高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)寫作之讀后續(xù)寫專項訓(xùn)練

讀文章列主旨。讀后簡要概括大意O

讀文章列要素

[whenwherewhowhatwhyhow)0

讀文章定人物性格，狀態(tài)特征，推測隨著時間推移事件的變化，事態(tài)發(fā)展

可能的語言動作，心理感受。【摘得匯】

讀透給出的段落首句，仔細分析可能的人物的動作，語言，情緒表情反應(yīng)等

要素，確定續(xù)寫情節(jié)發(fā)展的節(jié)奏，合理安排段落內(nèi)容。

讀出事件發(fā)展線索，最終的價值觀和情感取向也就是要表達的方向，確定事

情往何方向發(fā)展以及怎樣的主題結(jié)尾。

好想法源自于下筆記一記【讀+摘】

寫人物語言動作心理感受【主要人物會怎么說，怎么做，怎么想】

寫過程與結(jié)局【謹記過程和結(jié)局過渡要合理自然符合邏輯】

【動作狀態(tài)類標記】【情緒心理感受標記】【主要人物標記】

讀后續(xù)寫訓(xùn)練一

[A]WhenGloriaEstefanstartedprimaryschool,shecouldnotread,

writenorspeakEnglish.Shefeltlost,unhappyandpletelyfrightened.

However,someonechangedherlife-herEnglishteacher,MrsCollins.

HerfamilyhadleftCubain1959whenshewasonlyayearoldinthehope

offindingabetterlifeinAmerica.InitiallytheymovedtoMiamiwherethe

familysettledinasetofapartmentswithotherCubanwomenandchildren

whohadimmigrated.

Thewomenwerecloseknitandsupportive.Whileshefeltsafe,shewas

alsoisolated.TheyallspokeSpanish,andsherarelyheardEnglish.Onher

veryfirstdayinschool,whichshewaslookingforwardto,shewaspletely

shocked.Shecamehomeandtoldhermotherthatshehadlearntherfirst

Englishword"stupid".Itwasthenicknameaboyhadgivenher.

Ineverywaypossible,shewassetapartfromherclassmates.Shewas

theonlypanicandnonwhitestudent.Shealsofounditdifficulttograspthe

Englishlanguageasitwashersecondlanguage.Theculture,herschool

friendsandthefoodtheyateweredifferentfromhers.Assuch,shewasset

apartfromherclassmates.

Onepersonmadethatyearbearableforher,MrsCollins.Shewasyoung

andAfricanAmerican,sosheunderstoodhowGloriafeltasshewasthe

onlynonwhitestudentinclass.MrsCollinsneverdoubtedthatGloriacould

catchupwiththeotherstudentsintime.

Still,theteasingcontinued.Theboywhocalledherstupidwouldnotstop

laughingatherforheraccent.Hewasagoodstudentandtheproudholder

oftheclass'sreadingaward.Itwasanhonourgivenperiodicallytoastudent,

basedonexcellenceinschoolwork,participationandhomework.Gloria

wantedthatlongwaitedaward.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:

MrsCollinsencouragedhertopeteforthereadingaward.

Paragraph2:

Theawardceremonywasingup.

寫作步驟：

【讀出主旨大意】

本文講述了GloriaEstefan第一次出現(xiàn)在學(xué)校的時候，她既不會讀也不會

寫英語。因此在上學(xué)的時候總是被學(xué)校的同學(xué)們所嘲笑。而就在此時，

一名老師MrsCollins對她鼓勵照顧有加的故事。

【讀出要素細節(jié)】

人物及性格：

動作和狀態(tài)：

情緒及表情：

【讀首句，構(gòu)思段落】

@MrsCollinsencouragedhertopeteforthereadingaward.

由第一段首句內(nèi)容“MrsCollins鼓勵她去競爭閱讀獎?！笨芍谝欢慰?/p>

描寫在老師鼓勵下，GloriaEstefan在學(xué)習(xí)上尤其是英語方面，以及交朋

友方面取得了很大的進步。

②Theawardceremonywasing.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“頒獎典禮快到了?！?/p>

可知，第二段可描寫GloriaEstefan在比賽中的精彩表現(xiàn)，同時獲得了極

好的成績,使在場的男孩們吃驚，同時在之后的學(xué)習(xí)中GloriaEstefan取

得了更多的好成績。

【續(xù)寫線索】鼓勵一準備一比賽一獲得優(yōu)異成績一驚訝眾人一表現(xiàn)突出

【要點詞匯梳理】

下定決心，積極準備，不畏懼，不害怕，以比賽為目標，證明自己也可

以做到，努力練習(xí)，說英語，減少母語的干擾影響，老師的指導(dǎo)幫助，

自己的努力，最終掌握閱讀技巧，評比中獲得優(yōu)異成績，難以置信，令

人驚訝，讓大家刮目相看，證明自己，獲獎使得她進一步獲得動力和信

心，成績越來越好

行為類①掌握：haveagoodgraspofreading/haveagoodmandof

reading②參力口：participatein/takepartin

情緒類①鼓舞激勵獲得信心：cheeron/encouragepositively

②震驚的：shocked/astonished/amazed

范文：

MrsCollinsencouragedhertopeteforthereadingaward.Withthiskindteacher

cheeringheron,shegainedconfidenceandlanguageskills.Shemadesorapidprogress

thatbymidyear,shewaswellonherwaytospeakingEnglishfluentlyandhadagood

graspofreading.Besides,shedidwellinalltheothersubjects.Shecametoschool

earlyeveryday,participatedactivelyinclassactivitiesandfinishedhomeworkontime.

What'smore,shemademoreandmorefriendsinherclass.

Theawardceremonywasingup.Sheworkedashardasshecould.WhenMrs

CollinsannouncedGloriaasthewinnerinfrontofthewholeclass,itwasherproudest

moment.Sheimmediatelytookthereadingawardrightoutofthatboy'shotlittlehands.

Theboywasshockedandunwillinglyhandedittoher.Shefeltsohappyforherself,

owinghersuccesstoherteacher,MrsCollins.ThisservedasamotivationforGloria

whoworkedevenharderinschoolandearnedmore"A"grades.

【B篇】PrivatePropertyKeepOut!

Iabsolutelylovemylittlebrotherandsister,TexandIndibutsometimesI

feelextremelyannoyedwhentheydon'trespectmystuff.

Oneafternoon,IoverheardIndiandherfriendKatetalkingabouta

necklace."Ooh!Wheredidyougetthatcoolnecklace?"KateaskedIndi"

Ijustfoundit,"repliedIndi.

“Ilovetheflowerinthemiddleoftheheart!”saidKateadmiringly

“Yeah,“saidIndi."It'smynewfavoritethingintheworld!”

Itwasmynecklace!Unabletobottleupmyannoyance,!wentstraightoverto

them

“Excuseme,Indi,“Isaid."Wheredidyoufindthatnecklace?^^

“Rightthereonthefloor,“Indianswered,pointingtoaspotjustoutsidemy

bedroom

“Soyoufoundanecklacerightoutsidemybedroomanddidn'tthinkitmight

bemine?,,Istaredintohereyesandaskedinaloudervoice.

Indishrugged.

“Well,yourfavoritenewthinghappenstobemyfavoriteoldthing,andI'd

likeitbackPlease,please,pleasejustleavemystuffaloneonceandforall!”I

toldher.

ImusthavesoundedprettyangrybecauseIfoundIndi5seyesfilledwith

tears.Sheunwillinglytookoffthenecklaceandthrewitintomyhand

“Hereyougo,“shesniffled（抽鼻子）andwentoftothebackyardwithKate

Andthatwasthat.Idecidedtotrytochangemysourmoodbytakingoutthe

handicraft（工藝）boxfromthecupboardinthelivingroom.Ifoundcraftsticks

andseashellsforapictureframe（相框）,putonsomemusic,andgotdownto

working.

AsIcarefullygluedontheshells.IrememberedhowIndiandIhadfound

themtogetheratthebeach.Howcloseandhappywewereatthattime!Thafs

whenIdecidedtomaketheframeforInditoapologizeforoverreacting.Itwasa

taskrequiringtimeandpatience.Sobythetimewasfinished.Ifeltdefinitely

satisHedandevenpicturedIndi'ssmilingfacewhenIgavehertheframe.AsI

feltstarving,Iwenttothekitchentograbasnack,leavingthegluetodry

WhenIreturned,!foundTexbusilybuildingsomethingwiththecraft

sticks.

Latethatafternoon,Momknockedatmydoorandaskedmetogo

downstairsforafamilymeeting.

寫作步驟：

【讀出主旨大意】

本文以人物為線索展開，講述了因為弟弟妹妹未經(jīng)允許動作者的東西，作者

很生氣，造成一些不愉快。后來通過媽媽的說服，他們都意識到了自己言行

的不當之處，并互相道歉，重歸于好的故事。

【讀出要素細節(jié)】

人物及性格：

動作和狀態(tài)：

情緒及表情：

【讀首句，構(gòu)思段落】

續(xù)寫線索：

與TEX又一次發(fā)生矛盾

媽媽勸解一意識到錯誤一請求原諒一相互道歉一化解矛盾一快樂一媽媽總

結(jié)

【要點詞匯梳理】

行為類

發(fā)脾氣請求原諒：begforforgiveness/askforforgiveness

道歉：apologize/saysorry

情緒類

①羞愧地：withshame

②快樂地：happily/pleasurably

WhenIreturned,!foundTexbusilybuildingsomethingwiththecraftsticks.

Aterriblefeelingsuddenlywelledupinmyheart.Irushedforward,onlytofind

Texhadalreadymanagedtoruinmywork.ttOh,no!,,Icried.4tWhathaveyoudone

withmyframe?Ittookmealongtimetomakeit.ItwasmeantforIndi.Nowall

myeffbrthasgonetowaste.Whydoesn'tanyonerespectmythings?”】shouted

desperatelyatTex,whogotabitconfusedandfrightened.Befbrehecouldsay

anything,!stormedupstairstomyroom,madeahugesignsaying""Keep

Ouf\andshutmydoorangrily.

Latethatafternoon,Momknockedatmydoorandaskedmetogo

downstairsforafamilymeeting.Obviously,TexandIndihadtoldMomwhat

hadhappened.Wesatdowntotalkthingsover.4'Everyonehastheirown

privacy,whichdeservestoberespectedbyothers,“Momsaidseriously."Texand

Indi,doyouthinkso?,,TexandIndirealizedtheirmisbehaviorandtheytookmy

hands,sincerelybeggingforforgiveness.Blushingwithshame,Ialsoapologized

forlosingmytempersoeasilyandpromisedtobegentlerandmore

understandingtothemfromthen

on.Theunpleasantatmospheredisappearedandwemadeuphappily.Private

propertyisimportantbutwhatismoreimportantisfamilylove.

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HowCountryMusicHelpedHerHeal

Brandy?Ididn'trecognizethenamethathadshownupinmyinbox,butI

openedtheemailanyway.4Tmreachingouttoyouonbehalfofmy

family,^Brandywrote.'Tmsorryittookussolongtorespondtoyourletter,but

thisyearsincemyfatherdiedhasbeendifficult.

IrealizedthenwhoBrandywas.Herfatherhadbeenmyanonymous（匿名

的）donor.Oneyearearlier,I'dinjuredmykneeandunderwentasurgerywhere

thenewtissuedidn'tefrommyownbodybutfromadonor.Afterthesurgerya

nursehandedmeabooklettitledAboutYourDonor.Shesaidmydonorwasdead

andanonymous.4'Butsomepeopleliketosendathankyoutothefamilythrough

thehospital,“sheexplained.

Itseemedlikeanimportantthingtodowithmytime.I'dplannedtospendmy

recoverytryingtoteachmyselftoplaycountrymusiconmyguitar,somethingI'd

beenmeaningtogetaroundtoforalongtime.Butcountrymusiccouldwait.

Writingalettertomydonor'sfamilytookpriority.Ichosemywords

carefully,lettingthemknowhowmuchIappreciatedthedonor'sgenerosityand

howverysorryIwasfortheirloss.

Iincludedmyemailaddressandsentthelettertothehospitaltobe

forwarded,butIdidn'texpectananswer.Especiallynotawholeyearlater.Soit

meantalottomethatthefamilyhadreachedoutwhentheywereready.

BrandyandIdecidedtokeepintouchonline.ThereIlearnedalittlemoreabout

herfather,Larry/'Whatacoincidence,,?IwrotetoBrandy."Myfather'snameis

Larrytoo."Shedescribedherdadasthelifeoftheparty,thekindofpersonwho

madeeveryone*sdaybrighter.4'Andhejustlovedcountrymusic,“shesaid/'It

washisfavoritethingintheworld.^^

注意：

L續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

“Ilovecountrymusictoo!,,Isaid.

Ipostedthatmusicvideoonlineandexplainedmyintentionofdoingso.

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短文。

Theabilityofyoungchildrentoremaincalmduringacrisisisoften

limited,butafiveyearoldgirlSavannahfromHancockCounty,Indiana

provedtobeanexception,whichcanbelifesaving.

Theincidentbeganwithanemergencycalltothelocal911dispatcher（調(diào)

度員），JasonBonham,Tohissurprise,thepersonontheotherendwasa

littlegirl.Despitetheiravityofthesituation,herbehaviorandtheclear

conversationleftasignificantimpressiononJasonandmillionswholater

heardthecall。

Savannahwasuplateseeingamoviewithherfather,Frank,andher

motherwasonabusinesstrip.Itwasduringthemovienightthatsheheard

disturbingsoundsfromthekitchen.Withtheirpetdogbarkingceaselessly,

Savannahwenttoinvestigate.

Inthekitchen,Savannahfoundherfatheronthefloor,clutching（捂著）

hischest.Shewasterrifiedbutrememberedherparents*adviceabout

emergencysituations.Herfatherwasunabletospeak,indicatinghewasin

criticalcondition.

Savannahtooktheinitiativetocontactemergencyservices,dialing911

fromthekitchenwallphone.Herparentshadtaughtherwhattodoinsuch

situations,whichnowprovedinvaluable.

Jason,the911operator,hadbeeninthisjobfor11yearsbutwasamazed

byS'scalmness.Despitethechallengingcircumstances,Jasonwasableto

gathercrucialinformationaboutSavannah'sfather*scondition.Savannah

conveyedherfather*ssymptomsofdifficultybreathingandchestpainsto

Jason,whichhelpedidentifytheemergencyasapossibleheartcondition.

JasonkeptSavannahontheline,distractingherwithlightconversation,

whilemakingsureshewaskeepinganeyeonherdad.Jasonasked

Savannahtounlockthefrontdoorfortheconvenienceofparamedics*（急救

醫(yī)士）entering.SavannahkeptmunicatingwithJasonuntiltheparamedics

arrived.Sheperformedadmirably,notonlyupdatingJasonabouther

father'sconditionbutalsotakingpracticalmeasures,likeunlockingthe

frontdoorfortheparamedics.

BeforeacDanyinqherfathertohospital,Savannahcalledhermother.And

herfatherwasimmediatelytakenintosurgerythemomenttheyreachedthe

hospital,

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Savannah'sfathermadeitthroughsurgerysuccessfully.

Herexampledemonstratedthatevenachildasyoungasfivecouldmakea

difference.

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的短文。

At11:15a.m,IsetoutonahighaltitudetrainingruninCalifornia's

SequoiaNationalParkinsunny,70°Ftemperatures.Iwaspreparingfora

marathonandcametotheparkforascenicworkout,andtoseehowcloseI

couldgettothe10,500footpassesonthetopoftheGreatWesternDivided

climbedfivemilesand1,000feetbeforethetrail*ssurfacebecame

snowcoveredanddangerousenoughthatIhadtoturnaround.

Onmyrun,Inotedthepotentialinstabilityofthefivefootdeepsnow

bridgeoverFranklinCreek,andIknelttoexamineit.Therewerenovisible

signsofweakness,andthesurfacewasrockhard-Iguesseditcouldsupport

atruck.Icrossedwithoutincident.