短文故事續(xù)寫的作文講義高三英語二輪復習

2024年高考英語寫作短文故事續(xù)寫的作文閱談下面材料.根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構成一篇完整的短文。Istillrememberthedaywhenwe(decoratedthehouse.IwastenanditwastwoweeksbeforeNewYear.lookingforwardtomypresents.SinceI'mthewasyoungestinthefamily,allofthefamilymemberswouldgivemeagiftonewayoranother.Sometimesitwasacookieorahugbutitwasalwaysthere.Iwastheonlycenterofattentionanitwasfeelinggood.MyunclesusuallywouldaskmewhatIwantedbeforeNewYearandthatyearIknewwhatIwanted.IwasthespaceshipIsawintheads.Iwasdreamingofopeningabiggiftbox,anditwasthere.ButthatyearitcameinawaythatIwasn'texpecting.ItwastwoweeksbeforeNewYear.JusttwoweeksShecouldn'twait.Mydearmothertoldmyfatherthatitwastimeandthenwewenttothehospital.Afteranhour,theytoldmethatIhadasister:ButIdidn'twantasister.Iwantedaspaceship.Thenextfewdayswentsofast.Noonewascaringaboutme.EveryonewastalkingaboutherandIknewthatmylifewasnevergoingtobethesameeveragain.Iwasn'treadytogrowup,tobeabigbrother.Buitjusthappenedinaninstant.OnthedaybeforeNewYear,everyonewasinourhome,talkingonlyaboutmynewbornsister.Myfamilywasbeinghers.Evenmyunclesdidn'taskmeanythingaboutthegift.ShestoleeverythingI’deverhad,mylifeandmypresents.Thinkingaboutthis,lcriedmyselftosleep.Ihadanightmare(警夢)andwokeupinthemiddleofthenight.Shadowswereallaroundme,andIwasdefenselessandsoweak.Iranintomyparents’bedroombutcouldn'twakeupmypoorparentswhowerejusttoowornout.[wasstandingneartheirbed,tryingnottocrywhen[sawher.Shewasawakeandlookingatmewithherbigeyesinhersmallbed注意:l.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右:2.請按如下格式作答。Suddenlyalongshadowcameintothebedroomandshestartedcrying.Afterhavingfortedher,somethingslowlychangedinsideme.范文一ItwassoabruptthatIdidn'tknowwhattodo.Hopelessly,theywereallinadeepsleep.Iwalkedtomysister."Don'tcry,don'tcry,"Isaidtoher,butinvain.Shewasstillcryingandbeinglouderandlouder.Iwrappedmyarmsaroundmylittlesister.Sheseemedtonoticeme.Sheopenedherbigandlovelyeyestolookatme,andhersmallhandsseizedmetightly.Thenshesmiledinsteadofcried.ItwastheloveliestsmileIhaveeverseen.Ihuggedher,andminuteslater,shewasinadeepsleep.Thinkingaboutmysister'slovelysmile,Iwasreadytogrowup,tobeabigbrother.Timepassed,andmyparentsfinallywokeupatnoon."It's12:00,"theysaid.Theybothrantothediningroomandweresurprisedtoseemefeedingmysister."Goodafternoon,MomandDad,"Isaidwithasmile.Mymomwastouched."Ohdear,youlooklikeanadult.""Yes,I'vegrownup.I'mabigbrother,andit'smydutytocareformysister."Ilookedatmysisterwithabrightsmileshiningonourfaces.范文二：進一步優(yōu)化潤色成拔高款作文，藍色是好詞好句好素材，尖子生可以選用Thesuddennoise

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突如其來的噪音讓我驚愕，周圍依然沉浸在睡夢中，我一時不知所措。我走向正在哭泣的妹妹，試圖安慰她，輕聲說：“別哭了。”然而，我的努力徒勞無功，她的啜泣聲越來越大。我擁抱著她，她似乎感覺到了我的存在。她那雙大而富有表情的眼睛睜得大大的，凝視著我，她的小手緊緊地抓著我。令人驚訝的是，她的眼淚止住了，取而代之的是燦爛的笑容，這是我有生以來見過的最迷人的笑容。我把她緊緊抱在懷里，很快她就進入了平靜的睡眠。回想起她天使般的笑容，一種深刻的成熟感涌上心頭，促使我扮演起一個保護性的哥哥的角色。幾個小時過去了，我的父母終于醒了?！爸形缌耍彼麄凅@叫道，驚訝地看到我正在專心地喂我妹妹。我熱情地迎接他們。我母親看起來很感動，說：“你長大了，親愛的?！薄按_實如此，”我肯定地說?！罢疹櫭妹檬俏业呢熑?，我打算勤勉地完成它?！蔽铱粗妹茫覀兊哪樕涎笠缰鵂N爛的笑容。范文一與范文二：優(yōu)化改寫理由供參考“Thesuddennoisestartledme,andIfoundmyselfatalossasmysurroundingswerestillimmersedinslumber.”使用“startled”和“ataloss”等更生動的詞匯，增強了文本的緊張感和情感深度，同時描述了周圍環(huán)境的狀態(tài)，更具畫面感?！癐approachedmyweepingsisterandattemptedtoforther...”更具體地描述了“我”的動作，如“approached”和“attemptedtofort”，使場景更加生動。3.“Herbig,expressiveeyesopenedwide,gazingatme...”增加了對妹妹眼神的描述