河北省張家口高三英語(yǔ)一?？荚囎x后續(xù)寫(xiě)分析及下水文課件1

張家口高三英語(yǔ)一模讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)分析及下水文目錄CONTENT010203故事原文續(xù)寫(xiě)分析下水文與原文答案評(píng)析PART故事原文01Ritahadalwaysloveddogs.Asachild,herfamilyhadadog,afaithfulcompanionsheadored.Butoneday,thedogwentmissing，anddespitealltheireffortstofindit,theyneversawitagain.ThatheartbreakleftalastingmarkonRita,makingherparticularlysensitivetothesafetyofstray(無(wú)主的)orlostanimals.Onesunnyafternoon,Ritawasdrivinghomefromworkwhensomethingunusualcaughthereye.Nearasmallautorepairshoponthesideoftheroad,shesawaGoldenRetriever(金毛尋回犬)sittingbyitself.Thedoglookeddirty,withoilmarksonitsfur.Therewasnoonenearby,andthedoghadnocollarvisible.Rita'sheartsank.“Couldthisdogbelost?”shewondered,herthoughtsflashingbacktoherchildhoodandthepainoflosingherowndog.Shedrovepastthedog,butcouldn'tstopworryingaboutwhatmighthappentoit.“Whatifitgetshitbyacar?”shethought.“Orworse,whatifsomeonetakesitforthewrongreasons?”Atthenextcrossing,Ritaturnedhercararoundanddrovebacktowherethedogwas.Whenshearrived,thedogwasstillthere,sittingquietlyandlookingaroundasifwaitingforsomeone.Ritaparkedhercarandapproacheditslowly.“Heythere,”Ritakneltdownandsaidsoftly.Thedogwagged(搖)itstail.Itseemedgentleandtrusting.“Comewithme,”Ritacalled.Sheopenedthecardoor,andthedogjumpedin.Asshedrove,thedogoccasionallylookedoutofthewindow,barkingsoftlyasifcallingforsomeone.Backathome,Ritagavethedogabath,washingawaythedirtandoil.Thenshetookashortvideoofthedog,explainingwhereshehadfoundit,andposteditonhersocialmediaaccounts.Shewrote,“IfounditneartheautorepairshoponOakStreet.Itseemslikeitmightbelost.Pleasesharetohelpfindtheowner.”””續(xù)寫(xiě)首段提示續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段提示“I'msosorry,”Ritarepliedtotheman.“IthoughtMaxwasastray.”02Tohersurprise,itwasn’tlongbeforearepairshopownermessagedher.01續(xù)寫(xiě)提示【文本主旨】本文講述了Rita因童年失去愛(ài)犬的經(jīng)歷，對(duì)流浪動(dòng)物格外關(guān)注。她在路邊發(fā)現(xiàn)一只疑似走失的金毛尋回犬，將其救助并嘗試通過(guò)社交媒體尋找主人。故事體現(xiàn)了人與動(dòng)物之間的情感聯(lián)結(jié)以及對(duì)生命的責(zé)任感和善意。Rita的童年經(jīng)歷Rita童年時(shí)曾失去愛(ài)犬，那次心碎的經(jīng)歷給她留下了持久的傷痕，使她對(duì)流浪或走失動(dòng)物的安全格外敏感。發(fā)現(xiàn)金毛尋回犬一天，Rita在回家路上發(fā)現(xiàn)一只臟兮兮的金毛尋回犬，狗身上有油污痕跡，且沒(méi)有項(xiàng)圈，她擔(dān)心這只狗走丟了。救助并尋找主人Rita決定救助這只狗，給它洗澡后，通過(guò)社交媒體發(fā)布視頻尋找主人，希望盡快找到狗的主人。故事背景【詞匯積累】afaithfulcompanion忠實(shí)的伴侶

adorev.崇拜；敬慕

(be)sensitiveto對(duì)…敏感

asmallautorepairshop小型汽車(chē)修理店

collarn.衣領(lǐng)；項(xiàng)圈

visibleadj.可見(jiàn)的；明顯的

kneeldown跪下；跪倒

occasionally偶爾；有時(shí)

socialmediaaccount社交媒體賬號(hào)ThatheartbreakleftalastingmarkonRita,makingherparticularlysensitivetothesafetyofstray(無(wú)主的)orlostanimals.那次心碎的經(jīng)歷給Rita留下了持久的傷痕，使得她對(duì)流浪或走失動(dòng)物的安全格外敏感。“Couldthisdogbelost?”shewondered,herthoughtsflashingbacktoherchildhoodandthepainoflosingherowndog.“這只狗是不是走丟了？”她心想，思緒突然回到童年時(shí)失去自己愛(ài)犬的痛苦回憶中。PART續(xù)寫(xiě)分析02單擊此處添加標(biāo)題根據(jù)原文，本續(xù)寫(xiě)段落最好通過(guò)緊密的邏輯銜接、細(xì)膩的情感描寫(xiě)、合理的情節(jié)想象與開(kāi)頭的伏筆呼應(yīng)，將Rita的個(gè)人經(jīng)歷升華為對(duì)生命關(guān)懷的普世價(jià)值。既要滿(mǎn)足情節(jié)的合理性，又要賦予故事深度，詮釋人與動(dòng)物的和諧共生及善良的人性光輝。修理店老板出現(xiàn)與前文細(xì)節(jié)緊密銜接，Max身上的“油污痕跡”成為關(guān)鍵線(xiàn)索，老板解釋Max常在修理店活動(dòng)，沾染污漬，使情節(jié)邏輯嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，避免突兀。情節(jié)合理性01Rita得知Max有主人后，心情從擔(dān)憂(yōu)轉(zhuǎn)為欣慰，但又因誤判產(chǎn)生復(fù)雜情緒，這種情感變化豐富了人物內(nèi)心世界，為下文道歉和情感升華埋下伏筆。情感鋪墊02續(xù)寫(xiě)首段分析誤會(huì)化解Rita主動(dòng)道歉并解釋誤判動(dòng)機(jī)，源于童年經(jīng)歷，凸顯其善意初衷，老板回應(yīng)“Yourkindnesssavedhimfromdanger”，雙方互相理解，消解沖突，展現(xiàn)人際溝通的溫暖。0102Max與主人團(tuán)聚的歡快場(chǎng)景與Rita“強(qiáng)忍淚水”的細(xì)節(jié)形成對(duì)照，暗示她因彌補(bǔ)童年遺憾而釋然，結(jié)尾點(diǎn)明主題，將個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)與普世價(jià)值聯(lián)結(jié)。情感升華續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段分析單擊此處添加標(biāo)題首尾呼應(yīng)：老板邀請(qǐng)Rita“隨時(shí)探望Max”（visitthedoganytime），既為故事增添開(kāi)放性，也暗示Rita未來(lái)可能通過(guò)與小狗互動(dòng)來(lái)延續(xù)善舉，與前文“童年創(chuàng)傷”形成閉環(huán)。老板邀請(qǐng)Rita“隨時(shí)探望Max”（visitthedoganytime），既為故事增添開(kāi)放性，也暗示Rita未來(lái)可能通過(guò)與小狗互動(dòng)來(lái)延續(xù)善舉，與前文“童年創(chuàng)傷”形成閉環(huán)。首尾呼應(yīng)：

單擊此處添加文本具體內(nèi)容，簡(jiǎn)明扼要地闡述您的觀點(diǎn)。根據(jù)需要可酌情增減文字，以便觀者準(zhǔn)確地理解您傳達(dá)的思想。單擊此處添加文本具體內(nèi)容，簡(jiǎn)明扼要地闡述您的觀點(diǎn)。根據(jù)需要可酌情增減文字，以便觀者準(zhǔn)確地理解您傳達(dá)的思想。單擊此處添加文本具體內(nèi)容，簡(jiǎn)明扼要地闡述您的觀點(diǎn)。根據(jù)需要可酌情增減文字，以便觀者準(zhǔn)確地理解您傳達(dá)的思想。單擊此處添加文本具體內(nèi)容單擊添加標(biāo)題情感走向情感鏈條：擔(dān)憂(yōu)（發(fā)現(xiàn)狗狗）→行動(dòng)（救助并發(fā)布信息）→誤會(huì)（誤判為流浪狗）→和解（溝通后歸還）→成長(zhǎng)（彌補(bǔ)遺憾），展現(xiàn)了Rita從發(fā)現(xiàn)小狗到最終釋然的心路歷程。主題深化Rita的善舉源于個(gè)人傷痛，卻促成他人（Max與主人）與自我（走出陰影）的雙重圓滿(mǎn)，傳遞“善意終有回響”的價(jià)值觀，使故事具有深刻的教育意義。情感走向與主題深化PART下水文與原文答案評(píng)析03Paragraph1Tohersurprise,itwasn’tlongbeforearepairshopownermessagedher.Themessageread,“Thatdog,Max,belongstome!HeoftenwandersaroundtheshopwhileIwork.Thankyoufortakingcareofhim.IwasworriedwhenIcouldn’tfindhimearlier.”RelievedtolearnthatMaxhadahome,Ritafeltawaveofmixedemotions.Shewasgladthatthedogshehadworriedaboutwasnotlostafterall,butshealsoknewthatshehadtoreturnhimtohisrealownerassoonaspossible.SheimmediatelycalledtherepairshopownerandarrangedatimetotakeMaxback.(97words)Paragraph2“I'msosorry,”Ritarepliedtotheman.“IthoughtMaxwasastray.”Uponseeingtheman,sheapologized,sharinghowherpastexperienceswiththelostpethaddrivenhertoensurethedog’ssafety.Themanshookhishead,saying,“Noneedtosaysorry.Yourkindnesssavedhimfromdanger.”Meanwhile,heinvitedhertovisitthedoganytime.HavingseenMaxreunitewithhisownerjoyfully,Ritabreathedasighofrelief,buthernosebeingsour,shetriedtofightbacktears,which,however,turnedouttobeinvain.Thankfully,shefinallyma