讀后續(xù)寫寫作分析 海邊的神奇貝殼 講義 高二下學(xué)期期末統(tǒng)測(cè)英語(yǔ)試題

高二期末統(tǒng)測(cè)讀后續(xù)寫閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Caitlyn

steppedintothewarmandwetsands.Thewhitewavesracedoverherfeetandupherlegsandthenpulledbackagain.Caitlynwasonvacationwithherfamilyinanearbycoastaltown,andshelovedplayinginthe

ocean

water."Ouch!"criedthegirl,asherfootsteppedonsomethinghard.Shelookeddownanditwasalarge

shell

(貝殼).Caitlynbentdowntopickitup.Itwasaprettypinkshellwithpointsandanopeningthatlookedlikea

horn

(號(hào)).Sheheldituptoherear,hopingtohearthewhooshingsound(呼嘯聲).Instead,sheheardsomethingquitedifferent."Heykid!Wanttoheara

joke?"Caitlynnearlydroppedtheshell.Holdingitbackuptoherear,shetriedagain."Whydon't

fish

playbasketball?"theshellasked."I...Idon'tknow,"Caitlynwhispered."Becausetheyareafraidofthenet!Ha,ha!"laughedtheshell.Caitlynlookedaroundtoseeifanyonewaslookingather.Nobodywas."That's,uh,funny,"shereplied.Shedidn'treallyknowwhatwasgoingon."Whydon't

oysters

(牡蠣)sharetheirpearls?"Itseemedtobewaitingforareply."Uh,I'mnotsure."Caitlynsaid.Wasshedreaming?Theshellanswereditsownjoke."Becausethey're'shellfish'!Ha,ha!"Thegirllaughed.Onandontheshellwent,beingsillyandmakingjokes.Caitlynsatinthe

shallow

waterandlistenedforanhour.Whenhermothercalledtoher,sayingitwastimetogo,thegirllaidtheshellgentlyonthesands.Shepromisedtocomebackthenextday.Andshedid.Onthelastdayofher

vacation,Caitlyndecidedshecouldn'tleavetheshellbehind."You'recominghomewithme,"shesaidtotheprettyshell.Shethoughtitwouldbehappy."My

home

isintheocean,"itreplied,withoutany

laughter

initsvoice.ButCaitlyncouldn'tbeartogohomewithoutit.Paragraph1:

Arrivinghome,sheheldtheshelltoherear—silence._______________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:

Backatthebeach,shetooktheshelldowntotheoceanwaves._______________________________________________________________________________________

中文故事梗概Caitlyn在海灘度假時(shí)，踩到一個(gè)大貝殼shell。她撿起貝殼放到耳邊，期待聽到海浪的聲音，卻聽到了貝殼講的笑話。貝殼問(wèn)她為什么魚不打籃球，并自問(wèn)自答說(shuō)因?yàn)樗鼈兣戮W(wǎng)；還問(wèn)為什么牡蠣不分享珍珠，回答是因?yàn)樗鼈兒堋白运健保╯hellfish）。Caitlyn被逗得哈哈大笑，坐在淺水區(qū)聽了一個(gè)小時(shí)的笑話。海邊度假的幾天里，她每天都回到海灘聽貝殼講笑話，度過(guò)了愉快的假期。假期結(jié)束時(shí)，凱特琳舍不得離開這個(gè)會(huì)說(shuō)話的貝殼，盡管貝殼告訴她它的家在海里，她還是決定把貝殼帶回家…

主要人物:

Caitlyn

會(huì)說(shuō)話的貝殼shell敘事視角：第三人稱視角文本主題分類：人與自然和諧共生續(xù)寫思路建議第一段，從題目給出的續(xù)寫首句看，Caitlyn應(yīng)該是不顧貝殼的意愿，自私地把它帶回了家，但貝殼不再說(shuō)話了。一種合理的續(xù)寫內(nèi)容創(chuàng)設(shè)是：Caitlyn反復(fù)嘗試讓貝殼說(shuō)話但都沒有成功，于是決定還是把貝殼送回它原本的自然環(huán)境中。第二段，應(yīng)該主要寫Caitlyn把貝殼送回到海里之后的情況。一種合理的續(xù)寫方式是：回到自己的家園的貝殼重新開始講話了。文末主題升華方面，考生可以緊扣“人與自然”這個(gè)主題，把準(zhǔn)備好的升華句自然地用起來(lái)。寫作示范Arrivinghome,sheheldtheshelltoherear—silence.

Caitlyn

feltapangofdisappointment.Sheshookthe

shell

gently,hopingtohearevenawhisper,buttherewasnothing.Determinednottogiveup,sheplacedtheshellonherbedsidetable,thinkingitmightneedtimetoadjust.Daysturnedintoweeks,andstill,theshellremainedsilent.Missingthe

jokes

and

laughter,shereflectedonhowhappytheshellhadsoundedbythe

ocean.Realizingtheshellneededtobeneartheseatoregainitsvoice,Caitlynknewshehadtotakeitbacktoitstrue

home.

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Backatthebeach,shetooktheshelldowntotheoceanwaves.

Shekneltbythewater'sedgeandgentlyplacedtheshellinthe

shallow

waves."I'msorryfortakingyouaway,"shewhispered.Asthewaveslappedovertheshell,Caitlynheardafaintgiggle.Sheleanedincloser."Heykid!Whydidthecrabnevershare?"Theshellhadstartedtalkingagain."Becausehe's

shellfish

too!"Caitlynanswered,feelinggreatjoy.Inthatmoment,shefinallyunderstoodthatsomethingsaremeanttobefreeandbelongintheirnaturalplace.Asshestoodtoleave,shefeltaconnectionwiththeocean,knowingshehadlearnedalessonaboutrespectandharmonywithnature.

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01寫作細(xì)節(jié)分析Arrivinghome,sheheldtheshelltoherear—silence.

Caitlyn

feltapangofdisappointment.（恰當(dāng)?shù)那榫w描寫：失望）Sheshookthe

shell

gently,hopingtohearevenawhisper,buttherewasnothing.（合理的而且必要的動(dòng)作描寫）Determinednottogiveup,sheplacedtheshellonherbedsidetable,thinkingitmightneedtimetoadjust.Daysturnedintoweeks,andstill,theshellremainedsilent.（合理的內(nèi)容創(chuàng)設(shè)：反復(fù)嘗試）Missingthe

jokes

and

laughter,shereflectedonhowhappytheshellhadsoundedbythe

ocean.Realizingtheshellneededtobeneartheseatoregainitsvoice,Caitlynknewshehadtotakeitbacktoitstrue

home.（和下文給出的第一句合理銜接：決定把貝殼送回大海）

Backatthebeach,shetooktheshelldowntotheoceanwaves.

Shekneltbythewater'sedgeandgentlyplacedtheshellinthe

shallow

waves."I'msorryfortakingyouaway,"shewhispered.（合理的動(dòng)作和對(duì)話描寫：knelt、placed、whispered）Asthewaveslappedovertheshell,Caitlynheardafaintgiggle.Sheleanedincloser."Heykid!Whydidthecrabnevershare?"Theshellhadstartedtalkingagain."Becausehe's

shellfish

too!"（shellfish和原文重要概念互動(dòng)）Caitlynanswered（合理改編創(chuàng)設(shè)：這次是Caitlyn自己說(shuō)出的答案）,feelinggreatjoy.Inthatmoment,shefinallyunderstoodthatsomethingsaremeanttobefreeandbelongintheirnaturalplace.Asshestoodtoleave,shefeltaconnectionwiththeocean,knowingshehadlearnedalessonaboutrespectandharmonywithnature.（升華句的恰當(dāng)自然使用）

02詞匯和表達(dá)積累apangofdisappointment

一陣失望reflecton

反思，回想kneel(knelt-knelt)

跪下lapover拍打，輕輕覆蓋afaintgiggle

微弱的笑聲leanin

靠近respectandharmony

尊重與和諧下水文Arrivinghome,sheheldtheshelltoherear—silence.Caitlyn'sheartsank.Thelivelyjokesandlaughterthatoncefilledherearswerenowreplacedbyaneeriequiet.Shehadgrownsofondoftheshell'scompanyduringhervacation,anditssuddensilencemadeherfeelastrangesenseofloss.Shetrieddifferenttricks,shakingitgently,tappingit,butnothingbroughtbackthejokestervoice.Itwasasifthemagicoftheoceanhadbeenleftbehindwiththeretreatingwaves.Backatthebeach,shetooktheshelldow