高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)篇練習(xí)：困境中的溫暖-舊攪拌器帶來(lái)的驚喜+課件

高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)篇練習(xí)：困境中的溫暖——舊攪拌器帶來(lái)的驚喜1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫(xiě)原文We’djustdownsizedourhome.AsgratefulasIwastohavearoofoverourheads,Icouldn’thelpbutfeelblue.Ouroldhousewasbeautifulandhuge.Ourcurrenthome?Halfthesizeandcrowded.We’dhadtogiveawayorthrowawayalotofourstuff.Buttherewerestillboxeseverywhere,fromthefamilyroomtothegarage(車(chē)庫(kù)).Thedayafterthemove,whilethekidswereinschool,Itackledmoreboxes.Bytheafternoon,I’dmaderealprogress.Thefurniturewasunpacked.Thephotoswerehangingonthewalls.Butitjustdidn’tfeellikehome.4續(xù)寫(xiě)原文MaybeIcouldchangethat.IcheckedthekitchencupboardandsawthatIhadenoughingredientstobakechocolatechipcookies.JustlikemygrandmausedtomakewheneverIneededcheeringup.Wouldn’tthatbeanicesurpriseforthekids?Whentheygothomefromschool,there’dbefreshcookieswaitingforthemonthekitchencounter.Iputonmyapron(圍裙),measuredoutthebrownsugarandbutterandgottowork.Onebyone,Iaddedeggstothemixer(攪拌機(jī)).POP!Whatintheworld?Themixerstoppedworking.Mymixerwasbroken.“Really?!”Ifeltlikescreaming.Itwasjustakitchendevice,butitfeltlikethelaststraw.WhatmoredidIhavetogiveup?5續(xù)寫(xiě)原文Whatwouldmygrandmado?She’dlivedthroughtheGreatDepressionandhadlosteverything.Eveninthefaceofhardship,she’dkeptherfamilytogether.Sheusedwhatevershehadtogetby.Grandmawouldn’tquit.She’dfindanotherway.Inspired,Irantothegarageandsearchedtheremainingboxes.Foundit!IpulledoutGrandma’soldwhitemixer.Theoneshe’dpassedontome.She’dpurchaseditbackinthe50’sanditwasancient.I’dmarkedtheboxitwasinas“easilybroken”,butthemovershadn’tpaidattention.They’ddroppeditanyway.6段首句Paragraph1:Iwonderedifitstillworked.Paragraph2:Twohourslater,thekidsopenedthedoorandsaid,“Mmmm,cookies!”7Part2題目分析8續(xù)寫(xiě)原文分析9本文講述了作者搬家后，新住所又小又?jǐn)D，作者試圖通過(guò)烤巧克力餅干讓家更溫馨。然而，新攪拌機(jī)損壞，關(guān)鍵時(shí)刻作者想起奶奶，找到了奶奶傳下來(lái)的舊攪拌機(jī)。故事圍繞家庭搬遷的困境、營(yíng)造家的溫暖的努力以及舊攪拌機(jī)的出現(xiàn)展開(kāi)，為續(xù)寫(xiě)留下了關(guān)于舊攪拌機(jī)能否使用、餅干能否成功制作以及孩子們反應(yīng)的懸念。點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段段首，續(xù)寫(xiě)銜接第二段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)10續(xù)寫(xiě)思路分析Paragraph1:Iwonderedifitstillworked.分析：此段承接上文找到舊攪拌機(jī)，應(yīng)著重描述作者嘗試使用它時(shí)的心情，如既希望它能正常工作，又擔(dān)心它已損壞。詳細(xì)描寫(xiě)舊攪拌機(jī)啟動(dòng)的過(guò)程，比如插上電源后的反應(yīng)、攪拌時(shí)的聲音等。同時(shí)，可回憶奶奶使用這臺(tái)攪拌機(jī)的場(chǎng)景，體現(xiàn)這臺(tái)舊攪拌機(jī)對(duì)作者的特殊意義，展現(xiàn)作者對(duì)奶奶的懷念和對(duì)家的情感寄托。11續(xù)寫(xiě)思路分析Paragraph2:Twohourslater,thekidsopenedthedoorandsaid,“Mmmm,cookies!”分析：這一段要突出孩子們看到餅干時(shí)的驚喜反應(yīng)，描述他們的表情、動(dòng)作和言語(yǔ)，展現(xiàn)出孩子們的快樂(lè)。接著描寫(xiě)一家人分享餅干的溫馨場(chǎng)景，體現(xiàn)家庭的溫暖氛圍。最后，通過(guò)作者的內(nèi)心感受，表達(dá)出在這個(gè)看似困難的時(shí)刻，小小的餅干卻帶來(lái)大大的幸福，升華主題，強(qiáng)調(diào)家人之間的愛(ài)和家的真正意義。12Part3范文呈現(xiàn)13范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Iwonderedifitstillworked.Ipluggeditinwithabitofhesitation.Tomydelight,theoldmixerstartedtowork,thoughitmadeastrangenoise.Iaddedtheingredientscarefully.Asthemixerblendedthem,Ithoughtofhowmygrandmaalwaysmadedeliciouscookieswithit.Itwasn'tasfastasmynewmixer,butitwasworking.IwasgladIcouldstillmakecookiesforthekids.Paragraph2:Twohourslater,thekidsopenedthedoorandsaid,“Mmmm,cookies!”Theireyeslitupwhentheysawthecookiesonthecounter.Theyrushedoverandtookabite.“Mom,thesearegreat!”theysaid.Wesatatthetable,eatingcookiesandchatting.Ifelthappytoseethemenjoyingthecookies.Thissmallthingmadeournewhousefeelmorelikehome.14范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Iwonderedifitstillworked.Withamixofhopeandnervousness,Ipluggedintheoldmixer.Ithummedtolife,abitslowlybutsteadily.Icarefullyaddedtheremainingingredients,watchingasthemixerdiditsjob.IrememberedthetimeswhenGrandmamadecookiesformewiththisverymixer.Thosememoriesmademefeelwarminside.Paragraph2:Twohourslater,thekidsopenedthedoorandsaid,“Mmmm,cookies!”Theywerereallyexcited.Theyeachtookabigbiteandsmiled.Wesharedthecookiesandlaughedtogether.Thesmellofcookiesfilledthehouse.Itmadeournew,smallhomefeelcozyandfulloflove.15升級(jí)版范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Iwonderedifitstillworked.Withablendoftrepidationandanticipation,Iinsertedtheplugintothesocket.Tomypleasantsurprise,theagedmixerroaredtolife,emittingaslightlygratingyetreassuringhum.Imeticulouslymeasuredandaddedtheingredients,observingintentlyasthebeaterschurnedthroughthebatter.MemoriesofGrandma,herkindfaceilluminatedbythewarmglowofthekitchenlightasshedeftlyusedthisverymixer,floodedmymind.Thosecherishedmomentsofchildhoodcomfortandlovewererekindled,andIfeltadeepsenseofconnectiontoher.Despiteitsage,themixerwasperformingitstaskadmirably,andIwasfilledwithgratitudeforthispieceoffamilyhistory.Paragraph2:Twohourslater,thekidsopenedthedoorandsaid,“Mmmm,cookies!”Theireyeswidenedwithdelight,andtheirfaceslituplikeChristmastrees.Theydashedtowardsthekitchencounter,theirfootstepsechoingthroughthehouse.“Mom,theselookamazing!”exclaimedoneofthem.Wegatheredaroundthetable,sharingthecookiesandstories.Laughterfilledtheair,andthesweetaromaofthefreshlybakedcookiespermeatedeverycornerofournewhome.Inthatmoment,Irealizedthathomewasn'tjustaboutthesizeofthehouseortheamountofstuffwehad.Itwasabouttheloveandwarmthweshared,andthesesimplecookieshadthepowertotransformournewdwellingintoaplacefilledwithjoyandbelonging.16升級(jí)版范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Iwonderedifitstillworked.Withbatedbreathandaflutterofexcitementinmychest,IgingerlypluggedinGrandma'soldwhitemixer.Foraheart-stoppingmoment,nothinghappened,andmyspiritssank.Butthen,withahesitantwhir,itsprangintoaction.Thesounditmadewasasymphonyofnostalgia,transportingmebacktothedaysofmychildhoodspentinGrandma'scozykitchen.Iaddedtheingredientswithanewfoundsenseofpurpose,myhandssteadyasIwatchedthemixerblendthemtogether.EachrotationofthebeatersseemedtostirupnotjustthebatterbutalsoafloodofpreciousmemoriesofGrandma'sgentleguidanceandthelovethatpermeatedhereveryaction.Thismixer,thougholdandbattered,wasalinktoapastfilledwithwarmthandsecurity.Paragraph2:Twohourslater,thekidsopenedthedoorandsaid,“Mmmm,cookies!”Theirvoiceswerefilledwithunbridledenthusiasm,andtheirfaceswerealightwithanticipation.Theypracticallyleapedtowardsthekitchen,drawnbytheirresistibl