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閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Krymzen,aged10andhersisterSamaraWagner,aged9,livedinEdmonton,neartheNorthSaskatchewanRiver.Itwas4p.m.onEasterSundayandtherewasstillsnowontheground.ThesistersdressedintheirfavoriteT-shirtsandpinkleggingsrantothewoodlandbehindtheirhome.TheylovedRundleParkintherivervalley.Itwasaperfectplacetoplaywhiletheirmom,MirandaWagner,wasbusypreparingthefamily’sfestivedinner.Beforelong,theygotbored.Theydecidedtodosomethingdifferent.KrymzenledthewayandSamarafollowed.Theywereheadingtotheoneplacetheirmomhadtoldthemnevertogo—theriver.Theystartedtakinglittlecarefulstepsacrosstheice,dippingtheirrubberbootsintothewater.Thentheyheardabigcrack.Afterhearingthecrack,Krymzenturnedaroundfastandgotbacktosafety.ButSamaradidn’t.Shefellintothecoldriver.Seeingthedangeroussituation,sheranbacktoSamara.“Samara,canyoureachmyhand?”shecriedashersisterstruggledinthewater.Notfarawayfromtheriver,ayoungcoupleAdamandKelseyShawwerewalkingtheirdogRocky,aneight-year-oldhusky.TheywerecrossingtheRundleParkfootbridgeonthewaybacktotheparkinglotwhentheyheardscreams.Theylookedoverthesideofthebridgeandspottedagirlwhohadfallenthroughtheiceandanothertryingtopullhertosafety.“Weseeyou!”Theyshouteddowntothem.“Helpiscoming!”AdamtoldKelseytocallanambulance.Thenheturnedtothedog.“Rocky,”hesaid,“we’regoingdown.”HeandRockyslippedandsliddownthesamehillthegirlstookjustminutesearlier.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Adamandhisdogmanagedtoreachthecrack.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Luckily,theambulancearrivedintimetorushSamaratohospital.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
文章大意10歲的克里姆岑(Krymzen)和9歲的薩馬拉(Samara)在復(fù)活節(jié)周日下午到屋后的林地玩耍,這片靠近北薩斯喀徹溫河的林地是她們玩耍的好地方。玩了一會(huì)兒她們覺得無(wú)聊,決定前往媽媽禁止她們?nèi)サ暮舆?。在冰面上行走時(shí),冰面開裂,克里姆岑及時(shí)返回安全地帶,但薩馬拉掉進(jìn)了河里。不遠(yuǎn)處,亞當(dāng)(Adam)和凱爾西(Kelsey)夫婦正帶著他們8歲的哈士奇洛基(Rocky)散步,聽到尖叫聲后發(fā)現(xiàn)了這一情況,亞當(dāng)讓凱爾西叫救護(hù)車,然后帶著洛基前去救援。伏筆與續(xù)寫回應(yīng)伏筆:媽媽告誡姐妹倆不要去河邊,為后文薩馬拉掉入河中這一危險(xiǎn)情況埋下伏筆,續(xù)寫中姐妹倆不聽勸告遭遇危險(xiǎn),引發(fā)了救援情節(jié)。伏筆:亞當(dāng)讓凱爾西叫救護(hù)車,為薩馬拉獲救后的救治情節(jié)做鋪墊,續(xù)寫中救護(hù)車及時(shí)趕到將薩馬拉送往醫(yī)院,使情節(jié)發(fā)展連貫。續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)第一段情感線:緊張、堅(jiān)定。亞當(dāng)和洛基到達(dá)裂縫處時(shí)氣氛緊張,亞當(dāng)?shù)男袆?dòng)表現(xiàn)出他救人的堅(jiān)定決心,同時(shí)也為薩馬拉的安危揪心。故事線:詳細(xì)描述亞當(dāng)在冰面上艱難爬行接近薩馬拉并成功拉她上來(lái)的過程,以及洛基在旁邊的反應(yīng)。續(xù)寫示范:Adamandhisdogmanagedtoreachthecrack.Adamcarefullystretchedhimselfontheice,hisheartpounding.Rockystoodby,whiningsoftly.AdammanagedtoclaspSamara'sarmandpulledwithallhismight.Inchbyinch,hedraggedheroutoftheicywater.Samarawastrembling,herfacepalewithfear.Adamheldherclose,tryingtowarmher.第二段情感線:慶幸、感激。救護(hù)車及時(shí)趕到,大家為薩馬拉能得到救治而慶幸,薩馬拉的家人對(duì)救援者充滿感激之情。故事線:講述救護(hù)車到來(lái)后的情景,包括將薩馬拉送往醫(yī)院、醫(yī)生救治,以及家人的反應(yīng)。續(xù)寫示范:Luckily,theambulancearrivedintimetorushSamaratohospital.Theparamedicsquicklyputheronastretcherandintothevehicle.Atthehospital,doctorsworkedurgentlytostabilizehercondition.KrymzenandhermotherwereintearsofreliefwhentheysawSamarawasoutofdanger.TheythankedAdamandKelseyprofuselyforsavingSamara'slife.情感線從姐妹倆玩耍時(shí)的快樂、違反禁令的好奇,到薩馬拉掉入河中的驚恐,再到救援時(shí)的緊張和獲救后的慶幸、感激,情感起伏,扣人心弦,使讀者仿佛置身其中。情感變化推動(dòng)故事發(fā)展,讓讀者更關(guān)注救援結(jié)果和人物命運(yùn)。故事線故事圍繞姐妹倆在河邊的冒險(xiǎn)展開,從玩耍、涉險(xiǎn)到救援、送醫(yī),情節(jié)完整、邏輯清晰,有起因、經(jīng)過和結(jié)果。每個(gè)環(huán)節(jié)緊密相連,突出了在危險(xiǎn)面前人與人、人與動(dòng)物互助的主題,展現(xiàn)了人性的溫暖和勇敢。主旨升華句"Inthefaceofdanger,ahelpinghandandaloyalcompanioncanbethelightthatguidesusbackfromthebrink."(在危險(xiǎn)面前,援助之手和忠誠(chéng)的伙伴可以成為將我們從邊緣拉回的光。)"Therescueontheicyrivershowsthatcourageandkindnesscanbreakthroughtheiceoffearandindifference."(冰河上的救援表明,勇氣和善良可以打破恐懼和冷漠的堅(jiān)冰。)"Whendisasterstrikes,thebondbetweenstrangersandtheloveofourfurryfriendscancreatemiraclesonthefrozenwaters."(當(dāng)災(zāi)難來(lái)襲時(shí),陌生人之間的情誼和我們毛茸茸朋友的愛可以在結(jié)冰的水面上創(chuàng)造奇跡。)"Thisincidentbytheriverisareminderthateverylifeisprecious,andouractionsintimesofcrisisdefineourhumanity."(河邊的這一事件提醒我們,每一個(gè)生命都是寶貴的,我們?cè)谖C(jī)時(shí)刻的行動(dòng)定義了我們的人性。)"Theheroicdeedsontheriverprovethateveninthecoldestoftimes,thewarmthofthehumanheartandtheloyaltyofananimalcansavelives."(河上的英勇事跡證明,即使在最寒冷的時(shí)候,人心的溫暖和動(dòng)物的忠誠(chéng)也能拯救生命。)寫作示范范文一Adamandhisdogmanagedtoreachthecrack.Adam'seyeswerefixedonSamaraasheslidcloser.RockyusedhisstrongbodytostabilizeAdam.AdamfinallygotholdofSamara'shand.Withahugeeffort,hepulledherontotheice.Samarawascrying,herbodyshakingfromthecold.Adamhuggedhertightly,tryingtotransferhiswarmth.
Luckily,theambulancearrivedintimetorushSamaratohospital.Themedicalteamquicklytookover.Theywrappedherinwarmblanketsandstartedmedicalprocedures.Krymzenandhermomarrived,theirfacesfilledwithworryandgratitude.Thankstoeveryone'sefforts,Samaragraduallyrecovered.范文二Adamandhisdogmanagedtoreachthecrack.Adamlayontheice,ignoringthecoldseepingthroughhisclothes.Hereachedoutasfarashecould.Rockybarkedloudly,givinghimstrength.AdamgraspedSamara'swristandpulledherup.Shewashalf-conscious,herclothessoaked.Adamheldher,whisperingwordsofcomfort.
Luckily,theambulancearrivedintimetorushSamaratohospital.Theparamedicswereefficient.TheycheckedSamara'svitalsignsandrushedherinside.Atthehospital,thefamilyreunited.TheythankedAdamandKelseyfromthebottomoftheirhearts.Theeventmadethemcherishlifemore.范文三Adamandhisdogmanagedtoreachthecrack.Adammovedslowly,hismindfocusedonsavingSamara.Rockystayedbesidehim,providingsupport.AdamgotSamara'sarmandpulledhertowardshim.Itwasastruggle,buthedidn'tgiveup.WhenSamarawasoutofthewater,Adamrubbedherarmstogetherbloodflowing.
Luckily,theambulancearrivedintimetorushSamaratohospital.Thedoctorsandnursesworkedquickly.TheywarmedSamaraupandtreatedherforpossibleinjuries.Krymzen'sfamilywassorelieved.Theyrealizedtheimportanceofsafetyandthepowerofkindnessduringthisharrowingexperience.參考答案
Adamandhisdogmanagedtoreachthecrack.Atthismoment,ifthegirlhadalsoslippedintothecrackduetopullingtheother,thethingwouldhavebeenevenworse.
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