續(xù)寫(xiě)技巧公開(kāi)課動(dòng)作鏈（給爺爺?shù)亩Y物）學(xué)案

樹(shù)人中學(xué)2022-2023學(xué)年第一學(xué)期高二英語(yǔ)練習(xí)（31）續(xù)寫(xiě)——?jiǎng)幼麈溍鑼?xiě)班級(jí)：高二全段編制人：楊旭份數(shù)：450日期：2022.11.15讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中，成功的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)，可以交代人物的身份、地位，可以反映人物心理活動(dòng)的進(jìn)程，可以表現(xiàn)人物的性格特征。相反，空洞、籠統(tǒng)的描寫(xiě)會(huì)使內(nèi)容缺乏生動(dòng)性，使人物形象不豐滿。人物的動(dòng)作或簡(jiǎn)單，或復(fù)雜，都不是一下子就能完成的，細(xì)心觀察都能捕捉到最能體現(xiàn)人物特征的慢鏡頭。因此，在描寫(xiě)動(dòng)作時(shí)，同學(xué)們要學(xué)會(huì)細(xì)化動(dòng)作，把動(dòng)作過(guò)程分解成一連串細(xì)微的動(dòng)作，形成動(dòng)作鏈，寫(xiě)出動(dòng)作的連貫性，這樣才能使描寫(xiě)具有畫(huà)面感，使人物更立體。讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)作文中動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)沒(méi)有頭緒？不知道如何下手？不如拆解動(dòng)作，構(gòu)造動(dòng)作鏈，讓你的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)既豐富又精彩！何為構(gòu)造動(dòng)作鏈？我們先看一句高考樣題范文。He

stopped

thetaxi,

jumped

inwiththesuitcaseand

told

thedriver,“Gotothepolicestation,please.”這句話的意思是：他攔下了車(chē)，拿著箱子跳進(jìn)了車(chē)?yán)铮缓髮?duì)司機(jī)說(shuō)，“請(qǐng)到警察局去?！逼鋵?shí)，這句話只是描寫(xiě)了“上車(chē)”的動(dòng)作，然而通過(guò)拆解，細(xì)致地展現(xiàn)了一個(gè)動(dòng)作下的組成部分。其本質(zhì)是避免簡(jiǎn)單粗暴的使用一個(gè)動(dòng)詞概括整個(gè)動(dòng)作，而是用2-3個(gè)動(dòng)詞組合進(jìn)行描述。用一個(gè)公式進(jìn)行總結(jié)以上例句，如下:上車(chē)=攔車(chē)+上車(chē)+告訴目的地再比如2017年高考真題中的一個(gè)優(yōu)秀范文句子。

Shewould

getoff

thecarexcitedly,

laughing

and

dancing

around.這句話的意思是：她會(huì)興奮地下車(chē)，又笑又跳。這句講的是一個(gè)比較粗線條的媽媽?zhuān)瑒?dòng)作描寫(xiě)完整地描述了這位媽媽下車(chē)時(shí)及下車(chē)后的表現(xiàn)，即：下車(chē)=下車(chē)+笑+跳

這個(gè)訓(xùn)練過(guò)程，需要我們仔細(xì)觀察，并進(jìn)行合理聯(lián)想，并多多積累動(dòng)詞。同時(shí)，這也為我們提供了兩種構(gòu)造動(dòng)作鏈條的句式：1.A,BandC（連詞連接幾個(gè)動(dòng)詞）2.使用非謂語(yǔ)（V-ing,havingdone,done）Part1動(dòng)作三連結(jié)構(gòu)根據(jù)所給動(dòng)作鏈用合適地單詞形式完成句子擴(kuò)寫(xiě)（每空一詞）（一）（A,BandC并列結(jié)構(gòu)）例1：“男孩們湖中嬉戲”湖里嬉戲=

沖向湖邊(rush)

+

脫掉衣服(takeoff)

+

跳入水中Theboysplayedhappilyinthelake=Theboys__________excitedlytothelake,_________theirclothesand______intothewater.例2：“她抱住兒子”她抱住兒子=

沖向前(dash)

+

蹲下(kneel-knelt)

+

一把抱住Shehuggedherson=She_________forward,________downandgatheredhersonintoher________.例3：“這個(gè)歌手唱歌”歌手唱歌=

掃視觀眾(glance)+

深吸一口氣+開(kāi)始演唱Thesingersangasong=Thesinger_________attheaudience,_______adeep_______and______tosing.(二）非謂語(yǔ)結(jié)構(gòu)(A，B-ing+C-ing/HavingdoneA,...B/A+ed,B..)例1：“老人靜坐”老人靜坐=坐在夕陽(yáng)下+

看報(bào)紙(ing)+

聽(tīng)廣播(ing)Theoldmansatsilently.=Theoldman________underthesunset,________anewspaperand________totheradio.例2:他沒(méi)有買(mǎi)到票=

排了三小時(shí)隊(duì)(havingdone,queue)+

被告知票賣(mài)完了(soldout)Hedidn’tbuytheticket=Having___________forthreehours,he_____________thatthetickethadbeen____________________.例3:孩子們哭了=被感動(dòng)+哭了孩子們哭了=被這個(gè)故事深深感動(dòng)了，于是開(kāi)始(setout)哭了(weep)起來(lái),并用手擦眼淚（wipe)。Childrenweremovedtotears=Deeply________bythestory,thechildren__________out________________,________theirtearswiththeirlittlehands.Part3高考真題中的動(dòng)作鏈（根據(jù)提示，完成句子）2016.10浙江卷1.她吃了一些漿果(berry)，然后沿著小溪(stream)走著，希望能找到一個(gè)合適的地方來(lái)引導(dǎo)直升機(jī)(helicopter)。She__________someberriesandthen____________________thestream,__________tofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.2017.6浙江卷2.看到汽車(chē)消失了，麥克和他的朋友們騎上了自行車(chē)，繼續(xù)前往阿拉斯加。__________thecardisappear,Macandhisfriends__________(get)onthebicyclesand__________headingforAlaska.3.他們跳下自行車(chē)，拿出隨身攜帶的刀(knife)，一寸一寸地(inchbyinch)走近狼。They__________(jump)offtheirbicycles,__________(take)outtheknivesthey__________(take)withand__________thewolfinchbyinch.2018.6浙江卷4（根據(jù)括號(hào)提示，擴(kuò)寫(xiě)成動(dòng)作鏈句子）4我和爸爸向群山走去（hat,horse，head)。MydadandI___________________________________________________________________2020.1浙江卷（自己編寫(xiě)含動(dòng)作鏈地句子）5.他擁抱著父母He_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________.讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)實(shí)踐閱讀下面短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě),使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。AGIFTFORGRANDPASummervacationwascoming.JackandhisbrotherBerlinwerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofvisitingtheirgrandparentsagain.Thebigdaycameatlast.Afterthehappyfamilygotready,theysetoutforthegrandparents'eagerly.Ontheway,thebrotherswereexcitedlytalkingaboutthefuntheyhadwithgrandparents.Alittlebluehousewithatallwhitechimneyfinallyappeared.BehindthepropertywastheforestcarryingtheirgoodmemorieswithGrandpa.Theyarrivedatthedriveway,attheendofwhichGrandmawaswaitingforthemjoyfully.JackandBerlineachgaveGrandmaabighugandthenswepttothelivingroom,shoutingexcitedly“Grandpa,weareback!”Seeinghisgrandsons,Grandpawaswildwithjoyandtriedtogetupwithallhisstrengthfromthechairbutinvain.Ahelplessexpressionflashedonhisface.Grandmaexplainedthathishealthwasdecliningrapidlyandmaybecouldn'tstanduponhisownforever.ButGrandpadeclaredstubbornly(倔強(qiáng)地),“Ican!”Certainly,hewasstuckinhisboyishway.Mumandgrandparentswerehappytomeetagainafteralongtime.Theysattogetherandchattedaboutwhathappenedrecently.Thebrothersweresoonboredwithadultconversation,wentoutandwanderedintotheforest.Talltreesstretcheduptotheheavenswithlargebranchescrossingeachother,whileyoungonesrosestraightlikesoldiers.Grandpawasonceagreatexplorerfullofwisdom.Hecouldtellwherethebirdscamefromonlybytheircallsandsongs.Thetrees,birds,lizards,lotsofbugs...HowmanymerrymomentstheyspentwithGrandpainthekingdom!ButnowGrandpacouldn'tgetup.Thismadethemworried.“We'dthinkoutawaytocheerhimup.”Jacksaid.“Grandpaisabirdlover,andwecancatchhimabird.”Berlinsuggested.“Buthehatesbirdsbeingcaged!”Jackshookhishead.ThenabrightideacametoJack'smind.“Whynotmakeacane(拐杖)outofayoungtree!”P(pán)ara1：Berlinthoughtitwasagoodidea.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2：JackandBerlinhandedthecanetoGrandpa.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Activity1:ReadforThemeandsixelementsThemeLovefromkidsWhen__________________________________Where①：___________________________②：______________________________________Who___________________________________________________WhatJackandBerlinwantedtomakea_________forGrandpaWhy____________________How__________________________________________________________________________Activity2:ReadforPlotsandEmotions情節(jié)&情感_________________________________but__________________but_____________________Grandsonsthoughtoutawayto______Grandpa_______--makea______outofayoungtree.Grandsons_____outintothe______and_________________________________________but__________________but_____________________Grandsonsthoughtoutawayto______Grandpa_______--makea______outofayoungtree.Grandsons_____outintothe______and________merrymomentswithGrandpa.Berlinthoughtitwasagoodidea.JackandBerlinhandedthecanetoGrandpa.Grandpa____to_______but_________.developmentTheGrandsons__________GrandpainSummervacation.endclimaxbeginningActivity3:ReadforCharacterAnalysis人物性格分析grandpagrandsonsActivity4:RaisingthequestionsThenabrightideacametoJack'smind.“Whynotmakeacane(拐杖)outofayoungtree!”P(pán)ara1：Berlinthoughtitwasagoodidea.寫(xiě)作情節(jié)構(gòu)思：Howdidtheycarryoutthegoodidea?Whatdidtheydonext?Howdidtheyfeelafterthat?Para2：JackandBerlinhandedthecanetoGrandpa.寫(xiě)作情節(jié)構(gòu)思：（用5wh+how提問(wèn)構(gòu)思情）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Activity5:WritingMaterials1.當(dāng)他們選擇了一棵中等大小的小樹(shù)時(shí)，他們就把它砍倒，然后用刀砍掉樹(shù)枝和皮。Themomentthey______ayoungtreeofmoderatesize,they____________andthen___________________withaknife.2.為了讓把手感覺(jué)舒適，他們用軟布包了起來(lái)。Tomakethehandlefeelcomfortable,they____________________aroundit.3.看著那根花哨的拐杖，爺爺高興極了，臉上的笑容像鉆石一樣閃閃發(fā)光。他滿懷深情地感謝孫子們的禮物。Staringatthefancycane,Grandpawassohappy________________________________________.Hethankedhisgrandsonsforthewonderfulgift_____________.Para1：Berlinthoughtitwasagoodidea.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2：JackandBerlinhandedthecanetoGrandpa.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Theboys

rushed

excitedlytothelake,

tookoff

the