2021版高考英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)3.2.4讀后續(xù)寫課件20210312259

1、第4講讀后續(xù)寫 【典例】【典例】 (2020新高考新高考卷卷) The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. Mrs Meredith was a most kin

2、d and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them. 技法探究技法探究素養(yǎng)提升素養(yǎng)提升 One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. The

3、re was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy his name was Bernard had interested her very much. “I wish you could see him, ” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants

4、 very much to earn some money, but I dont see what he can do. ” After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money. ” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much. ” “So do I, ” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.

5、 ” For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成完成). ” The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do, ”

6、 said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn(爆米花爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it. ” 注意注意: 1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右左右; 2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 When Mrs Meredith heard of Johns idea, she t

7、hought it was a good one, too. _ _ _ With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. _ _ 【審題謀篇】【審題謀篇】 1. 初步審題初步審題 (1)體裁體裁: 記敘文記敘文 (2)時態(tài)時態(tài): 一般過去時一般過去時 (3)人稱人稱: 第三人稱第三人稱 (4)要點要點: 故事主線和線索故事主線和線索: Meredith一家人所在社區(qū)的一些人由于經(jīng)濟衰退而一家人所在社區(qū)的一些人由于經(jīng)濟衰退而 失業(yè)了失業(yè)了善良體貼的善良體貼的Mrs Meredith經(jīng)常拜訪并幫助窮人經(jīng)常拜訪并幫助窮人

8、Mrs Meredith拜訪了拜訪了 窮困交加的窮困交加的Bernard一家一家Bernard很想賺錢幫助媽媽很想賺錢幫助媽媽, 但無賺錢門路但無賺錢門路Mrs Meredith告訴了自己的孩子們告訴了自己的孩子們Bernard的情況的情況孩子們想到了用玉米做爆米花孩子們想到了用玉米做爆米花, 讓讓Bernard在社區(qū)賣爆米花的主意在社區(qū)賣爆米花的主意 2. 情節(jié)構(gòu)思情節(jié)構(gòu)思 第第1段段: 根據(jù)所給首句根據(jù)所給首句When Mrs Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too. 可知可知, Mrs Meredi

9、th同意了同意了John的主意。該段應(yīng)該寫的主意。該段應(yīng)該寫_ _。 第第2段段: 根據(jù)所給首句根據(jù)所給首句With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business及前文及前文Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it可知可知, Bernard開始賣爆米花了。該段應(yīng)該寫開始賣爆米花了。該段應(yīng)該寫_。 孩子孩子 們的具體分工及做法們的具體分工及做法 爆米花的銷售情況及爆米花的銷售情況及Bernard的感受的感受 【要點盤點】【要點盤點】 1. 第一段第一段: 孩子們的

10、分工及做法孩子們的分工及做法 你們自己給他爆玉米。你們自己給他爆玉米。 You will _. 你們可以每星期六早上給他送去。你們可以每星期六早上給他送去。 You _every Saturday morning. 很快孩子們就忙著爆玉米了。很快孩子們就忙著爆玉米了。 Very soon the children _. pop the corn for him yourselves may send him were busy popping the corn 他們的母親則出去買紙袋。他們的母親則出去買紙袋。 Their mother _the paper bags. 伯納德到了。伯納德到了。

11、 Bernard _. 玉米全爆好了玉米全爆好了, 紙袋裝滿了紙袋裝滿了, 放在籃子里。放在籃子里。 The corn was all popped, the paper bags _, and arranged in the basket. went out to buy arrived filled 2. 第二段第二段: 爆米花的銷售情況及爆米花的銷售情況及Bernard的感受的感受 比預(yù)期的要快得多比預(yù)期的要快得多, 他帶著一個空籃子回來了。他帶著一個空籃子回來了。 _, he returned with an empty basket. 他這輩子從來沒有掙過這么多錢。他這輩子從來沒有掙

12、過這么多錢。 He _before in his life. 當(dāng)他發(fā)現(xiàn)這一切都是他的時候當(dāng)他發(fā)現(xiàn)這一切都是他的時候, 他高興得幾乎說不出話來。他高興得幾乎說不出話來。 When he found that it was all to be his, he was quite delighted and he _. Much sooner than could be expected had never earned so much money could hardly speak 【我來升級】【我來升級】 1. 將句將句和句和句連接成含有條件狀語從句的復(fù)合句。連接成含有條件狀語從句的復(fù)合句。

13、_ _. 2. 將句將句和句和句連接成一個并列句。連接成一個并列句。 _ _. You may send him every Saturday morning, if you will pop the corn for him yourselves Very soon the children were busy popping the corn, while their mother went out to buy the paper bags 3. 將句將句和句和句連接成一個復(fù)合句。連接成一個復(fù)合句。 _ _ 4. 將句將句改寫成倒裝句。改寫成倒裝句。 _. 5. 將句將句改寫成改寫成so

14、. . . that. . . 復(fù)合句。復(fù)合句。 _ _. The corn was all popped, the paper bags filled, and arranged in the basket when Bernard arrived. Never had he earned so much money before in his life When he found that it was all to be his, he was so delighted that he could hardly speak 【五檔滿分范文】【五檔滿分范文】 When Mrs Meredi

15、th heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Then she said, “You may send him every Saturday morning, if you will pop the corn for him yourselves. John, will you agree to take charge of the work?” “Indeed, I will, ” replied John, and he kept his word. Very soon the children were busy

16、popping the corn, while their mother went out to buy the paper bags. When she came back, she brought Bernard with her. The corn was all popped, the paper bags filled, and arranged in the basket when Bernard arrived. With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. And much sooner than

17、 could be expected, he returned with an empty basket. Never had he earned so much money before in his life. When he found that it was all to be his, he was so delighted that he could hardly speak, but his bright smiling face spoke for him. People began to watch for the “l(fā)ittle pop-corn boy”, and eve

18、ry week he had at least fifty cents to take home, and often more. All this was because of Johns bright idea, and the way he carried it out. 【閱卷老師點評】【閱卷老師點評】 1. 梳理文章脈絡(luò)不清晰梳理文章脈絡(luò)不清晰, 主要線索覆蓋率低。主要線索覆蓋率低。 2. 續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與所給短文及段落開頭語銜接不合理。續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與所給短文及段落開頭語銜接不合理。 3. 文章續(xù)寫后情節(jié)不完整。文章續(xù)寫后情節(jié)不完整。 【技法點金】【技法點金】1. 讀后續(xù)寫的選材特點、考查角度

19、和注意事項讀后續(xù)寫的選材特點、考查角度和注意事項 選材選材 特點特點 (1)(1)所需閱讀的短文詞數(shù)在所需閱讀的短文詞數(shù)在350350以內(nèi)以內(nèi); ; (2)(2)多以記敘文故事類文章或者夾敘夾議類文章為主多以記敘文故事類文章或者夾敘夾議類文章為主, , 故事情節(jié)有曲折、有故事情節(jié)有曲折、有 起伏起伏, , 但是但是, , 故事線索的邏輯性比較強。故事線索的邏輯性比較強。 考查考查 角度角度 (1)(1)與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度; ; (2)(2)內(nèi)容的豐富性和對所給關(guān)鍵詞語的覆蓋情況內(nèi)容的豐富性和對所給關(guān)鍵詞語的覆蓋情況; ; (3)(3)應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和

20、詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性; ; (4)(4)上下文的連貫性上下文的連貫性 注意注意 事項事項 (1)(1)所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150150左右左右( (詞數(shù)少于詞數(shù)少于130130的的, , 從總分中減去從總分中減去2 2分分); ); (2)(2)應(yīng)使用應(yīng)使用5 5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語; ; (3)(3)續(xù)寫部分分為兩段續(xù)寫部分分為兩段, , 每段的開頭語已為你寫好每段的開頭語已為你寫好; ; (4)(4)續(xù)寫完成后續(xù)寫完成后, , 用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語 2.

21、 寫作步驟寫作步驟 (1)通讀文本通讀文本, 理清文章的脈絡(luò)關(guān)系。重點抓住記敘文的基本要素理清文章的脈絡(luò)關(guān)系。重點抓住記敘文的基本要素, 即時間、地即時間、地 點、人物和事件。點、人物和事件。 (2)整合信息整合信息, 定位情節(jié)的核心矛盾。構(gòu)建敘事框架定位情節(jié)的核心矛盾。構(gòu)建敘事框架, 延續(xù)情節(jié)的基本要素。延續(xù)情節(jié)的基本要素。 (3)仔細(xì)審題仔細(xì)審題, 明確續(xù)寫要求。明確續(xù)寫要求。 (4)細(xì)讀文本細(xì)讀文本, 把握文本的語言特征把握文本的語言特征, 傳承文本的遣詞用句。傳承文本的遣詞用句。 (5)擬寫草稿擬寫草稿, 修改錯詞病句。修改錯詞病句。 (6)標(biāo)出續(xù)寫部分中使用到的原材料中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)

22、鍵詞語。標(biāo)出續(xù)寫部分中使用到的原材料中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語。 3. 注意事項注意事項 (1)掌握所給文章的主旨意圖及故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展方向。這點至關(guān)重要。只有把掌握所給文章的主旨意圖及故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展方向。這點至關(guān)重要。只有把 握了文章的主旨意圖握了文章的主旨意圖, 才能很好地完成續(xù)寫。才能很好地完成續(xù)寫。 (2)正確理解故事的脈絡(luò)線索和段落結(jié)構(gòu)正確理解故事的脈絡(luò)線索和段落結(jié)構(gòu), 設(shè)計續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的基本框架。只有對原設(shè)計續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的基本框架。只有對原 文的脈絡(luò)線索和段落結(jié)構(gòu)有正確的和深刻的理解文的脈絡(luò)線索和段落結(jié)構(gòu)有正確的和深刻的理解, 續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容才能和原文骨肉續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容才能和原文骨肉 相連相連, 契合緊

23、密。契合緊密。 (3)感知文章的用詞特點感知文章的用詞特點, 以便使續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容在語言色彩上和所給文章保持一致。以便使續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容在語言色彩上和所給文章保持一致。 (4)注意語言的使用。考試說明中非常明確地指出注意語言的使用。考試說明中非常明確地指出, 寫作中要準(zhǔn)確使用語法和詞寫作中要準(zhǔn)確使用語法和詞 匯匯, 清楚、連貫地表達自己的意思。所以清楚、連貫地表達自己的意思。所以, 在考慮文章結(jié)構(gòu)的同時在考慮文章結(jié)構(gòu)的同時, 一定要注一定要注 意使用比較意使用比較“高級高級”的詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)。的詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)。 Passage 1 (2020山東新高考模擬山東新高考模擬) 閱讀下面材料閱讀下面材料, 根

24、據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的 短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。左右。 Though it is one of the faded memories of my life today, there are times when I remember his face clearly, especially his eyes. As he had yellow spots on his eyes we called him Spotty. He would have been a stray (流浪流

25、浪) dog, until he came to me. 新題精練新題精練素養(yǎng)應(yīng)用素養(yǎng)應(yīng)用 I was seven years old. My dad had just got a new job in Nasik. We had moved into a rented house. It was raining very heavily on the day we moved. It was a cold dark night. We had our meal and went to sleep. Somehow in the midnight I heard some strange so

26、unds outside the main door. I gathered courage and looked out through the window and I was really amused with what I saw outside. There was a small puppy lying on an old doormat which my mother had put outside the door. It was wet and trembling. At first it was difficult to see the little one. It wa

27、s the yellow spots on its eyes that made me realize its presence. It was trying to get under the doormat to avoid the cold air outside and it had managed to get in as I could see only its head outside the doormat. Was it sick or injured? I felt pity for the poor soul. I went in and came out with an

28、old towel. I went near the innocent one and held it in my hand and wiped the puppy till he had become dry. I took him into my room and made a bed for him with a woolen blanket and a small pillow. He seemed very healthy and comfortable in his new bed as he went to sleep immediately. The next morning,

29、 everyone in the family came to know about the unusual guest. “Shall we keep him with us?” I questioned my mom. Like any other parents would, my parents first totally refused my idea but my sister and I convinced them to keep Spotty. Slowly Spotty got on with everyone and became one of the family me

30、mbers. 注意注意: 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段續(xù)寫部分分為兩段, 每段的開頭語已為你寫好。每段的開頭語已為你寫好。 One day, Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken leg. _ _ _ _ Almost a year later, one midnight we heard Spotty barking breathlessly. _ _ _ 【參考范文】【參考范文】 One day, Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken leg. He came to my roo

31、m and sat near me. It was then that I saw his hind leg was injured and was bleeding. I called out my mother and she quickly tied a bandage around his leg and gave him food to eat. I was very upset. But the next day, Spotty was up to his usual pranks though he limped a bit. After this incident my rel

32、ation with Spotty became more intense. I really admired him a lot for his courage. Almost a year later, one midnight we heard Spotty barking breathlessly. We came out and saw that he was barking continuously heading somewhere. After some time Spotty became quiet. I patted him on his back and came in

33、side. The next day morning, my heart skipped a beat when I didnt see Spotty. I searched for him in each and every corner but he was nowhere. And this time he had gone and would never come back. I cried and waited for him. We waited for one long week. But there were no signs of him. Then one day my d

34、ad got transferred to Mumbai. We shifted back to Mumbai. What would have happened to Spotty? Would he have died? These were the only questions in my mind, but they all remained unanswered forever. Passage 2 (2020山師附中三模山師附中三模) 閱讀下面材料閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的 短文。續(xù)寫

35、的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。左右。 It seemed Id done everything Id ever wanted to do in my life, but I had one regret. I was born in 1898, the oldest of five kids. Papa couldnt spare me to go to school, so I worked in the fields with him till I was 21 years old. Everywhere I went, I learned some hard lessons

36、about what happens to a man who even cant read the alphabet. People cheat you out of wages. They sell you a ticket to one city, take your money and hand you a ticket to somewhere else. By 1928, Id been wandering for nine years. I met a woman named Elzenia. We fell in love, married and moved to Dalla

37、s, where I got work fixing roads for the city. When Amelia, the oldest of our seven children, first went to school, I took my wife aside. “Elzenia, ” I said. “I dont want the kids to know I cant read or write. ” In 1938, one day my boss called me in. “George, ” he said. “No one knows those machines

38、like you do. Id like to promote you. ” But my thrill and surprise were cut short when he said, “Fill out this application and well get you a raise. ” I couldnt admit the truth. I thanked him and walked out of his office. I did stay right where I was, until I turned 65 and my boss made me retire. But

39、 I didnt stop working. For the next 25 years, I lived a happy life, but it still seemed to me like something was missing. A young fellow handed me a piece of paper. Its information about adult education classes. People can learn to read and write. Now Im 102. I thought of my friends and neighbours a

40、nd what they might think if they found out I couldnt read. After all these years, my secret would be out. But all my life Ive wanted to read. It was high time for action. 注意注意: 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段續(xù)寫部分分為兩段, 每段的開頭語已為你寫好。每段的開頭語已為你寫好。 The young man drove me to a huge building and led me into a spacious classroom,

41、which was crowded with elderly people like me. _ _ _ _ Im still going to school. _ _ _ _ 【參考范文】【參考范文】 The young man drove me to a huge building and led me into a spacious classroom, which was crowded with elderly people like me. Through chatting, I learned that they had all been longing to read and

42、write but never had the chance to go to school. As the bell rang, in came the teacher, a woman well past forty. After a warm and brief greeting, we started our lesson. First we learned to read the alphabet and though I made mistakes at times, no one laughed at me. Everyone helped each other with ope

43、n-hearted enjoyment. Im still going to school. Though faced with the most challenging event of my life, Im full of courage and confidence. With the generous help of my teacher, friends and my children, I have made huge progress in study. Now Im never shy about admitting the truth that once I was not

44、 able to read and write at all. Besides, Im eager to encourage more elderly people to attend the adult education classes, because its never too late to learn. Passage 3 (2020濰坊三模濰坊三模) 閱讀下面材料閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的 短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。左右。 There was somethi

45、ng in the elderly womans grace that caught my eye. Although slow and unsure of her steps, the woman moved with deliberation (從從 容容), and there was no hesitation in her gestures. It was a few years ago, and I had taken a part-time holiday-season job in a video store at the local shopping mall. From i

46、nside the store, I could see the people outside rushing by. The elderly woman entered the store, along with her daughter, who was displaying a serious case of impatience, rolling her eyes, sighing and checking her watch every few seconds. I guessed if she had possessed a rope, she would have fastene

47、d it to her mother to drag her along to keep step with the rush of other shoppers. The elderly woman separated from her daughter and began to seek through the DVDs on the nearest shelf. After the slightest hesitation, I walked over and asked if I could help her find something. The woman smiled up at

48、 me and showed me a title written on an old piece of paper. Rather than rush off to locate the DVD for the woman, I asked her to walk with me so I could show her where she could find it. Looking back, I thought I wanted to enjoy her company for a moment. Something about her deliberate movements remi

49、nded me of my own mother, whod passed away the previous Christmas. I missed my mom and still felt regretful about the moments when Id used my impatience to make her life unhappy. As we walked along the back of the store, I introduced its floor plan: old television shows, action movies, cartoons, sci

50、ence fiction. The woman seemed glad of the unrushed company and casual conversation. We found the DVD and she thanked me, saying that it was the one shed enjoyed when she was her daughters age. Unwillingly, I accompanied her to the cash register, realizing I had to return the elderly woman to her da

51、ughter, who was still tapping her foot at the front of the store. 注意注意: 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段續(xù)寫部分分為兩段, 每段的開頭語已為你寫好。每段的開頭語已為你寫好。 As the elderly woman was waiting in the queue at the cash register, I walked over to her daughter. _ _ _ _ Together they made their way toward the stores exit. _ _ _ _ 【參考范文】【參考范文】 As t

52、he elderly woman was waiting in the queue at the cash register, I walked over to her daughter. “Mind some advice?” I asked. She rolled her eyes and said, “of course not. ” I smiled to show her I wasnt criticizing. “Cherish her and cherish every single moment you can stay with her, ” I said. And then

53、 I answered her curious expression by saying, “When shes gone, its these little moments that will come back to you. Moments like this. I know. ” Having finished saying this, I noticed the elderly woman moving with her deliberation back to her daughter. Together they made their way toward the stores

54、exit. Then the daughter glanced over her elderly mother. And slowly, almost unwillingly, she placed her arm with apparently unaccustomed affection around her mothers shoulders and gently guided her back into the crowd. Tears filled my eyes when I watched them disappearing in the crowd. Passage 4 (20

55、20威海二模威海二模) 閱讀下面材料閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的 短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。左右。 Danger at Scituate Lighthouse Rebecca stood by her father, looking out the windows of Scituate Lighthouse. Low sand dunes(沙丘沙丘) with sea grass topped the Massachusetts beach. There were no

56、clouds in the skynothing at all to give warning of the danger that was sailing toward them. “Now, Rebecca, ” Mr Bates began, gazing out across the open sea, “I want you and Abigail to help your mother and take care of things while I go to town for food and supplies. I wont be gone long. ” “Well help

57、, ”Rebecca promised. “I know I can count on you. ” Still, Mr Bates looked a little worried about leaving the lighthouse. After all, peace between the US and the UK had not yet been declared, even though the war of 1812 was nearly over. Although English warships used to frequently attack towns along

58、the coastincluding Scituateno English soldiers had been sighted for a long time. Besides, Rebecca thought as she watched her father set off, the family would soon starve if he didnt go for food. Her father hadnt been gone long when Rebecca happened to look out the window at the ocean. What she saw n

59、early made her heart stop. It was an enemy ship: a small, light-gunned British warship. Calling for her mother, she grabbed her fathers telescope and could just make out the name painted on the side: La Hogue. Rebecca, Abigail, and their mother stood together, frightened, as they watched the ship sa

60、il closer. Mother told the girls to watch the ship while she tried to sound the alarm and warn the home guard in the nearby village. The girls watched helplessly as the great ship drew near. Two small boats were lowered off the side, and Rebecca knew the boats would come ashore quickly. It was time