高考英語(yǔ)復(fù)習(xí)：如何使續(xù)寫(xiě)中的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)富有“電影鏡頭感”

導(dǎo)學(xué)案如何使續(xù)寫(xiě)中的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)富有“電影鏡頭感”

語(yǔ)言表達(dá)“空乏平淡”是同學(xué)們?cè)谧x后續(xù)寫(xiě)中存在的典型問(wèn)題，究其原因就是：不會(huì)根據(jù)文

章主題和情節(jié)發(fā)展進(jìn)行精彩生動(dòng)的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)是其中主要原因之一。今天，學(xué)會(huì)5招，提升讀

后續(xù)寫(xiě)技巧一一讓續(xù)寫(xiě)中的人物變得“靈動(dòng)”起來(lái)！

學(xué)習(xí)目標(biāo)：

1.Learnwaystodescribevividlyincontinuationwriting.

2.Promotewritingskillsthroughpractice.

StepI：輸入——夯實(shí)基礎(chǔ)

L“看”

a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思

①catchaglimpseof

②takeaquicklook

③lookinto___________________

④lookup_____________________

⑤gazeat______________________

@stareat_____________________

⑦glareat_____________________

⑧peepat______________________

⑨glimpse/glanceat

⑩gapeat_____________________

11blinkat____________________

12one'seyesfallonsomeplace___

13lookatsbstraightintheeye

14one'seyesfix/fdcus/concentrateon_

15one'seyesscan

b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)

(1)偷瞄——眼________________________

(2)瞥見(jiàn)；不注意看到

(3)向里看，調(diào)查_(kāi)____________________

(4)抬起頭向上看_____________________

(5)凝視_____________________________

(6)盯住_____________________________

(7)怒目而視_________________________

(8)偷窺______________________________

(9)瞥一眼____________________________

(10)吃驚地看_________________________

(11)朝...眨眼__________________________

(12)某人的目光落在___________________

(13)直視某人的眼睛___________________

(14)某人的目光緊盯著

(15)某人的眼睛掃視___________________

2.“走”的精彩描寫(xiě)

a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思

①tiptoe_________________________

②stride_________________________

③Sneak_________________________

(4)limp__________________________

⑤stumble_______________________

@stagger________________________

⑦slipintotheroom

⑧stormoutofthedoor

(9)dashback______________________

⑩rush/hurrytothestation

11pacerestlessly__________________

12wanderaimlessly

b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)

(1)躡手躡腳_________________________

(2)大步走_(dá)_________________________

(3)鬼鬼祟祟地走_(dá)__________________

(4)癇著走_(dá)__________________________

(5)跌跌撞撞地走_(dá)___________________

(6)蹣跚_____________________________

(7)溜進(jìn)房間_________________________

(8)沖出房門(mén)__________________________

(9)沖回_____________________________

(10)沖到車(chē)站__________________________

(11)不安地走動(dòng)________________________

(12)無(wú)目的地漫步______________________

3.“手”的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)

a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思

①graspatsth_______________________________

②seizesth(fromsb)

③drag_______________________________________

④reachforone'shand

⑤raiseone'shands

⑥slidone'shandsinto

(7)catch/holdofone'sarm

(8)cupone'shandover

⑨withone'sheadinone'shands一

⑩foldone,sarms

11catch/grabone'sarm

12pullsb.intoone*sarms

b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)

(1)盡力抓住某物_____________________

(2)(常指通過(guò)暴力突然)奪取

(3)拖拽；吃力地往前拉

(4)伸手抓住某人_____________________

(5)舉手_____________________________

(6)將手插進(jìn)......___________________

(7)抓住某人的手臂

(8)捂住......________________________

(9)雙手抱著頭......

(10)某人雙臂交叉___________________

(11)抓住某人的胳膊

(12)拉某人進(jìn)懷___________________

StepII：學(xué)會(huì)“5招”使續(xù)寫(xiě)“靈動(dòng)”——讓你的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)富有“電影鏡頭感”

Suddenly,Amovingdot(點(diǎn))onthehorizonwasspotted.Exhaustedbuthopeful,Jane

jumpedtoherfeettocatchaclearsightofit."Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangup

anddashedtothecenterofanopenarea,wavingheryellowblousedesperatelyandyelling

atthehelicopterThistimeshewasspotted,whichmadeherfeelmore

delighted.Eyesbrimmingwithtears,JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTom

,huggingtightlyinhisarms,“pleaseneverleavemealone!"

第1招：三聯(lián)動(dòng)——連續(xù)使用三個(gè)動(dòng)詞并列做謂語(yǔ)

例如：(上文中紅色句子)

(1)"Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangupanddashedtothecenterof...…

(2)JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTom......

第2招：非謂動(dòng)——非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞與主句的謂語(yǔ)搭配使用

例如：(上文中藍(lán)色句子)

(1)"Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangupanddashedtothecenterofanopenarea,

wavingheryellowblousedesperatelyandyellingatthehelicopterwithexcitement.

(2)Eyesbrimmincwithtears,JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTomlikea

flyingarrow,huR-ingtightlyinhisarms,“pleaseneverleavemealone!H

第3招：副助動(dòng)——句子前后或動(dòng)詞前后使用恰當(dāng)?shù)母痹~增強(qiáng)語(yǔ)效

例如：

(1)Suddenly,Amovingdot(點(diǎn))onthehorizonwasspotted.

(2)....wavingheryellowblousedesperately..…

第4招：介賓動(dòng)——介詞短語(yǔ)修飾限定，尤其是with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)

例如：

(1)JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTomlikeaflyinqarrow....

(2)Withbutterfliesinhisstomach,hewalkedtowardstheentrance.

第5招：無(wú)主動(dòng)——無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)往往是時(shí)間或地點(diǎn)名詞后接see或witness等動(dòng)詞

例如：

Thelittleriverandwoodsinmyhometownwitnessedmygrowth.

StepIII：Practicemakesperfect!

句子訓(xùn)練：

1.Helefthistent.

他一頭霧水地離開(kāi)他的帳篷

2.Hearingthathehadbeensaved,we.

聽(tīng)說(shuō)他得救了，我們松了口氣。

3.Helookedatme.

他以可怕的眼神看著我。

4.Theyleftthecave.

他們驚慌地離開(kāi)了那個(gè)山洞。

5.Shestaredatthestranger.

她驚愕地盯著那陌生人。

6.Atthesightofthesnake,Jack.

一看到那條蛇，杰克跳起來(lái)、抓起一塊石頭就扔過(guò)去。

7.,thepeopleonboardgotpanicked,.

飛機(jī)急劇下降，機(jī)上的人們開(kāi)始恐慌，全都尖叫起來(lái)。

8.Atlast,wereturnedtoourcamp,.

我們終于回到了營(yíng)地，又渴又餓筋疲力盡。

9.,fearoverwhelmedme,.

夜幕降臨，我感到極度害怕，使我渾身哆嗦。

10.,weran.

惡狼在后面緊追，我們拼命地逃跑。

StepIV：語(yǔ)篇輸出——學(xué)以致用

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

（2021?江蘇如皋第二次適應(yīng)性考試）Onedarknightduringthesummerholidays,Iwalked

overtomyfriendJeremy*shousetostayover.Weweregoingtohaveamoviemarathonofour

favoritesci-fiadventurefilmseriesandstayuplatewithsomesnacksanddrinks.Ihadnotbeento

hishousebeforebecausehehadonlyrecentlymoved,soIaskedhimtotextmeoverhisnew

address:64CherryTreeRoad.

Jeremy*snewstreetwasanicepartoftown,linedwithtalltreesandmostofthehouseshada

hedgeorfenceatthefront.Someofthehouseshadtheirnumbersonthegate,someonthehouse,

andsomedidn'tseemtohaveanumberatall.IthadstartedtocloudoverasIleftmyhouse,and

asIturned

ontohisroad,itbegantorain.Astheraingotheavier,Irushedtofindnumbersixty-four

andeventuallyfoundit...orsoIthought.Iwalkedpastnumber62,soassumeditwasthenext

one,whichappearedtohavenonumber.Yousee,usuallytheoddnumbersareononesideofthe

street,theevennumbersontheother.

Iwalkedquicklyupthedrivewaytothefrontdoor.Itwasverydarktooandtherewereno

lightsoninsidethehouse,whichdidseemstrange.However,Iwasgettingdrenched（濕透的）and

wantedtogetinside!Irangthebell,butnobodycame,soIrangandknockedagain.ThenI

noticedtherewashousenumberafterall.Aridiculoussmallonethatsaid63.Therewasasudden

thud（口平的——聲）insidetheapparentlyemptyhouse,andamomentlaterthefrontdooropened

violently.

Ahooded（戴兜帽的）manwithabeardandblueglasseshurriedpastmeandranintothe

street.Therewasashoutfrominside:"Waitforme,Rob!”Anothermanrushedout,buthe

droppedwhathewascarryingandtrippedonthedoorstep.Theothermanshoutedfromtheroad

“Cmon,Kev!”hepickedhimselfupandlookedatmebeforeracingafterhisfriend.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。

Ilookedatwhatthesecondmanhaddropped;itwasjewellery.

“Youwerebravefortryingstopthem,“saidtheofficer.

導(dǎo)學(xué)案一如何使續(xù)寫(xiě)中的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)富有“電影鏡頭感”答案

StepI：輸入---夯實(shí)基礎(chǔ)

4.“看”

a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思

①偷瞄一眼

②瞥見(jiàn)；不注意看到

③向里看，調(diào)查

④抬起頭向上看

⑤凝視

⑥盯住

⑦怒目而視

⑧偷窺

⑨瞥一眼

⑩吃驚地看

11朝…眨眼

12某人的目光落在..

13直視某人的眼睛

14某人的目光緊盯著……

15某人的眼睛掃視......

b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)

(1)catchaglimpseof

(2)takeaquicklook

(3)lookinto

⑷lookup

(5)gazeat

(6)stareat

(7)glareat

(8)peepat

(9)glimpse/glanceat

(10)gapeat

(11)blinkat

(12)one'seyesfallonsomeplace

(13)lookatsbstraightintheeye

(14)one'seyesfix/focus/concentrateon

(15)one'seyesscan

5.“跑、走”

a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思

①躡手躡腳

②大步走

③鬼鬼祟祟地走

④癇著走

⑤跌跌撞撞地走

⑥蹣跚

⑦溜進(jìn)房間

⑧沖出房門(mén)

⑨沖回

⑩沖到車(chē)站

?不安地走動(dòng)

?無(wú)目的地漫步

b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)

(1)tiptoe

(2)stride

(3)sneak

(4)limp

(5)stumble

(6)stagger

(7)slipintotheroom

(8)stormoutofthedoor

(9)dashback

(10)rush/hurrytothestation

(11)pacerestlessly

(12)wanderaimlessly

6.“手”的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)

a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思

①盡力抓住某物

②(常指通過(guò)暴力突然)奪取

③拖拽；吃力地往前拉

④伸手抓住某人

⑤舉手

⑥將手插進(jìn)……

⑦抓住某人的手臂

⑧捂住……

⑨雙手抱著頭……

⑩某人雙臂交叉

11抓住某人的胳膊

12拉某人進(jìn)懷

b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)

(1)graspatsth

(2)seizesth(fromsb)

⑶drag

(4)reachforone?shand

(5)raiseone?shands

(6)slidone'shandsinto

(7)catch/holdofone?sarm

(8)cupone'shandover

(9)withone,sheadinone?shands

(10)foldone'sarms

(11)catch/grabone,sarm

(12)pullsb.intoone?sarms

StepHI,句子訓(xùn)練:

1.Helefthistentinconfusion/confused.

他一頭霧水地離開(kāi)他的帳篷

2.Hearingthathehadbeensaved,wesi-hedin/withrelief.

聽(tīng)說(shuō)他得救了，我們松了口氣。

3.Helookedatmewithfrighteningnves.

他以可怕的眼神看著我。

4.Theyleftthecaveinapanic/,panicked,

他們驚慌地離開(kāi)了那個(gè)山洞。

5.Shestaredinastonishmentatthestranger.

她驚愕地盯著那陌生人。

6.Atthesightofthesnake,Jackjumpedtohisfeet,graspedastoneandthrewatit.

一看到那條蛇，杰克跳起來(lái)、抓起一塊石頭就扔過(guò)去。

7.Withtheplanefallingrapidlv,thepeopleonboardgotpanicked,allscreaming.

飛機(jī)急劇下降，機(jī)上的人們開(kāi)始恐慌，全都尖叫起來(lái)。

8.Atlast,wereturnedtoourcamp,hungry,thirstyandexhausted.

我們終于回到了營(yíng)地，又渴又餓筋疲力盡。

9Nightsettingin,fearoverwhelmedme,causingme