平分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)和高級.ppt

1、高三復(fù)習(xí)寫作講評課 Assessment take it as; open it for Places of interest/tourist attractions Attract tourists/appeal to visitors/ be attraction for visitors,Give to/Rentto/be rented to Sport company/companies which organize matches/organizing matches Make/ create money; bring in money/make more profits,Open/

2、be opened to the people/public/open them to public. Be used for/as; be made to; Do some exercise/build our bodies/strengthen our bodies,信息2 信息3 信息4,向公眾開放，用于健身,租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經(jīng)濟效益,開辟成旅游景點，吸引游客,正 文,2.列提綱/要點,.,信息5,總結(jié)，意愿,結(jié)尾,In my opinion/ as far as I am concerned./from my point of view. I would appreciate I w

3、ould you will think of /takeinto consideration.,開頭信息1,08年奧運會剛剛落幕. 征集奧運會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議. 你想寫一些建議.,.,3.連詞成句,The 2008 Beijing Olympic Games were over/finished. The 29th Olympic Games were held successfully in Beijing. Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games with a great success.,The 29th Olympic Games wer

4、e hosted in Beijing with a great success. Beijing achieved its dream of hosting the 29th Olympic Games successfully.,Collect some advice How to use/make use of /make the best of the stadiums. After the Olympic Games After Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games .,You are collecting some advice on how

5、to make use of the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games . I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games successfully.,Want to write some advice/Would like to give you some advice Contribute some suggestions t

6、o you.,I would like to give you some advice. I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you,4.Use it as/be used for/as;take it as;open it for Places of interests/tourist attractions Attract tourists/appeal to visitors/ be attraction for visitors,3.Give to/Rentto/be rented to Sport compa

7、ny/companies which organize matches/organizing matches Make/creat mony; bring in money/make more profits,信息2 信息3 信息4,向公眾開放，用于健身,租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經(jīng)濟效益,開辟成旅游景點，吸引游客,正 文,3.連詞成句,2.Open/be opened to the people/public/open them to public. Be used for/as; be made to; Do some exercise/build our body/strengthen our

8、bodies,2.The stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can build their bodies/strengthen their bodies,3.The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in more money/make more profits,4.They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.,.,信息

9、5,總結(jié)，意愿,結(jié)尾,In my opinion/ as far as I am concerned./from my point of view. I would appreciate I would you will think of /takeinto consideration. In a word,3.連詞成句,From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use of the stadium. I would appreciate it if you would take my advice into de

10、ep consideration,4.連句成篇,Para.1: The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums. I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.,Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to the public. The public

11、can build their bodies/strengthen their bodies. The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in more money/make more profits. They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.,Para.3: From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full

12、 use the stadium. I would appreciate it if you would take my advice into deep consideration,4.連句成篇,Para.1: The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums. I would like to contribute the following sugge

13、stions to you.,Para.1: I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.,4.連句成篇,Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to the public. The

14、 public can strengthen their bodies. The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.,Para.2: First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can strengthen t

15、heir bodies. Secondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.,First of all Firstly, To begin with,In addition, Besides, Moreover, Whats more,Finall

16、y, Whats worse,使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞,first; firstly; second; secondly; last but not least,and; too; as well as; along with; together with,for example; for instance; like; such as; as to,but; however; while; though; on the contrary,because; since; thanks to; as a result /consequence (of); thus; therefore,in a wor

17、d; in short; to sum up; in conclusion,whats more; besides; to make matters worse; whats worse; worse still; furthermore,4.連句成篇,I heard you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to

18、 contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly, The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as touri

19、st attraction. It can attract many visitors. From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration,5.潤色修正,二. 使用非謂語動詞使句子簡潔高檔,三. 巧用倒裝增強句子表現(xiàn)力,四. 嘗試多樣化表達方式,5. 潤 色 修 正 方 式,一.使用較高級詞匯使文章增加吸引力,強調(diào)句,Wit

20、h短語復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu),定語從句,名詞性從句(主賓表同從句),各種狀語從句,被動語態(tài),1. Many people want to visit the stadium . 2. The stadium is useful.,Many people are dying to visit the stadium.(唐珊）,The stadium is of great value.(王淑敏),一.使用較高級詞匯使文章增加吸引力,5.潤色修正,1.The 29th Olympic Games were successfully ended. It left many stadiums unused,The

21、29th Olympic Games were successfully ended, leaving many stadiums unused（孫詒）.,二. 使用非謂語動詞使句子簡潔高檔,5.潤色修正,1.we can let stadium make sense Only when we make full use of the stadium 2. The stadiums can be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits. they can be the places to appeal vis

22、itors to pay a visit.,Only when we make full use of the stadium can we let stadium make sense(張文雪).,Not only can the stadiums be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits, but also they can be the places to appeal visitors to pay a visit.(張蕾),5.潤色修正,三. 巧用倒裝增強句子表現(xiàn)力,We should take

23、 the Olympic stadiums into consideration after Beijing hosted the games successfully. The 29th Olympic Games were ended successfully. we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for our daily lives,It is the Olympic stadiums that we should take into consideration after Beijing hosted the

24、 games successfully.,With the 29th Olympic Games ended successfully, we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for our daily lives.,5.潤色修正,四. 嘗試多樣化表達方式,強調(diào)句,With短語復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu),You can open them for the public. The stadiums can be used to take exercise.,You can open the stadiums which can be use

25、d to take exercise for the public.(高玉華).,5.潤色修正,四. 嘗試多樣化表達方式,定語從句,各種狀語從句,我們鍛煉的越多，我們就越健康。,The more exercises we take, the healthier we will become.,被動語態(tài),We should pay more attention to the stadiums.,More attention should be paid to the stadiums.(潘暢),I heard you are collecting some advice on how to ma

26、ke the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly, The stadiums can be rented

27、 to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my ad

28、vice into deep consideration,5.潤色修正,高考書面表達各檔次的給分范圍和要求,第五檔（21-25分） 完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù): 準(zhǔn)確、清楚地表達了短文的內(nèi)容，要點無遺漏 應(yīng)用了較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯 語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯有少許錯誤，但為盡可能使用較復(fù)雜表達方式 所致；具備較強的語言應(yīng)用能力 有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊 完全達到了預(yù)期的寫作目的。,第四檔（16-20分） 完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù): 比較準(zhǔn)確、清楚地表達了短文的內(nèi)容 應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯能滿足任務(wù)的要求 語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯應(yīng)用基本準(zhǔn)確，少許錯誤主要是因為嘗試較復(fù) 雜語言結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯所致 應(yīng)用簡單的語句

29、間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊達到了預(yù)期的寫作目的。,2008年奧運會剛剛落幕，一家英文報刊在其網(wǎng)站上征集奧運會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議假設(shè)你叫李華，是該報的一名讀者，請給該報編輯部寫一封信，談?wù)勀愕慕ㄗh和理由內(nèi)容包括 向公眾開放，用于健身 租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經(jīng)濟效益 開辟成旅游景點，吸引游客 Dear editor, I am Li Hua, a reader of your paper. ,With the 29th Olympic Games ended successfully, What we should do now is how to make full use of the stadium