讀后續(xù)寫+告別陰霾：與媽媽散步的治愈之旅+講義 高三上學(xué)期10月月考英語試題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Haveyoueverbeensodepressedthatyoucan’tsleep?Youalsocan’teat.Youcan’tread.YouhavenofriendstocallupandnothingisgoodonTV.Soyousigh,pressyourfacedownharderintoyourpillow,andshedafewtears.Thiswasmylifetwoyearsago.Ihadjustturned14butalreadyfoundlifeastruggle.AsIlayinmybedoneSaturday,Mompeeked(瞄)intomyroomtomakeherregular“IsEmilystillalive”check.IknewthatifIspentmoretimelikethis,shewouldbegindustingme.AftersuggestingafewthingsformetodothatIimmediatelyrejected,Mommadehermove,“Emily!Getdressed!I’mtakingthedogoutforawalk,andyou’recomingwithme!”“Why?”Iprotested.“Becauseit’llmakeyoufeelbetter.”Thethoughtofmovingwasunbearable.IfeltasifallofmybodypartswereweigheddownbytonsofbricksIcouldn’trememberthelasttimeIhadgoneoutside.SomehowIfoundthestrengthtosliponapairofjeansandablacksweatshirt.Momwaswaitingatthedoor,leash(狗繩)inhandanddogatherside.Then,westeppedoutside.ItwasawarmMarchdayandithadbeenalongtimesincethewarmthofthesunhadtouchedmycheeks.Momledthedogandmedownsomedirtpaths,throughabigfieldandreachedHalseyPond.Butthesignsofspringhadyettoappearandthescenewasrathercolorlessthroughouttheentirejourney.“I’mtired!It’sboring,Mom!Whencanwegohome?”“Notyet,”she’dsay.Momstoppedtosayhitoeveryjogger,dogwalker,runner,andbicyclistwhopassedus.Sometimesshewouldgetintoaconversation.Theywouldtalkaboutweather,dogs,andallsmalltalktopics.Sheseemedhappy,andwasliterallyglowing(容光煥發(fā)).Afterwalkingforwhatseemedanage,Momfinallysaiditwastimetogoback.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:WhenIgothome,anewfeelingseemedtobeawakened.____________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:AnewSaturdayfoundmeaskingMomifIcouldtakethedogout.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意14歲的“我”曾長期處于抑郁狀態(tài)，對任何事都提不起興趣，整日躺在床上。媽媽強(qiáng)行拉“我”出門遛狗。盡管“我”一開始極不情愿，但在散步過程中，媽媽熱情地和遇到的人打招呼、聊天。整個行程對“我”來說有些無聊，“我”多次要求回家。然而回家后，這次散步卻在“我”心中喚醒了一種新的感覺。五要素分析人物：“我”和媽媽。時間：一個溫暖的三月周六。地點(diǎn)：從家出發(fā)，經(jīng)過一些土路、大田野，到達(dá)哈爾西池塘，然后返回。起因：“我”因抑郁而萎靡不振，媽媽為了讓“我”振作起來，拉“我”出門遛狗。經(jīng)過：媽媽帶著“我”和狗散步，沿途和路人交談，“我”覺得旅程無聊，多次想回家。結(jié)果：回家后“我”有了新的感覺。幾處伏筆及續(xù)寫回應(yīng)伏筆：媽媽說散步會讓“我”感覺好一些?；貞?yīng)：回家后“我”有了新感覺，意識到散步有積極作用。伏筆：媽媽在散步過程中容光煥發(fā)、很快樂?；貞?yīng)：后來“我”主動要求帶狗出門，也體會到了快樂。續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)第一段情感線：從最初的抵觸到回家后的微妙變化，有一種對新感覺的好奇和隱隱的期待。故事線：描述回家后的“我”身心上的變化，比如不再像之前那樣消沉，開始有了積極生活的想法。第二段情感線：主動要求帶狗出門體現(xiàn)出“我”心態(tài)的轉(zhuǎn)變，從消極到積極，對出門散步充滿熱情。故事線：著重寫這次出門“我”的不同表現(xiàn)，如主動和路人交流、欣賞周圍風(fēng)景，真正享受散步的過程。主旨升華句Sometimes,thesimplestactivities,likeawalkwithlovedones,canbethekeytounlockthedoorofourimprisonedsouls.Asmallstepoutofthecomfortzone,asreluctantasitmaybe,canleadustoanewworldfilledwithhopeandvitality.Inthejourneyoflife,it'softentheforceddetours,likethiswalk,thatbringusbacktothepathofhappiness.Thewarmthofthesunoutsideandthecompanyoffamilycanmelttheiceofdepressionwithinus,revealingthebeautifulselfbeneath.Wemayresistchange,butasshownbythiswalk,changecanbethecatalystforanewbeginningandanewoutlookonlife.寫作示范第一篇Paragraph1:WhenIgothome,anewfeelingseemedtobeawakened.Itwasasifatinysparkhadbeenlitinsideme.Inolongerfelttheheavygloomthathadcloudedmydays.Ilookedaroundmyroom,andforthefirsttimeinages,Inoticedthesunlightstreamingthroughthewindow,castingbeautifulpatternsonthefloor.Irealizedthattheoutsideworld,whichIhadshunned,hadsomuchtooffer.MaybeMomwasright.Maybegettingoutofmyself-madeprisonwasthefirststeptowardshealing.

Paragraph2:AnewSaturdayfoundmeaskingMomifIcouldtakethedogout.Shesmiledknowinglyandhandedmetheleash.AsIwalkedalongthefamiliarpaths,Ifeltasenseoffreedom.Igreetedeverypasser-bywithenthusiasm,andthistime,Ilingeredtoadmirethescenery.Thepondnolongerlookeddull;itwasabeautifulexpanseofwaterreflectingthesky.Iunderstoodthatlifehaditssimplejoys,andIwasdeterminedtoembracethem.第二篇Paragraph1:WhenIgothome,anewfeelingseemedtobeawakened.TherewasanewfoundenergywithinmethatIcouldn'tquiteexplain.Isatonmybed,thinkingaboutthewalk.Thefreshair,thepeoplewemet,andMom'shappyfaceallflashedthroughmymind.IfeltaconnectiontotheworldoutsidethatIhadn'tfeltinalongtime.Igotupanddecidedtocleanmyroom,ataskIhadneglectedforweeks.Itwasasifthewalkhadgivenmeanewperspectiveonlife.

Paragraph2:AnewSaturdayfoundmeaskingMomifIcouldtakethedogout.Shebeamedwithpride.Thistime,asIwalkedwiththedog,Ifeltasenseofpurpose.Istoppedtotalktoanelderlywomansittingonabench,sharingalaughwithher.Iwatchedtheducksswimminginthepondwithfascination.Irealizedthatthissimpleactofwalkingwasagift,awaytobreakfreefromthechainsofdepressionandembracelifeagain.【答案】Paragraph1:WhenIgothome,anewfeelingseemedtobeawakened.Theheavinessthathadweighedmedownbeforeseemedtohavelifted,ifonlyslightly.Thesimpleactofbeingoutside,feelingthewarmthofthesun,andhearingthechirpingofbirdshadsparkedsomethinginsideme.Itwasaglimmerofhope,atinyrayoflightinthedarknessofmydepression.Irealizedthatmaybe,justmaybe,therewasstillsomethin