2025屆新高考英語沖刺復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫指導(dǎo)

2025屆新高考英語沖刺復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫指導(dǎo)Activity1從前有座山，山里有座廟，廟里有個老和尚，老和尚在給小和尚講故事，故事講的是……Onceuponatime,therewasamountainInthemountaintherewasatempleInthetempletherewasanoldmonkTheoldmonkwastellingayoungmonkastoryThestorywentlikethis….linking銜接Watchthevideoclipandfindoutthecharacteristics.FiveElementswhat(Whatwasthemainidea?)how(Howdidthestorydevelop?)wherewhenwho(Whowerethemaincharacters?)Howtogetthewritingclues?Activity2312構(gòu)思法Activity33Para.1(sentence1+sentence2)Para.2(sentence3)1Para.2:

sentence4(1topicsublimationsentence)2填補2段續(xù)寫段的中間部分Activity4Passage1AMother'sDaySurpriseThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.Howpleasedandproudmotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.1.who2.when3.where4.how5.whatJenna&Jeff(twins),mother,fatheronMother'sDay(at6a.m.)athomeThetwinswantedtosurprisetheirmomonMother’sDay,sothey

butitwasamess.Thetwins

forMother'sDay→Theymadethe

amess→Their

cametohelp→Thebreakfastwasreadyfor

preparedbreakfastkitchenfathermompreparedbreakfastFiveElementsTable1Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

He

helpedtomakebreakfast.Seeingtheirdissapointedlook,hetoldthemtocleanupthekitchenwhilehehelpedthemtomakebreakfastformother.Thebreakfast

wasready.

TheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.She

wassurprisedandtouched.Sosurprisedandtouchedwasshethattearsstreameddownhercheeks.Itwasnotonlythebreakfast,buttheloveofthechildrenforher.Sentence1Sentence2Sentence3Sentence4Thinking思13minsDiscussion議5minsActivity1Achaingame(主題接龍）刮一刮親情類kinship刮一刮刮一刮助人類kindness勞動類labourActivity2

Holidaysarenotnecessarilyforfunorrest.Doingsomethingmeaningfulcanalsogainspecialpleasure.Whenthefinalbellrang,thestudentswereremindedthattherewasnoschoolonMonday-theLaborDay.“Enjoyyourextradayoff.”saidtheteachertoherclass.AnextradayoffunsuitedKaylajustfine,shelovedbreaks.Shewantedtogoouttoplaywithherfriends.WhentheschoolbusdroppedKaylaoff,sheranintothehousehappily.“Howwasschool,Kayla?”askedhermom.“Itwasgreat,Mom.IamexcitedaboutnoschoolonMonday.”“Youjuststartedbacktoschooltwoweeksago.Alreadyinneedofabreak,huh?”askedKayla’smomwithalaugh.Kaylasleptinthenextmorning.Saturdaywasherfavoritedayoftheweek.Itrainedmostoftheday,soKaylaenjoyedplayingvideogamesinside.OnSunday,herfriendscameoverandtheyplayedbasketballforseveralhours.ThenitwasLaborDay,youknow,theextradayoffthatKaylawassolookingforwardto.ButKaylawasawakenedearlythatmorningbyherdad.HetoldKaylathatinhonorofLaborDay,thefamilywouldbecleaningbothinsideandoutsidethehouse.Kaylacouldn’tbelieveit.Thiswasaholiday.Adaywhenshewassupposedtobeenjoyingfreshlysqueezedlemonadewhileplayinginhertreehouse.AsKaylawipedhereyes,shebegantowonderifthiswasjustabaddream.“Kayla,yourbreakfastisready.Wehavealotofworktodotoday.Let’sgetamoveon,”saidKayla’smom.Asshesatdownatthekitchentable,Kaylaaskedherparents,“Areyouseriousaboutworkingtoday?Isn’tLaborDayaholiday?”“Yes,Kayla.Itis,”repliedherdad.“ButyourmomandIthoughtworkinghardtodaywouldmakeyouappreciatewhyLaborDaywasobservedinthefirstplace.”Passage21.who2.when3.where4.how5.whatKayla,hermom,herdadonLaborDayathomeKaylawantedtoenjoyherholiday,butherparentstoldherthattheywouldcleanthehouseon

.playthehouseLaborDayKaylawasexcitedandwantedtogooutto

onLaborDay→Herparentstoldherthattheywouldcleanbothinsideandoutside

→ShedidsomechorestogetherFiveElementsTable2Paragraph1:Atfirst,Kaylafeltdisappointedatherparents’planfortheholiday.

Paragraph2:Butthingsbegantochange

asshewasdoingthechores.

Shewaseagertogoouttoplay.Shewassoeagertohangoutwithherfriendsthatshewasunwillingtocleanthehouse.Asenseofdissatisfactionseizedherwhenshemoppedthefloorandwashedthedishes.Shemoppedthefloorandwashedthedishes.disappointed→interested/excitedWhilewateringflowers,shefoundhowbeautifultheywere!1.IrealizedwhyLaborDaywasobservedinthefirstplace./2.Asthesayinggoes,nopains,nogains.Sentence1Sentence2Sentence3Sentence4Usethemethodof3+1+2tofinishthecontinuationwriting(sentence1+1topicsublimationsentence)

At7:30,Dadwasagainshoutingatmetogetup,urgingmetoputonsomeclothesthatweresuitableformetowalkaroundonsuchahotday.Iasked,“WhyshouldIdothat?Iwon’tbegoingout.Ihavealotofbusinesstodealwith.”Lookingmedirectlyintheeyes,DadtoldmesomethingaboutavillagecalledGiveKidstheWorld.Inthevillage,therewerealotofchildrenwhohadacertainseriousillnessordisability.

Sentence1主題句Astheirsonordaughter,whatcanwedoforourparentsonLabourDay?makethebedcookamealwaterflowerswashclothesmopthefloorcleanthewindow閱讀以下材料，完成寫作任務(wù)1

Jatin

and

his

younger

sister,Neha,

lived

with

their

parents

in

a

poor

neighborhood.Their

mother

was

very

sick

and

their

father

was

struggling

to

find

a

job,

and

they

had

only

a

little

money

with

which

to

buy

food.

As

they

had

not

paidthe

rentfor

several

months,the

landlord

was

breathingdown

their

necks(盯著他們）．2Oneday,JatintookNeha'sshoestoashoerepairmantobefixed.buthelostthemonthewayhome.Itwasn'tuntilhegothomethatherealizedhehadlosttheshoes.Hewasafraidthathisparentswouldbeangryanddisappointed,sohebeggedhissistertokeepitsecret.NehaagreedandthetwodecidedtoshareJatin'srunningshoes.Neha'sschoolhourswereinthemorning,soshewouldwearthemfirst.Afterschool,shewouldrushbackandgivethemtoJatin.Hecouldthenruntohisschool,whichbeganintheafternoon.Althoughheranasfastashecould,Jatinoftenarrivedlateandwaswarnedytheschool.3.

Along

distance

race

wasgoingtobeheldforboysin

the

city.

When

Jatinlearned

that

the

third

prize

was

a

new

pair

of

shoes,

he

decided

to

take

part.

He

ran

home

excitedly

and

promised

his

sister

that

he

wouldwin

her

the

new

shoes.4.

The

day

of

the

race

arrived.

Jatin

had

a

strong

start,but

halfway

through

the

race

he

began

to

get

tired

and

his

legs

began

to

ache.

Getting

more

and

more

exhausted(筋疲力盡）,he

thought

only

of

Neha

and

his

promise

to

her.

Dreaming

of

the

new

shoes

he

would

win

for

his

sister

gave

him

strength,and

he

stayed

right

behind

the

two

fastest

runners,determined

to

finish

third.

Suddenly,as

the

finish

line

drew

near,

another

runner

collided(碰撞）with

Jatinfrom

behind

and

Jatin

crashed

to

the

ground.續(xù)寫兩段開頭：Jatinlookedupandsawtheotherboysrushingahead.____________________________________________________________________________________________________Filledwithpleasure,Jatinwalkedhomequickly.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

世界著名認(rèn)知科學(xué)家哈佛大學(xué)心理系教授斯蒂芬·平克曾說過：“寫作之難，在于把網(wǎng)狀的思考，用樹狀結(jié)構(gòu)，體現(xiàn)在線性展開的語句里?！北敬卫m(xù)寫雖有進(jìn)步，但也暴露出些許問題。

續(xù)寫要讀寫并重；續(xù)寫不是另起爐灶；續(xù)寫要注意句子數(shù)量的分配。現(xiàn)從以下幾方面梳理：一、邏輯問題續(xù)寫邏輯可以說是個多視角邏輯，囊括了1、原文的邏輯銜接；2、段首句的邏輯銜接;3、續(xù)寫內(nèi)容之間的邏輯銜接二、結(jié)尾問題我們可以把結(jié)尾粗略分成三結(jié)尾：1、哲理性結(jié)尾；2、自然而然的結(jié)尾；3、聚焦景色結(jié)尾三、選詞方面----用詞方面必須注意幾個問題：1、你的語句可讀性強嗎？2、語句用詞是易懂的還是晦澀的？3、要學(xué)會名詞形式的活用或者說能否找到一個足夠強大的動詞，讓動詞獨立起作用，從而省略掉副詞。4、用具體代替抽象（Verbs

drives

sentences

whereas

nouns

slow

them

down）例如:

bridge

---連接，溝通The

parents

are

trying

to

bridge

the

generation

with

their

children.

flood---充滿My

e-mail

box

is

flooded

with

junk

mail.father--

為人父（to

beget

a

child）He

has

fathered

two

children

before

his

remarriage.

summer---去某地度假we

have

summered.friend--交朋友，加為好友May

I

friend

you

?類似的用法還有很多，如：cup,boss,box,brief,pride,carpet,cap,picture,brave,ship等原文信息知多少？poorlostshoeswaswarnedraceforthirdprize,but...disqualifytheawardgotthethirdlove1

Jatin

and

his

younger

sister,Neha,

lived

with

their

parents

in

a

poor

neighborhood.Their

mother

was

very

sick

and

their

father

was

struggling

to

find

a

job,

and

they

had

only

a

little

money

with

which

to

buy

food.

As

they

had

not

paidthe

rentfor

several

months,the

landlord

was

breathingdown

their

necks(盯著他們）．Backgroundinformation1---窮1.住在貧民區(qū)，母親生病，父親沒有工作；2.有很少的錢，不夠支付房租，只夠買食物；3.從以上兩點，我們可以判斷，他們不是一般的窮，根本沒有能力再拿錢去做別的事情。所以有些同學(xué)續(xù)寫的第二段，說父母還幫買鞋子的事，絕對是瞎扯淡，不符合原文邏輯！2Oneday,JatintookNeha'sshoestoashoerepairmantobefixed.buthelostthemonthewayhome.Itwasn'tuntilhegothomethatherealizedhehadlosttheshoes.Hewasafraidthathisparentswouldbeangryanddisappointed,sohebeggedhissistertokeepitsecret.NehaagreedandthetwodecidedtoshareJatin'srunningshoes.Neha'sschoolhourswereinthemorning,soshewouldwearthemfirst.Afterschool,shewouldrushbackandgivethemtoJatin.Hecouldthenruntohisschool,whichbeganintheafternoon.Althoughheranasfastashecould,Jatinoftenarrivedlateandwaswarnedbytheschool.Backgroundinformation2---禍不單行，也是加深了下一段想?yún)⒓颖荣惖钠惹行枰?.

Along

distance

race

wasgoingtobeheldforboysin

the

city.

When

Jatinlearned

that

the

third

prize

was

a

new

pair

of

shoes,

he

decided

to

take

part.

He

ran

home

excitedly

and

promised

his

sister

that

he

wouldwin

her

the

new

shoes.Backgroundinformation3——妹妹知情，哥哥要去比賽1.前文提到哥哥把妹妹的鞋子弄丟了。為了獲得鞋子，哥哥肯定是要參加比賽的。2.哥哥向妹妹承諾，一定要贏得這雙鞋子。所以妹妹是知情的。所以，有些同學(xué)后邊續(xù)寫妹妹問哥哥這雙新鞋子是哪里來的，也是完全不符合原文邏輯的。4.

The

day

of

the

race

arrived.

Jatin

had

a

strong

start,but

halfway

through

the

race

he

began

to

get

tired

and

his

legs

began

to

ache.

Getting

more

and

more

exhausted(筋疲力盡）,he

thought

only

of

Neha

and

his

promise

to

her.

Dreaming

of

the

new

shoes

he

would

win

for

his

sister

gave

him

strength,and

he

stayed

right

behind

the

two

fastest

runners,determined

to

finish

third.

Suddenly,as

the

finish

line

drew

near,

another

runner

collided(碰撞）with

Jatinfrom

behind

and

Jatin

crashed

to

the

ground.Backgroundinformation4——第三名化為泡影Backgroundinformation4——第三名化為泡影？1.從tired和ache以及碰撞摔倒可知有伏筆，Jatin是不可能一開始就如愿以償，獲得第三名的。大部分同學(xué)第一段續(xù)寫，幾乎都寫Jatin忍著疼痛沖刺，終于獲得第三名，顯然，不符合本段內(nèi)容隱含的邏輯（如果能自圓其說，也可以接受，但分不高）2.正因為他被撞倒了，才有了故事的轉(zhuǎn)折點。這需要我們明白一件事：我們都應(yīng)該樹立正確的三觀，要相信比賽的公平公正。對方撞人，肯定屬于違規(guī)行為，被取消獲獎資格，第三名自然落到Jatin身上。當(dāng)然這也是Jatin萬萬沒有想到的，所以他也算因禍得福，運氣不錯。3.有些同學(xué)第一段續(xù)寫提到，那個撞倒Jatin的選手，跟他道歉，并愿意把第三名讓給他，也把鞋子給他。請問：比賽這么隨意嗎？對方撞倒你就是想超越你，他會主動給你？另外，獲獎要光明正大，這種名不正言不順的行為，你會接受嗎？S1：

Jatin

looked

up

and

saw

the

other

boys

rushing

ahead.

He

felt

too

miserable

and

drowsy.

The

judge

came

to

Jatinand

asked,

"how

are

you?"

Can

I

help

you?

Jatinsmiled

and

shook

his

head.

He

stood

up

with

all

his

strength.

With

their

encouragement，Justin

ran

to

the

end.

He

won

the

fifth

place.Filled

with

pleasure,

Jatin

walked

home

quickly.

Jatin

said

to

his

sister:

he

broke

his

promise.He

was

about

to

talk

about

the

experience

of

the

race

when

judges

and

journalists

entered.

They

said

Jatin

won

the

third

place

because

the

boy

bumping

into

him

broke

the

rules.

He

felt

excited

at

the

good

news.

But

the

boy

didn't

even

apologize

for

what

he

did.

In

the

end,

he

won

a

new

pair

of

shoes.下劃線句子顯示此學(xué)生的段落續(xù)接存在邏輯問題。S1明顯在第一段結(jié)尾和第二段開頭段落鏈接時出現(xiàn)問題：Jatin

得了第五名，沒有贏得心心念的鞋子，他怎么會高興呢？和第二段開頭Filled

with

pleasure,

Jatin

walked

home

quickly有斷點，沒有起到承上啟下的過渡作用。另外，第二段才提到Jatin獲得第三名，不符合故事發(fā)展的順序邏輯了。S2

:Jatin

looked

up

and

saw

the

other

boys

rushing

ahead.

He

was

surprised

and

scared,

but

he

didn't

think

so

much.

He

only

thought

about

Neha

andhis

promise

to

her.

He

stood

up

soon

and

caught

up

with

the

boy

in

front

of

him.

Dad

encouraged

him

to

run

forward

again

and

be

full

of

energy.

Everyone

praised

him

and

cheered

him

on.

He

is

very

cute.

And

he

is

getting

closer

and

closer

to

third

place.

He

showed

his

youthful

perseverance.

Luckily

he

made

it.

The

sun

illuminated

his

bright

smile.無效信息比較多S3:Justin

looked

up

and

saw

the

other

boys

rushing

ahead.In

the

meanwhile,

he

was

filled

with

despair.When

he

thought

of

his

promise

to

his

sister,

he

ignored

the

pain

in

his

leg.

He

stood

up

quickly

and

ran

desperately.Unfortunately,

he

failed

to

get

to

third

place

and

he

cried

sadly.Unexpectedly,the

referee

gave

him

the

new

pair

of

shoes

because

of

his

will

of

iron

.All

smiled

happily.段落是一個語義鏈，段內(nèi)的句子是其中的一節(jié)鏈，一節(jié)必須扣住一節(jié)，才能形成連貫。每一個句子都要包含一些和上一句相似或有關(guān)的東西，才能借此扣住連接起來。由此段落銜接可從以下幾個點進(jìn)行縝密的織網(wǎng)構(gòu)思與梳理：1、段與段之間的銜接依靠上一段最后一句和下一段第一句的意思上的關(guān)聯(lián)；2、段與段之間的銜接依靠各段中主題句思想的關(guān)聯(lián)；3、段與段之間的銜接依靠全文中心思想來串聯(lián)；4、段與段之間的銜接靠過渡段的承接或轉(zhuǎn)折。

這種過渡段主要用于一個意思和另一個意思的轉(zhuǎn)折。一、邏輯問題

續(xù)寫邏輯可以說是個多視角邏輯，囊括了1、原文的邏輯銜接；2、段首句的邏輯銜接;3、續(xù)寫內(nèi)容之間的邏輯銜接二、結(jié)尾問題

我們可以把結(jié)尾粗略分成三結(jié)尾：1、哲理性結(jié)尾；2、自然而然的結(jié)尾；3、聚焦景色結(jié)尾。Filled

with

pleasure,Justinwalked

home

quickly.At

this

moment,

he

was

holding

the

new

shoes

in

his

arms

and

constantly

touching

his

hands,

he

had

forgotten

the

pain

caused

by

the

injury.

When

he

got

home,

his

sister

was

shocked

when

he

saw

the

injury

and

quickly

found

the

medicine

kit

to

treat.

In

the

face

of

the

pain

,

Neha

cried

and

was

moved

by

her

brother’s

actions.

She

hugged

Jatin

and

didn’t

calm

down

for

a

long

time.S3的結(jié)尾屬自然結(jié)尾：即順著所需知識的自然發(fā)展，以它的必然結(jié)果做結(jié)尾，沒有套話?；乜圻@個學(xué)生的續(xù)寫，無論語篇，句式亦或是詞語使用上并沒有特別加分點，那么最好不使用自然結(jié)尾。美聯(lián)社國際寫作指導(dǎo)布魯斯·德席爾瓦說：”結(jié)尾是你把小說的主旨釘在讀者的記憶中并回想數(shù)天的最后一次機會?！碑?dāng)你努力向讀者描繪你的故事從何而來，也該用同樣的力量告訴他們故事將去往何處。用一個精彩的結(jié)尾把故事釘在讀者腦海，就像往平靜的水面扔下一個石子。漣漪所至，就是故事的魅力所在。如果以哲理性結(jié)尾，明顯續(xù)寫故事就在末端和讀者有了情感上的鏈接。哲理性結(jié)尾：用凝練客觀的語言表述，提升內(nèi)化文章中心思想，它即能夠使續(xù)寫故事具有思想含量又能夠饋贈讀者