穿過缺口似乎是找到寶藏的唯一途徑?！癏owcouldIgetthere?”Lookingatthelog,hethoughtofwhat

thewiseoldman

hadsaid.Paragraph2:The

excited

young

man

laythe

log

across

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and

discoveredthat

it

wastooshorttocover

thedistance._______________________________________