【原創(chuàng)】2021屆高三英語考場作文讀后續(xù)寫下水文指導(dǎo)：走出火山谷

1、2021屆高三英語考場作文讀后續(xù)寫下水文指導(dǎo)：走出火山谷題目：On a steamy morning in July, Clay and Acaimie Chastain arrived at the base of Mount Liamuiga on the Caribbean island of St. Kitts, ready to spend a day of their honeymoon climbing Mount Liamuiga. The highest point on St. Kitts, Liamuiga is also a dormant （休目民的）volcano

2、that starts in the clouds and plunges down to meet the sea.They couldn't find a visitor centre or hire a guide, so they set off on their own. They reached the peak around noon and ate their sandwiches looking out over the ocean and surrounding islands.Thafs when Clay saw it: a small trail that l

3、ed into the volcano's crater（izC）, a bowl of green with cloud forest giving way to green grass. A series of screw eyes（螺釘孑L） had been drilled into the rocks, with ropes that led down. Clay wanted to go down and take some pictures. Acaimie followed him a little wayz but she was very cautious and

4、quite scared of heights; so Clay went on alone.A few minutes later, she heard a crasha noise that sounded like a large branch snapping , followed by the sound of something big rolling downhill. “Clay?” she called. Silence.Uneasy, she waited a minute and shouted againstill nothing. And then, from som

5、ewhere much further down, she heard a weak cry for help. This time she was certain: It was Clay calling for help from deep within the crater.As she looked over the lip of the volcano, she tried to stop some of her worst worries. Her phone wasn't getting a signal, and her cries for help were met

6、with only silence, "Clay!” she shouted as loud as she could. "Clay, are you OK?”Acaimie grasped the rope and began climbing down the trail. When the path became too steep, she slid on her butt, her legs and arms getting bruised and scraped in the process. Then, just off the trail, she saw

7、a flash of red. It was Clay's scarf. And next to it was his cell phone.She grabbed both and continued down, screaming for Clay all the way.“Help,“ he said in that strange voice.Tm coming! Stay where you are,“ she said.注意：L續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2 ,請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Finally, she spotted Clay.Acaimie had to

8、push those thoughts away and focus on what could do.簡要分析：若干個要素：Time: On a steamy morning in JulyCharacters: Clay and Acaimie Chastain(cautious, scared of heights) Purpose: spend a day of their honeymoon climbing Mount Liamuiga Place: a dormant volcano情感變化:uneasy, worried, cries for help一些物件:Clay'

9、; s scarf, his cell phone, a crash of branch提示：上面要素是必須列出來的，因為小說要素多，一不小心就漏掉重要的，好 記性不如爛筆頭。如何寫:讀后續(xù)寫最快捷的辦法就是將情節(jié)場景化，然后在各個場景之間進行有效的銜接。Finally, she spotted Clay.場景一：Clay' s situation場景二:Acaime7 s care場景三:Acaime7 s concern (the rope cannot stand their weight)Acaimie had to push those thoughts away and f

10、ocus on what could do.場景四:find a tunnel leading out through the cloud forest場景五:overcome her fear and grope for the way場景六：see the light, hug each other為什么想到隧道：因為研究死火山在bbc探索頻道里非常常見的，而這個火山又 在森林里,也可以有溶洞（cave ），宜興的溶洞就很多。由于高考作文評分標準著重于六大要素：主題（照應(yīng)文章線索）、句式.銜接、用詞、細節(jié)描寫（動作和情緒描寫），邏輯（情節(jié)符合邏輯）因此我這篇作文：主題：顯性主題克服困難，走

11、出火山谷；隱性主題夫妻之間的愛能戰(zhàn)勝一切困難包括害怕。句式：非謂語動詞、定語從句、名詞性從句、對話、強調(diào)句、虛擬語氣、感嘆句、 倒裝句、連動句、物稱主語句、狀語從句銜接：those thought用了兩個句子做鋪墊。我盡力都用課標詞匯，基本都沒有超綱詞匯。Finally, she spotted Clay.場景一：Lying on his back, Clay moaned bitterly. His trousers were torn to pieces and splashed with blood, which immediately brought tears to her eyes

12、.場景二：Heartbroken as she was, Acaime bandaged his wounds carefully with his scarf.場景三：It was four o' clock now! Fear crept upon her heart what if a wolf appeared out of nowhere? what if they were starved to death?.銜接句：“Honey, we need to find a new way out before the sun sets/1 Clay' svoice aw

13、akened her.Acaimie had to push those thoughts away and focus on what could do.場景四：“Right! The rope couldnz t stand our weight/7 She looked around only to find something glimmering in the deepest forest. She approached it in curiosity. God! What a big tunnel to the outside! She dashed back and told C

14、lay her discovery, her voice trembling with excitement.場景五：She held Clay by the arm and led him to the entrance, edging their way through the tunnel.場景六：It took them a century to finish such a long journey. What met them were the final sunrays, in which they hugged tightly in tears. It must be love

15、that got them through the darkest time.完整的：Finally, she spotted Clay. Lying on his back, Clay moaned bitterly. His trousers were torn to pieces and splashed with blood, which immediately brought tears to her eyes. Heartbroken as she was, Acaime bandaged his wounds carefully with the scarf. It was fo

16、ur oz clock now! Fear crept upon her heart what if a wolf appeared out of nowhere? what if they were starved to death?. ”Honey, we need to find a new way out before the sun sets." Clay7 s voice awakened her.Acaimie had to push those thoughts away and focus on what could do. ”Right! The rope cou

17、ldnz t stand our weight/' She looked around only to find something glimmering in the deepest forest. She approached it in curiosity. God! What a big tunnel to the outside! She dashed back and told Clay her discovery, her voice trembling with excitement.She held Clay by the arm and led him to the

18、 entrance, edging their way through the tunnel. It took them a century to finish such a long journey. What met them were the final sunrays, in which they hugged tightly in tears.It must be love that got them through the darkest time.(177 words )i文答案：Finally, she spotted Clay. He was sitting on the g

19、round, blood running down his face. Tlay/' she called in an anxious voice. "Whafs wrong? Have you broken anything?" With a confused look on his face, Clay just stared at her and couldn't remember anything that had happened. Perhaps the rope he'd been holding had snapped, or maybe he'd just missed a step, but it was clear he'd fallen a long way. Acaimic had to stay calm for Clay, but