高三英語講評(píng)開放式書面表達(dá)--三步作文法課件.ppt

1、書面表達(dá)： 古人云：“笑福開來”。微笑是和諧的開始，微笑是溝通的通行證。微笑可以冰釋前嫌，微笑可以舒緩窘境，微笑可以感化靈魂，微笑可以增強(qiáng)自信，微笑可以增添魅力，微笑可以 請(qǐng)你以微笑為主題寫一篇英語短文，題目自擬。 注意： 1. 對(duì)所提示內(nèi)容不要簡(jiǎn)單翻譯，可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。 2. 詞數(shù)150左右。 3. 文中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校及本人姓名。,Before writing 審題 審主題： smile (微笑) 審人稱： 要求以微笑為主題寫一篇英語短文。Smiling is the beginning of harmony. (smiling causes harmony.) smiling reli

2、eves stress 故人稱應(yīng)為第三人稱。 2. 審時(shí)態(tài)：smiling is smiling does 一般現(xiàn)在時(shí),3. 審要點(diǎn)：微笑是和諧的開始，微笑是溝通的通行證，微笑可以冰釋前嫌，微笑可以舒緩窘境，微笑可以感化靈魂，微笑可以增強(qiáng)自信，微笑可以增添魅力，微笑可以 4. 列提綱：三段法模式 第一段：Introduction: 主題句或背景導(dǎo)入或使用hook. 第二段：Body: 具體細(xì)節(jié)或具體論據(jù)既要點(diǎn)陳述。 第三段：Conclusion: 換種說法重申主題或提出倡議、號(hào)召。（目前大多數(shù)作文的要求是表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)）,While writing (注意書寫) 表達(dá)要點(diǎn)：用動(dòng)賓短語來表達(dá)。

3、make us attractive. cause harmony. change our mood. build up the bridge of communication. mean confidence. relieve stress. mean success make us seem successful help stay positive.,2. 擴(kuò)展成句： Smiling makes us attractive. Smiling changes our mood. Smiling relieves stress. Smiling people appear more conf

4、ident. Smiling helps us stay positive.,連綴成文： 關(guān)聯(lián)詞的使用。 復(fù)雜句的使用。 高級(jí)詞匯的使用。 Smiling makes us attractive. We are drawn to people who smile. Smiling changes our mood, as it can trick the body into feeling better. Smiling is infectious. When someone is smiling they lighten up the room, change the moods of ot

5、hers, and make them happier. Smiling relieves stress. It helps to prevent us from looking tired. Smiling people appear more confident, and are more likely to be approached. Smiling helps us stay positive. When we smile our body is sending the rest of us a message that “Life is Good!”,After writing 檢

6、查單詞拼寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)等。 檢查要點(diǎn)是否遺漏。 檢查句子結(jié)構(gòu)是否正確。 估計(jì)字?jǐn)?shù)是否符合要求。,學(xué)生作文中錯(cuò)誤的句子： Keep your smiles, you will healthier in the future. Smiling also contributes your selfconfident. Smile also can increase ours confident which has a good effect on ours work. A idiom goes that when you smiles, you will own happiness. Not only

7、 smiling can promote the development of nationships with others, but also it can make ourselves live better than before.,be,and,to,Self-confidence,our confidence,our,An,smile,can smiling,friendship,學(xué)生作文中較好的句子： While you are sad, a gentle smile from your friends or even strangers will cheer you up.(王

8、娟) As is known to us all, smiling is the beginning of harmony. （劉曉菲） Since smiling has many advantages, why dont you smile all the time? Laughter is a good medicine. If you really smile, you will live longer and lead a happy life.(吳曉遠(yuǎn)) For example, it is the beginning of harmony and it is also a goo

9、d way to communicate with others.(劉靜),抄閱讀文章中的句子; 不知所云.得分為0分,語言素質(zhì)欠缺;基本功差;語句毛病多;大小寫;標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào);書寫不清等等;得5分.,卷面不整潔; 涂改較多;語言錯(cuò)誤多;層次不清;得12分,語言不地道;中文式思維;詞匯錯(cuò)誤;卷面有涂改;得15分.,有少許語言錯(cuò)誤; 得23分,范文： Why Do We Smile? Everybody likes smiling. But why do we smile? Smiling makes us attractive. We are drawn to people who smile.

10、Smiling changes our mood, as it can trick the body into feeling better. Smiling is infectious. When someone is smiling they lighten up the room, change the moods of others, and make them happier. Smiling relieves stress. It helps to prevent us from looking tired. Smiling people appear more confident, and are more likely to be approached. Smiling helps us stay positive. When we smile our body is sending the rest of us a message that “Life is Good!” So just try smiling our way through the day. Stay away fr