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浙江1月：人與自我（與隊(duì)友互助完成任務(wù)）浙江6月：人與社會(huì)（參加社區(qū)服務(wù)）一、命題特點(diǎn)和考查重點(diǎn)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)是高考改革后的新寫(xiě)作題型。其具體內(nèi)容為：提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語(yǔ)言材料，要求學(xué)生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。該題型多以故事類文章或者夾敘夾議類文章為主，涉及的話題有關(guān)“人與自我”、“人與社會(huì)”和“人與自然”等。故事的邏輯性強(qiáng)，結(jié)構(gòu)通常有：順敘（按時(shí)間順序敘述）、倒敘（先寫(xiě)結(jié)果，后寫(xiě)事件經(jīng)過(guò)）和合敘（順敘和倒敘結(jié)合）。故事情節(jié)曲折，很多文本都圍繞“沖突、困境、變化”等展開(kāi)。語(yǔ)言以“記敘”和“描寫(xiě)”為主，輔以適當(dāng)?shù)摹白h（評(píng)）論”。讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)主要考查學(xué)生的閱讀理解能力和書(shū)面表達(dá)能力。評(píng)分時(shí)，主要從四個(gè)方面考慮：與所給短文及段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)的銜接程度；內(nèi)容的豐富性和合理性；使用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性；上下文的連貫性。其中，前兩個(gè)方面?zhèn)戎乜疾閷W(xué)生“讀懂了”沒(méi)有；后兩個(gè)方面重點(diǎn)檢測(cè)學(xué)生“寫(xiě)好了”沒(méi)有。讀是寫(xiě)的基礎(chǔ)，要讀出文章的主旨大意、主要情節(jié)和故事的前因后果；寫(xiě)是讀的延續(xù)，要通過(guò)想象把自身帶入到角色的世界，以“角色視角”描寫(xiě)發(fā)生的故事，突出續(xù)寫(xiě)部分與前文的邏輯銜接和連貫。（二）讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)情節(jié)的設(shè)計(jì)和表達(dá)1.如何設(shè)計(jì)情節(jié)？（1）了解敘事結(jié)構(gòu)，理清情節(jié)走向語(yǔ)篇類型決定語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)。到目前為止，高考試卷中的讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)均為記敘文。因此，學(xué)生要對(duì)記敘文的基本語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)有所了解，這樣才能快速理清情節(jié)走向，明確寫(xiě)作方向和要點(diǎn)，為完成“情節(jié)合理、連貫性強(qiáng)、融合度高”的續(xù)文打下基礎(chǔ)。分析近幾年的高考讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)真題可以發(fā)現(xiàn)，從故事類型來(lái)看，大致可分為兩類：一類凸顯沖突和矛盾，如：妻子Jane和丈夫Tom爭(zhēng)吵迷路（2016浙江卷）；夫妻遭遇北極熊（2020浙江卷）；母親節(jié)的驚喜禮物（2021新高考I卷）；殘疾男孩David參加越野賽（2022新高考I卷）。另一類則突顯個(gè)人經(jīng)歷，如：在流動(dòng)廚房做義工（2022浙江卷）；“我”和蜂鳥(niǎo)的故事（2023浙江卷）；“我”參加寫(xiě)作大賽的經(jīng)歷（2023新課標(biāo)I卷）。這兩類故事的敘事結(jié)構(gòu)基本符合以下兩種模式：StoryMountain（故事山）敘事模式：包括“介紹—發(fā)展—沖突—解決—結(jié)尾”幾個(gè)部分。該模式比較適合于凸顯沖突和矛盾類的純故事類語(yǔ)篇。此類故事情節(jié)起伏、曲折，有戲劇性的效果。續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容基本上為“沖突—解決—結(jié)尾”部分，或在前文中沖突（矛盾）已現(xiàn)，續(xù)寫(xiě)重點(diǎn)在“激化了的沖突—解決—結(jié)尾”。以上六要素并不總是同時(shí)出現(xiàn)，也并不一定按照固定的順序出現(xiàn)。以凸顯個(gè)人經(jīng)歷為主的故事，其情節(jié)一般比較平淡且沒(méi)有高潮，在敘述中通過(guò)體現(xiàn)事件之間的先后、因果等關(guān)系而展開(kāi)，其主題也比較單一。該類故事語(yǔ)篇的結(jié)構(gòu)模式可簡(jiǎn)單概括為“指向—進(jìn)展—評(píng)議—結(jié)局”。其中，評(píng)議可在文中動(dòng)態(tài)體現(xiàn)，回應(yīng)可視情況而定。續(xù)寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容重點(diǎn)在“進(jìn)展”和“結(jié)局”。（2）研讀原文和所給首句，梳理關(guān)鍵信息根據(jù)故事文本的敘事結(jié)構(gòu)理清續(xù)文寫(xiě)作方向之后，下一步就是要“讀好”、“讀透”原文和兩段續(xù)文的首句。那么，怎樣才能“讀好”、“讀透”呢？首先，要讀出故事主線，梳理原文中的重點(diǎn)信息。故事的情節(jié)由主線串聯(lián)在一起，這條主線可能是某件物品、某個(gè)人物，還有可能是某個(gè)事件，甚至也有可能是敘事者的思想情感、心理變化等。主線是文章主旨的載體，將貫穿于續(xù)文之中。其次，圍繞主線信息，展開(kāi)細(xì)節(jié)研讀，獲取有關(guān)人物動(dòng)作、神態(tài)、語(yǔ)言以及環(huán)境等的描寫(xiě)，并在字里行間捕捉觀點(diǎn)、態(tài)度、心理等方面的信息。這些細(xì)節(jié)信息的獲取對(duì)實(shí)現(xiàn)續(xù)文與原文的內(nèi)容協(xié)同有很重要的作用。然后，研讀原文語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)?！皟?nèi)容要?jiǎng)?chuàng)造，語(yǔ)言要模仿”是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的基本思路。關(guān)注原文使用的語(yǔ)言，尤其是一些特殊句式表達(dá)，在續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)模仿使用，以此來(lái)達(dá)到續(xù)文與原文在語(yǔ)言上的協(xié)同。最后，研讀續(xù)寫(xiě)段落首句。段首句對(duì)續(xù)寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容給出了最直白的提示，準(zhǔn)確理解段首句有助于寫(xiě)出邏輯合理、意義連貫的完整故事。尤其要重視第二段段首句的研讀，它既總起了第二段的內(nèi)容，又與第一段結(jié)尾緊密銜接。（3）借助自我提問(wèn)，合理推演后續(xù)情節(jié)經(jīng)得起邏輯推敲，能夠自圓其說(shuō)，這是對(duì)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)的最基本要求。在構(gòu)思情節(jié)時(shí)，要善于研究事件之間的因果關(guān)系，并依據(jù)這種關(guān)系，設(shè)計(jì)符合邏輯、符合人之常情的故事情節(jié)，避免出現(xiàn)“前言不搭后語(yǔ)”的邏輯漏洞。真正的閱讀過(guò)程是不斷提問(wèn)、不斷尋找問(wèn)題答案的過(guò)程。在考場(chǎng)上，學(xué)生需借助“自問(wèn)自答”獨(dú)立完成審題、構(gòu)思和寫(xiě)作。自問(wèn)自答就是剝洋蔥，從現(xiàn)象到本質(zhì)，層層遞進(jìn)，進(jìn)行循序漸進(jìn)、由淺入深的思考和理解。讀原文時(shí)，通過(guò)自問(wèn)自答，獲取主線信息和細(xì)節(jié)信息；構(gòu)思續(xù)寫(xiě)情節(jié)時(shí)，根據(jù)已知信息和段首句提示，通過(guò)自問(wèn)自答完成情節(jié)預(yù)設(shè)。訓(xùn)練自問(wèn)自答的能力，是訓(xùn)練讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的重要一環(huán)，最關(guān)鍵的是要“問(wèn)準(zhǔn)”。怎樣才能問(wèn)準(zhǔn)不跑偏？抓住主要人物、主要線索、主要場(chǎng)景和主旨大意來(lái)設(shè)問(wèn)。三、備考建議（一）忌“只寫(xiě)不讀”備考階段會(huì)做很多模擬卷，寫(xiě)很多篇作文，可效果卻不一定好。讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的“寫(xiě)”是以“讀”為基礎(chǔ)的，文本解讀能力是寫(xiě)好續(xù)文的前提。因此，復(fù)習(xí)階段也要保證有一定量的閱讀，難度適中的中短篇小說(shuō)是很好的素材。小說(shuō)閱讀不僅能提升閱讀能力，還會(huì)在情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)方面給學(xué)生以很大的靈感和啟迪。（二）忌“死記硬背”語(yǔ)言積累肯定離不開(kāi)背誦，但脫離語(yǔ)境機(jī)械背誦的內(nèi)容在實(shí)際應(yīng)用中必然會(huì)給讀者“生搬硬套”的感覺(jué)。有些習(xí)作句式、用詞都很高級(jí)，卻缺乏靈魂。因此，要避免孤立地背詞匯、背句子，建議背“場(chǎng)景”。只有在語(yǔ)境中去操練語(yǔ)法句型和敘事詞匯，才能做到靈活運(yùn)用。（三）宜“分塊訓(xùn)練、突破難點(diǎn)”讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的難點(diǎn)在于情節(jié)的“設(shè)計(jì)”和“表達(dá)”，要突破這兩個(gè)難點(diǎn)，可以采取分塊集中訓(xùn)練的方式。比如情節(jié)構(gòu)思訓(xùn)練，只讀不寫(xiě)，利用故事語(yǔ)篇的敘事結(jié)構(gòu)相關(guān)知識(shí)，勾勒故事走向；解讀文本，把握重點(diǎn)信息；自問(wèn)自答，設(shè)計(jì)故事細(xì)節(jié)。又比如細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)能力的提升，可以通過(guò)微技能專題訓(xùn)練來(lái)實(shí)現(xiàn)，如“環(huán)境描寫(xiě)”“動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)”“語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)”“心理描寫(xiě)”等專題。高頻寫(xiě)作例句讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)素材積累一、情感心理（四）好奇1.他們問(wèn)了我太多的問(wèn)題，我都糊涂了。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.我不明白你為什么不爭(zhēng)取大學(xué)獎(jiǎng)學(xué)金。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.我站起來(lái)發(fā)言時(shí)，腦子里一片空白。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.他把眼睛睜得更大了，真是難以置信。_____________________________________________________________________4.由于對(duì)發(fā)生的事情感到好奇，亨利第二天偷偷地回到了學(xué)校._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.她把眼睛睜得更大了，真是難以置信._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.人們聚集在一起，想知道發(fā)生了什么事。____________________________________________________________________（五）寬慰1.她用手指撫摸著我的頭發(fā)說(shuō)：“一切都會(huì)好起來(lái)的。”_____________________________________________________________________2。他伸出手，用手指捏成“心形”，說(shuō)：“我將永遠(yuǎn)與你同在”。___________________________________________________________3。她握著我的手哭著說(shuō)：“非常感謝！你不知道這對(duì)我有多重要?！盻__________________________________________________________4。聽(tīng)著，我感到一股暖流在我體內(nèi)蔓延。___________________________________________________________（六）鼓勵(lì)1.涼爽的夜晚，他們坐在戶外的木制門(mén)廊上，悄悄地安慰和鼓勵(lì)別人。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

2.我媽媽總是面帶微笑鼓勵(lì)我。___________________________________________________________3.多虧了鼓勵(lì)，我漸漸平靜下來(lái)，我開(kāi)始接受失敗是天賦價(jià)值的一部分。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.他握著我的手哭泣著：“非常感謝你。你不知道這對(duì)我有多重要?！盻_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5?！澳愫苤匾?。”我對(duì)自己說(shuō)了這句話，感到一股暖意在我體內(nèi)蔓延。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.他滿意地笑了，拍了拍我的肩膀說(shuō)：“做得好！”_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________（七）希望1。他們心中燃起了希望的火花。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.在經(jīng)歷了這么多困難之后，我們終于看到了曙光。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.父親失業(yè)后，她上大學(xué)的希望破滅了。_____________________________________________________________________4.和教授聊天后，詹姆斯對(duì)自己的未來(lái)充滿了希望。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.生活充滿了幸福和希望。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.抱最好的希望，做最壞的打算。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________7.如果運(yùn)氣好的話，我們將在今天結(jié)束前完成這項(xiàng)工作。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________(八)激動(dòng)1。感到她的心跳加速，熱血沸騰。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.當(dāng)她再次聽(tīng)到她鼓勵(lì)她的話語(yǔ)時(shí)，她的心軟了。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.聽(tīng)到這個(gè)消息，她激動(dòng)得胃里直打顫。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.他的臉因激動(dòng)而容光煥發(fā)。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.他激動(dòng)得幾乎說(shuō)不出話來(lái)。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.當(dāng)她俯下身來(lái)，把禮物捧到胸前時(shí)，她的心臟像自由的鳥(niǎo)兒一樣跳動(dòng)著。___________________________________________________________7.媽媽建議我們到下一個(gè)村莊去露營(yíng)，她的眼睛里閃爍著興奮的光芒。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________8.格林先生收到了期待已久的請(qǐng)柬，用顫抖的雙手打開(kāi)了它。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________9.當(dāng)他射入致勝一球時(shí)，隊(duì)員們高興得跳了起來(lái)。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________10.她幾乎抑制不住激動(dòng)的情緒。___________________________________________________________11.看到圣誕樹(shù)，孩子們興高采烈。___________________________________________________________12.聽(tīng)到這個(gè)消息，他激動(dòng)得跳了起來(lái)._________________________________________________________（九）憤怒1.他怒氣沖沖地沖出了房間，重重地關(guān)上了門(mén)。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.她快要爆炸了。__________________________________________________________________3.他非常生氣，揮動(dòng)著拳頭。_____________________________________4.湯姆怒不可遏，朝我揮動(dòng)拳頭。__________________________________________________________5.他的聲音因憤怒而顫抖。__________________________________________________________6.她憤怒地看了他一眼。__________________________________________________________7.他抑制不住怒氣，翻身怒吼道：“到底是誰(shuí)干的？”__________________________________________________________8.她的臉色漲了起來(lái)，一股沉重的怒氣像一片烏云籠罩著她。__________________________________________________________9.吉姆怒不可遏，向我揮動(dòng)拳頭。__________________________________________________________（十）悲傷1.他默默地站著，淚水順著面頰滾了下來(lái)。__________________________________________________________2.她哭了起來(lái)，跑出了房間。__________________________________________________________3.他們?cè)诒瘋谐霈F(xiàn)。__________________________________________________________4.她走到我面前，悲痛萬(wàn)分，眼睛里的光芒暗了下來(lái)，悲傷地說(shuō)：“我失敗了?！盻______________________________________________________5.我看見(jiàn)一位老婦人在街角用拳頭捶著胸哭。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.當(dāng)他張開(kāi)雙臂擁抱我的時(shí)候，我感到自己的喉嚨哽咽了。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________7.她的雙眼充滿了淚水。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________8.她痛苦地?fù)u了搖頭，淚水順著臉頰流下。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________9.他默默地站著，淚水涌上眼眶。_____________________________________________________________________10.最后，我妹妹終于崩潰了，捂著手帕抽泣著。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________(十一)驚恐1。那部恐怖電影把我嚇得頭發(fā)直直的。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.當(dāng)我看到那個(gè)小寶寶要從二樓摔下來(lái)時(shí)，我的心跳停止了。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.昨晚我夢(mèng)見(jiàn)被一只憤怒的狗追趕。我當(dāng)時(shí)真的很激動(dòng)。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.邁克一想到狼的血淋淋的嘴巴，嚇得幾乎要命了。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.狼非常生氣，它咆哮著，猛地把窗戶砸碎了。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.漆黑的雨夜、狂風(fēng)、雷電交加的云層完全把我控制住了。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________7.你無(wú)法想象狼走近時(shí)我有多害怕。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________8.麥克嚇得要命，他掙扎著爬起來(lái)，使出渾身解數(shù)把自行車(chē)扔向狼。9.她一看到蛇就尖叫起來(lái)。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________10.他嚇得僵住了，不敢動(dòng)彈。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________11她又害怕又震驚，一句話也說(shuō)不出來(lái)。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________12.她的臉色變得蒼白，站在那里，舌頭打結(jié)。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________13.看到那只兇猛的狼，邁克感到非常害怕，喉嚨發(fā)緊，膝蓋發(fā)軟。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________14.她從頭到腳都在顫抖，感覺(jué)如坐針氈。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________15.一只蜘蛛從櫥柜里爬出來(lái)，把我嚇得半死。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________16.她心中涌起一股恐懼的洪流。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________（十一）緊張1.他的心臟狂跳著，雙腿顫抖著。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.他的臉色變得蒼白，站在那里張口結(jié)舌。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.他感到非常緊張，一英寸也動(dòng)不了。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4他心中涌起一股緊張的情緒。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.他的心跳得如此劇烈，他感到如坐針氈。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.他繃緊了臉，好像在保護(hù)自己，以免再次失望。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________7.公共汽車(chē)越來(lái)越近了，湯姆的心臟劇烈跳動(dòng)，幾乎呼吸困難。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________8.他正要回答時(shí)，感到舌頭被手掌綁住了，開(kāi)始出汗。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________9.他伸手去抓住她的手，卻發(fā)現(xiàn)她凍僵的手指在出汗和顫抖。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________10.爸爸感覺(jué)到我對(duì)未知的恐懼所帶來(lái)的壓力，試著逗我笑______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________11.由于他們?nèi)匀淮贿^(guò)氣來(lái)，心跳仍然劇烈，他們確信剛才發(fā)生的事情是真的。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________（十三）悔疚1.聽(tīng)到這個(gè)壞消息，她感到非常內(nèi)疚。______________________________________________________2.絕望而無(wú)助的珍妮特跪了下來(lái)，后悔的淚水順著面頰流了下來(lái)__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.“我應(yīng)該和你一起去的，”蘇珊嘆了口氣回答。_______________________________________________________4.我站在那里，眼里含著遺憾的淚水。______________________________________________________5.她要是沒(méi)把留在湯姆的包里就好了。_______________________________________________________6.如果我沒(méi)有和湯姆吵架，他就不會(huì)走丟了。________________________________________________________（十四）困惑1.聽(tīng)我解釋后，曼迪臉上仍然是困惑的表情。______________________________________________________2.他發(fā)現(xiàn)前門(mén)有三個(gè)警察，這讓他很困惑（大惑不解的）。______________________________________________________3.他情緒的突然變化把她弄糊涂了。________________________________________________________4.我們對(duì)自己應(yīng)該做的事情有點(diǎn)困惑。________________________________________________________5.當(dāng)我站在舞臺(tái)上面對(duì)大批觀眾時(shí)，我的頭腦一片空白。___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.你怎么可能知道？”他問(wèn)，滿臉困惑。________________________________________________________7.路牌讓我們非常困惑，最后我們迷路了。_______________________________________________________8.有時(shí)老人似乎對(duì)周?chē)沫h(huán)境感到困惑（困惑的）。________________________________________________________（十五)憂慮1.由于擔(dān)心這次旅行，頭幾天我心神不寧。________________________________________________________2.會(huì)議結(jié)束后，他很關(guān)心生病的妻子，立即趕回了家。______________________________________________________3.他的心跳得如此劇烈，他感到如坐針氈。_____________________________________________________4.在十米外就能感覺(jué)到沮喪和沮喪的氣氛。_______________________________________________________5.她唯一想做的事就是沖回家，躺在破舊的小沙發(fā)上哭泣。________________________________________________________6.他對(duì)英語(yǔ)考試感到如此緊張，以至于大半夜都睡不著覺(jué)，心神不寧。___________________________________________________（2425高三上·遼寧朝陽(yáng)·階段練習(xí)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Tenyearsago,Iwasaprimaryschoolstudentandwestartedtolearntoswiminthenewsemester.Oneday,wepackedtogetheronaschoolbusandheadedforthedowntowntogoswimming.Therewerefifty10yearoldboysinthemidwintercold.Thoughwehadjustlearnedtoswimforafewmonths,weallwantedtoproveourselvesandeagerlyanticipatedthearrivalatourdestination.Theatmosphereonthebuswaschargedwithexcitement,anenergythatcouldhardlybecontained.Soon,wearrivedattheswimmingpool,andoutofthebus,weranthroughthecold,keepingupwitheachother’sspeed,intothesoundsandwetwarmthofthebuilding.Wecouldsmellthepoolandhearitechotousasweenteredthebuilding.Howexcitedwewere!Beforejumpingintothewater,thecoach,Mr.Blacktookusthrougha10minutewarmup.Thenhewarnedusthatonecouldsurfacethreetimesbeforetheywouldloseconsciousness(意識(shí)),remindingustoshoutforhelpifsomethingwaswrong.However,Ihadnoplantodothat,forIwasquiteconfidentwithmyswimmingskillsandoftenboasted(吹噓)abouttheminfrontofmyclassmates.IfIdidthat,whatashameitwouldbeforsomeonelikeme.Istillrememberthatfeelingofexcitement,asifitwereyesterday.IthadbeenfiveweekssinceMr.Blackhadannouncedthepoolswimsession,andallwecoulddothenwasrunandjumpintothewater.Andrunwedid.Weactuallyflewintothewater,eagertotestourswimmingskills.ButasIhitthedeepend,Ifelttheweightofthewaterpullmedown.IknewIwasdrowning(溺水).Oh,howscaredIwas!注意：（1）續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；（2）請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Isurfacedforthefirsttime.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Onthethirdrise,Ifinallymittedtoshoutingforhelp.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________精講精析：【知識(shí)點(diǎn)】個(gè)人經(jīng)歷、生活故事【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，本文講述了作者在10的時(shí)候參加學(xué)校組織的游泳活動(dòng)，因過(guò)于自信未聽(tīng)從教練的安全提醒，在水中遇險(xiǎn)，最終在第三次嘗試呼救時(shí)被教練救起的故事。這次經(jīng)歷讓作者深刻認(rèn)識(shí)到生命的重要性。【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①由第一段首句“我第一次浮出水面。周?chē)髁劣粥须s。但我卻沒(méi)有呼救。內(nèi)心有東西阻止了我?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫(xiě)作者在水中遇險(xiǎn)時(shí)，第一次浮出水面的情景以及內(nèi)心的掙扎。②由第二段首句“在第三次浮出水面時(shí)，我終于決定呼救?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫(xiě)作者第三次浮出水面決定呼救，但是為時(shí)已晚，幸運(yùn)地被教練救起的情景。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：遇險(xiǎn)——第一次浮出水面——內(nèi)心掙扎——第三次決定呼救——為時(shí)已晚——被救——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類①呼救：shoutforhelp/cryforhelp/callforassistance②沉沒(méi)：sink/gounder/disappearunderthewater③救起：liftoutofthewater/save/rescue情緒類①害怕的：terrified/scared②幸運(yùn)：Luckily/Fortunately/Byastrokeofluck【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1].Itdidn’ttakelongformetorealizethatmylifewaspassingtooquickly.（由it作形式主語(yǔ)以及that引導(dǎo)賓語(yǔ)從句）[高分句型2].Ittaughtmeanimportantlessonthatourlifeismorevaluablethananythingelse.（由引導(dǎo)詞that引導(dǎo)同位語(yǔ)從句）【答案】Isurfacedforthefirsttime.Itwasbrightandnoisy.ButIdidn’tshoutforhelp.Somethinginsidemestoppedme.Isankagainandresurfaced.Andthen,oncemore,Icouldn’tmakeasound,thoughIthoughtitwisetoshoutfor“HELP”.Itdidn’ttakelongformetorealizethatmylifewaspassingtooquickly.Iknewthatonthethirdtimeunderwater,Iwouldseemylifepassbeforemyeyes,feelingsoterrified.Myshortlife,only10yearsold,flashedbeforemyeyesinaninstant.Onthethirdrise,Ifinallymittedtoshoutingforhelp.However,itwastoolate.MymouthwasfullofwaterandIcouldn’tutteronlyoneword.Luckily,mycoachnoticedme.Heswamoverandliftedmeoutofthewater.Ineverhadachancetomeetmyfateandfinallyaskedforhelp.Tenyearslater,Istillrememberthatmomentvividly,asitmarkedaturningpointinmylife.Ittaughtmeanimportantlessonthatourlifeismorevaluablethananythingelse.一、翻譯語(yǔ)段場(chǎng)景描寫(xiě)之水中救人“他肯定出事了，”我心里想。果然，仔細(xì)一看，我發(fā)現(xiàn)那個(gè)男孩正拼命地?fù)]手。我迅速跳入水中，以最快的速度游向那個(gè)男孩。當(dāng)我找到他時(shí)，他已經(jīng)沉到池底，垂著頭，這讓我心里充滿了恐懼和擔(dān)憂。我抱起那個(gè)男孩，游向池邊，讓他的頭一直浮在水面上。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________二、讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)1．（2025·安徽淮北·一模）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。WhenSabrinaheardherdadPeteParker,acoalminer,parkinghisvan(貨車(chē))inthegarage,shekeptswitchingchannelsontheTV,hopinghewouldn’taskheraboutherupinggraduationthatwasscheduledintwodays.Shefearedherdadwouldruinhergraduationforlooking“dirty”andsmellingofcoalandsweat.“Hey,sweetheart!LookwhatIgotforyou,”P(pán)etesaidasheentered,soundinghappy.Thenhelefttwopackagesonthetable.Sabrinawassurprisedandquicklyunwrappedoneboxandfoundabeautifuldressinside.Sheloveditverymuch.Thensheopenedtheotherboxandsawanewsuitinit.“Thanksforthedress,dad.Butforwhomisthissuit?”“It’sforme,honey!Ihavetolookamazing...it’syourgraduation,afterall!”Sabrinabitherlipsinfrustrationandsaid,“Dad,Idon’twantyoutoe.Allmyfriendsandtheirparentswillbeattending.Idon’twantthemtolaughatmeafterseeingyou,alright?”Sabrina’swordshitPetelikeabagofbricks.Hewassohurtbecausehewaslookingforwardtoattendingtheevent.However,heknewSabrinawastooyoungtounderstandhisloveforher.“She’sstillalittlegirl!”hefortedhisbrokenheartanddecidedtostillgotothegraduationpartywithasurprise.Onthedayofthegraduation,Petearrivedandsatintheseatingareafortheparents.Whenhisdaughter’snamewasannounced,PeteranuptothefrontwithhisphoneandstartedfilmingasSabrinareceivedherdiploma.Sabrinalookedsopretty,andPetewassoproudshewasgraduating.Suddenly,Sabrinaheardthehostsay,“Mr.Parker,canwepleasehaveyouonstage.”Sabrinawasconfusedanddidn’tunderstandwhatwasgoingonasshesawPetewalkingovertotheplatform.注意：(1)續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右：(2)請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。Petesteppedontothestage.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________TearsstreameddownSabrina’scheeks.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．（2324高二上·湖南永州·期末）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Everyonewantstobeacheerleader(拉拉隊(duì)員).Everygirlwantsthechancetoshine,tohavealleyesonher,tobetheonetoweartheuniform,bepartoftheschoolsportsteam.Everyonewantstobeacheerleaderbutnoteveryonegetsthechance.Inthefallofmysenioryearinhighschool,IwasfacedwithmorepressurethanIknewhowtohandle.MyfriendsandIwereapplyingtocollege,takingthecollegeadmissionstestsandwritingessays.Itwasinthemidstoftheseotherpressuresthatcheerleadingtryouts(選拔)forthesportsteamtookplaceeveryyear.Outofthemanywhotriedout,onlytenspecialseniorgirlsmadeit.IknewIhadtobeoneofthem.Myyoungersister,Molly,startedhighschoolthatyear.IthoughtshewouldhaveitespeciallyeasysinceIhadalreadytoldhereverythingtoexpect:whichteacherstofear,whichcourseswereeasy.ThefirstfewweeksofschoolwerefilledwithtensionformeWitheverythinggoingon,IadmitIwasn’ttooattentive(關(guān)注的)toMolly.Still,Iwaitedforhereveryafternoonintheparkinglottodriveherhome.Ithoughtthatwasenoughforher,gettingarideinsteadofhavingtotakethebus,likemanyoftheotherfreshmen.Cheerleadingpracticewasheldafterschoolandsometimesranlongduringthoseweeksbeforethetryouts.HoweverlateIwas,Mollyalwayswaitedforme,watchingmefromthedistance.OnFridaymorning,thedayofthetryout,IdroveMollytoschoolasusual.Mollymusthavesensedmynervousnessanddidn’tsayanythingthewholeridetoschool.Butwhenshegotoutofthecarshehandedmeanote,saying,“Nomatterwhathappenstoday,whetheryoumaketheteamornot,Ithinkyouarethebestsisterintheworld.”注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Finally,themomentofthetryoutcame.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Withexcitement,Icouldn’twaittomeetMolly.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．（2425高三上·江蘇常州·期末）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文?！癐feelhopelessaboutmyschoollife!I’mnotapopularstudentinourclass.Ican’tplaybasketballaswellasotherboys.AndIfailedMathexamagainyesterday,whichmademe…”,Tom,a16yearoldboyofMr.Brown’sclass,loweredhishead,sobbing(啜泣)uncontrollablyintheTeacher’sOffice.“I’msorrytohearthat”,Mr.BrownpattedTom’sshouldergentlyandaskedtheyoungboytositdowninfrontofthedesksothattheycouldsitoppositeeachother.ThiswasthefirsttimethatTomhadturnedtoMr.Brownforhelpbecausehewassoshyandquietinschool.ButMr.Brownhadnoticedhimmanytimesinschool’svolunteerwork.Lookingatthesadyoungboy,Mr.Brownwassilentforamoment.Then,hetookapieceofpaperandapenoutofhisdrawer.“I’dliketoinviteyoutotakeasurprisetest,myboy”,saidMr.Brown,passingthepentoTom.“AnewMathexam?”,Tomraisedhiseyeswhichwerestillfilledwithtears,gotthepenandrepliedinconfusion,worryingabouttheingchallenge.“Justtakeiteasybecauseit’snotaboutnumbersorformulas(方程)”,Mr.Brownfortedhimwithabigsmile.Notknowingwhatwouldeintheexampaper,Tomnoddedhisheadandwipedhistearswithhissleeves.Mr.BrownhandedTomthequestionpaperandencouragedhimsoftly,“Now,youcanbeginandpleasefinisht